I really like reading health essays and biology related essays. This essay did a really good job at explaining the disorder, I would have expected more references used. The essay was well written and easy to read. My only advice would be to make your opening paragraph a bit more formal;the second paragraph actually would have been a good introduction paragraph.
- 01/03/2009
- 19:38:54
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I think the topic is great. Maybe just go into a bit more detail about the study. I think you did a pretty good job at explaining what is recommended to correct the behaviour. I would personally try to make the essay a bit more formal but I'm not sure if that is what they are asking for. Overall I enjoyed reading it.
- 01/03/2009
- 19:32:36
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I enjoyed reading your essay. It was comprehensive and it is such an interesting subject. I think that your arguments for permitting stem cell research is well established.
- 01/03/2009
- 19:29:09
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probably could have removed a few of the youralibi.com's in the essay. other than that the essay was quite easy to read and comprehensive.
- 01/03/2009
- 19:17:56
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i enjoyed this essay. good work. easy to read.
- 01/03/2009
- 19:14:50
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