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  • Oy . . .

    Not bad writing, but the fact that the author spelled Fitzgerald's name wrong in the title and mislabled it as European literature is enough to warrant concern. My suggestion in split off the biography from everything else, and submit the Gatsby related material as a study guide.I rate this poor. Writing is abysimally average, but miscategorization and lack of citing push it down.
    • 30/04/2003
    • 17:57:52
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Now this is an excellent piece of work

    Citing is done perfectly, excellent writing, and all points well supported.I'll be using this as a resource for my own Frankenstien work.
    • 25/04/2003
    • 10:17:34
    • Score: 0 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Besides Dylanna's comments, which I agree with 100% . . .

    Chocolate contains caffiene, an addictive stimulant,which is also contained in teas, sodas, and coffee, among other things. So theoretically, it is possible to have a physical dependance on chocolate.
    • 25/04/2003
    • 10:13:10
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Excellent

    Not only is the personification great, but the writing style, with its slight choppiness, is a perfect fit for an immigrant character. Wonderful work.
    • 25/04/2003
    • 10:07:58
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Wow . . .

    How did you manage to get a 75% on that? The writing is superb, and your citing is done very well. I salute you
    • 25/04/2003
    • 09:56:20
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Not bad . . .

    But way too many first and second person statements. Try to cut them down for your next essay. You get bonus points for trying to do MLA citations.
    • 25/04/2003
    • 09:29:15
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Not flat out terrible . . .

    ...but a few notes. If you use the acronym "U.S." you need a period after the S. When you use U.S. as a subject, you need to precede it by "the". This essay has a constant tense shift (try to keep the essay in the present tense), and the almost nonexistant thesis and inconsistant citations are another bad point. Also, the informal language isn't proper for a paper. Cut down on the contractions as well. You did include a bibliography, which is a plus.
    • 24/04/2003
    • 06:21:22
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • I'd give this one a C+/B-

    Unless this a working draft, I don't believe that this is a 12th grade work. The use of second and first person pronouns, not-very-focused thesis statement (only the second half of the essay is mentioned in it!), and lack of citations make me wonder (especially with direct quotes being used and statistics). Well written, but needing heavy revisions.
    • 21/04/2003
    • 16:44:35
    • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.