"Mates at War" is written by me and teachers commented on the types of pronouns used and said they could be a little better.

Essay by powerpointHigh School, 11th gradeB-, June 2007

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It was a cold day October 15 2002 and I woke up at 1.35 am in hot flushes it happens every night I cant stop thinking about the Vietnam war I has haunted me all my life. I strolled down to the kitchen for my medication and a drink of cold water but I am still shaking as I go to pick my broken glass up I look at my old riffle hang up on display and I think back to the time I was in a big state of fear with death lurking around every corner.

Jack said to me "Harry get down"I saw the sniper in the tree lining me up waiting to fire and if jack had not seen the sniper from up there I would have been dead. I bailed for the mats to cover myself and Jack said to me and Harry "I don't know how we are going to get out of this one but I haven't seen the sniper give orders about our land mines so maybe he doesn't no.

We need to force them to the land mines and make a run for the jet I will create the diversion and you two run for it they won't see you and promise me you won't look back no matter what happens and if i am not there in 5 minuets leave without me".

Harry and I both argued in disagreement but Jack our mate and general we both new was no person to be arguing with in this situation. Jack Harry and I have been mates since we were three years old we grew up together and Harry and I both thought of Jack as an older brother he always looked out for us no matter what the circumstances and throughout school...