I don't think the Chinese words you portrayed in the essay are really that relevant to anything. Plus, a lot of Chinese words are wrong.
- 16/02/2006
- 22:33:48
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You described the various Chinese cultural elements very well!
- 16/02/2006
- 21:37:32
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Your essay is really informative and lenghthy. I really love how you described each of the main characters in detail.
- 16/02/2006
- 21:34:10
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However, please avoid using "you" in the essay. It's informal.
- 08/02/2006
- 22:36:13
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You did a good job in illustrating the life story of Julius Caesar. However, I personally think that your writing style is not mature enough for a 12th grader. Moreover, your introduction lacks the "catchiness" needed and your conclusion fails in proving the element that pulls your essay together with the thesis.
- 08/02/2006
- 22:30:43
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