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  • Personal Essay

    Mikepnt, it is what you would call a personal essay and so does not need scientific facts or evidence.
    • 08/03/2010
    • 17:02:07
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  • NICE

    A nice, informative essay for 10th grade, well done. The only thing is when you say "Loch Ness Lake". That's not accurate because "loch" is the Scottish word for "lake". We don't have lakes here, just lochs. LochNess just means Lake Ness.
    • 24/02/2008
    • 12:57:18
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  • Good

    A credible account of the issues surrounding illegal downloading, although, perhaps a little too concise? All the same, nicely written.
    • 17/02/2008
    • 12:55:45
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  • Very Nice

    A clear, concise account of Irish immigration to the states. Well done.
    • 17/02/2008
    • 12:50:40
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  • Lovely Essay

    This essay is a pleasure to read. You paragraph well, your argument is well structured (i.e. setting out each case methodically and examining it) and unbiased. You introduce your topic and conclude it well. An excellent piece of work. My only advice is to brush up on your spelling. There are a few spelling errors here which can easily be avoided: you put 'loose' instead of 'lose' for example. Also, do you possibly mean 'bestowed' instead of 'bestrode?'Nevertheless, these are easy to sort. You have written a good essay!
    • 10/02/2008
    • 07:36:50
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  • Good

    This is short, but concise. An informative, well-structured essay, and you have included a bibliography. Good!
    • 05/02/2008
    • 14:30:47
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Lovely

    This is a really comprehensive account of the start of the first world war. You make good use of quotes and references, and you have a lovely style - a pleasure to read!
    • 05/02/2008
    • 14:29:42
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  • Good

    Good effort - maybe try to make it a wee bit longer next time but.
    • 28/01/2008
    • 13:08:12
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  • Of Mice and Men

    You're missing the point Johnjjp. Curley's wife is the one who is demonised by all the other men on the ranch. It is a misogynist, cold world that she lives in and Curley does not even allow her to leave the house. Curley's wife punishes Curley for a reason, Curley is brutal to her for no reason. She is barely allowed to even look at another man, but he is allowed to go to the whore house. She is not even allowed a name in the story - represented only in her relation to men, as Curley's possession. Why the hell should she work at a marriage like that? She is just another one of the miserable characters fated to be trapped in a lonely existence forever.
    • 12/11/2007
    • 11:51:57
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  • Story of Creation

    What exactly is this? If it is supposed to be a summary of the events in the bible then you should state it. As it stands we do not know if you mean this to be taken as fact. We don't know if you mean this is your own version of the theory of creation, just a summary of the bible or what. You need to label your essays appropriately.
    • 09/10/2007
    • 06:47:25
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  • No evidence

    Where is your evidence for all of this? You really need statistics to back up your arguments. For example, that women are more polite and have a tendency to get bogged down in details. You really can't just make statements like that without backing them up. Without any evidence your argument crumbles to nothing. This could be a really good essay if you just backed up your arguments.
    • 01/09/2007
    • 12:21:44
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Wonderful!

    What a wonderful this essay is. It truly was a pleasure to read! You give an excellent analysis and comparison of both American Beauty and The Great Gatsby. Well done! A+!
    • 29/06/2007
    • 11:59:18
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Good

    An excellent well-written, well-cited essay. You have a lovely style of writing which made your essay a pleasure to read.
    • 11/05/2007
    • 10:19:36
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  • Career as Marriage

    Good; I like your slant on a career - it is indeed very like a marriage relationship. You paragraph well - something I don't see often on this site. Well done.
    • 11/05/2007
    • 10:07:01
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Youth

    I think this is perhaps what we might term as 'ageist'! I would not necessarily dismiss 'old' people with such sweeping generalizations, but I suppose it is what the majority of the workforce think. A few grammatical errors, but (as I assume this is written by someone whose second language is English) quite well written all the same. The conclusion at the end is striking and rings rather true. You might have made it a little longer though. Otherwise, well done!
    • 11/05/2007
    • 10:03:27
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  • Also, coming back to this...

    johnjjp - she doesn't even mention anything ABOUT the soviet union/eastern Europe. The question is about private property rights in relation to the Communist Manifesto and she answers the question. The Soviet Union was led by Stalin, an exceptionally evil man, who corrupted the Communist theory. Thus, the Soviet Union cannot be held as a prime example. Countries which were initially capitalist, such as Germany, and Italy, also managed to produce fascists who took over and turned it into a dictatorship. The Soviet Union is no different - it was also run by a dictator and it is irrelevant which system is used since both capitalism and communism have been corrupted by fascists in the past. I feel like I know more about this now since also have finished an essay on it!You say you can't think of a single capitalist country where "dissenting citizens and other 'undesirables' have been tortured and butchered"...well, there is one right under your nose! AMERICA. George Bush is openly allowing the torture of people in Guantanamo Bay. Furthermore, these people are being detained there without trial. The Irish news at the moment are reporting disputes between the Irish authorities and the United States because US planes are stopping off in Ireland to refuel before they go on to middle eastern countries. In these planes are American citizens who are being transported by the US authorities to these countries so they can be legally tortured, as under US law this is illegal. America, the ultimate capitalist country, fares little better than many dictatorships under close scrutiny.
    • 14/03/2007
    • 02:45:25
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  • Swans

    Swans might look pretty - but they are also extremely violent animals! In Britain, its illegal to kill a swan because they are protected by the Queen.I didn't think your essay was very good. You might have cited this article to speak of, or at least quoted from it. I would also like to dispute the notion that 317 words constitutes an essay at any level past that of an eight year old. As eight year olds are unlikely to be able to use words such as "diligent" and "misconception", leading me to belief that this essay was definitely written by an adult or adolescent, both of which should know better than to submit essays of just over 300 words. Try a bit harder next time.
    • 05/03/2007
    • 09:52:42
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  • Excellent

    Brilliant essay; informative and interesting. The only correction I would make is that the plague continued well into the 16th century and possibly the beginning of the 17th.
    • 01/03/2007
    • 14:16:55
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  • Not a PHD grade A

    I don't know what University you are studying at, but where I come from this would definitely not achieve a grade A at first year undergraduate level, let alone Phd.Where are your secondary sources? Your secondary criticism? Where are the in-depth arguments and the critical analysis?I'm sorry, while this might be a good attempt for a high school student, this is not at University level, and is DEFINITELY not a grade A Phd.
    • 26/02/2007
    • 17:15:43
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  • Refreshing

    It was very refreshing to read this on this site. Most people seem to be brainwashed. Just out of interest, are you American? I have an American friend who told me she thinks that the educational system in the US is set up so as to blind citizens from the evils that the government does.
    • 06/02/2007
    • 09:38:02
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  • Abortion

    This is a good essay - there are lots of statistics, facts and it is extremely informative. The trouble with writing essays on controversial issues such as this is the danger of getting caught up in the debate. You stay neutral pretty well except for the first and last paragraphs. While it is fine to state your opinion, you should make sure that it is clear that it is YOUR opinion. I think what weakens this essay is where you say that the pro-life argument is stronger. You state it as fact when it is really sujective and you don't clarify that its your own opinion. If it is a FACT that pro-life arguments are stronger then you need to say WHY and prove that it is.My only other suggestion is that you should perhaps talk more about the health risks of pregnancy to the woman. You mention a lot about the health risks of abortion, and these are true, but in actual fact the risks of giving birth to a baby are higher that the health risks of having an abortion.Other than that, this is a really good essay. Keep up the good work!
    • 31/01/2007
    • 07:33:56
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  • Nice

    By 'public' I suppose you mean 'state schools' - they are called different things in the UK. 'Public' I think is the word we use to describe you you would describe as a 'private' school, and a 'state' school here is a school run by the government. It's all so confusing!I liked your essay - I thought is was a lovely point about the diversity that state schools can bring, and about how they prepare you a lot more for life. I would agree with you on that.I don't know what its like in the US though, but over here (not so much in the South, but in the North of England, Ireland and Scotland) the state schools are so underfunded. Although my own school was a good school in terms of exam passes, it was in a really terrible condition. We have no sports facilities, the art department had no paints or materials. In the winter there would be buckets in all the corridors to catch the drips from the ceiling - because when it rained (which is practically every day in Scotland) all the ceilings would leak. Whenever it was windy all the windows would break or blow in. Parts of the building had to be cordoned off because the building itself was dangerously unsafe. It was damp, cold, miserable and our courtyard used to flood annually and we would have to wade through the water to get to our classes. The pipes would freeze annually and we would be left without heating when it was freezing cold outside and snowing. I could go on forever. It is not a nice environment to grow up in, and these sorts of schools are pretty much the norm in Scotland. It is depressing, demoralising and we were often (although we looked down on the public schoolies) a little jealous of their resources. Yet despite all that, our school used to get better exam grades every year than the local public school. So in saying that there must be something in hardship that makes people work!
    • 26/01/2007
    • 10:40:24
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • I dont think...

    that this is long enough to be classed an essay. It is only 200 odd words. Exlawyers comment is almost as long. This is ridiculous. Put a bit more effort into it, or at least a bit more time.
    • 26/01/2007
    • 10:28:18
    • Score: 0 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Good

    This is a very good essay (I take it you were supposed to write a persuasive essay and not a balanced one), so well done!One thing I would like to point out is that you mention Abortion was permissable in Roman times. Actually, in all of Europe, it was pretty much tolerated for thousands of years. Before 1200 AD they had more knowledge than we might imagine. Herbs, poisons and concoctions were all swallowed by women under the guidance of the wise women and most of the time it worked. When the plague hit Europe in the 14th century, and continued for a couple of hundred years, the population dropped by two-thirds. People in power began to worry about re-population and around this time the witch-hunts began. It is a strong theory, since 'witches' were traditionally women with medical knowledge, that the witch hunts were a means of cleansing the general public of birth-control and abortion knowledge, to force the world to repopulate. Only recently did birth control and abortion become available to the general public. My point is that back in those days the perspective was that abortion was a necessary evil. The perspective of the world only changed because it was forced to change so we could repopulate. For thousands of years people have practised abortion, and I think that believing that abortion is wrong, is just another perspective. It is not fact, but merely opinion.
    • 25/01/2007
    • 07:55:28
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  • Nice summary

    This was a nice summary of what is a really lovely film. I don't usually like Robin Williams but he is fantastic in this as Mr Keating.
    • 25/01/2007
    • 07:43:03
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  • Not an Essay

    I'm sorry, but writing 300 words does not constitute an essay. For all we know you might have taken three minutes to paraphrase this from a newspaper article. This is not an essay, it is far too short, and says nothing profound or informative. This is extremely basic information that anybody in the western world who has a brain or has watched the news, ever, would know.If I were you, I would get back to the drawing board, and next time spend a little longer there.
    • 07/01/2007
    • 12:00:00
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  • Teenage Pregnancy

    You need to fix your grammer, and I don't think your language should be so coloquial when you are speaking about so serious an issue. You don't actually say anything in this essay; it is essentially empty of meaning. Why do you include statistics categorizing teen pregnancies ethnically? What is your point? You do not explain any reasons behind this (I am no expert, but I imagine, for example, that less white americans get pregnant in their teens because a higher percentage of white people are middle class), or any possible social problems that lead to teenage pregnancy. You do not suggest any solutions to teenage pregnancy.For example, you talk about teens having sex while the girl is on her period to prevent pregnancy, yet you do not explain why they feel the need to do that. For example, are they uninformed about condoms or other methods of contraception? Or are they unable to access contraception? In fact, you mention nothing about contraception at all! In an essay about pregnancy! You are far too opinionated without being able to back your opinions up. You condemn teenage abortion as 'sad' because it is the girls fault for having sex in the first place. You do not attempt to explain why she may have fallen pregnant; ignorance of contraception or failure of contraception. Nor do you bother to suggest reasons behind teenage abortion rates (for surely the most sympathy for abortion must be given to young girls). They may have been too frightened to tell their parents, unable financially to support the child or perhaps their parents even forced them to have an abortion. There are many reasons. All in all I think this is a poor essay. It is crammed with statistics and facts but they do not mean anything because they are unexplained. Your essay says nothing.Sorry to be harsh, but I felt like I could be because so many other people have given you a lot of praise and pointed out the good bits of your essay! :)
    • 10/12/2006
    • 10:46:09
    • Score: 11 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • Lovely

    What a beautiful writing style you have. This was lovely to read and a flowing summery of two complex plots.
    • 10/12/2006
    • 10:29:06
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Good Attempt

    This is a fairly reasonable attempt at what is a very difficult novel. "Hard Times" is in fact grouped under a genre of nineteenth century novels which have been termed by critics as "industrial novels" or "social-problem novels". That is, these novels (such as "Hard Times", "North and South" etc) have been defined as an attempt to highlight the incredible social problems caused by British Industrialisation. The main problem, critics have argued, is that these novels, particularly Dickens, failed to provide a feasible solution to the problems.The problems were, from a Marxist interpretation, the subordination of the working classes to the 'masters', or factory owners. Strikes broke out in the 1840s which proved a battle of will between the two sides. The strikers using the loss of money for the owners that would incur from the strikes as their weapon, and the owners using starvation caused by no wages due to strikes as theirs. Children were forced to work 15/16 hour long nights, 6 days a week, using dangerous machinery (the result of which were numerous fatal accidents) and in general the workers were trapped in their situation. They wanted higher wages and better conditions. Dickens approaches this with a critique on Utilitarianism. It is unclear whether Dickens conception of Utilitarianiam was the same as John Stuart Mill's, or whether, as John Holloway suggests, it was a cruder and less refined form; by which the world is based on logic and facts. Dickens, as with all the 'social-problem' novelists, has been criticised for being unable to characterise fully and properly the working class (Stephen Blackburn and Rachael are entirely unrepresentative of the real working class - something which is highlighted by Stephen's refusal to join the trade union) and are flat and unrealistic. Many critics attribute this to his ignorance of the industrial north, coming at it from his own middle-class perspective. Hope that helps!Keep up the good work!
    • 10/12/2006
    • 10:10:56
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  • Substance Abuse

    This was a very well written essay, you use references and quotations to back up your arguments and it is a very interesting subject. Personally I think all substances, with the exception of (due to the extremity of the addiction) Heroin and Crack Cocaine, should be legal. I think substance abuse would rocket at first but then subside. One thing I thought you might have included, which you touched on when you spoke of the alcohol prohibition, was that if drugs were legalised then the government would be able to control what was in them. The drugs would then be of the purest quality and not be mixed with things like rat poison, thus regulating their safety.
    • 08/12/2006
    • 08:21:29
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • A Jimmy Neutron Tale

    I don't know what Jimmy Neutron is. I agree with Grapey about your spelling errors, and it does appear to be something that you have just bashed out for points. However...there is something very compelling about your writing style. I quite enjoyed it. How old are these kids supposed to be though (or does that have something to do with the Jimmy Neutron thing?), because you make them act like wee weans. Overall though, I can't criticise your writing. If you put your mind to it properly I think you could come out with a really great piece of writing.
    • 08/12/2006
    • 08:07:55
    • Score: 7 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Homosexuality; is it a choice?

    Fantastic essay! So many essays on here are just argumentative, and do not try to discuss the issue. You have tried to produce a balanced argument. Well done.
    • 08/12/2006
    • 07:54:44
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Quite useful

    This factual account is quite useful. There are also the following options:IUD (Coil) - copper instrument implemented into the womb. Non-hormonal, about 97% effective. Does not protect against STDs. Can be painful to have inserted, but once in should be pain free. Lasts 5 years. Can also be used as an alternative to the Morning After Pill as emergency contraception. IMPLANON: Hormonal rod inserted into arm. Lasts 3 years. 99% effective. I wouldn't recommend the implant to anyone. For more information see my essay on Implanon
    • 08/12/2006
    • 05:48:40
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Same sex marriage

    "the children they adopt will also in turn feel like it is okay to be gay, thus increasing the number of gay Americans" This is sheer and utter ignorance - PEOPLE DO NOT CHOOSE TO BE GAY. Please could you provide statistical evidence which proves your statement that homosexual couples adopting is making it difficult for heterosexual couples to adopt. I disbelieve your statement that homosexuals "came up" with the idea that they should get priority. Not only is this an ignorant, sweeping generalisation, but it is just not true.Basing your argument on the Bible is weak. Since when was the Christian perspective the only perspective, and where has it been proven that what is written in the Bible is right? A democracy should give equal rights to everyone - of all cultures, religions and sexuality. Please consider there are other opinions as well as Christianity, and that NONE of them are proven to be right. You are basing your argument on the existence of God, which I have to point out to you, is a subjective belief, not a proven one. It is absolutely OUTRAGEOUS your ignorance of HIV. HIV is not merely a homosexual disease - it is passed between male and female as well. Your assumption that HIV would be rife if gay marriage was legalised is fundamentally flawed for two reasons.Firstly you are making the assumption that all homosexuals do not practice safe sex.Secondly you are making the assumption that sexual intercouse between same sex couples would actually increase because marriage was legalised. Homosexuals, like heterosexuals, have regular sex in relationships as well you know. Just because marriage isn't legal doesn't mean people aren't having sex! And why are homosexuals liable to die at a younger age!?
    • 06/12/2006
    • 16:36:39
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  • Good

    Good essay, good points, well-written. Well done.
    • 06/12/2006
    • 16:14:57
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Hmm

    This is not a great essay. Good point - but what if they just want to have sex? Kids - if you want to have sex - MAKE SURE YOU USE A CONDOM. It prevents transmitting fatal sexual diseases and it prevents pregnancy. Thats all you need to remember - use a condom.
    • 06/12/2006
    • 16:13:23
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  • Not a proper essay

    "When a born child is harmed pandemonium breaks out in the land, but we can mercilessly brush away one and half million children every year without raising an eyelid. This is more death than the lives taken throughout the whole of World War 2."These half a million unwanted children - where would they be if they had been born? In foster homes, in orphanages - unwanted and without parents.I beg to differ also, by asking how on earth an unborn child IS NOT part of the woman's body? Is it a seperate entity? The answer is no. It is attached, by an umbilical cord and to a placenta inside the woman's uterus. If the child was not part of the woman's body then we would not be having this debate now! Unfortunately for many women babies, begotten through failed contraception, through rape or simply by accident, are completely and utterly attached to their bodies and cannot be seperated from them by any other way than abortion. This argument is not convincing, and the speech does not appear to be by this member of cheathouse. This is not a proper essay.
    • 06/12/2006
    • 15:53:12
    • Score: 0 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Unbelievable

    I find these sorts of arguments absolutely crazy. Opposition to homosexual marriage is born out of fear and nothing else. This is highlighted in this essay:Traditional marriage is one of the bedrock institutions of our society and I don't want anything to occur that further weakens it. Marriage, as we understand it in our society, is about children, having children, raising them, providing for the survival of the species."Legalising homosexual marriage is not going to make heterosexuals turn gay! The absurdity of this comments absolutely baffles me. Nothing would change by legalising gay marriages at all, except that homosexuals would have the same recognised rights as heterosexuals (and so, by the way, they should. In every democracy there is a bill of rights stating equality for all). Heterosexual marriages will not be threaten by legalising gay marriage. Homosexual people do not abstain from same sex relationships simply because they cannot marry. They will continue to have relationships, as will hetereosexual people, regardless. Gay marriage is merely a legal recognition of the existence of homosexuality - something, by the way, which has been around since the beginning of time.To back up your arguments with quotes from the bible actually only serves to destabilise it. In all western countries do not Christians, Muslims, Hindus and many other religions live peacefully (or supposed to live peacefully)? Are not all these people granted the same rights as everyone else? Are athiests not granted the same rights? Why then do you base your arguments on the bible? Nobody has proved the Bible to be right. The bible is not the basis for democracy, or equal rights. The STATE is. And the state should protect the rights of homosexuals in exactly the same way as it does, or should, everyone else. I cannot actually believe this is an issue with some countries. It is utterly insane.
    • 06/12/2006
    • 15:43:48
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  • Abortion

    This is a well-written essay which was an extremely interesting read. I also thought that your arguments were fresh, new, and thus very convincing. I disagree however, and would like to point out that women who engage in sexual intercourse do not know that it may lead to pregnancy. Contraception fails frequently, when women often do not know that it is not 100% effective. This happened to me (if I had known I would always have used two methods of contraception - a precaution that I always take now). When contraception fails it is certainly not the women's choice or fault that she has fallen pregnant. What if, for example, she does not want to have children until she is thirty years of age, or older? Should she abstain completely from sex until then? Is that practical or realistic? I do not think abstaining from sex until you are ready to have children is a reasonable expectation to make of women, particularly if the women is in a steady long-term relationship.I also think, contrary to yourself, that since the baby is part of the women and is not an entity on its own, it belongs entirely to the women (in the same way that her own body does) and it is thus entirely the women's choice to do with the baby as she wishes. If she makes an immoral choice then it is HER choice, and she will deal with the consequences, emotionally in this world, and possibly if there is another world, then in the next too. Since the baby is part of the mothers body, the state cannot then force her to give up her rights to her body and force her to have it.Sorry for the rant! Excellent essay though! Well done!
    • 06/12/2006
    • 15:28:43
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Abortion

    You do provide a good argument for your case. You have referenced and all your works are cited. I think this is a good essay, although it could be longer.I agree what you are saying, that an unborn baby is no different to a born baby. I agree also that abortion is wrong. But I also think that while that baby is inside the mother, attached to the mother and an actual part of the mothers body, then it is the mothers decision what she do to it, not the state's. The mother should decide to keep the child or not. If she chooses not to then it is only her that deals with the consequences. And she will, because abortion is traumatic and emotionally draining. If God exists, then it is the mother who will be punished. So I think abortion should be legal. The mother will deal with the conseuences of her actions anyway. But she HAS to have a choice since the baby is a part of her.
    • 01/12/2006
    • 14:39:57
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Crap

    I don't have an issue with the content. I imagine that the author of this awful story wanted to 'provoke' argument. The writing, however, is crap. Boring, repetitive, unimaginative - its is even crap porn! Get some writing skills!
    • 01/12/2006
    • 11:47:54
    • Score: 0 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Fantastic

    How lovely and refreshing to find an essay on homosexuality that is not homophobic. You have clearly spent a lot of time researching this. Well-written, well-cited and well-researched. Well done!Homosexuality though, is just something that people are born with. People who think otherwise are just either incredibly ignorant or just plain prejudiced.There is far too much homophobia on this website and I think it is fantastic to read an essay which attempts to refute these prejudiced points of view.I have lots of homosexual friends and although I am aware there is prejudice in Britain, it is not nearly so pronounced as it appears to be in the US. It just really is not that much of an issue. I wonder why there is so much more of an uproar in America?
    • 30/11/2006
    • 13:54:42
    • Score: 0 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Good

    This essay is good - well written and informative (even if somewhat biased). I don't agree with you though, but I marked it good because your essay is good. :)
    • 29/11/2006
    • 07:33:41
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Very good

    This essay is well written and informative. Well done.
    • 29/11/2006
    • 07:25:09
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Informative

    This essay is extremely short, but concise and informative. I'm not sure if it could be classed as an essay, but it is definitely worthwhile to read.
    • 29/11/2006
    • 07:19:53
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Love

    "For example, if a father's son were using drugs, he could unconditionally love him and accept his destructive behavior, hoping that he doesn't overdose and die. Or he could use tough love and put him in a rehabilitation hospital in an attempt to save his life. So as a result, too much tough love can be unhealthy, just like too much unconditional love can be unhealthy."This doesn't make sense - you are contradicting yourself. You also need to learn how to paragraph and you don't make proper use of full stops (you often use a full stop when it should actually only be a comma).I'm also not so sure about "tough love" and "unconditional love". Is "tough love" a term you have coined yourself? If it is not, you need to reference that term.I thought, however, that it was interesting what you were saying about how the term love is often misconstrued. A point to perhaps think about is how the English language is inadequate in expressing love. We only have one word to describe it, and as you pointed out in your essay, this is often misleading and inexpressive. The Hebrew language has seven different words to describe love. The Inuits have I think around ten different words to describe snow (very fitting for their permanent winter climate). Why then, does the English language leave us with an inability to express one of the strongest and most important emotions of humankind?
    • 22/10/2006
    • 06:17:44
    • Score: 0 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Othello

    What an insightful, well-researched reading of this text! Informative, concise, well-structured and with original thoughts and ideas, exploring a range of topics within one essay.
    • 21/08/2006
    • 08:25:48
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Reformation

    Short, concise and informative.
    • 21/08/2006
    • 08:17:21
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Slave Reparations

    I totally disagree with this essay, and to me, it sounds a little racist. First of all, innoccent people pay their taxes to the government. That money is then owned by the government and is the government's to do whatever they want with. For example, your taxes will probably be funding lots of things that a) you disagree with and b) you would rather not fund. It is up to the government to do with your taxes what it feels is necessary for the country. If that means giving slave reparations then the government will budget accordingly (as is the nature of governments) and it is highly unlikely that you would be taxed any more for it. Thus why do you care?"The government has gone to great length to ensure that all people especially African Americans are not discriminated against" - The government is all for show. Look at what happened in New Orleans last year with Hurricaine Katrina. Had that been a city with a mainly white population then aid would have come a lot quicker. It is scandelous, and I am sure the black population of New Orleans felt let down and discriminated against. And this is the point I am coming to: yes, people who were slaves lived a few generations ago. You claim there is no one left to compensate because the people who lived through it are dead...Don't you understand that it is because of the slave trade there are so many racial issues in America today? It was the slave trade that caused that and people are still suffering discrimination and racial attacks centuries on because of it. Only 40 years ago were black people treated as second class citizens; people were KILLED trying to stand up for black rights. And I'm sorry, but America has a TERRIBLE reputation regarding racism and prejudice and it is still very very apparent today and ALL of this is a direct result of the slave trade.I do not necessarily think that reparations could feasibly be given due to many of the reasons you explain in your essay, however, your complete lack of understanding, and lack of regard for the other side of the argument is inexcusable.You sound racist when you talk about 'educating' african americans "especially those in favour of reparations" - what, you mean brainwash them? Are you really suggesting that any black person who is in favour of reparations is uneducated, are you actually suggesting that african americans, in general, are uneducated, because I'm sorry, but that is what it sounds like:"Through education African Americans will hopefully see the positive side of white Americans and not blame them for their problems".Does it never occur to you that there might be a reason white americans are blamed for the problems, or that a lot of black people still experience awful racial abuse towards them?I think you could have made more of an effort to show an understanding of the reasoning behind people wanting reparations. This, I think, you really failed in.
    • 28/04/2006
    • 13:01:43
    • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • SEX

    I totally agree with you. I think sex is natural and healthy. I assume you are from the US - since you say your school had no sex education course. Although I know America's attitude towards sex, I still find it quite shocking and completely bizarre. We have sex education from the age of 11 in schools which tells us always to practice safe sex. Free condoms are available all over my university campus (in the reception at the doctors surgery, in vending machines in the toilets everywhere, free condoms in the computer rooms and the student unions), and to be honest, I know very few people that don't use condoms, at university at least. I don't believe there is any harm in sex as long as it is practised with caution.
    • 24/04/2006
    • 14:30:51
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • China's one child policy

    A very informative and interesting essay. Well done.
    • 24/04/2006
    • 14:18:17
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • American Popular Culture

    Only the first paragraph of this essay is relevant to the title.And I hate to break it to you, but America is NOT cool.
    • 24/04/2006
    • 14:04:20
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Loch Ness Monster

    This is a lovely and interesting essay and I'm glad to see you have researched it well providing references and facts.I have two things to add though. First of all, Loch Ness is not a lake, it is a loch. Most Scottish people find it incredibly irritating when people call our loch's 'lakes'.Secondly, about the sonar beams, an argument against the reliability of this research is that Loch Ness is supposed to have a network of underwater caves all along its seabed. Thus, if Nessie did exist, she would probably reside in one of these caves. The sonar beams would not be able to reach deep into the caves.A lovely essay and a pleasure to read. Well done.
    • 24/04/2006
    • 14:01:05
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Women's sexuality and music

    What about britpop? I demand britpop :) A very informative and interesting essay. It sounds like you have a lot of knowledge on this subject.
    • 24/04/2006
    • 13:46:54
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Nature vs Nurture

    A very informative and interesting essay. I like your style and it is written very well. My only criticism is that you spend far more time explaining the 'nature' side of your argument, and you explain it far better. Having studied sociology I know there is a lot more you could say for the 'nurture' argument. With a little more work this could be excellent. Well done!
    • 23/04/2006
    • 08:51:11
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Sleep

    A nice essay, well written and informative. I thought it a little short though, and I would have liked to hear more about dreaming, but I guess it depends what your question is!
    • 23/04/2006
    • 08:37:38
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Private Property

    Why has everyone rated her comments badly? I liked the fact the essay was 'wordy' and she has a fair point to argue back at johnjjp.
    • 19/04/2006
    • 11:18:07
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • The Victorian Prison

    What a lovely, well written essay. Extremely informative and a joy to read.
    • 19/04/2006
    • 11:14:24
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Abortion

    This is very one sided and I do not think it is a good essay for that reason. You need to provide both sides of an argument, even if only to disprove the opposite side.I also thought that your writing was more emotional than factual. An example of this is:"Abortion only creates more traumas for victims of rape and incest, especially in cases involving teenage victims, who often develop strong feelings of attachment to their unborn children."First of all, I would like to refute the argument that abortion creates more trauma's for rape/incest victims. This statement is not backed up by any references, facts or statistics. How did you come by this view? As a reader, since you include no factual evidence to back this statement up, I can only assume that it is your own opinion. Have you ever fallen pregnant from rape or incest? Have you ever had an abortion. If the answer to this is no, then how can you make such an assumption. Perhaps abortion is not as traumatic as you think - how would you know? I can point out, however, that rape on the other hand, is proven to be, obviously, a very traumatic exerience. Childbirth, also is very traumatic. Now, as a woman (and this is MY own personal opinion) I would imagine it to be far more traumatic to carry a product of rape inside me, and give birth to it nine months later. I think that would be one of the most horrific things possible.Secondly, where is the evidence to back up your statement that teenage victims, especially, often become more attached to an unborn child? I have never heard of that before, and I would be inclined to argue the opposite; that it is older women who become attached to an unborn child more - simply because more older women want children than teenage girls.
    • 18/04/2006
    • 17:23:36
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Salem Witch Trials

    In 1962? Are you sure?
    • 17/04/2006
    • 15:06:54
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Drugs

    From reading this essay I seem to have gleaned that your own opinion has wandered dramatically throughout (often causing contradiction), especially in the case of marijuana. I think the biggest ignorance of drug problems comes from people like yourself who have never tried them and yet feel that they have something relevant to say. To base an essay on unsourced statistics is shady at the least, and you should know this. Your description of the effects of acid sound absolutely fantastic and if this was what really happened when taken I'm sure I, and others, would take it a lot more. Many of the things that you say in this essay are entirely incorrect (for example, that cocaine makes people have 'difficulty in talking' and that they are 'very spastic') which I have to say, makes me inclined to believe that the rest of your essay is not worth reading. I think, the next time you undertake an essay subject, you should really research a lot more sources and also check the credibility of these sources. I hope my advice will be helpful in the future.
    • 17/04/2006
    • 15:04:13
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Levin's essay

    I think you need to include a link to the original essay as without it, your essay seems rather pointless and hard to judge.
    • 17/04/2006
    • 12:05:02
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Abortion

    This is a brilliant, informative and very well-written essay. A pleasure to read and extremely unbiased - exactly how it should be until the conclusion! You set out and explain both sides of the argument extremely well and I can honestly say I did not know which side you swung towards until your conclusion.My only criticism is that you lost the structure a little in the last paragraph when you were trying to condense the arguments for both sides yet state your own belief. Just tie up a few loose ends there and it will be a perfect essay!In Britain, abortion is legal and free of cost for every single woman who wants one, regardless of why she wants it, who she is, what her circumstances are and how old she is. The age of adulthood here is 16, but children under sixteen are still allowed confidential abortions free from their parents knowledge and everyone is given any contraception or information on contraception free of charge. After a woman has an abortion she is also entitled to councilling free of any charge as well.I think it is important that young girls are promised confidentiality in issues like this, because if they do not want to tell their parents about it, then that is usually because they think their parents will not support them properly. Thus, they need to be given support and understanding elsewhere, and this is given in the form of our health service. They might be minor's but that does not mean they should not be allowed to think for themselves, or that someone else should be in charge of what happens to their bodies.I believe firmly that abortion is morally wrong. However, I also believe firmly that since the baby is inside, attached and a part of a woman until she gives birth to it, it is also completely and utterly her responsibility, the same way as the rest of her body is. Thus, if a woman wants to end that pregnancy, then it is her right and only her right to decide that and to live with the subsequent consequences.You state, as an argument against abortion:"The woman who is having the abortion should be responsible to prevent a pregnancy from the beginning of the sexual relationship."But let me just say one thing. I was using a reliable method of contraception and was unlucky enough to fall pregnant - there was only 0.01% chance, apparently, and I was that statistic. So it is not always about carelessness - sometimes it just happens. I had an abortion, and I believe it was wrong, although I cannot honestly say that I regret doing it, it was my right to make that decision because that child was mine, and was part of me and no one else, and I will be the one who lives with the consequences.
    • 10/04/2006
    • 14:37:48
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Homosexual Marriage

    First of all, when your country was founded, your political system was founded on the principle that there should be a SEPERATION OF THE CHURCH AND THE STATE within the political system.Homosexual marriage is not a right that is to be granted by the church. It is a right, or an issue, that falls to the powers of the state to decide. This is because, should homosexual marriage be allowed in America, it would be a marriage in the eyes of the law (and thus granted by the STATE), and NOT in the eyes of the church.So, please explain why the basis for this argument is the bible, and not rational human thought? There are many different religions and belief's in America, and that is why the state SHOULD be (I say SHOULD, because the seperation of church and state appears to slip George Bush's mind frequently as well) independant of the church. This is because the government is elected to represent its people, and that includes taking into consideration the diverse belief's of all its people. Thus, the government cannot reasonably be allied to one religion (even though, oddly, yours is).I think the reason that so many people argue against homosexual marriage using the bible as their argument, is because they cannot actually think of any rational, logical reason why there should not be same-sex marriage. And if there is not a rational, logical reason against it, then there is no reason for it to be illegal.You say:"Furthermore, marriage is the sole purpose for procreation, to repopulate the world and ensure the continuation of the species".This statement is so completely bizarre! What about all the couples (married or otherwise - because remember lots of couples choose just to live together and NOT marry, because Christianity is NOT the only religion/belief in this world, many people do not WANT to, or believe in marriage) who are together and choose not to have children? What about all the couples that perhaps know that they can't have children before they get married but decide to do it anyway. Why is this? Surely people get married because they LOVE each other? Aren't many people together because they want to be together as a couple?The last paragraph in this essay seems to make a last ditch attempt at providing an argument for the other side. It touches briefly on the argument that being able to marry is a human right. Yet this is completely undeveloped. You make no attempt at trying to explain it. In my opinion an essay should ALWAYS explain both sides of the argument clearly, even if you are then going on to refute the argument you just explained.
    • 10/04/2006
    • 14:05:29
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Great Britain

    Very Informative and well structured. Well done! This essay really was a joy to read.As a resident of Scotland I would like to point out that perhaps a little more information could maybe have been added to the 'political' section of the essay, as the British democratic system is diverse and fairly complex as a whole.You describe the Westminster Parliament superbly, but, as you only touched upon earlier - Scotland, Wales and Northern Ireland now have devolved power. Scotland has the most power, with the establishment of its own Parliament in 1999. This means all issues involving health, education, agriculature and many more are completely devolved to the Scottish Parliament. It also has tax raising powers and (like the Welsh Assembly) an entirely different voting system. These systems used for the Scottish and Welsh elections were completely revolutionary as they were hailed as a success and a step forward for democracy as they are more representative and present a fairer proportion of the vote in Parliament. Scotland used to use the Additional Member System but it has since then been changed to the Single Transferable Vote (details of these can be found on the Scottish Parliament Website). Because of these fairer voting systems smaller parties gained seats in Parliament where previously they would not, destroying the 'two-tier' party system common to Britain and resulting in a coalition government for Scotland of Labour/Liberal Democrat. This meant parties such as the Green Party, the Socialist Party and the Scottish National Party (or as in Wales, Plaid Cymru) gained seats in Parliament. The Scottish National Party is opposition party in Parliament, as is Plaid Cymru opposition party in the Welsh Assembly. While the Conservative Party remains popular in the South of England it is largely hated (due to the legacy of Margaret Thatcher (the old witch)) in the North of England, Scotland and Wales - and the proof of this is seen in the 1997 General Election Results for these parts of the country.Britain's political system, mainly because it consists of Four countries rather than one, and because it is based on such an ancient system of government, is complex and diverse and I think, very interesting.While the Scottish Parliament has been slated since its beginning a few years ago I would like to point out that it is only due to it's establishment that I (and every other Scottish person) can study at the country's top university for four years completely free of charge. It has outlawed fox hunting, gives free personal care to elderly people, free bus/train travel for retired people and just 10 days ago banned smoking in all public places in Scotland.
    • 06/04/2006
    • 20:58:30
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Ok...

    You might have made this longer. One paragraph is just a blurb, not really an essay. Sir Alexander Fleming was Scottish, specifically, by the way, for all those people out there who think British is English.
    • 06/04/2006
    • 18:51:12
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Reply to Wetclassique

    Can I just say in response to your doubts as to the essay's grade, that cheathouse does not cater for non-american students and probably a lot of people using this website don't know how to translate their grade to the american grade system. I don't know what 4.0 means, and my essays are not marked in percentages. We use a 20 point scale, and I have no idea how to grade my essays on here, so I usually guess.Please bear this in mind when criticising. :)
    • 06/04/2006
    • 18:46:49
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Dress Code

    This essay was ok. You should have made it longer and gone into more detail with references and examples from schools who do have uniforms and schools who do not.In Scotland the schools are supposed to have uniforms but nobody wears them. When I was at school it was a battle for the teachers to even get a quarter of the school wearing the tie. This is because they could not enforce a specific school uniform because the school couldn't afford to give it out for free (and couldn't make pupils buy it because many pupils couldn't afford it) so the school uniform was basically just black because nobody wore shirts and ties. There will always be 'cool' kids in schools anyway, and making schoolkids wear a uniform is not going to mask who the geeks are and who the cool kids are. It makes very little difference as far as I can see.There was a survey done in Scotland recently, studying whether people worked better in uniform or in their own clothes (this was a survey of office workers) and it was actually found that people worked better without uniforms. I work in a job at the moment where I have no uniform and I must say it is very liberating (since every other job I have had I have had a uniform) and it makes me more relaxed and comfortable in the workplace. As I work on commission, it is important to feel myself and I think wearing my own clothes helps. Screw Uniforms!
    • 06/04/2006
    • 18:40:52
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Abortion

    I thought your essay was very well written, although it would have been helpful if we could have seen the original essay you are rebutting.Just for the record (for this crazily religious mentality you have in America) I believe in sex before marriage. I do not believe in marriage. I live with my boyfriend happily, and have done for the last 2 years. I have had an abortion. Not because I was silly, but because my contraception failed (I am that statistic - 0.01% out of 100). I would always have used 2 methods of contraception if I had thought in any way that might have happened.I am not religious. I hate people who try and argue basing their arguments on the Bible, or other religious works. This is because they arrogantly ignore all other beliefs. Most people do not believe in the Bible. There is no proof that the Bible, or any other religious work is true. So please, if you must argue, argue with rational thought, and logic, not religion.I do think abortion is wrong. But, I'm young, and the least maternal person ever and I am not in an ideal situation to bring up a child. And I am selfish, because I do not want children now, it would ruin my life, and I have very real fears that I would not be able to love a child I had now. People who say this is natural are wrong. Lot's of people do not love their children at birth, and I fear I might have been one of them.My point is, it is my life, my body and was my child while still inside of me. I did the wrong thing, but it was my decision to make, with or without the state I would have attempted it anyway. Whether it is illegal or not, people will get pregnant when they don't want to, and will try and get rid of their babies. This is the harsh truth.
    • 06/04/2006
    • 18:24:13
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Abortion

    An informative and well written paper. Well done for presenting both sides of the argument clearly and without any visable bias. Good work! The only thing I would say is that for an essay it was presented in a rather factual, formal style. Perhaps it could be more flowing and without bullet points? Other than that - well done!
    • 03/04/2006
    • 16:49:04
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Gender Roles

    An excellent, well presented and informative essay. How refreshing to read such a forward thinking essay. Well done!
    • 03/04/2006
    • 16:41:46
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • "1984"

    This is a pretty good essay - it analyses the book well, and makes relevant comparisons to today's world. My only problem with it is this:"Many believe that Orwell wrote 1984 with the intention of showing people what the future could be like if totalitarianism was accepted in North America."It irritates me that Americans tend to believe that the whole world consists of North America, or revolves around North America. Orwell was British, and 1984 is actually set in London, however he was showing people what the future would be like if totalitarianism was accepted in the world, not North America.
    • 13/03/2006
    • 17:42:33
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Homosexuality

    How absolutely refreshing to find an essay like this on this site! I'm sick of the homophobia on here and its wonderful to find an essay who is proud to fight that. The only weakness here is the opening paragraph, which isn't very professional, but I see you are in 8th grade, and I'm sure that is something you can work on!A wonderful essay - well done and well spoken!
    • 13/03/2006
    • 17:32:45
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Irish Identity

    Fantastic essay! Well written, well structured and your arguments and well presented and backed up. Scottish people struggle with identity as well, and also feel prejudice from the English, so as a Scot, I can appreciate where this essay is coming from.
    • 01/03/2006
    • 15:38:20
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Immigration

    "They immigrate to the U.S. and steal as many American jobs as they can, and send their earnings back home to their family."Your use of the word 'steal' highlights not only how prejudiced you are on this topic, but also how unprofessional you are and made me reluctant to read on, as I thought I was not going to be reading an intelligent essay. Not only that, but it is a sweeping generalisation to state that ALL immigrants send home earnings to a family in a different country.Overpopulation? Do you know how UNDERpopulated America is considering its size and the fact it only has 250m people in it? Britain, for example, is probably not that much bigger than Florida, and has 60m people in it alone.You talk about job displacement, which is certainly always a problem. However, I do not think that immigrants have an advantage because they will work for less. Read John Steinbeck's "The Grapes of Wrath".Also, you speak about immigrants 'adapting to the American lifestyle' and thus using up natural resources, and causing environmental degradation. Did you know that the USA is the single worst country in the world for wasting natural resources and misusing the environment? This has nothing to do with the levels of immigration but because of the excessive American lifestyle.You refer to American's as 'Natives', but does it ever occur to you that the real 'natives' are the people who lived in America before colonisation? That Americans are ALL immigrants, coming in search of a better life, just 200 years ago? What gives you the right to decide that nobody else is allowed into the country, when it was not your country in the first place?I think you should take some of these points into consideration. Your essay is very detailed, and well structured. However, it is extremely biased, and even when arguing in favour of something, it is my opinion that you should always state the arguments of the opposite side (even if it is to try and disprove them).
    • 01/03/2006
    • 15:03:40
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Bush Speech before Iraq Invasion

    "Bush made it clear that they had entered into this war "reluctantly," but did so to "spare innocent civilians," as well as protect them from the "grave danger" posed by the "weapons of mass murder" that Saddam Hussein possessed"Well, this clearly proves Bush to be a liar. Not only was Bush biting at the bit to invade iraq (even suggesting to Tony Blair that the US would 'bait' Saddam by flying a US warplane low down over the country - with the intent that Saddam would gun it down) but shock shock horror - no WMD were found!I liked how you state both perspectives towards the end of your essay and I think you give a very good analysis of Bush's speech. A good fairly unbiased essay - very nice work!
    • 01/03/2006
    • 14:38:39
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Viewing Politics and Government

    Hmm, at first I thought this was a high school essay, until you mentioned that you are 23."Bush represents good; Bin Laden and Saddam represent the evil."I think you need to research things properly and stop being blinded by propaganda. I would not call Bush the embodiment of 'good'. Do you think the torture of untried suspects at Guantanamo Bay 'good' and democratic (Bush condones it, you know). Do you think it is 'good' and democratic that the FBI flies its suspects over to Egypt so that they can torture them legally, without trial. Because it is illegal in America. George Bush is not 'good' and neither is America. Osama Bin Laden, Saddam Hussein and Bush - all three of them are evil, and it is hypocritical of George Bush to condemn anyone for torture when he is doing exactly the same thing and getting away with it.You need to put more facts into your essay, and research things properly.
    • 28/02/2006
    • 15:27:37
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • The Yellow Wallpaper

    This is a fantastic essay. It is concise, well structured and provides an excellent analysis of the story. Well done!
    • 27/02/2006
    • 10:27:55
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Needs to be longer.

    I really don't think this is long enough to be classed as an essay.
    • 24/02/2006
    • 11:26:58
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Grapes of Wrath

    This is written quite well, but it is basically just a plot summary. You need to try and analyse the book rather than just paraphrasing the story.
    • 16/02/2006
    • 10:23:50
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • "Eat to Live" OR "Live to Eat"

    I personally Eat and Live, and find that the two are very much inter-related. I often get Mind Hunger but I do try to trust the wisdom of my biology. A very informative essay, although I would try to include more quotes and references, and this would back up your theories and arguments and thus make the essay stronger.
    • 16/02/2006
    • 10:21:36
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Oh, and...

    ...please, wassabi, correct me if i'm wrong, but wasn't America founded upon the right to equality, free speech and liberty?
    • 31/01/2006
    • 12:28:43
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Brilliant and Refreshing.

    How amazing to find such a well written, reafreshingly unprejudiced essay on this site! Well done! You have a well-structured, well-presented essay. Your arguments are clear, valid and well thought out. I imagine it must be frustrating to live in a country with so much homophobia and stupidity surrounding such a simple issue as a gay marriage (for example, that ridiculous argument that 'gay marriage denies all semblance of morals'). Keep up the good work (that is, educating people out of their ignorance and prejudice).
    • 31/01/2006
    • 12:25:54
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Setting a Good Example.

    Well, your essay was written well, and you set out and explain your points competently giving good, clear examples. Well Done.I thought it was a very interesting read, however I think you are treading a very fine line by suggesting limitations on free speech, even if - as you suggest - it is done with the good intention of reducing prejudice. I think it is important to note that once a law exists that allows businesses and governments the right to censor public information, there is immediately the opportuntity for them to take advantage of that right and censor information to their advantage. I think that is why there are democratic laws written into the constitution; to prevent the right of free speech being manipulated. I also wasn't sure about the example you made of 'mein Kampf'. While this is obviously a horrific book, and it is understandable for certain places to refuse to sell it, I think it is important that it remains available to the public as it is a historical document and of educational value. The censorship of literature, historical documents and art is reminisicent of communism and I think it is for that reason that we have, and always should have, the right to access anything without censorship and restrictions.
    • 31/01/2006
    • 12:11:10
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • The American Dream.

    "We view our perfect society not based on religion morals and faith like the Puritans once did; but more towards the direction of politics, money, and economics. We believe that the only way to survive in this world is to have money."Um, I agree with jeslawre that the American Dream was about opportunity and liberty. I think you have just demonstrated how the original dream has become distorted in the face of capitalism and the shallowness of the American obsession with money.
    • 17/01/2006
    • 16:39:38
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • A Slave In Roman Times.

    I found this both interesting and informative. The only negative thing I would say is that the description of Rome does not seem to be one that would fall within the sphere of a slave's everyday life. Other than that - well done!
    • 17/01/2006
    • 16:31:24
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • The Last Americans.

    It might be better for the world if America does disappear. Global Warming, the disappearing rainforests and many other environmental problems are not being properly addressed by world leaders. However, America and China, with their massive, massive consumption of natural resources and completely unacceptable levels of waste are spelling disaster for the earth as a whole. As if the refusal to recycle and combat the waste problem isnt enough, George Bloody Bush's utter refusal to sign the Kyoto Treaty, or ANY treaty attempting to reduce greenhouse gases is absolutely unbelievable. What is he playing at? If anything destroys the earth is will be George Bush as the leader of America.
    • 08/12/2005
    • 11:27:41
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • National Identity.

    I'm not sure if it is just the format of cheathouse or if this essay is badly structured (I suspect the former) but really I'm not sure what to make of this.I see what you are trying to say when you talk about cookie dough, but (as a foreigner looking in) america can never truely unite, having a national identity, simply because it is so multi-cultural. Many Americans are going to have other cultural identities as well. What about Arab-Americans, like you mention? How can they be part of a national identity now? You mention Hurricaine Katrina, but do you really think the people, particularly the large black population, affected by that feel part of a national identity after they were abandoned and ignored by their own government in such a time of need? What do you think the black population makes of that? I think you have chosen a very complex topic here and you don't do it justice. You need to discuss in more depth ethnic identities within america in relation to a wider national identity. Hope that helps.
    • 08/12/2005
    • 11:13:10
    • Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • The Death Penalty.

    This is a fairly good essay - you raise many relelvant points in support of your argument and provide statistics and references to back them up. However, you should maybe look at tightening up the structure, grammer and word choice in order to make your essay flow a little better. Keep up the good work.
    • 08/12/2005
    • 10:48:29
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Sex.

    I assume that the person that wrote this essay lives in America. I always find it so unbelievably bizarre the American attitude towards sex. I cannot believe that sex education is NOT taught in schools and that condoms are NOT made available. In Scotland, we are given many talks in secondary school about safe sex and we are shown how to use condoms and how to put them on. This is a mixed class. All the students have access to contraception and are told about it. Teenagers will always have sex and always have had sex. The more you tell them not to the more they will rebel. Sex before marriage is healthy and can builds experience. Now this doesn't mean sleeping around as only a minority of people really do, but teenagers in teenage relationships. What's wrong with them having sex if they know what they are doing. Teaching about sex, the implications of it such as disease and pregnancy and how to stop it is the only way forward. Teenagers will decide for themselves whether or not they want to have sex, so let's make sure we do everything in our power to make sure they are safe while they are doing it.Also, who told you that condoms do not protect against HIV? The Pope? I think you should look that up again.
    • 22/11/2005
    • 15:29:02
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Sex.

    c0lrisk, I think that the fact sentences start in one paragraph and finish in another is more due to the formatting of cheathouse than to the actual structure of the essay.This is a great essay - and it is so refreshing to find an essay on this site stating reasons why pre-marital sex can be loving and healthy. The only advice I have is to say more about safe sex, as this is one of the main arguments against pre-marital sex. Also what mistahwoof said about examples from other cultures who have a healthier attitude towards sex is a good point.For the people who commented against this essay I think that in order to be taken seriously you need to distance yourselves and your opinions from the bible. Christianity, as with all religions, is a matter of opinion, and not all people have the same opinions. This is a good objective essay. If you are going to comment on it, please comment on it objectively.
    • 22/11/2005
    • 15:14:46
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  • Drug testing in the workplace.

    Good essay. Well-presented arguments, well - structured and overall a good, interesting essay. I also agree with the conclusion that you came to. Well done!
    • 22/11/2005
    • 14:51:47
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  • Capital Punishment.

    You say that:"...the abolitionist argues that killing is always wrong, then he must also concede that killing in self-defense is unacceptable and should be punished".However, this is not true as killing in self-defence is done instinctively as no other choice in order to protect your own life when it is being endangered. Yet the death penalty cannot really be likened to killing in self-defence as the state does not have to execute individuals in order to defend it's citizens. Given the fact the justice system often makes mistakes it is more plausible for the state to defend its citizens by giving convicted murderers life imprisonment. That way citizens are protected if the prisoner is guilty, but the prisoner's rights are protected also if he/she is innocent as there is then the chance of the conviction being overturned.Also, people have this wonderful view of prison. Perhaps in America this is different, but prison is not the easy ride it is made out to be. First of all your rights are taken away, but mainly all sorts of awful things make prison as terrible as it should be, and these come in the shape of the other prisoners. Rape and violence are everyday occurences in prison as most people who have been inside can tell you. Prison is not a nice place, and it is definitely a punishment. Death is not suffering, but prison is.Also you say there is no proof of wrongful convictions. This is untrue as there is plently of proof, some of which can be found at:http://www.clarkprosecutor.org/html/links/dplinks.htm#ngAlthough I disagree strongly with your arguments on this issue, this is a very good essay. It is well-structured, your arguments are planned and presented. As advice I would only say that you need more statistics and examples to back up your argument. I also thought you skirted around the argument about innocent people being victims of capital punishment. Other than that - great! A very good essay.
    • 22/11/2005
    • 14:46:22
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  • Capital Punishment.

    I disagree with Keir, as I think that for a 9th grade essay, this is good. The essay sets out the clear argument that the death penalty should not be introduced as innocent people are often mistakenly and injustly killed. The essay also provides good examples to back this argument up, and suggests alternative methods of punishment instead of the death penalty.Probably, the essay could be improved by providing an argument that capital punishment does not deter people from crime (this could have been done by merely giving statistics on rising crime in America after the section on deaths per year by capital punishment in the US).I also happen to think that the example of the French Guillotine is an excellent one. The point being made, Keir, as you seem to have missed it, is that capital punishment, while seen as being humane at the time, often is not, and the essay points out relevant mistakes made in the past.On the whole, good work, although work on making your arguments flow into each other better by using linking ideas and sentences.
    • 22/11/2005
    • 14:23:03
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  • Great.

    What a good essay, and so informative! I had no idea that it was mainly through western influences that homosexuality has become less tolerated.
    • 05/10/2005
    • 10:00:29
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Date rape.

    Very informative...well done.
    • 31/08/2005
    • 11:09:49
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Hmmmm...

    But surely Alisoun is the only one in the tale who goes completely unpunished at the end? So it would seem the moral isn't not to commit adultery? Nicholas, Absolon and John all get punished in the end, by being branded, humiliated and being made a cuckold repectively. It would seem Alisoun is the only one getting away scot free. The main sins being commented on, to me, were jealousy, adultery (but only on Nicholas's part) and falsity (immorality for a parish clerk).
    • 18/05/2005
    • 16:16:13
    • Score: 1 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Health Insurance

    Quite a strange essay, very short, almost like an article.
    • 18/05/2005
    • 08:58:30
    • Score: 0 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • You people are unreal...

    America is unreal, that this is even a bloody issue! How stupid is the person that wrote this essay? And it worries me that there are so many other essays like this on this site. It's offensive to so many people.I can't believe I have to try and explain this to people, you are all like children...Being homosexual is as natural as being hetersexual. This is because when a person is attracted to somebody, it is because of chemicals in their brain. This is nature, we are never sure why we are attracted to the people we are, blondes, brunettes, tall people, short people, men, women etc etc. Men can be attracted to women, women can be attracted to men. However, shock shock horror, women can also be attracted to women, and men can be attracted to men, and some people can be attracted to both. Chemicals, thats all it is, not something that can be helped or controlled. It is as natural as hetersexual attraction.What are you all frightened of? Because basically thats what it is: fear of the unknown...either that or sheer stupidity...Is a black person unnatural? Or people with red hair? Or a person born with only one limb? Are you prejudiced against these people as well, because they are in minority groups too you know...they were all born different from your average middle class white american. In fact, let me guess, anyone who ISNT white, middle/upper class and american, they're unnatural and abnormal as well, right? They don't deserve any human rights.Is this really the general feeling in America? Because I've always wanted to visit, but this sort of thing makes me feel like you should just all be locked away, until you see sense.
    • 18/05/2005
    • 08:52:06
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  • Smoking in public places

    Essay is a bit short, and the spelling could definately be improved on, but its a good topic.The Scottish Parliament has recently passed a law that will come into affect in 2006, banning smoking in all public places. This is because the west of Scotland has the worst cancer and heart disease rates in Europe. It is a working class country, everybody smokes here, everybody drinks here all the time. That's our culture. I don't smoke really, but I'm not sure how I feel about the new law. Obviously it is a step forward in terms of health, as smoking related illnesses are costing our Health Service (which is completely free of charge for any person who happens to be in the country when they need healthcare) millions each year.Yet it is a drastic law as everybody in this country smokes. In a lot of rural areas, old people go down to their local pub specifically to have a smoke and a drink with their friends, that is their life. If they are unable to smoke, many people will stop going out. I have some English friends who are seriously considering moving back to England because they can no longer smoke on a night out. There are fears it will hurt business, particularly pubs and clubs, which are natural smoking atmospheres. One of the main concerns are that people living near the English border will just drive through to England for a night out instead, taking business away from Scotland, because they can no longer smoke. Already people are saying they'll just get a carry out in the flat, buy their own booze rather than go to a pub, so they can smoke.I'm undecided on this issue. I think perhaps there should be a ban on all public areas except pubs and clubs, who should be able to apply for a smoking license or something, because this ban will wreck business and damage the economy. Despite the fact, I suppose, it will help the economy in the long run, through better heatlh and the NHS.
    • 18/05/2005
    • 08:31:18
    • Score: 1 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • G.W.Bush

    This is a great essay, well structured, mainly unbiased and sticks to the point. Well done.I thought it was particularly interesting your point about the fact the US didnt invade North Korea (despite it being a bigger threat) actually possibly encouraging other countries to develop Nuclear Weapons Programmes to deter the US from invading.Bush may have won the American public's vote, but I am really doubtful as to whether he is being as clever with the rest of the world. I live in Scotland, and the anti-american feeling over here is very very strong. It was strong enough before the Iraq War, but that really was the icing on the cake. Tony Blair only got back into power here again because our main opposition party is so weak, and people still remember the hated Margaret Thatcher. There are calls from all over the country now to oust Tony Blair and that is purely because of the Iraq War. It was highly unpopular across the world, and I think that Bush and Blair made a massive mistake in going ahead with it, I think it will have made relations with a lot of countries strained, possibly irrepairably strained for a long time. That to me, does not seem like a clever move. America is now hated even more than it was before, across the entire world.
    • 18/05/2005
    • 08:18:44
    • Score: 0 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Well done

    I think this is a good essay, especially considering it is such a controversial and difficult topic to write an essay on.I have heard people talk about Original Sin, and I think it is a common belief amongst some branches of Christianity.I strongly agree with all your arguments that Christianity (as do most religions) cause discrimination, war and intolerance of other beliefs and cultures. However, what ruskipaul says about the bible being full of love is also true, at least of the new testament. If you read what Jesus himself was supposed to have said, you really cannot find much wrong with that.I probably should be commenting purely on the essay and not on the other comments here, but never mind...to Capnusa: I'm not sure if you can actually prove that all the scriptures were passed down from Adam and Eve, or that Adam and Eve even existed. I think that is subjective.ccmustangs2001: I think you will find Catholicism and Christianity are different branches of the same religion (at least I think it was just a typo, you were asserting they are seperate religions, yeah?). Your very comment has just acted as evidence backing up everything this essay says (which somehow, amusingly, I don't think you intended it to do)! You are being homophobic and displaying sectarian beliefs (baptists are ok, but not Catholics, right?). You just sound like a bigot. It sounds to me like you're the one who hasn't interpreted the bible properly. Wasn't Jesus supposed to have said that "love thy neighbour as thyself" is the second most important commandment, next to "love thy God with all thy heart" (when the Pharisees try to catch him out about the ten commandments)? It doesn't sound to me like you adhere to that rule at all.Oh, and by the way, homosexuals are born homosexual. It is natural, the same way as it is natural for some women to be attracted to men, and some men to be attracted to women. Likewise, some women are attracted to women, and some men attracted to men, and some to a bit of both. That's the way nature made it, the way it has always been and the way it always will be. Love your neighbour.
    • 04/05/2005
    • 14:26:30
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  • Same Sex Marriage

    This essay is absolutely ridiculous. Your arguments are obscure, the analogies you use irrelevant and you repeat yourself throughout.
    • 04/05/2005
    • 10:56:53
    • Score: 0 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Pre-Martial Sex

    Thanks for that, that was hilarious.
    • 03/05/2005
    • 17:02:38
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Sex

    Great essay; informative, relevant and interesting. There are other contraceptive methods though, such as the IUD, or the coil. I use that - it's 99.99...% effective against pregnancy. It hurts a lot getting it inserted, but its safe and most importantly, its non-hormonal, so it doesn't mess up your body's system.
    • 03/05/2005
    • 16:18:20
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Patriot Act

    Although this essay is very short, and increasing the length, and thus the contents, would definately improve it, I think it is a very refreshing opinion you have and you back it up with sound arguments. How nice not to read another mindless pro-Bush essay!
    • 03/05/2005
    • 16:08:48
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Not an essay

    Way too short, I wouldnt class this as an essay.
    • 27/04/2005
    • 14:21:59
    • Score: 0 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Drug Testing

    Good argument, although my only advice would be to make it a little longer, and also to maybe provide more of an opposite argument?I think it IS an infringement on people's rights. By buying drugs you are indirectly perhaps causing the deaths of other people, however, by voting for the government you are also causing the deaths of many innocent people (iraq for one, and I'll bet theres more we don't know about. And that goes for every and any government, not just Blair or Bush's). It's all relative. If people want to take drugs recreationally, and can still hold down a job, then it is their choice to do so. Drug Testing infringes on that right. Just because something is illegal, it does not necessarily make it wrong. As we have seen, the government can often be wrong.
    • 27/04/2005
    • 14:21:18
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  • Why

    Why was this rated bad? It's a good, indepth account on the economy as far as I can see, although I did just skim through it. Do people just rate things bad because it is at the bottom of the points scale and too long for most people to be bothered to read?
    • 27/04/2005
    • 14:14:26
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • World Bank

    Hmm, informative essay but you are using facts selectively here. The World Bank is what has helped to get Sudan into such massive debt in the first place. These loans are not interest free and the developing countries cant pay them off. Organisations like the World Bank, and the World Bank itself have advocated the use of cash crops in sub-saharan africa. These cash crops were not thought through properly, and instead of the farmers using the land to farm food for themselves, they were forced to farm crops such as cotton instead, so that the country could sell it to try and pay off it's massive, ever increasing debt. This left the African people with no food, no money for food and no means of growing food. Not to mention that fact that lots of the cash crops failed, either because the crop they were forced to grow was not suited to the climate/soil, or because the production of the same crop was increased in other countries lowering the price and meaning that countries would not buy off of african countries because their crops were too expensive. This left African countries in even more debt, which is NOT interest free, meaning it is ever-increasing and impossible to pay off. Its evil.
    • 11/04/2005
    • 09:33:53
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  • Refutation of the Bible

    A good topic, and it does seem like you have a decent knowledge of the subject, however, perhaps make the tone of your essay a little more professional? It sounds like you're taking the piss out of the Bible rather than just refuting it. I don't believe in the bible myself, but people do, and it's disrespectful to mock other's beliefs. Perhaps try and be more professional about it. Nice try though, and very interesting topic! You're definately going to lose points for this though, I bet.
    • 11/04/2005
    • 09:25:05
    • Score: 1 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Um,,,,,

    While there is a lot of great stuff in this essay, such as the description of what you learnt from the book, I have to say, the Mary Shelley's Frankenstein that I read did NOT end with the Creature being stoned to death. I wonder if you read the proper 1818 edition after all, because that is not how the book ends.
    • 16/03/2005
    • 11:07:45
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  • Hockey pucks

    I don't really see why people are marking this so badly. Obviously, this was a presentation of some sort, and not an essay, and its not very formal or particularly informative, but I don't think it deserves a bad mark.
    • 08/03/2005
    • 15:01:59
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Britian

    A nice account, but your Political section is rather vague. Britain is a kingdom of devolved assemblies (since 1997). With the most devolved powers is the Scottish Parliament, who deals with matters such as health and education seperately from the British Westminster Parliament. Then Wales and Ireland have devolved political assemblies with certain devolved powers for local matters. You might also mention something about the political situation in Ireland, since the IRA has a significant impact on British News. Other than that - a lovely essay, well done!
    • 08/03/2005
    • 14:58:49
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Love

    This is a lovely wee essay - a really interesting read. Good work
    • 08/03/2005
    • 14:50:57
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Tattoos

    Hmmm, I think you're right in some senses here, like that people might regret getting tattoo. Although I'm all for free will, and if its their choice then fine, but there must be an age limit on it. 18 is a good age. I think 16 might be the legal age in Britain though. What is it in the US?
    • 17/02/2005
    • 06:22:13
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  • William Wallace

    This is a lovely essay - well structured, interesting and it seems very well researched. I enjoyed reading this (as I am actually Scottish myself), I don't much like the film Braveheart - I think it romanticises this country far too much, and I especially didn;t like Mel Gibson playing William Wallace (who I guess is, as you say, a national hero), but I liked your essay topic - its nice to have someone distinguish between Hollywood and fact.Well done...
    • 16/02/2005
    • 13:57:47
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  • Nice

    I liked the way you began this, it made me want to read on. I think this is a really nice piece of writing. Hope theres more to come!
    • 11/02/2005
    • 10:09:10
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  • A wonderful gift

    It seems odd that this is entered under 9th grade, unless that was a mistake?I think this is a little empty and pointless. What exactly is Chayon-Ryu? You never explain anything beyond its being a martial art. You don't explain why you wanted to learn it so much or why you like it so much either. Or what its about. Considering that you apparently teach this subject I would have thought you would be able to explain, and want to explain, a lot more about it.Sorry.
    • 11/02/2005
    • 10:05:22
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Nice

    This is a nice wee speech, well done.Ironic George Bush calls murderer when he is a murderer (albeit a subtler one) himself.
    • 10/02/2005
    • 06:18:04
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  • Violence in the Media

    Interesting essay on an interesting topic - well done!Personally I think that the only instance of violence on screen ever really filtering down to actual violence in society is when it is glamourised. Take 'Pulp Fiction' or 'Kill Bill' - both great films in my opinion, but they glamourise violence. It's cool, the films are cool, the characters are cool and the violence is cool. 'A Clockwork Orange' was banned in Britain for ages because loads of copycat attacks were being made all over the country because the film was cool. I think if violence is glamourised then it may lead to actual violence on the streets. Real violence, on the news for example, would probably produce the opposite affect in most people.Just my thoughts :)
    • 10/02/2005
    • 06:10:11
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  • Gender Equality

    I agree with what the essay is trying to say, but Mahlum is right, it is extremely one-sided. You might be better to present a less biased essay and it would be taken more seriously.Also, your style of writing is very informal and I think if you wrote formally it would give the essay more credibility.
    • 10/02/2005
    • 05:59:25
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Ghandi

    Great essay about a great man. Well done.
    • 08/02/2005
    • 10:58:27
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Ok

    Ok, but I think Shakespeare deserves a lot more that 500 odd words...
    • 08/02/2005
    • 10:56:50
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Homosexual Marriage

    Great. Really really good, well done.
    • 07/02/2005
    • 02:06:45
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Hmmm

    Theres a shortened version of this essay already on this site.
    • 07/02/2005
    • 02:00:33
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Drugs

    Good essay, but you do not really make much of an argument here. WHY are drugs bad? WHY must we stop children taking them if they want to? What are the bad affects of drugs?People have told me all my life what drugs can do to me and it never stopped me, possibly because the people teaching me this forgot to tell me how much fun they are, and that not all drugs are fatally dangerous and addictive.I don't smoke, but I remember trying it when I was 12. I was terrified, but I wanted to know, because all my friends smoked. My parents had led me to believe that one draw of a cigarette would make me instantly addicted. Obviously this was a lie. I stole a fag out of my mums bag and hid in the bathroom to smoke it. I was almost sick, and most definately not addicted. I concluded they had lied to me.As I found out more about drugs later on in life I concluded that my teachers and parents had been selectively using facts, and had 'forgotten' to tell me a lot of things about drugs. Such as millions of people use drugs every weekend and do not die, or become addicted. That the chances of dying from taking E are really really slim and that unless you are a heavy smoker, cannabis does nothing really that bad to you.I think that maybe if children were taught ALL the facts in school it would help. Such as the bad effects of E and the good, and what to do to stay safe when you are taking drugs. Inevitably people will still take them, so perhaps if they knew how to stay safe because they were taught it, there would not be so many drugs casualties at the end of the day?Just my opinion. :)
    • 07/02/2005
    • 01:56:25
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  • Drugs

    This is a fantastic essay, I read every word of it, very clearly structured, explained and well thought out. I thought it was great. Only improvement I could see was that you might have included the effects of Ecstacy. Very informative - it's good to know exactly how you're damaging yourself.
    • 03/02/2005
    • 02:07:19
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Drugs

    No clear argument, no statistics, nothing to back your argument up except the hollow arguments you have been told either by teachers at school or by your parents, neither of which are probably very informed.
    • 02/02/2005
    • 05:23:16
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  • 1984

    I thought this was ok, you make some good points. You relate an unneccesary amount of the plot, and in too much detail,,,,,my advice would be to cut that out, you won't get graded on that, I would cut it down to just putting it in where it is relevant to you making a point.Also, you repeat yourself a lot, I would try and cut that down.Your conclusion is good, although I would maybe make it a bit longer. And also, I think that the book also demonstrates that although we live in a democracy, many elements of it are very totalitarian, as you pointed out in fact in your introducion. Doublethink, for example, and the mass media.All in all, good work though, well done!
    • 02/02/2005
    • 05:10:40
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  • A Clockwork Orange

    Fantastic essay! Really well written, lot's of quotes to back your ideas up and nicely structured. Good work!
    • 01/02/2005
    • 04:40:37
    • Score: 1 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • A Clockwork Orange

    Nice essay, well done!I think it's shocking that the 21st chapter was taken out of the american version of the book. Apparently Burgess only agreed to it because he was so strapped for cash at the time. It's such a shame as I think the last chapter just reinforces the whole argument that Burgess is putting across. He has a great counter-argument, but at the end of the novel brings a conclusion hat cements his ideas and the ommission of the final chapter undermines that.I agree with you that its just an attempt to Americanise all things, as America does with everything. I wouldn't read the American version, it's not the complete book.
    • 01/02/2005
    • 04:27:31
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  • A Clockwork Orange and 1984

    Nice try, but you might have done better to cut down on the repetition, a lot of points are repeated two or three times unnecessarily. Also, you said that often the people are at war with Oceania...have you even read the book? I'm sorry, but obviously not, obviously the people are not at war with Oceania, ever, because they ARE Oceania.Also, Alex trying to be a pleasant new person but because of his history can't do it? Alex is NEVER a pleasant person in the book, or trying to be one. Not even in the last chapter, the reader only knows of his intentions to settle down and give up the violence. He does not even consider giving up any of the violence until the 21st chapter.I think you have made a few good points here but you could structure them better, you also need to start getting your facts right. Just some advice, but handing in essays where you don't know simple things about the plot makes your work seem sloppy and will probably lose you more marks than anything, because the teacher will think you havent read it and not care too much about looking for the good aspects of your essay.
    • 01/02/2005
    • 04:19:38
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  • Terrible

    I agree with everything said by dreconem and mjj328. Plus, the novel is NOT written mostly in Russian, if you'd bothered to read it, it only uses some Russian slang.
    • 25/01/2005
    • 04:30:40
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  • Criticism

    Actually, I've managed to find criticism on it:Welsh's Trainspotting: A reader's guide, by Robert A MoraceHope this helps! Its quite good.
    • 13/01/2005
    • 06:02:05
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  • Trainspotting

    "The complex plot is that there is no plot, the meaningful theme is that there is no theme; it is just one boy's struggles with himself, the people around him, and a hard, cruel world"This is a total cop-out, there are so MANY themes in Trainspotting, it depicts a subculture of people flawlessly, it is a critique of capitalist and materialist culture and a rejection of the social order as well as following the lives of individuals who choose to deviate from the norm. I agree with sileas, I think you have missed the point somewhat. Sorry.
    • 13/01/2005
    • 05:41:42
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  • Trainspotting

    This is quite a good review for 12th grade, but I'd just like to add that Trainspotting is so much more. Both the book and the film depict the British subculture they are describing flawlessly. Trainspotting has been criticised because it glamourises heroin, it was criticised because the music it uses and in general everything about the film is "cool"...but that is the way that that culture is. That is the music that is listened to and the "don't give a fuck" attitude is also accurate. Heroin isn't cool, and neither the film or the book is saying that - on the contrary, they depict the horrors of heroin very accurately. Both the novel and the film are very very clever, very realistic and amazing pieces of art. If you haven't read the novel - READ IT NOW! It is one of the most intelligent pieces of literature I have ever read, and I'm an honours student of English Literature. Its amazing.I probably should be commenting on the essay, not the film - im sorry, cant help it!On the whole a good essay...nicely structured and very concise. Well done!
    • 13/01/2005
    • 05:34:46
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  • Suicide

    You make some good points but your essay is way too short for such an important topic meaning you are unable to develop points that would strengthen your essay. Also you NEED to have statistics, it makes it look really unprofessional without them. Other than that though, nice work!
    • 10/01/2005
    • 03:16:54
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  • WalMart

    Great, its clear, concise and well-structured. Well done with the essay! What a pity WalMart is so bloody evil though...
    • 10/01/2005
    • 03:13:37
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • American Beauty

    Lovely essay, I read it all. You did a great analysis of the characters and themes, fantastic job, well done!My only advice is to brush up your grammer and spelling, and also perhaps cut out all the hyphens in the middle of the words.Also, I thought that the paragraph on drugs was rather weak, as you are criticising the film(makers) because they have a different opinion on drugs than you do. You suggest that it detracts from the film - I think it is a great part of the film. Its realistic. Also, when you bring religion into it - I disagree, I don't think American Beauty is about religion in the slightest, that is, that i disagree that the beauty depicted in the film has to be seen from a religious perspective.Other than that though, I thought this was FANTASTIC, really interesting and a pleasure to read! Write more!
    • 23/12/2004
    • 05:19:34
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Beauty

    You give a really good attempt at explaining a very difficult concept. Beauty is something that nobody can really explain. For example, why some people think one thing is attractive while someone else thinks the same thing is ugly. Bizarre. But a good essay.
    • 16/12/2004
    • 11:52:00
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Lovely

    A lovely essay, I liked the fact it was taken from the girls perspective. Great Work!
    • 16/12/2004
    • 07:17:46
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Great job

    Great essay, I really liked it. Its a good book to write about as well. My only suggestion is maybe the opening and conclusion could be a bit longer. Other than that - great!
    • 16/12/2004
    • 07:07:50
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Moving Pictures

    Great job - I love terry pratchett and this was a nice essay.
    • 16/12/2004
    • 06:36:00
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Fantastic

    George Orwell is a genuis and this is a lovely essay on 1984. Well presented, clearly thought-out and concise. Brilliant!
    • 15/12/2004
    • 14:54:24
    • Score: 2 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Wow

    This sounded really heartfelt, it certainly moved me, if it's somewhat controversial. A good essay, even if i'm not entirely sure I agree with what you're saying. Very strong essay.
    • 15/12/2004
    • 14:49:14
    • Score: 4 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Good

    Nice, clearly structured and concise. Well done!
    • 15/12/2004
    • 11:44:07
    • Score: 0 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Nice

    Nice essay, I enjoyed reading it, very informative. :)
    • 15/12/2004
    • 11:42:42
    • Score: 0 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Informative

    Really nice essay, very informative - I had never thought about slavery in America from an economic perspective before.
    • 15/12/2004
    • 11:38:42
    • Score: 0 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Interesting

    I liked it :)
    • 15/12/2004
    • 11:30:54
    • Score: 3 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Hmmm

    A little too short?
    • 15/12/2004
    • 11:06:32
    • Score: 0 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Good

    This was an interesting essay to read. Britain has an unwritten constitution, and although there are several drawbacks to that, I think it is a good thing in terms of change. It enables outdated laws to be reformed easily.Really informative essay - I liked it. :)
    • 15/12/2004
    • 11:05:42
    • Score: 0 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Great

    Great essay - really informative. It's ironic that people could spark off such a horrific hate campaign against immigrants when they themselves are descended from immigrants - everyone is. Your essay is very short but extremely interesting. Good work!
    • 15/12/2004
    • 08:40:26
    • Score: 3 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Nice

    I liked it, really interesting - well done!
    • 14/12/2004
    • 17:19:30
    • Score: 0 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Ok

    This is ok, but for an essay it needs to be more formal.
    • 13/12/2004
    • 16:23:22
    • Score: 1 out of 3 people found this comment useful.