way to short for what you are trying to say. it is to choppy on info...reader wounders what he just read and who the Jimmy Bach is. don't think it is too useful
- 05/05/2003
- 16:18:38
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needs to be reveiwed to make it flow better.ex...Hamlet, written in 1600 by William Shakespeare, change to Hamlet, written in the 1600\'s......sounds much better and in 3rd paragraph abut Leartes change to \'Leartes, the other character...other than this I think it is a promasing essay.
- 05/05/2003
- 16:09:13
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Not bad! can be revized a little more(example take out some, 'the' 'is'....)it would flow a little better and make a bigger impact on reader! like the information given, it supports your point of Canadian poverty well..
- 05/05/2003
- 15:58:00
- Score: 3 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
This is an excallent essay! many of these points are very valid and exploration of them was outstanding. We need to see more of these kinds of essays because it is a matter that is just starting to be explored.
- 05/05/2003
- 15:46:57
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.