Very short, not enough information. You also need to open and close your paragraphs with an opening and closing sentence.
- 08/04/2004
- 00:59:44
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
This essay sucks. Such a closed-minded view. Just be glad you live in America.
- 08/04/2004
- 00:56:39
- Score: 3 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
Several grammatical errors. Beware run-on sentences. If you have two complete sentences (indep. clauses) divided by a comma, you've got an error. You need a semicolon or a period.
- 05/04/2004
- 00:57:11
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
I'd like to see some proof of these stats. Where are your citations? All you've done is state some numbers with no proof or references. Your first citation was good. That should follow on the others, as well.
- 04/04/2004
- 20:29:27
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Kudos on this essay. It's well above your level.
- 04/04/2004
- 20:22:44
- Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
This is a well-researched essay. However, I don't feel it's quite to College Soph level.
- 04/04/2004
- 20:20:44
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
My choices:1984, so that the tyrannical government destroying the books would be noticedan atomic science book, because if we lost every other piece of science in the world, we could regain most of it knowing one simple thing: we are surrounded by small atoms that are held together by electromagnetic force and make up everything in the worlda book of sheet music from the classical and baroque periods.
- 04/04/2004
- 20:12:27
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Hahahaha, cute essay. "Whales are hard to come by, because they are dying out, but that's good! Kill more!"
- 02/04/2004
- 11:30:34
- Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
You jump from point to point without any elaboration. You could have added that the girls later admitted to faking the whole thing for attention.
- 30/03/2004
- 11:39:22
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
In my opinion, it's only RATIONAL to go around the back of the enemy and fire. They'll be expecting you there as well. Isn't that what everyone would do, for example?
- 30/03/2004
- 11:25:17
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Overall a good essay. However, you need to work on your sentences. If rephrased and put into paragraphs, your paper would have much more clarity.
- 30/03/2004
- 10:53:31
- Score: 7 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
You got ripped off. You could have purchased that computer for well under $1500. I have to rate this essay 'poor' due to your lack of research.
- 30/03/2004
- 09:00:49
- Score: 8 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
Very well written, very well thought out. A+.
- 29/03/2004
- 17:13:48
- Score: 1 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
It's generally a no-no to put information about your own religious beliefs in a paper. Some people find it offensive or wrong that you believe the way you do. Instead, use the following: 'some believe ______'. For example, what if we substitute the islam equivalent for all christian references in your third paragraph."I believe Allah has a plan for us and that He made us for who we are. No one should suppress how we are to live our lives since we are here to serve Allah. With this being said, it only makes sense to say that those who have given their life to Allah are strong enough to live in the world without caring about how others perceive them so they can fulfill their duties as Muslims."I'm sure the reader, being a devout christian, would argue within his or her mind throughout the rest of the paper as to the credibility of the author.
- 29/03/2004
- 17:10:53
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
This paper is not on par with that of a high school senior. I found it interesting, but it needs more work.
- 29/03/2004
- 17:05:53
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.