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  • Hmm.

    This is rather brief, you make some interesting points but ultimately you need to expand them more to produce a more developed response.
    • 01/11/2005
    • 19:45:38
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Not me

    I'd just like to say I didn't make the silly little comment at the bottom, it appears a user who I allowed permission to acess my account has been absuing it. So please stop the negative ratings!
    • 31/10/2004
    • 06:49:40
    • Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Congrats

    I'm astonished someone actually gave you a negative rating, the essay was beautifully written - a pleasure to read.
    • 12/06/2004
    • 07:16:21
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Fine except...

    I admit your essay isn't highly praised for no reason however something which added that slightest imperfection to your work - your use of first person. It really irritates me! Is it an American thing? I don't know but for me it's taken away some of the brilliance of your work but wonderfully analysed so well done.
    • 01/06/2004
    • 16:58:31
    • Score: 35 out of 42 people found this comment useful.
  • In agreement with most of Johnjip's comments

    It has a delightful ending and isnt at all bad for a 6th grader! If it wasn't for that strange term called loyalty I would say you were a better storyteller than my little sister!
    • 01/06/2004
    • 16:50:32
    • Score: 16 out of 16 people found this comment useful.
  • Great

    It's nice then and again to read an engaging + well articulated essay. Well done. I would add crticisms like the others but will refrain from doing so since you're only a tenth grader and that essay was of a high quality and not at all bad for someone your age. You should have recieved more than 85%.
    • 01/06/2004
    • 16:34:22
    • Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Pretty

    Hmm it's not a creative masterpiece but it is quite quirky/pretty. Take that as a compliment as I'm quite critical :-)
    • 01/06/2004
    • 16:28:18
    • Score: 26 out of 30 people found this comment useful.
  • Not bad

    Perhaps not the masterpiece 'Ruskipaul' thinks, but a good solid peice of work. I thought it was slighlty clichéd to be original but nevertheless I'm giving you a smiley face :-)
    • 01/06/2004
    • 06:01:21
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • This is brilliant

    It's not often you find an essay that discusses a serious issue in an engaging and eloquent manner. Well done!
    • 01/06/2004
    • 05:18:32
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • To Ruskipaul

    I don't think it was racist at all or his/her use of the word had racist undertones, it was just a clumsy word to use.
    • 30/05/2004
    • 13:01:28
    • Score: 2 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Well done

    I don't see why someone gave you a bad smiley for that! It's clearly not a terrible essay! The injustice! :)
    • 30/05/2004
    • 12:25:56
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Shock and horror

    Stop being so pendantic! I didn't have spell check/grammer and again I stress this was a timed essay completed early morning when I should have been getting my precious beauty sleep. Satisfied?! :)
    • 30/05/2004
    • 12:20:48
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • My excuse

    I must confess this isn't the best essay I've written - well firstly it was a timed essay and written a few months ago early morning! However I think there are some interesting elements I've talked about that may be of use to anyone studying 'Othello'. Feel free to criticise my unfinished conclusion. Strangely enough I recieved an A- for this so there you go. xxx
    • 30/05/2004
    • 09:46:09
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • A great essay

    Although i must say your teachers could have set a more demanding essay rather than focusing solely on this resolution - as it makes the essay a tad repetitive but you have done well.
    • 30/05/2004
    • 09:30:17
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • My essay

    I realise that the essay needs reworking, any comments will be helpful - thanks :)
    • 03/03/2004
    • 13:15:48
    • Score: 0 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Has potential

    This essay starts of really well, however towards the end it disintegrates, but as mentioned the essay has some real potential if you reworked it particularly.
    • 03/03/2004
    • 13:13:02
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Brilliant

    This is well written, coherent and written with confidence.
    • 15/02/2004
    • 13:48:23
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Excellent

    This is so well written, hard to believe it's the work of a tenth grader!
    • 30/12/2003
    • 08:29:39
    • Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • ...

    I don't agree, in fact most of the communsim regimes have fallen - why? Becuase the system is oppresive, extreme and always corrupted. Sure it sounds fair, but in reality in a capitalist dominated world it won't work - Cuba may be seen as a success story for communsim but that's only on the surface. I think more than fifteen million people were killed under Stalin's regime on the idea of eliminating the 'Kulaks'- what does that say? I think it's a good essay, but some ideas need to be more developed.
    • 21/12/2003
    • 08:44:54
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Spelling

    u spelt description wrong in ur title!
    • 06/12/2003
    • 16:13:01
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • :-)

    Well it's two paragraphs clearly
    • 06/12/2003
    • 08:13:21
    • Score: 6 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • In addition

    i meant long term negative consequences about presidential powers, as well as there neing many short term negative consequences thanxs v. much - sigh (ppl should really try to read an essay before deciding to go mad!)
    • 04/12/2003
    • 17:05:02
    • Score: 8 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Read the essay

    The essay has nothing to do with the present South and North Korea. Simple as that the US failed to drive out communism as they aimed - thus the present north Korea is the result! Read the essay not because you feel like a patriotic american!
    • 04/12/2003
    • 12:10:32
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Don't agree

    I don't think it's that great! You may spot some Spelling errors but it couldn't be helped!
    • 02/12/2003
    • 17:32:51
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • From the author

    i wish i could rate it and say it's great but i know it needs lots of work, so if u have ne words of advice please do comment! Thanks! x
    • 15/08/2003
    • 12:51:22
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • This is great

    I really like this, not only is it clear but you've structured it well and got all your points across which gives your essay a lot of clarity!
    • 06/08/2003
    • 10:18:12
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • The best

    My essay is the best without a doubt the best.It is insighful, exploring every detail
    • 26/05/2003
    • 13:29:03
    • Score: 7 out of 20 people found this comment useful.