This is rather brief, you make some interesting points but ultimately you need to expand them more to produce a more developed response.
- 01/11/2005
- 19:45:38
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
I'd just like to say I didn't make the silly little comment at the bottom, it appears a user who I allowed permission to acess my account has been absuing it. So please stop the negative ratings!
- 31/10/2004
- 06:49:40
- Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
I'm astonished someone actually gave you a negative rating, the essay was beautifully written - a pleasure to read.
- 12/06/2004
- 07:16:21
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
I admit your essay isn't highly praised for no reason however something which added that slightest imperfection to your work - your use of first person. It really irritates me! Is it an American thing? I don't know but for me it's taken away some of the brilliance of your work but wonderfully analysed so well done.
- 01/06/2004
- 16:58:31
- Score: 35 out of 42 people found this comment useful.
It has a delightful ending and isnt at all bad for a 6th grader! If it wasn't for that strange term called loyalty I would say you were a better storyteller than my little sister!
- 01/06/2004
- 16:50:32
- Score: 16 out of 16 people found this comment useful.
It's nice then and again to read an engaging + well articulated essay. Well done. I would add crticisms like the others but will refrain from doing so since you're only a tenth grader and that essay was of a high quality and not at all bad for someone your age. You should have recieved more than 85%.
- 01/06/2004
- 16:34:22
- Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
Hmm it's not a creative masterpiece but it is quite quirky/pretty. Take that as a compliment as I'm quite critical :-)
- 01/06/2004
- 16:28:18
- Score: 26 out of 30 people found this comment useful.
Perhaps not the masterpiece 'Ruskipaul' thinks, but a good solid peice of work. I thought it was slighlty clichéd to be original but nevertheless I'm giving you a smiley face :-)
- 01/06/2004
- 06:01:21
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
It's not often you find an essay that discusses a serious issue in an engaging and eloquent manner. Well done!
- 01/06/2004
- 05:18:32
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
I don't think it was racist at all or his/her use of the word had racist undertones, it was just a clumsy word to use.
- 30/05/2004
- 13:01:28
- Score: 2 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
I don't see why someone gave you a bad smiley for that! It's clearly not a terrible essay! The injustice! :)
- 30/05/2004
- 12:25:56
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Stop being so pendantic! I didn't have spell check/grammer and again I stress this was a timed essay completed early morning when I should have been getting my precious beauty sleep. Satisfied?! :)
- 30/05/2004
- 12:20:48
- Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
I must confess this isn't the best essay I've written - well firstly it was a timed essay and written a few months ago early morning! However I think there are some interesting elements I've talked about that may be of use to anyone studying 'Othello'. Feel free to criticise my unfinished conclusion. Strangely enough I recieved an A- for this so there you go. xxx
- 30/05/2004
- 09:46:09
- Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
Although i must say your teachers could have set a more demanding essay rather than focusing solely on this resolution - as it makes the essay a tad repetitive but you have done well.
- 30/05/2004
- 09:30:17
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
I realise that the essay needs reworking, any comments will be helpful - thanks :)
- 03/03/2004
- 13:15:48
- Score: 0 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
This essay starts of really well, however towards the end it disintegrates, but as mentioned the essay has some real potential if you reworked it particularly.
- 03/03/2004
- 13:13:02
- Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
This is well written, coherent and written with confidence.
- 15/02/2004
- 13:48:23
- Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
This is so well written, hard to believe it's the work of a tenth grader!
- 30/12/2003
- 08:29:39
- Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
I don't agree, in fact most of the communsim regimes have fallen - why? Becuase the system is oppresive, extreme and always corrupted. Sure it sounds fair, but in reality in a capitalist dominated world it won't work - Cuba may be seen as a success story for communsim but that's only on the surface. I think more than fifteen million people were killed under Stalin's regime on the idea of eliminating the 'Kulaks'- what does that say? I think it's a good essay, but some ideas need to be more developed.
- 21/12/2003
- 08:44:54
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
u spelt description wrong in ur title!
- 06/12/2003
- 16:13:01
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Well it's two paragraphs clearly
- 06/12/2003
- 08:13:21
- Score: 6 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
i meant long term negative consequences about presidential powers, as well as there neing many short term negative consequences thanxs v. much - sigh (ppl should really try to read an essay before deciding to go mad!)
- 04/12/2003
- 17:05:02
- Score: 8 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
The essay has nothing to do with the present South and North Korea. Simple as that the US failed to drive out communism as they aimed - thus the present north Korea is the result! Read the essay not because you feel like a patriotic american!
- 04/12/2003
- 12:10:32
- Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
I don't think it's that great! You may spot some Spelling errors but it couldn't be helped!
- 02/12/2003
- 17:32:51
- Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
i wish i could rate it and say it's great but i know it needs lots of work, so if u have ne words of advice please do comment! Thanks! x
- 15/08/2003
- 12:51:22
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
I really like this, not only is it clear but you've structured it well and got all your points across which gives your essay a lot of clarity!
- 06/08/2003
- 10:18:12
- Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
My essay is the best without a doubt the best.It is insighful, exploring every detail
- 26/05/2003
- 13:29:03
- Score: 7 out of 20 people found this comment useful.