I'm glad your essay makes the distinction of neo-wicca, there is a difference between what was practiced and what is, a source of contention in the community.One point of clarification about the burning times however. Very few witches were burned, and in fact no witches were burned in Salem, but as oft happened many Christians were accused of being witches and were destroyed by the community, in Salem, only a voodoo witch doctor was persecuted.The estimates of thousands to millions being burned are unsubstantied and highly in doubt. If anything is likely, it's that actual "practicing" witches were burned with Christians at about a 1:10-1:20 ration as the law or large numbers allows. You cast a wide enough net you will catch some.Enjoyable none the less.
- 02/09/2004
- 17:11:18
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
I would rework the begining, as it's not clear what your talking about at first, and the grammar needs some work, but content wise, I enjoyed your article.
- 29/06/2004
- 14:14:52
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Very good.I personally didn't like the movie, but your description of it is more exciting!
- 29/06/2004
- 14:11:55
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Techincally sound essay, though citation of sources needs some work.Personally, I think the opinion stated is a load of crap, and no evidence is offered for review of the authors opinion. That being said, it was a good read, if misguied.
- 20/06/2004
- 23:53:45
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
I've read this somehere prior, I just can't place it. I don't have much faith either that it shows up in every essay house with a google search.Formating needs to be restructured.
- 19/06/2004
- 04:48:06
- Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
A conclusion is needed.Citations not in MLA or APA format.
- 19/06/2004
- 04:38:08
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
The way this essay is submitted, nobody will read. It is one incredibly long paragraph.
- 19/06/2004
- 04:36:22
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Grammatical errors:Comma useStarting a sentence with butSpellingSentence fragments, you don't have subject verb agreement.Structural errors:No thesisNo clear argumentsNo illustrative examples or citationsPoor conclusion
- 19/06/2004
- 04:34:03
- Score: 7 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
Grammar and scentence strutcure needs to be reworked.Pay attention to:1) Spelling, ie. Descriptive, not discriptive;2) Proper comma use;3) There are many scentence fragments whic join to make a rather long run on.5) Keep tense consistent. Now and was cannot occur at the same time6) Pluraize plural objects.
- 19/06/2004
- 04:27:56
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
I agree with ruskpaul, there is also an obvious lack of a thesis.I would also like to comment on your comma use and general sentence structure; this essay needs a grammatical rewrite.Otherwise I found it informative. :)
- 19/06/2004
- 04:22:37
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Informative, well researched/documented, straight to the point. I learned. That's the point is it not? Bravo!
- 19/06/2004
- 04:13:37
- Score: 25 out of 25 people found this comment useful.
This is a commentary, personal at best, no structure at all. Support your ideas with research, talk about how others feel that way. This is more of a blog entry than anything worthy of being submitted.
- 17/06/2004
- 16:13:01
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
This is strictly a comparison of facts of both stories. More detail is needed. Compare a theme, setting, character, anything other than the facts.
- 17/06/2004
- 16:11:03
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.