This essay could have used better organization -- less paragraphs, more condensed and focused content.
- 02/11/2003
- 13:32:55
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
Interesting essay. Next time maybe you should consider single-spacing to make it easier to read...
- 02/11/2003
- 13:20:34
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
You seem to have a lot of one-liners without definition and subsequently do not transition well. The thesis is also unclear...
- 02/11/2003
- 13:13:21
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
A touching portrayal with good descriptive imagery.
- 01/11/2003
- 12:01:06
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.