Abortion-Pro Choice.

It's a pretty good essay, and people, dont just vote the essay bad just because you dont agree with the opinion. If they make good points in the essay then it is a good essay regardless of whether or not you like their viewpoint or not. Also, if you would like to see my essay on the Jewish view on abortion click on my name and you will see it.

I don't believe in abortion everyone should have a chance at life also there is treatment for mothers with hiv so that it wont be pased to the baby.

Abortion is wrong its not fare on the baby

Beware when making rash statements. "Worshipers of God regard abortion as murdering a soul, claiming that God gives each being a soul at the time of conception." You should note that not all Christians have the same viewpoints (e.g. protsetant semi-ambivalence and catholic disgust of the practice). Again, "A fetus is nothing more than a glob of tissue, a meaningless, lifeless conglomeration of cells." will appear condescending and possibly offensive (I refer you to dixie1's comment) to your readers, which is something to avoid when writing persuasively. Likewise, your comment of the welfare system's "drain[ing] from our tax dollars" presents a different point that is seperate from what you are trying to cover. Don't even mention this; it could serve to alienate even more readers.


"Adoption is generally not any better for an abandoned child. In most cases the mother of an unwanted child is very young and inexperienced or too poor to take care of even herself. The child would end up malnourished, given little options for a successful life and won't receive the proper attention and love a planned birth child would." Are you really telling the readers that a child we *definitely* be malnourished and neglected if "put up" for adoption? If not, revisit your use of the language.


When using science as reasoning, make sure you have reputable sources cited. This was noticeably absent from your point about HIV/AIDS possibly being passed on from mother to child.


"Morals should not interfere with the topic of abortion but rather, should be based upon reason and personal belief." Funny; I would have thought that's exactly what morals are. Then again, I am American.


You write, clearly, with a passion. You should, however, seek to use this constructively through use of proper language. Your propensity for using brash terms coupled with minor mechanical errors takes away fomr your overall message, though.