Reading and Children- how teachers make students hate reading.

Hey people if you are going to rate my essays low please inform me why so i can improve. The assignment was to write an paragraph agreeing or disagreeing w/ another essay(How Teachers make Children Hate Reading by John Holt) Where did i go wrong?

Try to explain both your argument in agreement of the writer, but also take a moment - even if its just a couple of lines - to say, but.... If you can show that you have examined both sides of the argument then you can improve your score.

I also found that the lack of paragraph structure hindered the essay. Paragraphs were invented for a reason. It separates different ideas in an essay. It helps people to grasp what is being said. You also need to do some proof-reading and editing. Try reading it out aloud and you will see there are some places in which incorrect words have been used that disrupt the flow of the essay. The lack of introduction also makes it hard for us to establish your argument. It is in the introductory paragraph that you should have established that you were writing a book report on Holt's article, because quite frankly I didn't know what you were doing until I wrote your comment posted below. In order to improve this essay, you need to begin with a thesis statement for each paragraph. This is a sentence that tells us what the paragraph is going to be about. The rest of the paragraph then explains the thesis statement and gives examples to make it clearer. This however made some interesting points, because I was never forced to read in this manner. We had a reading log, in which we would read books of our choice and rate them, pretty much in the same way that it works on here, and I loved reading when I was young. This would have also gained impetus if you had discussed your own personal experience in relation to Holt's book. It adds reader interest and also helps to clarify your argument much more as you would be giving examples. This essay is not too bad, it is of first draft quality. It would be good if you took these suggestions, edited this essay and then re-submitted it so we could all see the polished product.

Great ideas, but it may have recieved a frown due to the missing body paragraphs, intro, and conclusion. A little paragraph organization would have made this paper even better. Otherwise, it was pretty good.

Your ideas were very nice and they made sense. Very interesting read.

this is a good essay. It is well written and deals with an interesting topic. I think we all can relate to being nervous about reading in front of the class. Great topic choice.

This is a pretty good essay. It could flow a little better at times, but it is good.

this essay is totally right.

great job