Very well written, engagning, unique, and quite twisted;) The end took me by complete surprise!I'm curious to know what your teacher thought of this.....
- 25/02/2003
- 20:58:05
- Score: 12 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
The author seems passionate about the subject, and that shows in this essay. However, the organization is choppy if non-existant, and can be a bit confusing at times as to why he is telling us something. The paper serves as an excellent start, and could easily be re-worked into an excellent essay.
- 25/02/2003
- 20:40:47
- Score: 6 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
This essay raises many good questions. It's very well written for a seventh grade essay, and could easily be expanded upon.
- 25/02/2003
- 20:28:57
- Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
I'm currently half-way through a year long course in java, and up until now, I had no idea what the differenced were. I pretty much dove head first into programming as soon as I got a taste of it, so I never really knew anything about either java or C++. Fantastic essay!
- 25/02/2003
- 20:22:27
- Score: 18 out of 18 people found this comment useful.
I found this to be a wonderfully captivationg essay. The examples were perfect, and I could tell you placed a lot of time and effort into your observations. It makes me want to explore this subject on my own, which for me is a sign of an excellent essay!
- 24/02/2003
- 01:21:51
- Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
I found this to be a very informative and well written essay. However, the paragraphs may be a bit short and jump around a tad. Some paragraphs could be combined, or need a transition between the two. Other than that, it's excellent.
- 24/02/2003
- 00:56:03
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
The eassy is well written, but the introduction is a bit lacking. The intro is what catures the readers attention, and most often contains a "hook." If the essay had an anecdote, quote, facts/statistics, or something to engage the reader, it would be an excellent essay.
- 21/02/2003
- 07:45:17
- Score: 11 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
As far a syntax goes, you do not need quotation marks surrounding each sentence. All that is needed is a quotation mark at the beginning of the first sentence spoken, and one at the end of the last. (that is, if there is no commentary inbetween) Other than that, it is a good piece of writing that gives a glimpse of army life.
- 21/02/2003
- 07:32:36
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.