The content was okay, and the works were cited. I've noticed not many papers on this site contain the works documented throughout papers. Good job.
- 09/04/2003
- 20:02:59
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
This essay was done very nicely. The author establishes why they believe juveniles should be tried differently from adults. The content was very well written. Good job!
- 09/04/2003
- 19:59:55
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
The author of this paper did a good job of stating their vies and opinions on businesses monitoring e-mails written in the workplace. There were a view grammatical errors, such as capitaling "employees", and a few minor things like that. Good job.
- 08/04/2003
- 22:27:36
- Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
This paper was very good. The author shows they know a lot of information about Stephen King and his novels. The author was able to express what they wanted to say very clearly and fluently. I can not think of any criticisms to say. Nice job!
- 08/04/2003
- 21:55:05
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
The paper was well written, but I would make a few grammatical corrections. I would eliminate the exclamation marks and replace them with periods. This makes the paper look more professional. There were a few spelling errors, but those can easily be corrected. A suggestion is to remove the "you's" from your paper. Write the paper as though this has happened to someone and not as though you are suggesting it. Overall, with a few corrections, this is a great paper. :)
- 08/04/2003
- 21:45:48
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
This paper was well researched and well written. The author clearly knew what they were talking about in the paper and stayed on the subject. Great job!
- 08/04/2003
- 21:41:34
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
There are several corrections that I would make to this paper. In the title, I would change it to: "Television Violence: Does the Violence on Television Negatively Affect Children?:. Affect should be spelled with an "a" and not an "e" because affect means influence. I would remove all of the "@" signs. Change the = signs to a ', or in some cases, there is no punction needed. I would remove all of the random "A"'s that are all over the paper. In the opening paragraph, I would change the fourth statement to read as follows: "Whether on the news, movies, or commercials, violence is present on various channels." There are many other corrections I would make, so if you would like to know them, just contact me!
- 06/04/2003
- 20:51:43
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
This essay was well written and well researched. However, I would write it more in ascending order. The part where it says, "Most of all, Crutcher shows the importance of reaching out.", I would put that as my last point of the paper. Since essays should be written in ascending order of relevence, I would put this last. Good job!
- 06/04/2003
- 20:40:31
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.