Please read your essays before turning them in. "So What" and "like in the ear" is slang language and should not be included in an educational essay.
- 26/03/2007
- 02:04:36
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Please reread your essays before you turn them in. Your essay was very rough and needed to be re writen. Did you copy and paste a lot? And where is your conclusion?
- 20/02/2007
- 16:08:46
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
I'm in school to be a teacher, thank you from the bottem of my heart. I need to read this.
- 02/02/2007
- 06:25:23
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Your essay was very hard for me to read. Please double check your essay before submitting it.
- 02/02/2007
- 02:12:18
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This essay need lots of work in grammer and sentence stucture. For the subjuct matter it is to short and not very well thought out.
- 26/01/2007
- 02:26:34
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
The reason I question your title is because your essay is small for the subject matter. An overview of cancer would have been a lot better. Yes, you did have some information about cancer, but there is a lot more that can be said about this disease.You need to work on your quotations and grammer. I would have given you a B on this paper.
- 26/01/2007
- 02:05:29
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Please use quotes and page numbers when you have sources.
- 18/01/2007
- 09:53:11
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Your writting skills are not bad, but you do need to double check your work before turning it in. I found many spelling errors and sentence errors. Keeping working on it and you will see your grades improve over time.
- 18/01/2007
- 08:31:27
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
this was a well writen and very informative essay. Good job.
- 25/08/2005
- 12:05:47
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
I liked the beginning, but you really could have added to this paper. It seems to fall flat at the end.
- 08/07/2005
- 19:35:37
- Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
where are your work cited....No one can really use your essy for research without having that important information.
- 09/06/2005
- 23:01:06
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
Where is your own words? In almost every paragraph you use a quote. This is not your work then. You should have two quotes per pag3e at the most.
- 12/05/2005
- 07:35:51
- Score: 0 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Great job with your quotes and your work cited.
- 10/05/2005
- 08:37:35
- Score: 0 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Great job eith your quotes and your work cited.
- 10/05/2005
- 08:37:07
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This was a good topic to write about, but an essay is more then a run on papragraph. A normal essay has 4 to 5 paragraps with 5 to 7 sentences each. next time try to use quotes...you can find information on the net.
- 06/05/2005
- 08:37:33
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Your essay was short, but still had great facts. Would have love for the easy to be longer and full of more information. Thanks for the reference list.
- 06/05/2005
- 08:29:23
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I love the way to told your story!!! Great job....writing about your own life is hard to do. But, I hope it opened up new doors for you.
- 06/05/2005
- 07:51:37
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
i can tell you used sources...you need to list them and give them the credit.
- 04/05/2005
- 00:50:38
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
nice work...great feeling involved!!!
- 04/05/2005
- 00:39:52
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Where did your facts come from?
- 04/05/2005
- 00:34:22
- Score: 1 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
This was a weel planned essay...very enjoyalbe to read.
- 21/04/2005
- 03:51:00
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Your essay is short, but a good start for your grade level. Next time try to do a lot more reseach about his war times and add that in to the report.
- 06/04/2005
- 03:48:40
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
Your sources seem a little out dated. You should have done a seach on the internet for more current data. Your paper is well written, if a little out dated on the facts.
- 02/04/2005
- 19:17:03
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Your paper was nice, but you need to break each subject into its own paragraph.
- 02/04/2005
- 18:30:44
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this looks like class notes, not an essay
- 31/03/2005
- 13:41:34
- Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
I really liked the way you opened up this essay.
- 31/03/2005
- 13:22:56
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Your opening and closing paragraphs need work. Most of your work is in one long paragraph. You need to have sources to back up your recommendation.
- 31/03/2005
- 12:47:42
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
I like the topic you choose to write about. Your paper does need work, but not bad for your grade level. Do work on ending a paper with a conculsion. A teacher would rather have a longer paper then an incomplete one.
- 31/03/2005
- 12:40:15
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I enjoyed your essay, but it was a little disorginized. You should have put the pets before her death. Also, no conclusion was written. Further more what award was she given? Did it have a name?
- 26/03/2005
- 13:41:06
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You did bring up many parts that should have been in the movie, but I disagree with you. If not for Harry Potter being made into a movie, I would never have read the books. I'm a huge fan now...all do to Hollywood!!
- 22/03/2005
- 11:41:13
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eassay needs more current research see link.http://www.sciam.com/article.cfm?articleID=000D19A5-F60B-1F26-8D4A80A84189EEDF&sc=I100322
- 22/03/2005
- 11:12:10
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I reeally liked how you compared Poe's experiences to his writting. I wonder if the killings in Tale and The Cask were something he experienced some how. Or did he just have a twisted sence of humor/horror? Thank you for giving me more insight to Poe.
- 22/03/2005
- 10:51:23
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Your essay was a little rough in spots. Try reading it out loud. You might see were the changes need to be made. I might not agree with all your facts, but you were very good at putting both sides of the agruement in your essay.
- 22/03/2005
- 10:33:12
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Your essay stareted out great, but the eaasy just seemed to stop. You need to work on the ending a little to smooth it out. I do agree that your sources are old, but so is the Bible. And people quote that everyday.Nice job overall. Keep working to improve your ending.
- 22/03/2005
- 10:27:43
- Score: 3 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
Nice essay...really great detail. I was hoping for a better conculsion.
- 22/03/2005
- 10:16:01
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
nice essay, should be new title, but good comparision. If keeping title it really should talk about the changes the US did after Lincoln was killed.
- 22/03/2005
- 10:01:45
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
Your paper was ok, to really make a point on how great these writters were I would have listed more of their writtings. And the great impact they had on changing the colonists minds.
- 18/03/2005
- 10:19:55
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
nice job with the long quotes.
- 18/03/2005
- 10:11:01
- Score: 0 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Please learn to use spell check. Your eassy was very hard to read due to many errors in spelling. You might want to read your essay out loud, you will find many spelling and grammer mistakes.
- 18/03/2005
- 09:28:43
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Your essay was very informative. Good job with the facts and truths of this War. Nice quote usage.
- 18/03/2005
- 09:14:56
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
John,The opening on this essay was much improved over your last two. I really enjoyed reading your work. I now have a deeper understanding of Browning's work. I will have to reread this poem, so that I can see it through new eyes.
- 18/03/2005
- 08:55:46
- Score: 23 out of 28 people found this comment useful.
john,Nice work done here. I do agree with another comment about the over use of "This essay is about, or The purpose of this essay...." I believe you can write the opening a little better, but otherwise this is a wonderful essay. As a future teach I give it an A!!
- 18/03/2005
- 08:48:15
- Score: 19 out of 24 people found this comment useful.
I've always loved this poem. John, You did a great job expaining this piece of art.Thanks for giving me a heads up on reading your essays.
- 18/03/2005
- 08:01:26
- Score: 29 out of 34 people found this comment useful.
You need to use sources to back up your statements. What tumors??? Dateline did a good story on cheating with cell phones, you could have used this as a sources.
- 15/03/2005
- 09:15:12
- Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
You need to incorporate the questions into your paragraphs. This was a good essay, but would be a smoother read if you made whole paragraphs out of the questions. And, Yes the 1st book is more interesting to me, too.
- 15/03/2005
- 08:58:38
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
This easy is hard to read do to many wording mistakes. You might read your paper out loud before turning it in. You will find many mistakes this way.
- 15/03/2005
- 08:49:54
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
Your information was right on target. Good job with this essay. I really enjoyed reading it.
- 11/03/2005
- 11:13:25
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
Your essay needs a little work, but the subect matter was interesting.
- 11/03/2005
- 11:07:26
- Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
this was a very informative essay.
- 10/03/2005
- 20:46:43
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
I FOUND THIS ESSAY TO BE THOUGHTFUL. THIS IS A HARD SUBJECT FOR SOMEONE SO YOUNG.
- 09/03/2005
- 04:20:21
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
YOU SEEM TO HAVE A FEW RUN ON SENTECES. THIS MADE THIS ESSAY HARD TO READ. PLUS, YOU ADDED SOME SENTENCE INTO YOUR ESSAY THAT DID NOT SEEM TO BE NEEDED.
- 09/03/2005
- 04:11:34
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
PLEASE READ AN ESSAY OUT LOUD TO YOUR SELF BEFORE TURNING IT IN. YOU WILL FIND YOUR MISTAKES EASIER TO SPOT THAT WAY. PLUS, PLEASE DO A LITTLE MORE RESEARCH AND ADD IN WHY THINGS HAPPENED. SUCH AS: WHY HE WAS NOT PUBLISHED FOR TWO YEARS. THAT WOULD HAVE MADE YOUR ESSAY A LOT BETTER.
- 09/03/2005
- 03:51:39
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
I thought this essay was very rough. It has a lot of short and choppie sentences. It did not flow correctly. This author needs to learn what a fragmented sentence is. Please look into getting a bbok like The Little, Brown Handbook. It will help you a great deal when you reach college English.
- 14/06/2004
- 08:48:15
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.