It is a little short but informative. Also it is grammatically correct and well structured.
- 07/12/2003
- 21:25:25
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Well written. Topics are presented nicely with out being too long winded.
- 06/12/2003
- 15:10:24
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
Hey people if you are going to rate my essays low please inform me why so i can improve. The assignment was to write an paragraph agreeing or disagreeing w/ another essay(How Teachers make Children Hate Reading by John Holt) Where did i go wrong?
- 14/11/2003
- 17:17:48
- Score: 11 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
This essay is good. The composition of the paper is nice, and your writing style is not that bad; nevertheless could use some improvement. It needs more detail and support in some areas to have overall better developed essay. Organization, however, is quite good. Try to and more hooks and transitions to add detail and help it flow. Also, you might want to build on your introduction. Keep writing; you have potential.
- 31/10/2003
- 20:28:00
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Well one should never start with I am going to talk about... or end an essay w/ In conclusion.That is what sixth graders are taught to do. your writing skills should be a little more developed
- 30/10/2003
- 18:12:11
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
Ok... this is a nice essay, but you might what to add more detail and support. Also, try to develop your intro a little more. Otherwise, I say well done. This is a nice basic essay and can be easily given more info to have a well developed A paper
- 27/10/2003
- 16:29:32
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
Well written could use more sentence variety and inroduction should have thesis at the end.
- 25/10/2003
- 13:47:36
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.