I liked how you personalized this essay. It is very descriptive and interesting!
- 23/03/2004
- 22:56:16
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
But where are your sources, especially for the figures you discuss? You stated that "there are over thirty-seven million people living in poverty in our(1st person) country," according to whose fact book?
- 11/03/2004
- 12:02:06
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
your analysis was a great read and so was the work you discussed. keep up the great work!
- 08/03/2004
- 19:02:26
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
I liked how you personalized the subject. However, this was too personal to the extent of not being very useful for other readers in this forum.
- 08/03/2004
- 18:59:39
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
I why someone would give this essay a measely 62% because it is a well-written essay with a lot of helpful tips.
- 08/10/2003
- 16:29:54
- Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
I enjoyed the poetic nature of this essay. It's not often that people write essays that are as beautiful as the short story it is based upon.I am not really confused by the essay, but could understand why someone else might say so. In the body of the essay, you "listed" color imageries after another, and for those who haven't read the essay, this could be very confusing. To avoid this confusiion, I think you could have found stronger associations between them and grouped them together and avoid using lists!I loved the attention grabbing introduction and the poetic conclusion.
- 03/06/2003
- 12:07:59
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
This is a great essay. I could tell that you have done a lot of research.However, your conclusion and introduction doesn't fit with the rest of the essay. In my opinion,the introduction sounds very rigid and forced. I understand that you need to state the thesis, but you could have worded it better than "On the position of Nuclear Power, I feel that I am for the argument." You should have just started with "Nuclear power is a useful source of energy that we should continue using." The "I feel" and "I think" would have been implied. Excessive misuse of "I" really throws readers off.Also, as Basstard mentioned, it would have been nice to show the readers the other side of the argument by including information about power plants, etc...But as I said before, great essay. If you smoothed out the intro and conclusion, I bet you would have received a much higher score.
- 03/06/2003
- 11:52:58
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
This essay answers the issues raised by the objective. It may not completely address all causes of the Great Depression, but what does? kudos to you.
- 03/06/2003
- 11:34:35
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
You nailed this wonderful poem at its core and at the same time showed some profound insights in your "original" interpretation. Good job!
- 03/06/2003
- 02:20:13
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
This was a fine biography of Elvis Presley, but you could have improved it by adding fun quotes and interesting anecdotes, especially in the introduction as an "attention grabber."
- 02/06/2003
- 04:55:18
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
A very informative and well-developed essay!
- 02/06/2003
- 04:42:21
- Score: 4 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
This was a difficult essay to undertake. You raised some good points but needed to develop your ideas further. Avoid using logical fallacies--hasty generalizations for one. I could just see the opposing debate team flooring your with counter arguments. Overall, it's not very persuasive and underdeveloped.
- 02/06/2003
- 04:36:55
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.