I think that fort the purposes of this paper, the essay was too short. If I were a university student (as shown in your level for the essay) I would not dare hand this into a teacher this is Junior High writing (length wise).Yes the spelling and organization of the text was above average, the text lacked in quantity therefore missing out on much needed information.
- 20/09/2009
- 23:59:51
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Mainly, a well done well thought out essay, if I were to pick something to improve on I'd have to say your first paragraph, it doesn't catch the reader's attention very well.
- 20/09/2009
- 23:01:22
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This essay was spectacular! It kept me -the reader- interested, surprised and completely agreeing with all the information. However if I were to use the H1N1 information now it would be slightly out of date. Besides that, great work, I will be looking forward to more.
- 18/09/2009
- 17:51:21
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This essay was perfect for my assignment. Great good, keep it up!
- 18/09/2009
- 16:40:18
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This essay was very similar to my own, worked perfectly! I just found the body setup to be a little out of place.
- 17/09/2009
- 21:38:06
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