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  • Suggestion...

    Try to avoid starting any essay with "In this essay, I would...", allow your argument to flow organically.
    • 17/09/2008
    • 20:40:33
    • Score: 3 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Interesting Verbage!

    "He did not budge from his seat nor did he halt the indecorous act of the media whom deliberately crashed into the scene, cracking a jeorpardized ambiance of shame and guilt"Someone has been employing their thesaurus!P.S. I am a little confused about your bibliography, at what point did you cite those two sources?
    • 17/09/2008
    • 20:28:31
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Lots of good information

    Nice organization, lots of good data. However writing style is a bit dry at points, but that is probably what your prof wants.
    • 17/09/2008
    • 20:01:40
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Suggestions.

    I think this could benefit from a stronger conclusion.
    • 22/10/2004
    • 20:32:03
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • WHOOSH!

    Roller coaster rides are thrilling and exhilarating! You certainly stress this point.
    • 22/10/2004
    • 20:19:56
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Ok.

    Not the most captivating story I have ever read.
    • 20/10/2004
    • 21:20:23
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Good.

    You have definite potential as an essay writer, just try to improve the general flow of your writing.
    • 20/10/2004
    • 21:19:12
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • So-So.

    A rather ho-hum approach to describing on the greates villains of the 20th Century.
    • 20/10/2004
    • 21:15:27
    • Score: 0 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Some advice.

    Try making your sentances a little longer, and more complex, it will help with overall style.
    • 20/10/2004
    • 21:05:10
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • STOP THE INSANITY!

    DAMN BEATNIKS AND JAZZ MUSICIANS, RUINING THE WORLD WITH THEIR REEFER STICKS!
    • 20/10/2004
    • 20:47:32
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Keep working on it.

    Essay could use some more complex arguments, I would also start your introduction on a more creative note.
    • 20/10/2004
    • 20:43:26
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • LIVEN IT UP!

    Try thinking of some more creative ways to say "Diaper", it will make your essay much more enjoyable to read.
    • 20/10/2004
    • 20:38:51
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • WHAT?

    THIS MAKES NO SENSE WHAT SO EVER!
    • 20/10/2004
    • 20:30:35
    • Score: 0 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Satisfactory.

    Not a terribly interesting essay, seems more like a summary of textbook info. But its competently written, and fairly concise.
    • 14/04/2003
    • 21:56:22
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Good for 10th Grade.

    Your writing has a very nice flow, however, your essay still relies too much on opinion, especially the last paragraph. But don't worry, you have potential for future years. I too was a product of the Ontario school system, and your 78% is well deserved. P.S. You might want to make the introduction a little longer.
    • 14/04/2003
    • 00:14:40
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.