I thought you essay was very well written. It was a very descriptive essay in that you had examples cited for every point. My only concern is that a few of your paragraphs were just sentences in the middle of your paper. Look over your structure agian. Overall... two thumbs up.
- 06/10/2003
- 10:14:35
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
Your essay is thorough but it has no structure. You have no paragraphs, its just one big page. You also show references but have no bibliography.
- 06/10/2003
- 09:57:35
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
I really enjoyed reading your essay, it was very touching. I think you could get a little more descriptive in some aspects. Another thing, a lot of your sentences start with "I" so I would look it over and see if you could change some of your sentence structures. Agian, I think you have a basis of a good essay going.
- 06/10/2003
- 09:34:53
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
I thought your essay overall was pretty decent. I liked a lot of the descripitve words you used. My only concern with the essay was the tense you used. I would look over it and make sure that it all fits together and its going in the same direction.
- 06/10/2003
- 09:21:54
- Score: 56 out of 56 people found this comment useful.