User Details For: spoonman419

Essay List
  • Drug Legalization in America - A Radical Stance

  • World's Largest Crustacean - Giant Spider Crab

  • Obesity in American Schools - A Witch-hunt

  • The Nature of Man - Selfishness

  • The Whaling Industry Today - Norway and Japan

  • Definition of Irony from Personal Experience

  • Nature Vs. Nurture

  • Abortion: Jesus Ain't the President - A Rebuttal

  • The Jumping Bridge - Descriptive Prose Exercise

  • Self-presentation and Clothing - Personal Experience

  • Poem about Seeing Two Small Kids Get Mauled by a Dog

  • Euthanasia Debate: It's about Autonomy

  • Mary J - A Short Poem about Marijuana

  • Nature vs. Nurture Paper Outline

  • Course Reflection (to teacher) - Psychology

  • Equal Rights and Equal Dignity for Americans Act of 2003

  • Euthanasia Debate Notes

  • The Run

  • Ernie: Rock Bottom

  • Buses: Part 1

  • Buses: Part 2

  • Buses: Part 3

  • Buses: Part 4

  • Buses: Part 5

  • Buses: Part 6

  • Buses: Part 7 (final)

  • Religion : Minkind's Security Blanket

  • The Addict

  • The Damned

  • Dead as Dark

  • Dionysus

  • The American Way

  • Lifetime

  • Something More

  • I am Strange a Ghost Just Me

  • Fear in the Meat

  • Dad's Guitar

  • He Approaches... Are You Ready?

  • She is These Days

  • Black Mountain Herb - Part 1

  • Black Mountain Herb - Part 2

  • Black Mountain Herb - Part 3 (final)

  • Ole Betsy

  • One Flew Over the Cuckoo's Nest

  • The Ache

  • Universal

  • Disgusted

  • Stop Shooting the Bacon and Shoot the Cafe!

  • Perception of Perfection

  • Structural Functionalism

  • Father's Day

  • Six Black Dudes on a Bus

  • Friday Night At The Whore House Of Technology

  • The ride of the Elven Queen

  • Ensure Contentment to Ensure Complacency to Ensure Conformity

  • Anti-Marijuana Propaganda

  • Children of Vengeance - Part 1

  • Children of Vengeance - Part 2

  • A Modest Proposal to Prevent the Use of Marijuana by Americans under the Age of Eighteen

  • Reality Conflict

  • Perchance to Dream - Part 1

  • Perchance to Dream - Part 2

  • Prisoners of War - Chapter 1

  • Prisoners of War - Chapter 2

  • Prisoners of War - Chapter 3

  • Prisoners of War - Chapter 4

  • Prisoners of War - Chapter 5

  • Prisoners of War - Chapter 6

  • Prisoners of War - Chapter 7

  • Prisoners of War - Chapter 8

  • Prisoners of War - Chapter 9

  • Prisoners of War - Chapter 10

  • Prisoners of War - Chapter 11

  • Prisoners of War - Chapter 12

  • Prisoners of War - Chapter 13

  • Prisoners of War - Chapter 14

  • Prisoners of War - Chapter 15

  • Prisoners of War - Chapter 16

  • Prisoners of War - Chapter 17

  • Prisoners of War - Chapter 18

  • Prisoners of War - Chapter 19

  • Prisoners of War - Chapter 20

  • Prisoners of War - Chapter 20 (part 2)

  • Prisoners of War - Chapter 21

  • Prisoners of War - Chapter 22

  • Prisoners of War - Chapter 23

  • Prisoners of War - Chapter 24

  • Prisoners of War - Chapter 25

  • Prisoners of War - Chapter 26

  • Prisoners of War - Chapter 27

  • Prisoners of War - Chapter 28

  • Prisoners of War - Chapter 29

  • Prisoners of War - Chapter 30

  • Prisoners of War - Chapter 31

  • Prisoners of War - Chapter 32

  • Prisoners of War - Chapter 33

  • A Letter to the Past

  • Prisoners of War - Chapter 34

  • Olympic Rant

  • Prisoners of War - Chapter 35

  • Comments List
    • The Begining and Ending of The Universe

      This essay was very information for its purpose. The writing style is direct and suites the subject you presented. The introduction should've mentioned the concepts exhibited throughout the essay, instead of going straight into theories. However, I do like how it was presented in sections, which adds to the fluidity and helps break down the complicated concepts discussed. The conclusion was rather disappointing, and you only briefly mention the end of the universe. This is a definite negative, since the title may prove to be misleading. Overall, you did an adequate job at presenting the information pertaining to the beginning of the universe, although it is quite lacking in respect to the end.
      • 29/08/2004
      • 20:13:58
      • Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
    • My dreams

      Wow... this is so hokey it is beyond belief. Really?! You're dream was to fall in love, get married and have a child?! No way! Thaat's so creative and inspiration and totally something no one has EVER done before like EVER! Not to mention your brilliant style of writing that constists of ABSOLUTELY no repetition at ALL! It's like this essay was God-inspired, I swear. Oh, but I bet your little darling of a child is a God-sent miracle, because you know people don't have children very often! Geeeeeeeeeeeez!!! Get a friggin' clue!
      • 24/08/2004
      • 21:29:58
      • Score: 2 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
    • Re: really

      Of course humans are animals, if you consider that we evolved from them. We are creatures of habit, just as any other on this earth, and we do what we can to ensure the survival of our species. If you look at the brain of a human, what distinguishes us above the rest is our greater ability to make complex association, due to a much larger area of the brain called the "associative" area that is dedicated to learning through means of conditioning and associations, as opposed to being dedicated to instinct. Due to a greater capacity, we are able to be conditioned against our instincts, which is really all that causes our realtively great intelligence.
      • 22/08/2004
      • 07:38:01
      • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
    • RE: larrylovenduonofit

      I don't think there should be any paragraphing, because there is such lack of transition in this. It suites the point better as one lump paragraph, so it stresses that there is no real separation in thought. I like it just the way it is. It better demonstrates ADD this way.
      • 20/08/2004
      • 22:21:21
      • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
    • ADD vs. Short Attention Span

      Although I'm not sure this should be in Health and Medicine, I found this essay hilarious. At first, I actually wanted to learn the difference, but as I readon, I soon found myself laughing aloud. True, you don't actually adress any difference, but the essay serves as a great example of what it's like to have ADD. I was diagnosed when I was younger and they put me on ritalin for a couple years. I never took it though, after I found out how much kids would pay for it! Haha. This was a great essay.
      • 19/08/2004
      • 17:52:43
      • Score: 4 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
    • Plagiarized

      This is directly from http://www.notegoat.com/papers/music2.htmlI'm not sure if you were trying to pass this off as your own, but in any case, you can't submit stuff like this. You must've written it to give the rights to CH.com
      • 18/08/2004
      • 19:21:48
      • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
    • Duplicate Submission

      This was a very informational essay that is broken down well for its purpose. Some sources would be incredibly useful and it would've been better if you attached a conclusion. Anyways, it is relatively well-written, but you only need to submit it once.
      • 14/08/2004
      • 20:48:24
      • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
    • The Rule of the Bone

      This essay was extremely short for the subject matter. Personally, this is one of my favorite books and I think you missed some major points. It was never about his connections to other people; I loved how the people came and went, while Chappy gleaned a bit from each experience. The ending wasn't a bad one in this respect, because although Chappie may have lost some important people, he also learned some important life lessons. It was disappointing that you didn't even mention Bruce, because he was a very integral character symbolism-wise. Rose, Bruce, and I-man were all reflected different periods in his life. Really, I didn't think this essay does Rule of the Bone the least bit of justice. Try not to read it so shallowly.
      • 09/08/2004
      • 21:07:55
      • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
    • Siddhartha

      This was okay, but there is definitely room for improvement. I realize it was just 11th grade, but I would've liked to see closer implementation of Maslow into the story. It seems like you just mention Maslow, make a few connections and expect the reader to do the rest. Anyways, the essay flowed relatively well, although I would've liked a longer conclusion. There was a bit of contradiction at the end, stating it is not the achievments that make the journey, but you go on to say that the journey revolved around the hope for achievements. That really bothered me, and made it seem as though you missed the point entirely. Nice effort, overall, though.
      • 09/08/2004
      • 20:00:56
      • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
    • Narcotic Manipulation Of Our Nation

      Overall, this essay came off as rather lame. I mean, could you have employed anymore paranoid and essentially meaningless cliches? The beginning made some good points about narcotics not just being illicit substances, but it all got progressively hokier. I would've respected it so much more if not for the emotional language. Drug use is essentially facilitated by one's drive for hedonism, and that is why the "pain" always returns after use. As a former drug user, I found this essay really lame.
      • 08/08/2004
      • 15:01:39
      • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
    • Wicca

      I know some people who practice Wicca and they are thoroughly misunderstood. You did an excellent job with this essay in explaining this religion. You get this to flow relatively well and the quote on the end gives it a fitting conclusion. Overall, this is quite informational and well-researched. Nice job.
      • 07/08/2004
      • 14:10:21
      • Score: 10 out of 16 people found this comment useful.
    • Plagiarized

      http://www.studyworld.com/studyworld_studynotes/complete/studynotes/Titles/miceandmen/summ1.html
      • 05/08/2004
      • 20:38:35
      • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
    • Plagiarized

      http://www.courseworkbank.co.uk/GCSE/English_Language/Stories/more2.html
      • 05/08/2004
      • 19:48:29
      • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
    • Plagiarized

      http://www.gradesaver.com/ClassicNotes/Authors/about_john_steinbeck.html
      • 05/08/2004
      • 19:46:14
      • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
    • Plagiarized

      http://www.lancs.ac.uk/users/history/studpages/lanchistory/pendle.htm
      • 05/08/2004
      • 19:43:34
      • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
    • Plagiarized

      http://www.pdhre.org/dialogue/revolution.html
      • 05/08/2004
      • 19:42:23
      • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
    • Plagiarized

      http://www.gradesaver.com/ClassicNotes/Titles/farewelltoarms/essays/essay1.html
      • 05/08/2004
      • 19:38:31
      • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
    • Plagiarized

      http://users.aristotle.net/~diogenes/unhappy.htm
      • 05/08/2004
      • 19:31:49
      • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
    • Plagiarized

      www.4freeessays.com/essays/1613.shtmlwww.planetpapers.com/Assets/1613.php
      • 05/08/2004
      • 19:29:42
      • Score: 4 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
    • Plagiarized

      http://www.courseworkbank.co.uk/GCSE/English_Literature/Novels/more2.htmlwww.getfreeessays.com/show_essay/47726.html
      • 05/08/2004
      • 19:22:40
      • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
    • Plagiarized

      http://www.antiessays.com/essay.php?cat=misc&eid=1128www.freepapers.net/essays/Body_Modification.misc.shtmlwww.findfreeessays.com/show_essay/44101.htmlwww.joesessays.com/misc/misc5.shtmlamong others
      • 05/08/2004
      • 19:08:22
      • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
    • Plagiarized

      http://www.counterculture.co.uk/movie-review/the-ring.html
      • 05/08/2004
      • 19:04:01
      • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
    • Plagiarized

      http://gofree.indigo.ie/~warrenl/Tolkien/NorthSouth/NorthSouth.html
      • 05/08/2004
      • 18:58:53
      • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
    • Capitalism Bring War or Peace?

      This was a well-written and inciteful essay. I agree with most of all of you points and I think you got this piece to flow well. There was some definite research although there is no bibliography. The conclusion was clearly stated and summed up the information quite well. It's a shame when a governments goals consist of the aquisition of money rather than the goodwill of its people.
      • 01/08/2004
      • 18:36:08
      • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
    • Happiness, refers to John Stuart Mill's ideas

      I can tell you certainly feel strongly about Mill's position, because much of what is in your essay is biased and assumptuous. I'm not quite sure that your examples are the best for illustrating Mill's theories, either. This essay is realtively well-structured, although I'd rather see the concluding questions in the introduction. Really, that last example wasn't very good, since it would make the most sense for the man to save his daughter, being the youngest and more likely to spread happiness to others, as opposed to the older wife, who has lived much of her life. I think that decision would be both logical and Utilitarianistic (if that is even a word).
      • 01/08/2004
      • 16:13:20
      • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
    • John Stuart Mill on Liberty

      This essay was very fluent and explanatory of Mill's essay. I thought the intro was well-structured, although I didn't like how at the conclusion you presented some questions of Mill's theories. You could've elaborated a lot in that respect, instead of just ending it there. Anyhow, the points came across very well and I agee with the sovereignty of the individual. Conformity really inhibits innovations. Nice job, overall.
      • 01/08/2004
      • 15:54:53
      • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
    • Ethics Affect Actions

      This is a well-written piece. You did a good job at introducing the subject, although you could've elaborated a bit on the hypothetical in the introduction, for it is the framework for the essay. Both sides are explained well, but I do agree that Kant could've been explained at more length. The conclusion could use a bit of work, but overall you successfully got your point across. Well done.
      • 01/08/2004
      • 15:22:21
      • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
    • Religious Parody

      This is some good stuff! As someone who is not particularly fond of religion, but has been extensively educated on Christianity, I found this quite humorous. You show the reader how a weighty subject such as religion can be taken lightly. I love the whole thing and I would really like to see some more work from you on the subject. Awesome script!
      • 01/08/2004
      • 11:34:32
      • Score: 3 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
    • Whey Protein

      This was a very informational essay, although it isn't in traditional essay form. The sentence structure seems rather elementary at times, but all the information is presented in an easy-to-understand manner and one can tell it has been extensively researched. Personally, I use whey protein, and discovered it a couple months ago while sifting through the alternatives. Just looking at the nutritional label, I could tell it was the best. Anyways, this was well-done overall, although lacking a conclusion, the format of the essays makes up for that. Nice job.
      • 01/08/2004
      • 09:43:09
      • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
    • America answer to its growing drug problem

      Your opinion is very nicely put in this essay. I agree that drug testing is not effective and certainly not neccessary for most areas of employment. When I used marijuana, I applied for a job that required drug testing, so I just found ways around it. I diluted my urine by drinking liters of water and taking vitamin B a couple days before the test. As a habitual user at the time, I passed with no problem.Certainly, there are fields of work that need to high standards for employees, such as transportation as you mentioned. It would be best if companies employed idustrial/oganizational psychologists to analyze their situation and create a plan that would be safest and most effective. Drug testing is expensive and inefficient in most cases, and I agree that those funds could better be used confronting the problem of drug use itself through rehabilitation programs and such. Very nice job with this piece in presenting the information and integrating your opinion and solution. Good research as well. Way to go!
      • 31/07/2004
      • 12:56:30
      • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
    • The Music Fans vs. The Music Industry

      This is a very informative and well-researched piece. I agree whole-heartedly with your view on this situation. After Napster was originally shut down, I just started going to other peer-to-peer fileswapping programs. As long as the music is not being resold, there should be no problem.On the other hand, there will soon arise the problem of sharing movies from DVDs, and I feel this will incite a much fiercer battle from the movie industry. Music can always be performed live, and artists can do many other things such as touring and selling merchandise to make money, but once filesharing is popularized for movies, there will be a much different battle at hand. I know that wasn't the subject of your piece, but it is very relevant to these types of peer-to-peer programs. Good job overall. I enjoyed this short essay.
      • 31/07/2004
      • 12:45:09
      • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
    • Just wanted to point out

      That this in no way is supposed to imply that black people are not to be trusted. The kids that beat me up were in a gang, which I should've known by the blue they were wearing. I just don't want anyone to think I'm racist, because I have met many nice black people in my time.
      • 30/07/2004
      • 21:13:20
      • Score: 3 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
    • Mccadden...

      Philosophy itself is complete speculation. Personally, Descartes can kiss my ass because Kant is the man. Kant said that we couldn't possibly understand our reason for existing because that would require us to look unto ourselves from an unbiased standpoint. Obviously, that is impossible since within existance, everything is influenced by everything else.Secondly, there are no sources since if you read the essay over, you can see that they are obvious logical deductions... who the hell am I supposed to cite for that? Maybe I should cite you "God" for giving me the ability to reason... Sorry if I upset you, but seriously, these are deductions I have made from my own personal experience and education.Just to let you know, part of that experience is 13 years of religious affiliated education... everything is biased... even your precious Descartes.
      • 27/07/2004
      • 19:03:48
      • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
    • By the way...

      I used the term "off topic" because it was supposed to be a rather ambiguous substance. I know all signs point to heroin, but I feel as though it could've just as easily been a whole slew of other things.
      • 25/07/2004
      • 15:38:38
      • Score: 4 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
    • Sin

      This is a fairly simple essay. You come right out and state the topic with appropriate justification, except it is lacking a conclusion. Myabe you could've closed, mentionaing the relativity of most of these concepts. Much of it is logical though, since if you wrong another, they will be more likely to wrong yet another. That facilitates the tendency to sin, making it more likely for you to be sinned against. What goes around comes around... I guess it's more fun to attach glorified meanings to such simple concepts...
      • 25/07/2004
      • 15:34:23
      • Score: 4 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
    • A Modest Proposal

      First off, there are no polar bears in Antartica. Secondly, this piece could definitely use quite a bit of elaboration to emphasize on the satire. I am a big fan of Swift's Modest Proposal and I really don't think this spoof does him much justice. "Who wants to marry a Beggar?" would be better if they didn't know it was a beggar and perhaps maybe the beggar is actually a homosexual. Comon, man, you could've been so much more creative with this if you put in the time and effort. Nice attempt, though. It almost got a laugh.
      • 10/07/2004
      • 22:25:32
      • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
    • Plagiarized

      from http://www.us-israel.org/jsource/Holocaust/Schacht.html
      • 25/06/2004
      • 18:38:05
      • Score: 1 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
    • Plagiarized

      http://www.washingtonpost.com/ac2/wp-dyn/A849-2004Jun23?language=printer
      • 25/06/2004
      • 18:36:33
      • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
    • Plagiarzed

      from http://www.us-israel.org/jsource/biography/Rommel.html
      • 25/06/2004
      • 18:35:09
      • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
    • Plagiarized

      This essay was plagiarized from http://www.us-israel.org/jsource/biography/Roehm.html
      • 25/06/2004
      • 18:32:27
      • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
    • Plagiarized

      This essay wasw plagiarized from http://www.sdspls.org/nshof/ellicott.html
      • 25/06/2004
      • 18:31:08
      • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
    • Plagiarized

      This essay was plagiarized from http://www.sdspls.org/nshof/banneker.html
      • 25/06/2004
      • 18:29:11
      • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
    • Plagiarized

      This essay was plagiarized from http://www.cnn.com/2000/STYLE/design/05/22/major.lenfant.ap/
      • 25/06/2004
      • 18:27:36
      • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
    • Plagiarized

      This essay was plagiarized from http://www.adolfhitler.ws/lib/nsdap/goering.html
      • 25/06/2004
      • 18:17:45
      • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
    • Plagiarized

      This was plagiarized from http://www.thirdreich.net/Himmler_Bio_nn4.html
      • 25/06/2004
      • 18:16:01
      • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
    • Plagiarized

      This was plagiarized from http://www.leninimports.com/josef_goebbels_bio.html
      • 25/06/2004
      • 18:13:41
      • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
    • French Satin at a Pissup

      I thought this was a very good read. The story was well-developed with her getting ready for the party with such high expectations. The desciptions of the party itself were pretty vivid and added much to the contrast between her and the environment. You set this up quite well, although the ending seemed relatively abrupt. Overall, this is a good story that would ring so very true in America as well.
      • 20/06/2004
      • 17:20:49
      • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
    • 7th grade b-day

      Again, this came off as very informal. The essay didn't flow very well due to abrupt puctuation. My suggestion would be to try making your sentences longer, using commas and conjunctions. The story itself is comprised of repitition and rather dull language. You say this is supposed to be "opinion," but I don't understand what's so opinionated about your documentation of your birthday. If I'm being honest, I would say it could use more effort in the revision stage.
      • 18/06/2004
      • 16:37:06
      • Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
    • Stereotypes

      Sorry to say, but this essay is mediocre at best. I mean... talk about a grammatical nightmare. Besides the horrible sentence structure and numerous misspellling, the general tone of the essay is rather childish. What did you do, Hanna, copy this out of an after-school special. Really, though, you offer no incite whatsoever. With the honest to God truth, I hope you didn't seriously submit this to a class. Geez...
      • 16/06/2004
      • 19:19:23
      • Score: 11 out of 18 people found this comment useful.
    • Acne

      Very informative essay. The touching the face thing is pretty important. This was well written although the conclusion is pretty absent. I'm already drinking more water and trying to sleep on my back. Then I'm getting a haircut. Thanks.
      • 24/05/2004
      • 15:26:57
      • Score: 4 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
    • The Philosophy of Religion. The God of Philosophy

      First, I must say that this was very well reseached and quite thorough on the subject matter. I really enjoy philosophy, so this was a great read for me. Although it got quite wordy at times, this essay flowed fantastically. You broke down many philosophical theories and presented the contradictions as well as you added some of your own thought. However, I would've liked to see you elaborate more on your own opinion, since so much of this material is relative.Personally, I hold the conviction that God is existance, being perfect and just. I realize that it is the tendency of us as humans to want to conveniently explain our relative happenings with a neat package of teachings such as religion. We are constantly striving to understand our world, and it is the curse of cognitive misers that let so many of us fall victim to irrational concepts such as God as a supreme being, a seperate entity which governs our lives.This is really an excellent essay and I would reccomend it to anyone interested in philosophy. Personally, my feelings are closest to those of Kant. I would've like to see you mention some of his works on reason. The reseach done on this paper is impeccable. The introduction and conclusions are strong as well. Overall, nicely done. I enjoyed this one.
      • 21/05/2004
      • 23:21:24
      • Score: 5 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
    • Fear and Trembling

      You did a decent job at summing up this work and explaining the concepts presented. It really did seem repetitive at times, but your points came across well. I read this book recently for a philosophy course, and it really clears a lot up when looking at religion. Faith is not rational and it is inherently absurd. Personally, this is why I'm not religious, and if it means that being reasonable will land me in purgatory, then I'm cool with that.
      • 21/05/2004
      • 21:53:19
      • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
    • Rome

      This is good for your grade level. I see that you did combine those other essays into one. Well, aside from there being minor grammatical errors, it is okay. What I would suggest is that you read your essay aloud to either yourself or someone else and make note of any awkward sounding sentences. Another this is you should go over your essay and make sure everything is the same tense. Often in this, I see you going from past to present and back again, which makes for a rather confusing read. If you're talking about the past, you will want to change your is's to were's, so the essay flows better.
      • 19/05/2004
      • 15:11:05
      • Score: 3 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
    • Poem "You and I"

      I thought this was pretty good. I especially like the beginning for the nice, vivid descriptions. A bit of advice from my experience with writing poems: What I find makes poems more interesting is instead of using emotional words and abstract ideas, try to decribe them with metaphors and such, or even illustrate them with body language. Symbolism in place of huge concepts such as fear and love goes a long way in making a more personal poem. Anyone can use conceptual words, but it takes true creative talent to express those concepts in descriptive ways. Nice job with this, though. I enjoyed it.
      • 19/05/2004
      • 10:06:51
      • Score: 12 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
    • Eisenhower

      This was pretty good, overall. The sentence structure is a bit choppy, but it's decent for the 9th grade. However, you provide a lot of support and elaboration for your thesis. I realize that teachers at that grade level don't usually ask for a bibliography, but it would be nice. You really could've have summed it up better in your closing paragraph, though.
      • 17/05/2004
      • 16:40:05
      • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
    • Too Gory?

      Well, this was an actual occurence and believe it or not there is a lot of bloodshed when there is a vicious rotweiler on the loose. I stood there in shock, watching all of this unfold. I was fourteen at the time and I even had an apprearence on the news as a witness. If the description is "too gory" for you, imagine what it was like to actually be there.
      • 17/05/2004
      • 11:12:23
      • Score: 12 out of 17 people found this comment useful.
    • Conformity

      Aside from some gross errors in grammar, this essay definitely got its point across. I mean, there seem to be entire parts of sentences missing, which makes it difficult to read. I was quite confused when Copernicus claimed sin was the center of out solar system.I very much like the subject matter, though. It should be better-known that conformity inhibits innovation. Really, when I first thought of this, it seemed quite sensible. However, I don't beleive that conformity is good at all. If you think about it, conformity is the resignation of reason out of pure laziness. It's easier to go along with the crowd than to personally discern one's values.Anyways, this was a decent attempt at the subject. The introduction was rather attention grabbing, although quite short. The conclusion could definitely use some more strength. Overall, nice try.
      • 15/05/2004
      • 23:32:51
      • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
    • Brazil

      This sin't even an essay and it sure looks like it got ripped off. I'm sorry if this is presumptuous, but it's in encyclopedia format. Who the hell would assign this?
      • 15/05/2004
      • 20:23:44
      • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
    • A Hard Lesson in Love

      The beginning of it was pretty damn funny, if you ask me. You did an excellent job at letting the reader know how much you focued on his appearence. You could've elaborated a bit on the awkwardness with some more external details, but you did a good job with the internal description. You must be pretty hot to be so judgemental, though. You learned your lesson the hard way, which is usually the most effective. It easy to take other people's words on things, but to live out a learning experience is so much more valuable. Overall, nice writing.
      • 15/05/2004
      • 13:47:03
      • Score: 18 out of 23 people found this comment useful.
    • Marijuana Legalization

      I've read many essays on marijuana legalization. You did an OK job at presenting your argument, although you fail to use any references for the information. Another thing you failed to address is the economic troubles that will arise from legalization. There would be a substantial decrease in the prison population, leading to less tax income for the government and many lost jobs for government officials. There would also be many companies effectively bankrupted due to the ease of production of marijuana/hemp and such low prices. Sure this might be countered with the taxation of retail marijuana for recreational use, but you don't even touch that. Overall, it was a fair attempt at such a controversial issure.
      • 14/05/2004
      • 16:28:23
      • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
    • A Modest Proposal

      I enjoyed this essay. I remember reading A Modest Proposal back in high school and I thought it was definitely a satirical masterpiece. Of course, Swift was well-known for his satire. You did a good job at explaining the context of this particular work and his intentions behind it. Overall, the essay flows well and has a strong conclusion. Nicely done.
      • 14/05/2004
      • 16:21:48
      • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
    • Democracy

      Very well written, although some sources would be nice. I particularly liked the conclusion. That quote by George Washington summed up your paper quite nicely. Overall, this is a good informational analysis essay.
      • 12/05/2004
      • 20:56:06
      • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
    • That was... interesting...

      It was really well written and descriptive, I must say. The end was rather funny. I don't quite understand the title, though. Nice prose and the end had a good twist.
      • 11/05/2004
      • 19:50:02
      • Score: 4 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
    • Positivism and Interpretivism

      Well, I remember one of the first things I learned in Sociology class was that correlation doesn't imply causation. Personally, I'm a fan of empiricism instead of basing theories on observation anyways. Good explanation on both sides, although it did get a bit wordy here and there. You made sure to clarify the difference. Anyways, nice job.
      • 11/05/2004
      • 19:42:05
      • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
    • Rastafarians

      I knew much of that before, except for the part about Bob Marley being half-white. I still don't see how those Bible verses encourage the use of marijuana, but I guess they are open for interpretation. Nice, smoothe development of the story. The conclusion could use a little work, but well done overall.
      • 11/05/2004
      • 19:24:36
      • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
    • Unforgetable Experience

      Nice job in describing your experience so vividly. However, you English could use a bit of work. I did enjoy the story, though, and I can definitely relate to an experience like that. I lost a lot of my friends when I decided to stop using drugs, and it was pretty instantaneous much like your experience. Once again, the details really bring it together.
      • 11/05/2004
      • 12:37:07
      • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
    • Happiness

      I guess you're saying happiness is relative, which makes sense. Being a relativist, this si especially my view on practically any type of emotion. Really, emotions seem more to be products of conditioning. One may think they are happy while indulging in heodism while others find happiness in simple piety, as you mentioned. I like this definition, and I think you did a good job at concisely explaining the relativist of the concept.
      • 10/05/2004
      • 20:45:03
      • Score: 9 out of 13 people found this comment useful.
    • For the butter

      you gotta put the weed in a pan with the butter and let it simmer on low for a few minutes until the butter turns a nice greenish color. thc attaches to the fat in the butter that way. otherwise, you'd be better off eating the weed raw. after you are satisfied with the butter, you gotta strain the weed out using a strainer of sorts. then you got a good cannabutter that will get you messed up much more effectively.
      • 10/05/2004
      • 20:37:48
      • Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
    • Music Piracy

      This is a well written essay. Given all the support you have, I really don't see any reasonable opposition to your argument. Really, it is the greedy superstars, like Metallica, that feel as though they will be losing money. Seriously, though, if you're an artist, get out there and perform for your fans instead of sitting on your ass in some studio. Nice Job.
      • 10/05/2004
      • 11:32:50
      • Score: 6 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
    • Camus

      The Stranger is a great read for anyone wanting to start thinking about philosophy. You did a pretty good job at explaining the main theme of existentialism, especially referring to his life in the book. I would have liked to see more elaboration on the notion of a meaningless universe. An explanation of the relationship between Meursault and Marie could've been useful in explaining the concept. Nice summary, overall, though. It catches the gist of it.
      • 10/05/2004
      • 09:50:13
      • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
    • Well done

      You did a terrific job at covering all the bases. Both sides ARE well represented, and you have a good final thought with the conclusion. You make sure to jimmy your opinion in at the end, but it would do well with a bit more elaboration. Nice use of research brings the essay together. I would really like to see some references, though.
      • 09/05/2004
      • 22:44:53
      • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
    • WWI

      This was very factual and straightforward. The information is presented rather blandly, and it could definitely use some more flavor. Nice job, though, on presenting the information with the use of statistics for support. Although it could use some creativity, you can see there was some effort put into reseach. However, some sources couldn't hurt. Anyways, it was quite informational.
      • 09/05/2004
      • 22:39:01
      • Score: 5 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
    • Yeah...

      I pretty much agree with the general tone of this poem. Realistically, though, we live in a capitalistic society that preaches individualism, so it isn't really plausible for people to care about eachother the least bit altruistically under such influences. It's America and it'll be like this as long as money is glorified. If only more people would take note of the saying, "Money can't buy happiness." It's so true if you just look at all the shallow rock stars who commit suicide.
      • 08/05/2004
      • 23:37:50
      • Score: 11 out of 14 people found this comment useful.
    • Great paper

      This essay is fantastic and I can tell there was a lot of effort put into it. Great historic references to support your claims. Very well done. I really can't say enough about it. Geez. Way to go!
      • 06/05/2004
      • 18:30:39
      • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
    • Meh...

      I really can't say there was anything interesting about this essay. However, it was fairly thorough in presenting both sides of the argument. I could tell there was a great deal of reaserach done. It is just missing some strength and enthusiasm for such a controversial topic.
      • 03/05/2004
      • 08:21:51
      • Score: 5 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
    • Repetitive

      Aside from the fact that you repeated your essay twice, it was done fairly well. I agree with the position that autonomy should be our utmost priority, especially when it doesn't infringe on the rights of others. You gave some good support by referring to the euthanizers that receive lienent opposition in court.
      • 03/05/2004
      • 08:05:19
      • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
    • Nice Job

      Very thorough with both sides represetned. Nice research done. I can tell you put a lot of effort into this one. It somes off as a bit choppy and words are repeated quite often that make it hard to read, but you definitely get the point across.
      • 27/04/2004
      • 18:25:10
      • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
    • Good but a bit repetitive

      First, I'll say that I am a bigger fan of Maslow than of Skinner. Behaviorists, basing so much of their theories on observations, tend to miss out on a lot of things. I mean, isn't it commonly accepted that correlations doesn't imply causation? That's why I'm not too keen of Skinner. Anyways, the part of the essay on Skinner's theory is waaaaaaay too repetitive. Really, it was rather irritating to read. The rest of it was good, though. Nice job overall, but it could've been more concise.
      • 24/04/2004
      • 00:12:46
      • Score: 5 out of 7 people found this comment useful.