There are some great observations in here as well as some really good references - unfortunately not all of the observations are followed up with references or complete discussion. The topic itself is such a good one - to have it discussed fully and weighted with solid references would make it an outstanding essay!
- 13/02/2008
- 08:31:33
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There is a lot of really good information here - and it is presented fairly well - unfortunately this isn't really an essay. It looks like a short answer test. In this form there are no in-text citations or a bibliography, which leaves me wondering exactly where the writer came up with the information. It would be so much more helpful if I could follow up with the sources so that I can actually use the information included here.
- 28/11/2007
- 11:13:44
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There is some really good information in this essay! I can see where a bit more cohesion and depth in the point/purpose of what was written would have made this an excellent paper.Thanks for sharing.
- 28/11/2007
- 10:51:14
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Just wanted to say this is a great essay. The content and citations were very helpful to me in my own research and essay (On achieving self-identity in adulthood).
- 25/11/2007
- 05:09:13
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While this was an interesting essay I have to question the A+ grade for a Bachelor's degree level. There were no citations in the body of the essay although "studies" and "research" were cited and a great many solid assertions made without the requisite attributions. I have to ask "What studies are you referring to?" "What research are you drawing upon?" Who says that these things are proven? While there is a bibliography at the end this doesn't really fulfill the college level expectations for proper citation. This would be more of a high-school level paper.
- 25/11/2007
- 04:58:39
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