Elementary school and junior high school are the times in a child's life where he or she would get made fun of most. There is a lot of teasing, as well as, unnecessary words that are said to one another. During this period, a child must learn how to deal with words and how to stand up for himself or herself. However, if that child has a weakness, it would be a much harder time. Gay couples should not be able to get married and adopt a child.
Throughout many time periods in a child's life, that child experiences many words of ridicule. Elementary and junior high school are the times when these children start and become harsher. If a child comes from a gay couple, that child would get made fun of much more than a child from a straight or "normal" couple. It would be a greater task or even challenge for that child.
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Your \"thesis\", which I assume is the last sentence of your intro (and also your title) comes completely out of left field. Your intro talks about how hard it is to be a kid, then all of a sudden you throw in a statement about gay people adopting! Not a very good lead-in!
In your second paragraph, you draw some pretty farfetched conclusions. You imply that teasing automatically leads to children not aspiring to be anything. You also throw around the word \"cursed\", which to me sounds silly and overly dramatic.
In the next paragraph, you talk about dwelling on the past and how it affected your friend. Then at the end you throw in a sentence about school shooters! Where did that come from??
You state a lot of opinions as facts in this essay and you have no substance to back up any of your ideas.
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