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  • Two thumbs up

    I thought you essay was very well written. It was a very descriptive essay in that you had examples cited for every point. My only concern is that a few of your paragraphs were just sentences in the middle of your paper. Look over your structure agian. Overall... two thumbs up.
    • 06/10/2003
    • 10:14:35
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Make it a little more organized

    Your essay is thorough but it has no structure. You have no paragraphs, its just one big page. You also show references but have no bibliography.
    • 06/10/2003
    • 09:57:35
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • I enjoyed this essay

    I really enjoyed reading your essay, it was very touching. I think you could get a little more descriptive in some aspects. Another thing, a lot of your sentences start with "I" so I would look it over and see if you could change some of your sentence structures. Agian, I think you have a basis of a good essay going.
    • 06/10/2003
    • 09:34:53
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Overall decent

    I thought your essay overall was pretty decent. I liked a lot of the descripitve words you used. My only concern with the essay was the tense you used. I would look over it and make sure that it all fits together and its going in the same direction.
    • 06/10/2003
    • 09:21:54
    • Score: 56 out of 56 people found this comment useful.