I love your writing style, there's so much detail. I can imagine every little thing happening in my head so clearly.The way you write is really captivating as well.Nice story, too. (:
- 04/10/2009
- 06:47:14
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Bear in mind that this was written last year, and I'd like to think that I've improved since then on my beginnings and endings. I just submitted a piece of coursework I wrote last week, check it out and tell me what you think.In the original of this story, dreams were in italic and letters were in different fonts so it was a lot easier to understand. It's a shame I can't do that on this. Thanks for the advice, I'll keep it in mind for anything further I do.Anna
- 04/10/2009
- 06:36:31
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I'm sorry that the format is hard to follow. It didn't look like that before it was published, so I'm sorry for the error.And I've always been one for abrupt beginnings and endings, that's just my style, and if you personally don't like it, that's fine with me.Thanks for the comment.
- 02/10/2009
- 14:13:55
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Very informative, well structured, I could enjoy reading it. Constructive criticism: repetitive in some places. Otherwise, well done.
- 29/09/2009
- 16:52:35
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