People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experience, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer.
In our days most of young people after school are going to college. Some of them are looking for new skills to get a good well-paid job with huge salary, others because of their parents, and some or to have an opportunity to place a mark in a check box ÃÂBachelor degreeÃÂ or ÃÂUniversity degreeÃÂ. In my native country after school some of male young people after school are going to college or university not to go to the military army. When I went to the college in my country, I had all of this reasons.
The First and the most important reason was militaryÃÂ Military service in our country is very difficult and dangerous.
A lot of young people after service in the army have got disabilities and psychological illnesses. This in not because of warÃÂ This is all about service regulations rules and relationships between fresh guys and experienced ones. In our days this is the most important reason for many young male people.
My Second reason was ÃÂto get an opportunity to place a mark in a check box ÃÂUniversity degreeÃÂ. In our country for many jobs it doesnÃÂt mater what is your major. It is more important whether you have university degree or not. This doesnÃÂt work with specific jobs, but usually most of people with university degrees working not in their main major. For example my major is mechanical engineering and I never work in this sphere. I was a driver, a salesman, manager. And now IÃÂm working at photo-video studio in a position of video...
Grammar Corrections
Overall a decent essay. You stay on topic for the most part, though not completely. There are some grammatically incorrect sentences. For example, the first sentence in the second paragraph. "In our days most of young people after school are going to college." The preposition "of" is unnecessary. Perhaps a better way to write the whole sentence would have been, "In our day and age, most young people will be going to college after school."
The last paragraph is a little unclear as well, but overall the essay is informative. I'm also curious, what country are you from?
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