Wow, Im in Year 11, second last year of high school and I never wrote an essay that long. Actually the only thing that went on for so long written by me was a fiction story. I must admit, I didn't read it all, but again, a big WOW, you must have put much effort into this. Priceless, simply priceless...
- 31/03/2003
- 07:08:54
- Score: 15 out of 15 people found this comment useful.
Well, It's a good piece of writing, but if you'd like to make it an essay, you mustn't forget the essay format. Besides, any kind of formatting into paragraphs will do good to the report. I would comment on your ideas, being a smoker, but I'm not here to do that, so all I can do is comment on the 'essay'. :)And BTW, some people smoke simply because they enjoy smoking, just a little thing you could add to the text."I live to smoke, not smoke to live"ssj4jin
- 31/03/2003
- 06:58:47
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
Excellent is all I can say. A balanced, well researched information, and most importantly, very lively, which makes it an interesting read. Presents points of view of athletes, and provides factual evidence on the consequences of steroid use. I really cannot find anything to criticise this on. I award it 10/10, I really enjoyed it, made me think, even though I dont think I will ever have anything to do with steroids. Some may disagree, but this was my best read today.
- 20/03/2003
- 05:04:29
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Perhaps this is not one of those essays I would read with great interest, but after I read it, I found it to be quite nice. Many statistics are used, I like that, factual arguments always benefit to a piece of work concerning economy. Very informative, and easily understandable unlike many other papers of the same type. The only thing I would watch out for, is your paragraphs, at times they end with an uncompleted sentance, and continue on in the next paragraph, but other then this little visual problem, it seems to be fine. This easily gets 9/10 from me, a work well deserving it.
- 20/03/2003
- 04:58:57
- Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
Appropriate report structure used. Informal language used, is quite easily understood, and the report gives a fair idea about the plot. However, more details needed to be used at times, the linking of the sentances is quite poor and at times( "Sirius Black breaks into Hogwarts and destroys the Fat Lady portrait that guards Gryffindor Tower. Quidditch starts, and Gryffindor House plays against Hufflepuff.") and perhaps the introduction of new characters needs to be used, as the reader who has no previous Harry Potter experience will be lost ("During the game, Harry sees a hoard of Dementors.")Overall, I would give this report a 6.5/10.
- 19/03/2003
- 00:28:56
- Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
Creative, language used to provide a clear explanation of the Gothic genre, with appropriate examples of texts. Well structured, and easily understandable piece of writing could benefit from a detailed bibliography and use of footnotes, but overall a 9/10 essay.
- 19/03/2003
- 00:15:34
- Score: 13 out of 13 people found this comment useful.