This essay is very interesting, but I feel you left out the reason why this is even an issue... I live in a city in Ohio, and most people feel the flag represents anything but freedom for the people of the south... the KKK's activity with the flag caused this. Because most people feel here that it is a symbol of the institution of slavery, or of the Jim Crow laws established by the US Congress enforcing racial segregation in the Southern States for almost a century later. If you could include that, it may show that you understand the racial part, which is the point of the controversy...
- 29/04/2006
- 07:37:05
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This piece is very intresting, but contains a few spelling errors, and lacks the structure of a well written essay. Really needs a stronger conclusion.
- 25/04/2006
- 18:09:47
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
...this "essay" is not bad, but it is not great either... there are a few grammar errors... And two of the three points are poorly chosen, I feel this essay lacks research to find out what issues dealing with Canada's history that really impacted the economy and social life of the everyday Canadian.
- 25/04/2006
- 18:05:46
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I really enjoyed this piece, I feel it is a great paper. The intro is very well writen. The transitions could be better. Also, there are three major spelling mistakes, and a few grammer mistakes. Other than that, I would give this paper a 8.5.
- 25/03/2006
- 15:10:34
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Tell me you didn't write a paper starting with "Webster's college dictionary defines"!! This is a definite "wow this student has no creativity". I feel the definition adds a great touch to the paper. But, DO NOT put it as a topic sentence it's a straight give away that your paper is boring, dull, and repetitive. Other than a few minor mistakes, this paper is really great.
- 25/03/2006
- 15:06:06
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
On a scale from one too ten, I would give it a 7. It contains many great points and views, but I believe they could have been presented better. This essay contains too many questions, seven of them. Try to find a better way to state opinions and add variety. I am not sure if there is a concluding paragraph, but if there is, it isn't doing its job. Adding one would improve this paper greatly. Rewording the intro would also help.
- 25/03/2006
- 14:56:17
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
This essay is very well written, I really enjoyed the intro. I feel if the conclusion connected to the intro better, it would be a great improvement. On a scale from one to ten, I would give this essay a nine.
- 25/03/2006
- 14:47:19
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This essay is outstanding overall, I really enjoyed it, had interesting insights. There are a very limited amount of errors, such as comas where there should be semi-colons. It is also creditable due to the sources. Great essay, I give it a 10.
- 24/03/2006
- 19:58:08
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
The first thing I noticed about this paper is the grammar mistakes. The first sentence has a mistake. "people's life" isn't parallel. The third sentence is also not correct. Similar mistakes are made throughout the essay. Overall though, this essay is well written for a 9th grader. It contains strong points, good research, details and personal opinions. This essay may not deserve an A in English, but with proper proofreading, it could. On a scale from one too ten, I give this a 7.5
- 24/03/2006
- 19:46:56
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This is a nicely written piece. I really thought it was interesting how you switched view points from a well off part of society to a homeless person living off the streets. I was a little confused the first time I read it, so I suggest that you expound on the first paragraph.
- 23/03/2006
- 21:53:28
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Wow. I was really impressed by this piece. A lot of great points were brought up; I love how the writer expanded on his/her feelings. The words chosen for the piece, flow well. On a scale from one to ten, I would defiantly give this paper a 10!
- 22/03/2006
- 20:27:09
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I feel that this poem is really well written! I enjoyed it. The only things I would do to change it, are to divide it into stanzas and title it. Other than that, it is perfect!
- 22/03/2006
- 20:23:48
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
I feel this essay contains full potential, but the writer lacks the ability to expound on it.Lacking:1) Facts2) Creditable Sources3) Spell check4) Use of vocab over a 3rd grade level5) Point6) Proofreading7) Order8) Thesis9) Intro10) ConclusionAll in all, this essay is all opinion, I think the 90% it recieved is based on bad judgement.
- 20/03/2006
- 22:36:00
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Very well written. I have been told that I am a very attractive girl, I have even been requested 2 model; and I have to admit I don't really agree with the idea. Women in actual pagents do not look weak, they look as though they feel the world is thiers for the taking. Many designers today contain many syles of the modern suit. Women make their own choices, they can be in the FBI just as easily as a house wife... I feel that your points are strong, even though I disagree with you. The essay could be improved by removing the second to last paragraph, it is kinda weak. The intro is strong, but the essay is lacking a conclusion. A conclusion would also make this paper a much greater paper.
- 20/03/2006
- 22:21:06
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
hmm I think its odd this essay scored a 60%, pretty good through my eyes... my boyfriend is a freshman in college and he would have gotten an A if he wrote this kinda paper... the transitions between the paragraphs were nicely done... the intro could use some work though.
- 14/03/2006
- 16:01:02
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
Author: B.A. Robinsonhttp://www.religioustolerance.org/worldrel.htmhttp://environment.harvard.edu/religion/religion/christianity/bibliography.htmlCopyright © 2004 Forum on Religion and Ecology.Copyright © 1998 to 2005 by Ontario Consultants on Religious ToleranceAuthor: Bruce A Robinsonhttp://www.religioustolerance.org/christ.htmAuthor: Marilyn Adamsonhttp://everystudent.com/features/isthere.htmlChristian Classics Ethereal Libraryat Calvin College.http://www.ccel.org/php/wwec.phpJoseph KeatingTranscribed by Theodore L.P. Regohttp://www.newadvent.org/cathen/03712a.htmThe Catholic Encyclopedia, Volume IIICopyright © 1908 by Robert Appleton CompanyOnline Edition Copyright © 2003 by K. Knightweb site copyright 1995-2005 wgbh educational foundationhttp://www.pbs.org/wgbh/pages/frontline/shows/religion/
- 25/02/2006
- 13:55:44
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Overall, this is an okay paper. it has a lot of great points, and the ideas are clearly stated. but, there are also some things that could be improved upon.Good things: great transitions between paragraphs. Clearly stated. Simple words that flow.Needs improving: some of the sentences are short and choppy, could use more detail. Uses I and my a lot, a good paper doesn't need those words because personal views should be assumed. The thesis also needs a little editing.
- 25/02/2006
- 13:51:45
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
This essay contains some good points and statements, but contains a few dire points that destroy the writing format of a good essay...1) It is good to start an essay with stating what the essay will be about, but it is not good to say "now i will talk about..." or "this essay is about" because it doesnt hook a reader.2) Transitions in a paper are great, they lead from one idea to another. but this essay could be improved by changing the transitions. The word "NOW" is used 6 times in this piece, which could be changed to make the essay stronger.3)The essay starts with the word now... when the reader reads this, they will be thinking, wow this writer doesn't know how to write a solid paper, what were they talking about before "now"???4) The most important thing!!! Never use "I" in a paper, it takes away creditability of the paper. a strong paper will show how the writter feels about a topic, just by looking at the thesis statment...
- 25/02/2006
- 13:24:45
- Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.