Don't you just hate fast food!
- 24/10/2004
- 13:42:48
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Great theory but can any do that all the time. The world isn't always roses.
- 24/10/2004
- 13:36:32
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
You've got at great tone of phrase. You put the ideas forward very well.
- 24/10/2004
- 13:30:21
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This looks really crap cos there is no paragraphing between the poems, nd also i spelt pretty wrong!
- 24/10/2004
- 12:51:12
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I'm British so part of me thinks that it's completely phoney, but at the same time thats really great!
- 24/10/2004
- 12:48:19
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The images in ur poem are really strong, 'tis deep nd emotional. It probably describes how many peeps feel.
- 24/10/2004
- 12:37:00
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
there is no 'u' in world, but that was probably just a typo. I love ur ideas.The contrast between the dark and vibrant colours is great it is really different to the dulling pain which people usually expect to experience.
- 27/07/2004
- 06:34:09
- Score: 12 out of 13 people found this comment useful.
It's rare to see someone take such an objective view. Your writing is very powerful.This paper is well thought out and structured.Well done.
- 28/03/2004
- 08:07:11
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
That was so good and thought provoking. Your writing is really deep and meaningful It's made me really want to go out and read that poem.Great job
- 28/03/2004
- 07:47:53
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
majorly comprehensive and detailed. Very good but occasionly you repeated yourself.It's a shame you didn't mention 'Dasani' (the random bottled water the coca cola company is selling, Do they sell it in America?) You could have said how the company has lost a some of British support since it was with drawn from the market because it contained too many chemicals and because it was made from purified tap water and sold for 3000 times the price.But, GREAT ESSAY!
- 28/03/2004
- 07:40:17
- Score: 6 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
Its extremely eloquent and well written. It also speaks with the voice of truth. Well done!
- 21/03/2004
- 12:34:58
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
People only try to flush their babies down the toliet because of people like you constantly critizing and looking down on them.
- 21/03/2004
- 12:28:11
- Score: 8 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
... You are so biased.From what you've said, your sex life must, or is going to suck. You have taken a very boring simplistic angle to this. One parent can give just enough love as two!!! YOUR SO PREJUDICE and JUDGEMENTAL, you've just labelled all single parented kids as tear aways, YOUR WRONG, statistics can be used to manipulate any point of view.Your arguments are fair enough but they are put forward so badly.TEENAGERS OF TODAY NEED ONLY ONE MESSAGE;do what you want but use a CONDOM.
- 21/03/2004
- 12:24:56
- Score: 12 out of 13 people found this comment useful.
When i saw the title of abortion i thought i would be the same as everything else; judgemental, overly persuasive resulting in no change to the readers views. However yours is great it really made me think.This is a great thought provoking well backed up composition!
- 29/02/2004
- 09:40:52
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
I like what you have done in this essay. I think its great the way you are willing to challenge the stereotypes of muslims. I totally agree with your views.Great essay!
- 29/02/2004
- 09:28:18
- Score: 16 out of 16 people found this comment useful.
Your missing words in someplaces and the grammar aint perfect. But I still don't get what ur trying to say. You haven't backed it up completely.This is kinda random, but...Does no one else think that Osama Bin Laden has been scapegoated as the bringer of all terrorism. Often terrorism is the effect of oppressed nations, fighting against those that over shadow it. Terrorism is and should always be condemned but would any of us have heard of Afganistan if 9/11 hadn't happened.Through the opium fields and diverse culture of what we consider as 'terrorist nations' there are normal civilians who are victim to the propaganda but forward to them by leading powers. It is unfair to label terrorism with muslims.Some muslims truely believe in dying for their cause, bombing their cities will only fill them with rage. This will never make them stop.For all those people who died on 9/11, wouldn't you want them to rest leaving a peacefull world of reconciliation and hope? For as long as we start wars of revenge this will never happen!
- 27/02/2004
- 16:01:29
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
I like ur style, literally!This was really intresting to read and very different from everything else.Your approach is totally refreshing!
- 27/02/2004
- 15:44:35
- Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
That was really intresting.This has nothing to do with ur amazing essay......but what i don't get is why communism is such a big threat. Everyone says that democracy gives power to the people but it only gives it to the narrow majority. Sometimes its better to be told what to do instead of having your preferences ignored.Why should every unique country with its own culture have to bow down to America. There are other ways of life.Anyways I've rambled. Very good essay!!!
- 24/02/2004
- 15:06:56
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
Ace piece of writing!I loved the matrix. It's a shame about the sequals though!
- 12/02/2004
- 15:42:33
- Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Good essay!Soz this sounds really random but i'm meant to be reading the book at the moment. So far i've only read the bit about the Cyclops, but does anyone else think that Odysseus is a little arragant and full of himself. Although he seems to have the ultimate edge and always manages to get himself out of fatal situations, he always seems happy for his men and the other people around him to die first.You described him as brave, but is that really how you describe a person who puts his own life,wants and needs before those of others?
- 12/02/2004
- 15:26:03
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
I pretty much agree with your views but please get your facts strait;Marijuana doesn't have medical purposes for treating cancer! It can cause lung cancer in much the same way as tobacco. Medically it is used to relieve pain in conditions like MS nd other terminal illnesses.You need to justify the cultral advantages for legalising cannabis much more strong for your easy to have any kind of lasting effect. You could say that it deepens your senses and random other things.A driver who is high is just as likely to crash as some who has been drinking. All drungs alter reaction rates.The drug doesn't pass straight through your blood seem, so although you may not over dose there may be higher quantities working in your body than tou realise.Plus: Is 'incarcerating' the only big word you know?Basically, fair effort but get your facts right. Everyone has the right to smoke cannabis but only when they know the extent of its side effects.
- 12/02/2004
- 15:12:32
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
the vocab is a bit basic but that can easily be improved. The first section was really interesting and the second was a great summary. But you could have looked a little more into the red fern and its symbolism.
- 03/02/2004
- 17:28:06
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
exellent write up, that story sounds so cool.WHY IS IT UNDER THE TITLE OF ROMEO AND JULIET?
- 11/01/2004
- 10:45:34
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mostly gd but it gets a bit tedious at times
- 11/01/2004
- 10:33:40
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Which way are you trying to debate? If your debating against the death penalty dont write the pro points down as well!!plus, where's the passion? Your writing about life and death! All you need is a few though provoking sentences and your essay will have a whole new depth.
- 11/01/2004
- 10:15:11
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Its very informative and effective for the view you are trying to put across.If you included some atheistic views and linked them into this aspect of the story of the creation it would be even better.
- 07/01/2004
- 15:51:52
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
thanks for the help. The text book i was using had none of this detail
- 07/01/2004
- 15:34:32
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Why would a responsible law-abiding citizen actually need a gun?
- 01/01/2004
- 14:15:43
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Most people seem to believe that abortion is about the taking of life but what about the second chance it gives to the mother. We all make mistakes; whats worse removing a few simple cells unformed or shaped or bringing a child into a love less world. What about those people who never intended to get pregnant, those abused or raped is it fair to take away their chance for a free life? You can use any number of religous arguments against abortion but what if the mother truely believed that a spawn of evil was growing inside her. Does she not have the right to try and correct the wrongs of the world and start afresh. Doesn't everyone have the right to make their own choice and decide for themselves? If abortion was made illegal no one would have the freedom of choice.
- 31/12/2003
- 09:52:56
- Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
Most people seem to believe that abortion is about the taking of life but what about the second chance it gives to the mother. We all make mistakes; whats worse removing a few simple cells unformed or shaped or bringing a child into a love less world. What about those people who never intended to get pregnant, those abused or raped is it fair to take away their chance for a free life? You can use any number of religous arguments against abortion but what if the mother truely believed that a spawn of evil was growing inside her. Does she not have the right to try and correct the wrongs of the world and start afresh. Doesn't everyone have the right to make their own choice and decide for themselves? Can't everyone be free?
- 31/12/2003
- 09:51:12
- Score: 3 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
Does anyone else think that 9/11 was the only way that the Eastern World thought that they could be heard. It was wrong but would any of us actually know where to find Afghanistan on a map if we hadn't seen it on the news or even heard of Al-Qaeda... Although i think the media might feed people the ideas for copy cat crimes their are so many other reasons...But good essay!!!
- 31/12/2003
- 09:29:06
- Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
You have some major faults in the way this is written. It's really disjointed and you say the same things over and over. You brushed too lightly over Henry VIII's take over the church of England and changing the countries whole religion just because the pope wouldn't grant him divorce.No one cares that he buys jewelry and as you mentioned many times, exspensive clothes.Fair effort but this essay really needs work.
- 20/12/2003
- 08:01:30
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its a good start,but you need to back it up with more examples and make your arguments stronger
- 18/12/2003
- 16:33:10
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
This rocks, it is unique nd different.
- 18/12/2003
- 15:59:32
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
A good informative essay about something which everyone has felt at one point. Although factually strong it could do with a bit more freedom; it doesn't immediately engage the reader. It could do with a stronger intro, build on your ideas from the first two sentences and try to strike a stronger bond with the target audience.
- 18/12/2003
- 09:30:57
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That was really interesting nd v. true. Each argument was well backed up. One thing that would have boosted the essay loads is if you had said why some people are more territorial in some places than others and why
- 18/12/2003
- 09:19:52
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I don't think u've seen the bigger picture at all. This book isn't a warning, world war II was the warning. 1984 is increasingly our reality. We are constantly being monitured by CCTV, mobile phone calls are tapped. Big Brother is the FBI and MI5. The two minutes hate has nothing to do with this banished guy speaking against the party, it's about big brother controlling peoples emotions, telling them what to hate, teaching them to despise the traitors. The affair with Julia was something Winston believed that the party couldn't control. In the end when the pair sit on the park bench (an, important point you missed out!) with nothing left; no emotions worth having and nothing to trust but a remanifactured version of the truth, they realise nothing will ever be able to stop big brother. This dystopia is something much bigger and more significant than you have made it. You said that "George Orwell might not have been the most creative of authors," how can you justify that? He has depicted a totally realistic picture of us and our future. Tell me, who could be more creative than that?
- 18/12/2003
- 08:31:07
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This is soo cool; its so true. You've put your ideas forward really well.
- 12/10/2003
- 03:14:28
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
This is really different; its captivating from the begining. I'ts length doesn't really matter as it says what it wants to in a small number of words.
- 12/10/2003
- 03:04:03
- Score: 21 out of 23 people found this comment useful.
The definitions of words isn't always needed but it makes the reader think of their metaphorical values
- 03/10/2003
- 12:27:47
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
A good essay for its purpose
- 03/10/2003
- 12:20:24
- Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
gd, The essay seems to cover all of the philospical ideas. It's well structured and makes sense of what can be a very tedious book
- 29/09/2003
- 10:27:10
- Score: 12 out of 12 people found this comment useful.