I think you have to change the title or let the reader know how this principles can be applied to business.
- 29/11/2006
- 05:41:48
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1.)"but their life job is still a house-wife" Do you think feminists agree on this?2.)There are grammatical errors.3.)Poor introduction.4.)Either your arguments are not new or not well-thought out.
- 29/11/2006
- 05:31:58
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1.) Murderers are human beings not to be treated in the same way as mere cancer cells.2.) You confined death penalty in racism. There are stronger arguments against death penalty.3.) Better and more sources should have been used.4.) Are potential murderers afraid of death or execution? [You assumed that they will fear death.]5.) Is there no chance that they will change for the better even if imprisoned for a lifetime?6.) Is it costly to support the life of a prisoner such that it would be better to kill the murderers? Is it better to kill them does reducing to 0% the chance of them committing the same crime?7.) What is justice by the way?
- 28/11/2006
- 06:03:56
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There are some grammatical errors. Your paragraphs and sentences are not constructed well. No close reading has been done as shown by your poorly supported points in the second paragraph. I am sorry to tell you this.
- 24/11/2006
- 06:18:15
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I don't know what's the equivalent of middle school, 8th grade here in my country. "Antartica" is a general topic. Sorry to say this but your work is underdeveloped and has no clear focus.
- 24/11/2006
- 05:41:35
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Is it the unborn's fault that he/she has been conceived through rape? Does he/she not have the right to live? Is the fetus not going to become a human? Does the mother own the life of the fetus? It seems that you only reached the level of presenting the two sides of the issue. No real analysis of the arguments of the two sides has been made which could have lead to your decision of which has a stronger stand. How about the scientific aspect of the issue? Is abortion good for the mother's health? In situations when the life of either the mother or the unborn is to be chosen, the one with the higher chance of surviving is chosen. Killing or letting the baby die in this case is the lesser evil. Please read on the principle of double effect.Unwanted pregancy is not only the consequence of rape; it can be the effect of not using contraceptives or on a higher level, lack of self-discipline.
- 22/11/2006
- 03:06:29
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In the first paragraph, you imply that same-sex marriage should be allowed. Then in another paragraph, you say that no one can stop same-sex lovers because they are in a relationship already. My question is: If they love each other, why do they not just live together and forget the idea of having to go through the ceremonies? "Marriage is a way to show love, commitment and dedication when in a serious relationship" If they really love each other and would like to be with each other until death, by themselves they can do the promise. What's the use of marriage, specifically a Catholic marriage if the couples aren't going to fulfill their promises."Many dislike the idea of man and man or woman and woman wed under God because it goes against religion and morals." You've used the word God already. Based on this statement, it means that for you a wedding is 'under God' and thus, is (and has always been) a part of religion.
- 22/11/2006
- 02:12:08
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Some statements are not new. On the brighter side, it is good that you lifted lines that made your essay more academic in nature. It could have been better if you cited an advertisement and analyzed it based on your arguments.
- 22/11/2006
- 01:06:53
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