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  • "Monkey's Paw..."

    Your ideas aren't expanded completely and your sentence structure could use some work. However, the basic ideas you have aren't bad.
    • 22/02/2007
    • 11:37:35
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • "Slavery and the Road to Freedom"

    Transitions could use some work. Thorough, informative, and interesting to read.
    • 22/02/2007
    • 11:26:47
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • "Business Environment and Recording Transactions"

    Useful for the person who knows who LL Sam and Melinda Garcia are. I would have one recommendation for you - and that is to attach the information about Melinda and LL Sam so the reader has background knowledge about your topic. Otherwise, it's not so useful. However, you did bring into account the importance of looking beyond just assets.
    • 22/02/2007
    • 11:18:52
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • "Calibre of Impact..."

    What can I say? I liked it. Inspirational and motivating. There were a few mistakes in grammar/word-choice, but overall not bad. I enjoyed it a lot. Good job.
    • 22/02/2007
    • 11:09:54
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • "Anglo-Saxon Heroic Poetry"

    Although confusing at times because I am not familiar with Anglo-Saxon poetry, your essay was thorough and informative. For any one looking for a piece of information on Anglo-Saxon poetry, I would have to recommend this.
    • 22/02/2007
    • 10:59:36
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • "Why Rap Music Sucks..."

    Wow, where to start? I have to say I agree with you on pretty much everything stated (except for the part where Jesus would beat up the singers...hehe). I liked your enthusiasm, and you basically put everything I had on my mind into words - that's an important skill when it comes to giving/making speeches. Good job.
    • 31/08/2006
    • 10:03:46
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • "Low-cost airlines success"

    Not a bad paper, overall. The one thing I would change is the title. When I read "Low-cost airlines success" I thought it might be a comparison between the success of lower-priced airlines to that of more costly airlines. The title would do more justice for the essay if it was something like "An Evaluation of Low-Cost Airlines" or "The Dawn of Low-Cost Airlines"...I don't know, that would help the reader out.
    • 31/08/2006
    • 09:45:40
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • A Good Man is Hard to Find.

    Well-written and a great research tool. Good job.
    • 27/09/2005
    • 21:22:15
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Life and Death

    Not organized, thoughts seem to just be written as you think of them. However, I must admit, for something of so short a length, you do seem to get in a lot of info and opinion.
    • 13/05/2005
    • 19:59:09
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "Their Eyes Were..."

    Very short compared to all the dynamics of the book. Not really organized, however, a fair, VERY brief summation. Room for improvement, including more details.
    • 10/05/2005
    • 21:26:32
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • One more thing...

    Sorry about the spelling of 'week' as 'weak' in the 7th paragraph. I do know how to spell the word. hehe
    • 10/05/2005
    • 20:48:35
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • From the author...

    Quick FYI on the title...in our class we were to come up with a title having to do with certain words in the text, thus I came up with "The Basic ABCs..." as listed right before the actual text. Happy reading!
    • 10/05/2005
    • 20:45:42
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • "I think, therefore I am"

    Very interesting and well-said. Good job.
    • 10/05/2005
    • 20:31:02
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "America...Immigrants"

    The paper is logical and interesting. However, the format after submission is bad. Well-done overall.
    • 10/05/2005
    • 20:18:30
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "Truancy..."

    Well-written with transitions that really impressed me. Interesting to read and a good wake-up call.
    • 10/05/2005
    • 20:11:10
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "The Atlantic Slave Trade..."

    Informative, but could be better written. Not saying I didn't like it, I did, and it was interesting.
    • 10/05/2005
    • 20:03:48
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Love and Marriage

    I give you credit, this essay is well-written, however, with that comes a complete bias. It seems like you tried to be fair by not bashing the other side, yet you did not include arguments from the other side of the issue. If you are going to pose a question as the one you did in the title, then you need to address BOTH sides and their reasons.However, if you had made a title that would lead a reader to believe it was an argumentative essay, then I would say, well done. But your question made me believe that you would address both sides and draw a conclusion from the two.Not a bad paper, and well-supported (with evidence from one side)To make this an 'A' paper I would suggest you do as stated above.One more thing...I'm not going to rate this negatively (I do disagree with your stance), I will base my rating on the quality of the structure and so on.
    • 09/05/2005
    • 22:26:56
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • "Common Sense" by Thomas Paine

    A good short summary of both the author and the book. A good research tool and well-written. Good job.
    • 09/05/2005
    • 21:58:55
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Cesar Chavez

    This essay was plagiarized...http://www.americaslibrary.gov/cgi-bin/page.cgi/aa/activists/chavez/growup_1
    • 05/05/2005
    • 22:02:47
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • The Korean War

    I disagree with Skarsnik, without all the facts that you included, you could have been misunderstood for having added too much personal opinion; this would have definitely detracted from your paper. Any ways, good job and of course, very informative.
    • 05/05/2005
    • 21:48:47
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • WWI

    Interesting to read and thorough for its length. However, there were a few grammatical errors.
    • 05/05/2005
    • 21:43:47
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Cause of WWI

    An in-depth and very well-written essay. Good job sumiko.
    • 05/05/2005
    • 21:39:52
    • Score: 0 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Scopes Monkey Trial

    All I can say is...interesting.
    • 05/05/2005
    • 21:36:59
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • The Containment Theory

    Well-written and a good research tool.
    • 05/05/2005
    • 21:30:03
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Containment

    Thorough and thought-provoking. Great job.
    • 05/05/2005
    • 21:26:25
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • George Washington

    A great research tool and very informative. Interesting to read and extremely well-written. Great work.
    • 05/05/2005
    • 21:18:21
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • "Is the Philadelphia Experiment Real?"

    Interesting to read and informative. Good work.
    • 05/05/2005
    • 21:15:18
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "False Love" Part 3

    A shocking ending, but not a bad story.
    • 05/05/2005
    • 20:24:06
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • "American Revolution Timeline"

    An informative, yet short overview of the Revolution. Good job.
    • 05/05/2005
    • 18:53:43
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Events leading to the American Revolution

    Not very well-structered. However, it was informative.
    • 05/05/2005
    • 18:48:48
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • "American Revolution: Was American Revolution Just?"

    This is not a bad essay, and I'll make my rating based on that, however, I disagree strongly with you.The colonists were being taxed WITHOUT representation and thus Britain had no right to make a deal with them in the first place. It makes no sense for colonists to pay taxes for which they could not have a say in and then be forced to pay for soldiers in trade of taxes when all Britain had to do was give them some representation.Oh wow...I just decided to look down below at the comments and saw...well anyways, I disagree with the argument...nothing personal of course...hehe.
    • 05/05/2005
    • 18:39:47
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • "False Love" part 1

    Just one suggestion. Its only an opinion...when you use dialogue the way I was taught is to create a new paragraph when someone new is speaking. I know its perfectly fine the other way, but I think this story would be easier to follow if you had done it that way. Other than that, pretty good story, I'll be reading the next parts.
    • 04/05/2005
    • 20:17:48
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "Colors"

    Very dynamic and fun to read. Good job.
    • 04/05/2005
    • 20:11:39
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Basketball

    Interesting to read and informal. Not bad.
    • 04/05/2005
    • 20:09:35
    • Score: 5 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Robert Browning's "Porphyria's Lover"

    Very well-written and explanatory. Easy to read and even more understandable. You really clarify a lot. Great job.
    • 04/05/2005
    • 00:52:17
    • Score: 19 out of 26 people found this comment useful.
  • To Meganmez

    What makes you believe that people suck up to those that rank higher?Tell you what, you get on the leader board, and you can answer your own question. In the mean time, comment on the essay and its quality and not wish that you had as many points as johnjjp.
    • 04/05/2005
    • 00:50:34
    • Score: 20 out of 25 people found this comment useful.
  • To SpecialK255

    Thank you for your comment. It will help.
    • 04/05/2005
    • 00:46:25
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Message From the Author

    I wrote this essay as fair as I possibly could, so don't just rate this essay bad if you disagree with the way it was written. Thank you.
    • 03/05/2005
    • 21:27:10
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Witchcraft

    Interesting to read and well-supported, however, I do not agree with the essay.
    • 03/05/2005
    • 20:59:07
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Media Violence

    Very well-supported essay and interesting to read. Good job.
    • 03/05/2005
    • 20:55:13
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Robert Browning's "My Last Duchess"

    Very interesting to read and well-written. I've never read "My Last Duchess" but you really sound confident in your interpretation. Good job.
    • 03/05/2005
    • 19:55:15
    • Score: 27 out of 35 people found this comment useful.
  • Biography

    A good insight into who you are. I'm sure it has helped you because you are being so honest with yourself, just like diamondize1 said. Interesting to read.
    • 03/05/2005
    • 19:48:09
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • "Law Enforcement Explorer"

    Interesting to read and well-written. The only draw back is the funky formating that occured when you submitted it.
    • 03/05/2005
    • 19:36:32
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • "Pouring Perfection..."

    Very thorough and precise. Well-written. Good job.
    • 03/05/2005
    • 19:24:53
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • WWII

    A good research tool, however, a bibliography is a list at the end. You cited every source as you went. Not only that all you did was substitute a few words with other words to make it look like you did it. Not exactly your own work (and its not an essay).
    • 03/05/2005
    • 19:20:30
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Howard Zinn

    Good overview of Zinn's book and interesting to read. Good structure and flow. Although I may not ENTIRELY agree with Zinn's approach I respect him for trying to be fair.
    • 03/05/2005
    • 01:44:51
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "Hope is the Last to Die"

    Very thorough and informative. Had a few errors but nothing major or anything that would detract from the understanding of your paper. Good job.
    • 03/05/2005
    • 01:41:47
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Melanoma

    Not a book report as said, but still seemingly-factual (I don't know if all is true). From what I know it seems very thorough, but not very interesting. For being so short it is really very enlightening and useful as a research tool. Good job.
    • 03/05/2005
    • 01:39:43
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Progressives

    Great essay and an even better research tool. I needed it and my question was the exact same one so it was really a big help and well-supported with facts. Good job.
    • 03/05/2005
    • 01:19:58
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • The Truman Doctrine

    Interesting to read and very well-written. Great research tool. Good job.
    • 29/04/2005
    • 00:19:57
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • The Bill of Rights

    Interesting essay to read. It has a few minor errors, perhaps typos or just quick mistakes. But beyond that, the essay was well-based and I liked how you integrated the quotes. Good job.
    • 29/04/2005
    • 00:00:08
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Heaven's Above

    Overall, great script...funny (although being a Christian, Jesus wouldn't say 'whatever'), I liked it, has a good message too!
    • 12/10/2004
    • 18:09:52
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Huckleberry Finn

    Interesting to read...I've never read Huckleberry Finn. There is room for improvement when it comes to grammar...one example is in the conclusion. What does "things" stand for? Never use the word 'thing' in essays or reports of any kind, because 'thing' has to stand for something. Overall, not bad.
    • 12/10/2004
    • 17:54:30
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • "Their Eyes were Watching God"

    Very interesting to read and thorough. Good research tool.
    • 28/07/2004
    • 16:13:06
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • "The Creation of the U.S. Constitution"

    Well-written, and very well detailed. Interesting to read despite the length. I enjoyed reading it.
    • 30/06/2004
    • 17:38:03
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • "Susan B. Anthony"

    There are a few grammatically errors, but nothing major. Thorough and informative. Good job.
    • 15/05/2004
    • 14:09:56
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • "Corporate Downsizing"

    Need to downsize the one large paragraph into more centered paragraphs. Hard to continuously pay attention while reading this, and b/c of the lack of structure, was choppy a number of times. On a good note, it was informative, and thorough...fix this up and it'll be much better.
    • 15/05/2004
    • 14:07:02
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • "Dreams Forever: A Raisin in the Sun"

    Very thorough, in-depth, and well written. Great job overall.
    • 15/05/2004
    • 14:03:41
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • "City or Country"

    I live in the country now too...and I do want to continue living here...the biggest city I ever lived in was L.A. and that was only for a couple of months...the next biggest was Sacramento for a couple of years...but I've always loved the freedom, the fresh air, and the adventure of the country...Interesting essay, descriptive...but the reader can tell which you liked better through your writing, the country sounded much more from the heart. Anyways...well done.
    • 15/05/2004
    • 13:59:30
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Frankenstein

    Very detailed, well-written, and interesting to read. Another great job!
    • 12/05/2004
    • 23:07:06
    • Score: 11 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Events Leading to the Civil War

    Interesting to read and well-written, great job.
    • 09/05/2004
    • 19:56:38
    • Score: 4 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • "Law in Business"

    Informative and well-written.
    • 09/05/2004
    • 19:54:47
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • "Child Poverty"

    Well written and researched...good job.
    • 09/05/2004
    • 19:52:55
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "Corporations Law: Optimum Insurance"

    Informative and a good research tool...interesting at times to read, but lagged on in some places. Well-written. Good job.
    • 09/05/2004
    • 19:51:22
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • "American Civil War"

    Wow...there was really long paragraph...but interesting to read. And over all generally well-written. Good job.
    • 08/05/2004
    • 19:04:00
    • Score: 0 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "Ancient Chinese Food"

    A pretty good overview...could possibly be used as a research tool...brief, but covers well.
    • 08/05/2004
    • 16:53:37
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • "Biotechnology: Good or Bad?"

    Not at all grammatically correct, but interesting to read about your opinion, however, I don't necessarily agree with it.
    • 08/05/2004
    • 16:50:31
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • "WASL and High School Requirements"

    A good informative paper, covers virtually all questions one might have about the WASL. Interesting to find out about education requirements.
    • 08/05/2004
    • 16:48:26
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • "God and Generals"

    Not exactly written very well grammatically, but a decent overview of the book. Pretty good for the age level.
    • 08/05/2004
    • 16:43:33
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • "Major Causes of WWI"

    Informative and interesting to read. Good job.
    • 08/05/2004
    • 16:41:41
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • "Constitution"

    You have a different style of writing for the DBQs than I was taught, but its pretty good, and interesting.
    • 07/05/2004
    • 21:38:42
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • "Democracy and The News..."

    Interesting to read and true...well done.
    • 07/05/2004
    • 21:37:17
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "Conflicting Management Styles"

    For a sophmore in college, not great...but it covers its purpose.
    • 07/05/2004
    • 21:35:56
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • "Justifications of WWI"

    Very interesting paper, well-written, and explained thoroughly. Would make a great research tool or study material, very factual, and flows smoothly. Great job!
    • 07/05/2004
    • 10:27:45
    • Score: 5 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Gee...

    I just looked out your level...11th grade writing? I should think not.
    • 07/05/2004
    • 10:23:26
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • World War II & American Economy

    Never have I read that America supported both sides, and I'm in AP Euro...that was the only evidence I believe you had wrong...if you can prove me otherwise send me a message with a link to your source. Other than that, not a bad paper.
    • 07/05/2004
    • 10:22:41
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • "Arguements for the Dissolution of NATO"

    There can be no trust that should be put into the U.N. Name one nation that has been restored by the U.N. from civil war, or just war itself. Don't try the NATO arguement, especially b/c they're individual groups. I have to say this is a good opinion essay, well-written, and interesting to read...but I don't see many facts. When you try to bring in raw facts, all you do is corrode it w/ personal opinion. However, I won't mark this down for personal opinion...I'll just rate it based on its structure - if I didn't do so, you like so many others, would try to say I'm being blinded or biased by my own opinion.Don't get me wrong, though, I do agree with you concerning NATO (but there still won't be peace when its gone)...
    • 07/05/2004
    • 10:17:58
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • "The American Businessman..."

    You seem to have a great talent for writing. This was interesting to read, in-depth, and will make for a good research tool. Great job.
    • 06/05/2004
    • 22:59:44
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • "Fire and Ice"

    Great analysis, especially for tenth grade, and interesting to read. Well-done.
    • 01/05/2004
    • 00:31:51
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Spacing...

    The spacing wasn't that great...glengem has a good point...but the essay is still fine, just a little choppy due to the line interuption.
    • 01/05/2004
    • 00:27:32
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • "A Class Divided"

    The one huge paragraph is awkward w/ good insite into this topic...well-done, interesting to read. Good job overall.
    • 01/05/2004
    • 00:26:12
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "Beowulf"

    A good research tool despite its briefness. Well done overall.
    • 01/05/2004
    • 00:23:56
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Oh yeah...

    Not at all bad, actually a really good paper for a ninth grader. Well-done.
    • 01/05/2004
    • 00:19:44
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Abolitionists vs. Slave Holders"

    The slave holders should have given up their slaves and freed them...b/c chances are, they needed work. The slave holders really didn't have any arguement, especially because, like you said, it is morally and ethically wrong. Well written however, and interesting to read.
    • 01/05/2004
    • 00:19:09
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Islam vs. Christianity

    Very interesting to read. Good job.
    • 01/05/2004
    • 00:05:19
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • War

    I agree with you whole heartedly. On an unbiased level...well written, well expressed point, and very interesting to read. Well done.
    • 30/04/2004
    • 22:28:09
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "Men and Women"

    Very short but certainly expresses your opinion well....I'd like to see men take on house cleaning roles...thats too much of a responsibility.
    • 30/04/2004
    • 22:26:11
    • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • "A Realization"

    Really touching and almost sad in a way. Well done, especially with the ending poem.
    • 30/04/2004
    • 00:33:34
    • Score: 6 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Note from the Author:

    Docs sited are not included due to their length. Sorry about the inconvenience.
    • 30/04/2004
    • 00:29:21
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • "1984"

    Just one negative thing to say, and that is that you should have written the author and title of the book as the title of the essay, because "1984" is too broad...it could be on anything. Other than that, not a bad paper.
    • 30/04/2004
    • 00:16:29
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • "Polio"

    Sad...but well-written. There isn't much to say...it kind of leaves you in a strange mood.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 17:43:13
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • "My Last Day At School"

    Very poorly written, too short...accidently clicked the smiley button instead of the frown, so you're lucky. Need to work on the grammar...this shouldn't be considered good enough to be any paper eligible for cheathouse.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 17:32:21
    • Score: 5 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • "Pedal to the Metal w/ Reloaded Matrix"

    Hmmm...not really an essay, if it were ever to be developed, it would need to be more indepth and not so freely written (it has character)...interesting, and brief, but includes needed info.
    • 28/04/2004
    • 22:51:02
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Egyptians Preoccupied w/ Death?

    With this type of subject, I don't see how a person can keep out there opinion...Pretty good for starters, could definitely be expanded on...but nonetheless interesting.
    • 28/04/2004
    • 22:47:52
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Joseph Stalin

    Another interesting paper to read, informative w/ great info. A good research tool.
    • 28/04/2004
    • 22:44:55
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • "Hitler: Leader or Monster?"

    This was a great paper...and I don't see why others were so hard on it. Interesting to read and informative. A great read. Good job.
    • 28/04/2004
    • 22:41:47
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "Cuban Missile Crisis and The Arms Race"

    For one...it wasn't really capitalism that caused the conflict between Russia and the US, but the fact that Russia was communist and the US was democratic...communism is capitalist in its own way, but it is the government political ideology (i.e. democracy [Right to vote]) that really spurred on the Cold War.Your intro could be longer and your paper more accurate...however, it was grammatically correct, and interesting to read.
    • 28/04/2004
    • 22:39:52
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • "The Bombing of Pearl Harbor"

    A very thorough and well-written essay. Good job....Should have included your bibliography, because you have the internal citations.
    • 28/04/2004
    • 19:57:32
    • Score: 13 out of 14 people found this comment useful.
  • World War I

    A somewhat thorough peice on World War I that would serve as a pretty good research tool.
    • 28/04/2004
    • 19:15:25
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "Keating"

    Wow...sorry, but I can't believe this was accepted...if I just submitted short questions and answers like this, I'd have tons of "essays." This isn't worth 350 points...I could make one of my comments into an essay and get 350 points in this case.
    • 28/04/2004
    • 18:17:57
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • "The Dragon and The Bear..."

    Paragraphs are a little long but filled with valuable information. Well-written, a little confusing at times, but that was just b/c your paper was bulging at the seems with info. Seemed very thorough (I don't know much about the topic). Well done.
    • 28/04/2004
    • 18:11:38
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Courlove7:

    Thanks...greatly appreciated...
    • 28/04/2004
    • 17:55:14
    • Score: 16 out of 27 people found this comment useful.
  • "Bunburyists"

    Really short but does a great job of explaining the play. Good job.
    • 28/04/2004
    • 17:52:25
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • "Same Sex Marriage"

    You're off to a great start, and have some good points, all you need to do is organize them in a consistent matter. Keep trying and you'll get there!
    • 27/04/2004
    • 21:51:25
    • Score: 5 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • "The Dead: Death of the Irish Culture"

    As stated by Mccadden earlier...a good analysis and sum-up...but could definitely be structured better. Conclusion is either non-existent, or that last sentence you have is too short for a conclusion.
    • 27/04/2004
    • 21:48:04
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • "The Literal, Mythological, and Biblical Symbolism..."

    Interesting although at times reading became a little confusing, so the flow of the essay wasn't overall the great. But it was, however, grammatically correct. Despite a little skipping around it was a pretty good paper to read.
    • 27/04/2004
    • 21:44:15
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Pope Gregory VII

    Interesting, thorough, and informative. Good job.
    • 27/04/2004
    • 21:15:56
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • "My Understanding of the Holocaust"

    Interesting to read and well-thought-out. Good job.
    • 27/04/2004
    • 21:10:58
    • Score: 10 out of 13 people found this comment useful.
  • "Global Warming"

    Although I believe the world has not been around for 4 billion years...this was a technical essay that was structured pretty well.
    • 27/04/2004
    • 19:22:57
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • "The Dead"

    I don't know how long "The Dead" is, but you seemed to be thorough, and you explained it really well, despite this paper's short length.
    • 27/04/2004
    • 19:20:39
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • "The Life and Poetry of Sylvia Plath"

    Interesting to read, well-written and expressed. Good job.
    • 27/04/2004
    • 19:18:52
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • "Why Has an American Society Developed So Violently?"

    Interesting and informative. Well-organized and written. Great job.
    • 27/04/2004
    • 19:02:39
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • "Patriot Act"

    Interesting essay although I might not agree with you on the matter. But that won't hurt the score I gave you b/c I thought it was well-written, and establishes arguements pretty well, at least it wasn't one of those essays where somebody just tries to weasle their way through.
    • 27/04/2004
    • 18:45:03
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Sir Isaac Newton

    Sums up Isaac Newton, but is a little narrow-minded (not broad) on his achievements...I believe you could have written much more on him and been more thorough...overall a decent paper.
    • 27/04/2004
    • 18:41:08
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Johnjjp...

    I plan on coming up with a sequel this June or July, when I have the time. Thanks!
    • 26/04/2004
    • 20:32:31
    • Score: 23 out of 26 people found this comment useful.
  • "Porphyria's Lover"

    Flows well in transition, very indepth and thorough. Great job.
    • 26/04/2004
    • 19:36:18
    • Score: 43 out of 54 people found this comment useful.
  • "Mona Lisa Smile"

    Interesting to read since I never saw to Mona Lisa Smile, and wondered how it was other than what the critics said. A good analysis. Good job.
    • 26/04/2004
    • 19:07:17
    • Score: 11 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • "Martin Luther King vs. Malcolm X"

    Really short for a topic as big as this...should have been a lot more thorough. Not bad start.
    • 26/04/2004
    • 19:04:05
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "Malcolm X's Hierarchy of Needs Chart"

    Not really an essay, but a pretty good generalization of needs.
    • 26/04/2004
    • 19:01:49
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • "Nuclear Radiation: Effects, Facts, and Prevention"

    A strong intro but tapered off after that. Interesting to read, and a good research tool.
    • 26/04/2004
    • 18:54:16
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • "Advice from Dad"

    Its pretty funny b/c I identify really well with this essay. When I played basketball, I was one of the "stars" of the team, and believe me, it went to my head. I've been taught some lessons since then that have helped me to humble my self, and I haven't been the star of anything since then, b/c I was tested and I, ultimately, failed. Enough of me...another great essay, despite its length, very interesting, with several good lessons that comes with it.
    • 26/04/2004
    • 18:42:39
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • "A Matter of Life and Death"

    A great essay to read...it was a good idea to introduce the other beliefs of Life and Death. Well written, extremely thorough, a great research tool, and most important very interesting and factual. Good job.
    • 26/04/2004
    • 18:37:07
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Oh, but yeah...

    Who am I to give advice on transitions? LOL. I just realized I did that.
    • 26/04/2004
    • 18:12:23
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "Marilyn Monroe: The Start"

    Its a good "The Start" but you should also include her birthdate, because I don't know what year she was born, like when, in the late 1920s or early 1930s? I know I can just look it up somewhere but it would be a good asset to your essay. Otherwise, pretty good, but transitions could use a little work (not too bad, I'm horrible at trans.). Anyways interesting to read.
    • 26/04/2004
    • 18:10:50
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "Civility and Morality..."

    I was bummed to not see one of your own comments...to see if you were correct. Anyways, well-written, indepth, and a good research tool. Well done.
    • 26/04/2004
    • 17:09:36
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Oh yeah...

    Interesting way to muster up some points...lol.
    • 26/04/2004
    • 17:07:02
    • Score: 8 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • The Progressive Era

    Yes atoomer0881 "This was very thoroughly researched. It was very well written. The facts are all there and he seems he knows what he's talking about. Job well done..." In my own words, and not the author's...it was interesting to read and had good transitions. Good job.
    • 26/04/2004
    • 17:06:01
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • "The Pueblo Revolt of 1680"

    Interesting to read b/c I never actually read about this subject. Well-written with good transitions. Good job.
    • 26/04/2004
    • 16:54:19
    • Score: 1 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • "Piano" analysis

    Well-written and a pretty good analysis. Good job.
    • 26/04/2004
    • 16:44:51
    • Score: 4 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • "Stoichiometry of an Oxidation-Reduction Reaction"

    To make this better for a more universal aspect...you could have explained what some of the terms were like I assume some don't know what "molarity" is, that would have made it better...but I geuss for your class lab report that doesn't matter...oh well, nevermind that suggestion.
    • 26/04/2004
    • 16:42:25
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • "From Enlightenment to Postmodernism"

    Very interesting to read despite its length, and very well-written. A great research tool, with a good bibliography in the end that others can use or refer to. Great job.
    • 26/04/2004
    • 16:39:13
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • "The Sunflower"

    A very touching analysis, since I never read The Sunflower. Well-written and very interesting. Laid some questions in my mind...because there is someone that I know I haven't forgiven for certain things...I believe now I can. Thanks.
    • 25/04/2004
    • 00:58:15
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • "The Subjection of Women"

    No grammatical errors, and a good summary. Good job.
    • 25/04/2004
    • 00:55:11
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • 1972 Summit Series

    Interesting to read. Well-done.
    • 25/04/2004
    • 00:52:58
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Genocide Report

    Was this an actual true journal? Or did you make it up? It was interesting to read all the same.
    • 25/04/2004
    • 00:48:58
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Johnjjp...

    Are you saying that the holocaust was justified?
    • 25/04/2004
    • 00:42:59
    • Score: 18 out of 35 people found this comment useful.
  • Johnjjp...

    I don't believe the north was ever "jealous" of the south...and if opinion isn't fact...then why do you think you're right and that you have the facts? What do you mean make yourself clearer as words mean? You have no clue what you're talking about...
    • 24/04/2004
    • 23:20:21
    • Score: 20 out of 35 people found this comment useful.
  • "Business Ethics"

    Whats with the low score again? Are you just selecting random scores? It was another great paper. Interesting read and good job.
    • 24/04/2004
    • 22:21:49
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • "Time Management"

    Interesting to read, great job. What level is this, because like the others said, it doesn't make sense that it is a 62%. The only way I could see that is if you were in college and didn't meet the requirements. Anyways...good job!
    • 24/04/2004
    • 22:19:04
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "Caffe Bella Napoli"

    Could have been better written, the thought process shown here was a little unorganized...but it does an ok job of explaining about the picture.
    • 24/04/2004
    • 22:16:19
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • The Reformation

    Pretty sad how the Catholic Church couldn't pull their act together...anyways...good essay and very thorough. Well done.
    • 22/04/2004
    • 20:01:39
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Purpose Trusts

    Well-written and interesting to read...although technical. Good job.
    • 22/04/2004
    • 20:00:11
    • Score: 2 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • William Wordsworth's "Michael"

    Great intro...and interesting to read! Good job on keeping my attention (I'm not much of a poetry person). Well-done.
    • 22/04/2004
    • 18:30:29
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • "Homeostasis in the Human Body"

    Interesting to read and thorough. Good job.
    • 22/04/2004
    • 18:25:23
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Computer Purchase Case Study

    I don't know what was with the negative ratings...I guess because one person started the negative the others followed. I found this pretty good (I'm being influenced by the negatives!), and well-written. I didn't notice any grammar errors. Well-done.
    • 22/04/2004
    • 18:19:22
    • Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Kittenpause:

    I honestly don't see how this could be biased or how you could come up with a conclusion of that kind...it answers the question, and nothing more. Now if you want to find out the answer...try reading the paper and not the title.
    • 21/04/2004
    • 23:16:30
    • Score: 12 out of 15 people found this comment useful.
  • Catcher in the Rye: Holden

    A little short for being an analysis of a character...especially if he seemed like one of the most interesting characters you've come across. There must have been many more facets to talk about than what you have here.
    • 21/04/2004
    • 19:40:36
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • The Confederate Flag as A Symbol

    Good essay, and a good point. Good job.
    • 21/04/2004
    • 19:35:56
    • Score: 15 out of 35 people found this comment useful.
  • Roe vs. Wade

    Great essay with quite a few great points. Interesting read, well-written, and great conclusion. Well-done.When will people see the light?
    • 21/04/2004
    • 19:31:54
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Life is Beautiful

    Pretty decent...could be more in-depth...but I suppose you only saw it once? Anyways, not bad.
    • 21/04/2004
    • 19:28:43
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • "Persuasive Essays are Pointless"

    A good persuasive paper.
    • 27/03/2004
    • 23:53:29
    • Score: 4 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Kobe Bryant

    Well-written and interesting to read. Good job.
    • 27/03/2004
    • 23:46:11
    • Score: 2 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Faith and Salvation

    Intersting to read. I did some research on this for myself, and I see different interpretations...including by me.
    • 27/03/2004
    • 16:26:14
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Titanic

    Intro could be condensed, but other than that a great paper and a good read.
    • 27/03/2004
    • 16:23:04
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Of Mice and Men: Friendship

    I thought it hit the title of the essay pretty well although the point was repetitive...which isn't a bad thing.
    • 27/03/2004
    • 16:20:52
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "Beethoven"

    You need paragraphs...could have been better written, but a good read. Also occasionally a little choppy.
    • 27/03/2004
    • 16:18:35
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "Korea: A Peninsula Divided"

    Very well-written and interesting to read. Didn't notice any grammar mistakes or typos. Great Job.
    • 27/03/2004
    • 16:16:09
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Voltaire

    I've read Candide, so it's interesting to read another point of view on the book.
    • 26/03/2004
    • 20:50:13
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Voltaire

    J'ai lu Candide, ainsi il est intéressant de lire un autre point de vue sur le livre.
    • 26/03/2004
    • 20:49:46
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Policy of September 11, 2001

    Very good and thorough intro. Interesting to read although a bit tedious at times.
    • 26/03/2004
    • 20:46:50
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • "Politique du 11 septembre 2001"

    Intro très bon et complet. Intéresser à lire bien qu'un peu pénible parfois.
    • 26/03/2004
    • 20:45:49
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • "The Battle of Cannae"

    Well-written and very interesting to read. Good facts and well-supported. Good job.
    • 26/03/2004
    • 20:38:38
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Short Story

    Interesting story...you've got a decent writing technique.
    • 26/03/2004
    • 19:43:50
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • "The Renaisance Man"

    A good personal paper but lacks a good flow. Sentence structure needs to be improved.
    • 26/03/2004
    • 19:41:46
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • "Art in Reality: Cyberspace and Virtual Space"

    Quite a few times I found myself thinking of something other than what I was reading, so if need be, you should make this paper as interesting as it can be on a subject like this. Well written however, and also well-researched. Good job.
    • 26/03/2004
    • 19:37:32
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "A Bend in the River"

    A little choppy to read at times, but not bad and interesting.
    • 26/03/2004
    • 19:34:10
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • From the Author

    Okay I have to admit now that I look at it...it does suck...but hey it's got good info.
    • 26/03/2004
    • 00:02:15
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Species Invasion

    Exactly...a college paper? Bit too, what's the word, short, simplistic? Need to expand - especially b/c this is supposed to be a college paper. I can understand you wrote short...but that at college level should be at least a thousand or two thousand words.
    • 25/03/2004
    • 23:56:28
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "Men, Money, and Dating"

    Interesting to read. Good job.
    • 25/03/2004
    • 21:56:07
    • Score: 0 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Federalist Papers

    Well-written with some good facts. Good job.
    • 25/03/2004
    • 21:54:51
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Hearing Life in a Deaf World

    Very interesting to read, great intro. Like courlove said, you could have gone more indepth. Well-done.
    • 25/03/2004
    • 21:53:20
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Adolf Hitler

    Well written and extremely well researched. Every event covered with attention to detail. Interesting to read. Great Job!
    • 25/03/2004
    • 21:50:10
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Birth Control Methods

    Well in the first place, it would be a smarter choice to not have sex in the first place.In other words...birth control is just a control on how to kill babies.
    • 25/03/2004
    • 21:40:14
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Propaganda Paper

    Interesting to read and entirely true. Might want to make a little longer next time and detail it. But a very good start and hit right on target. Good job.
    • 25/03/2004
    • 21:38:41
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • "The Jaguar" by Ted Hughes

    Well written and organized. Good job.
    • 25/03/2004
    • 21:36:08
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • NATO and the Cold War

    Paragraphs need to be more in-depth. The paragraph format is funky when it showed up on the page. Not a bad paper, but room for improvement.
    • 25/03/2004
    • 19:40:31
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Panem et Circenses of the SPQR

    Could have been a little more clearly written. But very indepth and interesting to read. Good job.Oh and...are the numbers inbetween sentences some kind of internal citations?
    • 25/03/2004
    • 19:37:51
    • Score: 0 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Nazi Treatment of the Jews

    Extremely true...and extremely sad. Hard to believe that people would actual do this to other human beings, it just shows the evil of man. Anyways, well-written and very well researched. Interesting to read. Good job.
    • 25/03/2004
    • 19:31:48
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "House on Mango Street"

    Interesting translation and inlook into the "House on Mango Street." It's interesting to read different versions, because I interpreted different areas in a different way. Good essay. Well-written.
    • 25/03/2004
    • 19:28:23
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Correction

    wasn't*
    • 23/03/2004
    • 20:01:39
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • "February Revolution in Russia of 1917"

    It was just food shortages that began the strike, but a number of aspects. Very interesting paper to read. Well-done.
    • 23/03/2004
    • 20:00:22
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Constellations: Ursa Major

    Interesting to read and well-written. Good job.
    • 23/03/2004
    • 19:52:01
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Lord of the Flies

    A little simplistic, definitely not an analysis of the book. But, a good sum-up.
    • 23/03/2004
    • 19:48:42
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Antigone - Heroes

    Good for being so short...just the start of what could be much more complex.
    • 23/03/2004
    • 19:30:04
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Hamlet

    For just being notes, these are extremely thorough. Good job.
    • 23/03/2004
    • 18:25:55
    • Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Freemasonry: Shattering the Myth

    Never knew much about freemasonry, but this essay, while informative, was also interesting. Well written. Good job.
    • 23/03/2004
    • 18:23:29
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Abortion

    Good convincing paper on abortion. I have an essay on abortion too, its pretty good. Just letting you know. Anyways, strong arguement, but you should have added a few more facts. Not bad.
    • 23/03/2004
    • 18:12:40
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Characteristics of Strategic Management

    I don't know how you got a grade of 7%. Again, another well-researched and informative paper.
    • 23/03/2004
    • 18:09:13
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • External Environment for Banking Industry

    Well-organized and informative. Good job.
    • 23/03/2004
    • 17:52:08
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Amazon.com Case Study

    Not the most interesting paper to read, but certainly very informative. Well-researched. Good job.
    • 23/03/2004
    • 17:49:42
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Northern and Italian Renaissance Artists

    Extremely short for a topic as vast as Renaissance art is. Intro is weak and needs a thesis (if one, a stronger one). Not off to a bad start, a good introductory paper.
    • 21/03/2004
    • 17:42:46
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "Is the Death Penalty Right or Wrong?"

    A great paper. Very well-research (should have included bibliography) and extremely interesting to read. Good job on your arguement(s).
    • 21/03/2004
    • 01:46:31
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • The Roots of Romanian Political Culture

    Well-researched, very thorough and intricate, great paper. A little confusing at times, but recovers well. Good essay and a good read. Well-done.
    • 21/03/2004
    • 01:40:52
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Report on WTO

    For being so short, it describes the cituation well. But you should have, for those out there that don't know what "WTO" stands for, written what the abbreviation is. Well-done essay overall.
    • 21/03/2004
    • 01:32:51
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • The Lord of the Flies and the Roman Catholic Church

    Interesting essay to read. Free of grammar errors, and well-organized. Good job.
    • 20/03/2004
    • 12:49:53
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Martin Luther and his Critique of the Church

    Well-written and interesting to read.
    • 19/03/2004
    • 17:41:25
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Romeo and Juliet

    Well-written and thorough essay, interesting to read. Good job.
    • 19/03/2004
    • 17:36:53
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Why did Australia join the Vietnam War?

    Essay is short and to the point. Good job on the background of the vietnam war, which informs the reader well. Well done.
    • 19/03/2004
    • 17:31:18
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Astronomy in the 21st Century

    Interesting paper to read, and free of gross gramatical errors.
    • 19/03/2004
    • 17:29:40
    • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Roll of Thunder Hear My Cry

    I've always wanted to get around to read this book, but I never had. This makes it sound all the better. A well-written essay that is interesting to read. Good job.
    • 19/03/2004
    • 00:42:02
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Fast Food Restaurants

    Not bad...but could be better for an 11th grade essay. Interesting to read.
    • 19/03/2004
    • 00:38:55
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Bond Type w/ Physical Properties

    Although this may not be the most interesting to read, since I am in Chemistry currently, it is informative. Described well and extremely thorough. Good job.
    • 19/03/2004
    • 00:36:48
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • College Mentorship

    Although it is not a topic I am paying attention to currently, it was interesting to read and learn. Well-done.
    • 19/03/2004
    • 00:34:58
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Constitution

    Very well-written, not biased, and did not offer any personaly opinion in the body or main arguement of the paper. Well done.
    • 19/03/2004
    • 00:32:37
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • The Fallen Tyrants of Babylon

    Could be written better, longer paragraphs with more in-depth analysis. Not a bad start.
    • 18/03/2004
    • 17:52:43
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • "Abortion"

    This was a really good paper taking both sides, it didn't seem biased at all, I'm pro-life, and even though you're pro-choice, it did not come across as that from reading it. Well-done.However, how is this a "travel description" paper? Might want to have admin. change that.
    • 18/03/2004
    • 17:44:40
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Research Methods Essay

    A bit confusing at times, could use some work, but not a bad stop.
    • 17/03/2004
    • 22:55:38
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • "Pride and Prejudice"

    Very interesting and well-written paper. Good job.*A couple minor grammar errors, that are probably typos.
    • 17/03/2004
    • 22:52:05
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • "History and Background of the Apache Indians"

    I'm sure you could have gone much deeper into this topic, but a great start on a much broader topic. Well-done and very interesting.
    • 17/03/2004
    • 22:40:21
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • "The Iraqi Road..."

    Because I have done very limited research on this topic I can't really tell you of anything to add. You covered everything I can think of and more than I knew. Well-done and well research. Good job.
    • 17/03/2004
    • 22:38:36
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Best Friend

    Not a bad poem at all, with a good message. Well-done.
    • 17/03/2004
    • 22:33:55
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • "Scribes:

    A few fragmented sentences, but not much compared to the size of this paper. This does not seem like 7th grade work, but I am trusting this is yours, and for the level it was written at it is really great. Good job, and good research.
    • 17/03/2004
    • 22:32:13
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Re: Stoned4Life

    All good questions. In fact, there will never be peace in the middle east until the Lord Jesus Christ returns for his people, and his thousand year reign begins. Don't get me wrong, all good questions, but I, in my heart know that Jesus Christ will eventually return, whether it is or isn't in my or your lifetime...His return will probably be while you and me are alive because prophesies in the bible are actually coming to pass at this very moment. The bible says "there will be wars and rumors of wars" (soon before christs return). Also, the mark of the beast or antichrist will be a numbering system to which you will need to recieve on your hand or forhead in order to buy and sell. There is a microchip out there that they expect to use in the years to come which is approx. as thin as a penny, and about as long as it's radius. This they hope to inject under the skin, and want to use it to buy or sell, for your id, and for credit cards, etc.To me these signs are clear and makes me have more faith than I ever have. I hope this answers your question though. Take care and God Bless.
    • 14/03/2004
    • 21:01:46
    • Score: 14 out of 17 people found this comment useful.
  • From the Author

    These are STUDY NOTES...not an essay.
    • 10/03/2004
    • 20:01:57
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • From the Author

    I'd appreciate it if those who rate the essay would leave a comment as to why they rated it...just out of courtesy.
    • 10/03/2004
    • 19:59:30
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Biased CNN

    I'm glad somebody spoke out about the pathetic biases of CNN, even if very few people read this. It made me angry when they even dared to say that Israel was engaging in terrorist acts...they seemed to blame everything on Israel...they want them to just sit there and not do anything, it's really sad.Anyways...I could say much much more, but I should comment on your essay. For being so short it was to the point and could be used as a minor research tool.
    • 28/02/2004
    • 21:02:52
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "The Toyota Way"

    Well...there's too much info in this essay to try and sum it up...but it was really very interesting. Looks like you've done some research. Good job.
    • 28/02/2004
    • 20:58:36
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Article Review

    This isn't really an essay...and what article were you reviewing? I'm a little confused. You really only go as far as to summarize the article and do not really analyze it.
    • 28/02/2004
    • 20:55:18
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • "Newton's Three Laws of Motion"

    For being so short it covers the basics well...however, it could be elaborated greatly. Not a bad start.
    • 24/02/2004
    • 00:09:49
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • "Edgar Allen Poe vs. D.H. Lawrence

    A pretty good versus paper...actually the best of the few that I've seen, and pretty interesting. Well-done.
    • 24/02/2004
    • 00:07:55
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • "Salem Witch Trials"

    The Salem Witch Trials saddens me much. B/C the people that were trialed were always from the lower class or servants occused by the upper classes. Overall a good essay, but the format is funky.
    • 21/02/2004
    • 11:51:41
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • "Personal Goals"

    I never really thought about the impact of personal goals - It's a good paper...but sometimes personal goals are a bad thing...but that's rare. I'm glad to hear how successful you've been, I plan to go into the Navy or Air Force as well, so this is a good encouragement.
    • 21/02/2004
    • 11:39:39
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • "Explication on Sonnet 87"

    This would have been an even greater paper than it already is if you had included some sort of intro - popping right into the body of the paper was a little odd.
    • 21/02/2004
    • 11:28:10
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Learning Styles

    By the way that you group this...it sounds as if you're in my AP Euro Class. My teacher and I'm sure others put a huge emphasis on the economic, political, and social factors. - Pretty good essay...better than I could have done, I don't know much about this.
    • 21/02/2004
    • 01:12:35
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Correction

    Correction: last title was supposed to be "The Cold War." I was typing too fast.
    • 21/02/2004
    • 01:05:07
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • "The Cold Wae

    Very well-written and technical paper. Overall seemed extremely organized...this topic interests me very much. It was a good length that covered the most important details in the shortest length possible. Great Job!
    • 21/02/2004
    • 01:04:18
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • "Most Important Events of Ancient History

    A few of the sentences were a little hard to understand...but overall a pretty good essay.
    • 21/02/2004
    • 01:01:29
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • "Amelia Earhart: A Hero"

    On a technical note,...you forgot the quotations ("") at the beginning of the first paragraph which was a quote...but you remembered the last one. A well-written and brief biography on Amelia Earhart. Good job.
    • 10/02/2004
    • 18:28:31
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "America Should Go to War"

    Well-written and thought out. If I were against going to war, you probably would have convinced me...but that's b/c I'm pretty open minded to things...if the arguement is right, lol.
    • 10/02/2004
    • 18:22:34
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Persuasive Essays are Pointless

    I hope you realize that this in itself is a persuasive essay - which makes this pointless. Sorry if I'm too harsh...but you're trying to convince people (through a persuasive essay), that persuasive essays are pointless.
    • 24/01/2004
    • 18:29:49
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • War with Iraq - Persuasive Essay

    The only flaw this essay has is missing factual evidence. If indeed it is in there you need to use a works cited and internal citations. The reader might as well assume that the author of a persuasive essay without cited facts is just making up the "facts." Although I don't agree with you on this issue I must commend you for a well-written essay (with the exception of missing citations).
    • 10/01/2004
    • 00:18:16
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Brave Heart VS. The Patriot

    Not bad...but if this is an essay, it lacks a strong thesis...the last sentence in the intro just restates a lot of what the second sentence stated...with a little more added. The rest of the essay wasn't bad at all. The sentences are a little too simplistic...but fine for being in 9th grade. Keep at it. One more thing...you might of wanted to have given us (the reader) a little more background on the movies and then went into why they were different or how they were similar.
    • 10/01/2004
    • 00:10:09
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Community Care of the Elderly in Northern Ireland and Great Britain

    Well-researched and written. Although it contains many facts and info, it's still pretty interesting to read. Good work.
    • 10/01/2004
    • 00:03:34
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • "Where Are You Going, Where Have You Been?"

    Well written, it has a great flow making it easy to read. Good job.
    • 09/01/2004
    • 23:55:39
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Time for once Full Oscillation of a Pendulum

    Pretty well detailed...but not very interesting, that is, not to me.
    • 15/12/2003
    • 18:19:00
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Hoba

    You know what Hoba...I really don't know why jmk12345 titled his comment hoba...lol.
    • 14/12/2003
    • 17:23:22
    • Score: 13 out of 16 people found this comment useful.
  • "Communist Manifesto"

    The name "Communist Manifesto" was used a little repetitively. This is a good start to something that could definitely be more in-depth...but for being so short, it isn't bad at all.
    • 30/11/2003
    • 23:08:45
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • War in Iraq

    Peace is not an answer to terrorism Yoma! You cannot stand around waving banners of peace while being bombed on and remain the country that we are today! I'm sorry, but if the aggressor is not peaceful...then we cannot be peaceful in return...it just doesn't work that way. If we're ignoring them...the enemy will not just say, "Oh, I'm sorry, you're ignoring me...so I must fight someone else." NO!!! They will come in full force against us...I'm sorry, but people like you annoy the heck out of me. And racism isn't the problem...I'm not racist, not by any means, I have so many friends from different ethnic backgrounds it's not even funny. There will not be peace until God has judged man...when every knee will bow and tounge confess Him.
    • 29/11/2003
    • 19:27:47
    • Score: 3 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Hitler

    You could have definitely been a lot more thorough...I'm sure there is a lot more info out there to write on Hitler than just this. Interesting...not a bad start.
    • 29/11/2003
    • 19:20:40
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • "How I Started Wearing the Hijab"

    Not a bad essay...but I have one question...do you learn more about your religion itself...or your god? See, I'd see it more important to learn about God than the religion...and to know God. Just asking.To make this better though...you should have stated the significance of the Hijab to muslims like yourself - what is the importance in the religion?
    • 29/11/2003
    • 19:18:32
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • To What Extent are Judges Politically Neutral?

    Biased paper.
    • 29/11/2003
    • 11:48:13
    • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • The Great Depression

    A great and interesting read...well-written, easy to read...and very informative. Great research tool. Good job.
    • 28/11/2003
    • 18:12:22
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • "Dklfjd dlkfjd"

    Okay...this is really annoying me...get rid of the random typing!!!
    • 28/11/2003
    • 17:50:43
    • Score: 5 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • The Collapse of New Zealand Society

    New Zealand is in a pretty sad state of affairs, not only do you have to deal with the bad climate...but this too?
    • 28/11/2003
    • 17:34:53
    • Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • "Cristabel" by Samuel Coleridge

    Very interesting, creative, and well-written. Great job Hoba!
    • 28/11/2003
    • 17:31:48
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Surviving Columbus

    Well...hehe...this proves the Pocahontas movie (I believe that's how you spell it) is a little wrong about Columbus...he's not the kind hero, indian lover. Interesting essay.
    • 28/11/2003
    • 12:52:03
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • The Black Dahlia Mystery

    Very interesting and well-written...honestly, I don't see why this recieved a frown...somebody must be a sore loser. LOL.
    • 28/11/2003
    • 12:47:53
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Jackie Robinson

    A very good bio and insight into Jackie Robinson's life and affects on our lifetime. Good job.
    • 27/11/2003
    • 23:36:29
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Parents

    How old are you kool? I wish, just like courlove7, that children thought their parents more like this - or at least that the parents were good, and the children could see it. Fact is, even though I might get mad at my parents every once and a while (oh about everyday), I still respect them, and understand that what they're doing is the best for me! Best wishes kool...you'll be greatly rewarded by God by honoring your parents!
    • 27/11/2003
    • 23:34:27
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • The Fall of the House of Usher

    Again short...but a very good short summary. You're pretty good at that hoba!
    • 26/11/2003
    • 20:40:01
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Tell Tale Heart

    I'm geussing this is another short pre-write, am I correct? Even though this is really short, it covers well.
    • 26/11/2003
    • 20:37:03
    • Score: 6 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Navy Seal Training

    Very interesting...but, how long are the other training courses? You stated how long the conditioning course lasted, but not the other aspects. Otherwise, a well-written and good summary of the training a Navy Seal goes through.
    • 26/11/2003
    • 18:51:57
    • Score: 14 out of 15 people found this comment useful.
  • Social Security

    Interesting paper...haven't heard of this yet, but a good informing paper. Easy to read and well-written.
    • 26/11/2003
    • 18:47:16
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Wal-Mart

    A good essay with a whole lot of info. It had a good flow and was easy to read (exepting the abbreviations I had to stop and think about for a second). Good job!
    • 26/11/2003
    • 18:42:59
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • AVIATION Application and Adherence...

    I'm am very fond of the aviation industry...but if there could ever be an essay that was interesting and boring at the same time, this would be it. Sometimes...this was really interesting (don't get me wrong...the facts were great), but sometimes...facts were stated too, uh, bluntly, I guess you could say.This was well-written...a great read (the interesting out-weighs the boring). Don't recall finding any grammar errors either...so you did good.
    • 26/11/2003
    • 02:15:22
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • To Hoba

    I wouldn't say my friends parent's are sick...they just don't know...it's a vacationing spot for them. But I do geuss, that if what you say is true...that they'd die of stress. TTYL.
    • 26/11/2003
    • 02:08:40
    • Score: 18 out of 27 people found this comment useful.
  • The Art of Cheating

    Funny and interesting to read...those who actually chose to use this info should be sure their teacher hasn't seen this - otherwise, they're dead meat. Anyways, filled with plenty of good ideas (not that I'd ever use them, hehe).
    • 25/11/2003
    • 02:02:03
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Early Psycology

    Brief on each topic, but good coverage on the needed aspects. Well-organized. Good job.
    • 25/11/2003
    • 01:58:39
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Dead Ringers

    Good analytical form hoba. I liked it. Can\'t recall finding any grammar errors...so there probably weren\'t any!
    • 25/11/2003
    • 00:29:46
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Obscenity

    Well-done, pretty in-depth. Could be a good research tool.
    • 23/11/2003
    • 22:39:10
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "Out of the Dust Bowl" By Karen Hesse

    I don't know why you got a negative rating, this wasn't bad at all.
    • 23/11/2003
    • 22:23:43
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Transcontinental Railroad Important Dates

    A pretty good, and thorough timeline. Written well.
    • 23/11/2003
    • 22:21:59
    • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Structure Paper for Crime and Punishment

    Well...not bad review, but not indepth, just lists the different things in each chapter. But good help to those who need the overview.
    • 23/11/2003
    • 22:18:47
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Formaldehyde

    Written in a "simple" form, i.e. uncomplicated sentences...short, simple, and to the point. Contains the basic info...not bad - good start to what could be an even better essay.
    • 23/11/2003
    • 18:14:56
    • Score: 7 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • The Element Tungsten

    Pretty good for its short length...but for others who aren't in Chemistry or never have taken it, you should explain what the "energy level" is referring too.
    • 23/11/2003
    • 18:12:06
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Life of a Child...

    Plentiful grammar errors...but a picture in my mind is created by your writing. It think that could outweigh certain elements.
    • 23/11/2003
    • 18:09:07
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Short Bio of Benjamin Franklin

    Great paper...you did a great job throughout, but the intro especially helped the paper becuase you immediately stole the reader's attention. Well-done.
    • 23/11/2003
    • 17:49:46
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Team Charter

    Good writing style...the sentence fragments worked for this particular paper. Well-done.
    • 23/11/2003
    • 17:47:21
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Poverty in the US?!

    #1 Why did you even write this???#2 Too short.#3 I agree whole-heartedly with courlove7.#4 I agree just as much with Hoba.and...#5 Sheesh!!!
    • 23/11/2003
    • 17:44:07
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Cyberspace and Ethics and Issues

    Very good paper...interesting, and well-written. Kept my attention.
    • 22/11/2003
    • 13:14:39
    • Score: 10 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Miracles Happening in Today's World? It is all a Matter of Faith

    Interesting paper...well-written.
    • 22/11/2003
    • 12:55:01
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Children of Divorce

    Great paper...maybe to make it even better...start off with a really short story - inside a child's head as he's in a divorce court watching his parent's, you could show the confusion through example. Just a small tip...good paper.
    • 22/11/2003
    • 12:13:48
    • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Dieting Myths

    Very interesting...and a good eye-opener for those out there who actually think these myths are true...they annoy me when they say they're gonna go out and get one of those pills that "helps" them lose weight. There's a famous story of one person who did that and the side-affect was horendous. She took the pills, and now she's lost all feeling, she's handfed through, I believe a whole in her neck...and stays in a wheel chair all day. It's great to lose weight, isn't it?!
    • 22/11/2003
    • 12:10:52
    • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Elaboration of No. 7 on the I Hate New Zealand Top Ten

    I liked yankee's question. You always find out about new laws once you've broken it, that's just another law you have to learn, and to learn that, you probably have to break it too. LOL. Anyways, your frustration shines through this paper. Whew!
    • 18/11/2003
    • 23:55:02
    • Score: 18 out of 18 people found this comment useful.
  • "Top Ten Things I Hate About New Zealand"

    Hah hah...some friends of my parents love going to New Zealand for some strange reason as I would see according to this list. But I guess they're not their long enough to notice the problems. Hope you get the money to get out of there if that's what you really want!
    • 18/11/2003
    • 23:50:18
    • Score: 22 out of 28 people found this comment useful.
  • Critical Review of Bergen's Book: Holy War Inc.

    Really good, and very interesting. Good job.
    • 17/11/2003
    • 19:55:55
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • How Supreme Court Decisions have Affected American Society

    Pretty good, but simply worded, for the simple. Nah, good job.
    • 17/11/2003
    • 19:53:15
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • OB Operational Definition

    Pretty good. Good help for those who need to know what organizational behavior is. Good analysis overall.
    • 17/11/2003
    • 19:51:17
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Coca - Cola Company

    Brief, but a good tool to those just wondering, or who are looking to start a paper on the coca cola company. Good job.
    • 15/11/2003
    • 12:16:08
    • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • What to Eat and Why! (For Teens)

    Very interesting topic. Great tool for those out there who are either writing a paper like this...or just want to eat the right stuff. Good job.
    • 15/11/2003
    • 12:12:48
    • Score: 12 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • Running in the Family

    Could be a little better organized. Not bad for starts.
    • 15/11/2003
    • 12:07:05
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • A Smokers Pleasure

    Really interesting essay. Good job, and good research - may help to bring some awareness to smokers.
    • 15/11/2003
    • 11:56:04
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Right / Left Brain

    Not bad, but get rid of the 'she said' or 'she stated,' write her name out every once and a while. A reader can forget who 'she' is.
    • 15/11/2003
    • 11:51:53
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • CNC Routers

    Before rating this down, take a look at the grade level, and rate it based on it!!!
    • 15/11/2003
    • 02:09:57
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • "Turkeys Turning Point:..."

    A couple sentences seem a little scrambled, I don't know how to put it. If anything, reread it a couple of times, you might understand what I mean. But it wasn't bad, and since I don't know much about this topic, I can't really comment on the data usage. Overall, it seemed fine, remember, I only said a couple of sentences.
    • 15/11/2003
    • 01:55:40
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Crucification of Jesus

    Could be better written...and much more insightful, seemed like it was written half-heartedly. Oh yeah...which version of the bible were you using??? i.e. NIV, KJV...ect.
    • 15/11/2003
    • 01:51:51
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Reading and Children

    Great ideas, but it may have recieved a frown due to the missing body paragraphs, intro, and conclusion. A little paragraph organization would have made this paper even better. Otherwise, it was pretty good.
    • 15/11/2003
    • 01:43:12
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Thirty Years' War

    In stead of starting off with, "The war began" state the actual war which began. That way, the ready doesn't have to look at the title to know what you're talking about. I believe I only say 'The Thirty Years' War' only stated twice throughout the whole essay, once in the middle and once in the conclusion, you should have atleast had mention of it in the intro, because that is what the whole paper is about.
    • 15/11/2003
    • 01:39:38
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Women's Roles in Society, the Pressures of Being Beautiful

    Very well-written, and a very good approach to this subject. Good job.
    • 15/11/2003
    • 01:36:58
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Critical Thinking Styles and Forces of Influence

    Well-written, and well-organized. Good Job.
    • 15/11/2003
    • 01:34:40
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Causes of World War I

    To be frank, I would have expected this to be longer, because the causes of World War I are very complex. It didn't just erupt out of a simple issue.
    • 13/11/2003
    • 01:00:47
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Analysis of the film, "Falling Down"

    Not a bad paper, but because I am not in the entertainment industry, I cannot really say much as to the technicalities.
    • 13/11/2003
    • 00:58:29
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Notes: Charles Dickens & "Hard Times"

    A little choppy to read, but I guess I should expect that from study notes...and...thoughts.
    • 12/11/2003
    • 00:30:19
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • 1920s vs. 1980s

    I don't agree with you on the fact that you said alcohol isn't a factor in crime -it is a proven fact that it does. Not bad overall, but could be improved.
    • 11/11/2003
    • 15:48:35
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • America and Change after the War of 1812

    The thesis is a little weak, but the paper surely makes up for it.
    • 11/11/2003
    • 15:44:38
    • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Feet

    Pretty basic paper on feet. When you say "releases half a cup of moisture each day," what is your definition of moisture? i.e. water, water vapors, etc.
    • 11/11/2003
    • 15:42:11
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • No One Person is Perfect

    A good strong paper. Good intro and conclusion. Well-done overall.
    • 11/11/2003
    • 15:38:06
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Ethics in Business

    The sentences were sometimes either stated simply, or with a little more enthusiasm, I think you should have kept an ongoing enthusiastic approach. Am I making any sense???
    • 11/11/2003
    • 15:35:13
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Time Travel, Einstein, Theory of Relativity

    Not bad, but could be more in-depth. A little more research could have been done. But, a good start.
    • 11/11/2003
    • 15:29:27
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • To Clone or Not to Clone?

    Good job with pointing out both sides of the arguement. I liked the fact that you left out all personal opinion until the conclusion. Well-done.
    • 11/11/2003
    • 15:26:45
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • "Viva La France...Is Luck a Large Factor with Soccer?"

    You can't really associate, and state whether a win was a factor of luck. Everything is based on the individual and team skills. Besides that, I did not like the paper itself, even if luck were a factor. The structure of the sentences was pretty bad, and the "paragraphs" themselves. Could very much improve.
    • 11/11/2003
    • 15:23:34
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • In 100 Years...

    This will never happy, but it is realistic to a 7th grader. But like you said, it's what you'd like the world to be like. Not bad for the level it was done at. It's interesting how our skills improve over the years, is it not?
    • 11/11/2003
    • 15:18:21
    • Score: 14 out of 14 people found this comment useful.
  • "Holocaust, Concentration Camps..."

    This essay should be a lot longer, given the title. I'm sure you could have come up with more. Instead of writing the title that you did, all you have to do is add in one word to make this better, "in" i.e. "...persecution of Jews in Westerbork, Auschwaitz, and Bergen-Belson."
    • 11/11/2003
    • 14:13:10
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Homeschooling

    Great job on this essay. Very interesting. I don't see why more aren't homeschooled. There'd be more one-on-one teaching.
    • 11/11/2003
    • 14:09:41
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Ghengis Kahn vs. Napoleon

    Very well-written and easy to read. Extremely interesting. Great job!
    • 11/11/2003
    • 14:03:08
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Hitler and Psychohistory

    Very interesting.
    • 11/11/2003
    • 13:53:43
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Animal Farm vs. Russia

    Sentence structure needs to be improved. Reads a little strange. But not bad.
    • 11/11/2003
    • 13:51:59
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Balance of Power

    Not bad, but the intro and conclusion could be stronger.
    • 11/11/2003
    • 13:49:36
    • Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Consolidated Transition Plan

    A pretty good paper, and a very good research tool. Despite the lenght, it was interesting.
    • 11/11/2003
    • 12:24:14
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Family Relationships

    Not a bad paper, but for 13th grade, it's not great.
    • 11/11/2003
    • 12:12:01
    • Score: 1 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Death Stalks a Continent: HIV/AID in Africa

    Despite it's length, a very interesting paper, let alone a good read. Well-done.
    • 11/11/2003
    • 12:08:57
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • "Cultural Diversity"

    Very indepth, but it did lose my attention a couple of times.
    • 11/11/2003
    • 11:59:37
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • King Lear

    For never having read King Lear, it sounds like a good evaluation...but I never read it so I don't know if there is more to evaluate.
    • 11/11/2003
    • 11:56:04
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "Small Pox Vaccine and Why We Shouldn't..."

    A good informative paper. Don't think I knew this much, so it went a at least a little more in-depth than I ever learned.
    • 10/11/2003
    • 19:35:27
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Hester in The Scarlett Letter

    Good evaluation of Hester.
    • 10/11/2003
    • 19:30:27
    • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Trotsky's Career

    Interesting paper, but I don't have much background with Trotsky, so I wouldn't no if it covers everything.
    • 10/11/2003
    • 19:29:11
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Hester Pyrnne

    A very good paper, I never read "The Scarlet Letter" but this makes it pretty clear, not confusing at all.
    • 10/11/2003
    • 19:25:14
    • Score: 3 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Never Given a Chance

    A very compact paper, with a hard hit. Good opening arguement, you could take this to court, and prove a point!!! Great job for being so short.
    • 10/11/2003
    • 19:23:41
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Monetary Policy

    Overall, a pretty good essay, to me not extremely interesting, but it didn't really lose my attention. Contained a few grammar errors, but not so significant to affect the entire paper.
    • 10/11/2003
    • 19:09:24
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Entertainment

    I did not like your style on this, sentences were very short, not saying it was bad, but it does lack depth, as said by courlove7.
    • 10/11/2003
    • 19:04:51
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Motivational Theories

    Great piece of work, few to absolutely no flaws. Great organization and info. Well-done.
    • 10/11/2003
    • 18:59:55
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • "Australian TCF Industry Tariff Reductions"

    A great read ellyjean! Very good research tool for anyone, I don't know much about the Australian TCF,...but this seemed very indepth. Well-done.
    • 10/11/2003
    • 18:56:29
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • How to be a Wise Buyer

    Short, but a good basic guide.
    • 10/11/2003
    • 18:43:16
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "A Lesson Before Dying"

    Pretty good essay, with good organization.
    • 10/11/2003
    • 18:42:12
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Descriptive Essay

    Pretty good for a descriptive essay, but it was a little difficult at times to picture what you were trying to describe.
    • 09/11/2003
    • 17:46:55
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Exemplification Essay

    A pretty good essay on the value of time management. Liked the examples you made. Well-done.
    • 09/11/2003
    • 17:41:21
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Mother Teresa

    The second to last paragraph should have gone first, but other than that it was a pretty short but good essay.
    • 09/11/2003
    • 09:29:09
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • "How Smart is Smart?"

    Another good essay courlove7. I congrajulate you on this. Interesting paper for being on technology like this.
    • 08/11/2003
    • 22:06:38
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • "Jesus Christ is More Than a Word"

    It sucks that a person has to conform to the view of their teacher. This was an interesting essay. But if you don't mind, what is your view?
    • 08/11/2003
    • 11:19:39
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Abortion

    Well...for one, definitely an opinionated paper like you described it to be, forget what kittenpause said about only your point of view being addressed (kittenpause - it's an opinionated essay). Although it had grammatical errors, it got it's point across and could be of help to students out there.
    • 08/11/2003
    • 11:00:43
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Charles Darwin

    A well-organized bio on Charles Darwin. I liked your subtitle organization especially.
    • 08/11/2003
    • 10:50:49
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "The Fortunes of Silas Marner" by George Elliot

    A good essay. Seemed like it was well-thought out. Good job.
    • 08/11/2003
    • 10:48:10
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Terrorism and the United States

    Gee kittenpause1, you must have an IQ below 100, otherwise you wouldn't be so sore about this essay. Becuase all I've got to say about my IQ is the fact that it is way above 100. It was a good essay, and if you had common sense you wouldn't say what you said in your comment. Mel930 isn't the fool.
    • 08/11/2003
    • 10:43:03
    • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Abortion

    A good essay on abortion, not neccessarily on both sides, but well-organized and presents your arguement well.
    • 08/11/2003
    • 10:39:20
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • "The Spark of a Match: Colonial Rebellion Against British Mercantalism"

    There were a few grammar errors, but nothing significant, and I believe they were by mistake. Good job.
    • 08/11/2003
    • 09:22:02
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • "Meditation 17"

    Pretty good essay on "Meditation 17." Didn't find much wrong aside from just a couple grammar errors.
    • 08/11/2003
    • 09:19:35
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Biography on Flannery O'Connor

    A good paper, but the sentences could be improved, maybe a little more indepth? I can't see how this could be five pages. Good job overall.
    • 08/11/2003
    • 09:17:24
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Communication Essay: Audience Participation

    A well-written and well-done paper. I liked it. Good job.
    • 08/11/2003
    • 09:13:15
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • African American Music

    Although this is very interesting and somewhat well-done, it needs body paragraphs, and an intro and conclusion paragraph. Where'd they go?
    • 08/11/2003
    • 09:10:28
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Borderline Personality Disorder (BPD)

    A pretty good paper, with well-organized info. Never heard of the "disorder."
    • 08/11/2003
    • 09:05:35
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "The Vampire: What Boundaries Does it Threaten?"

    Huh, very interesting, although long, it did not lose my attention! Which is amazing with something of this length. Well-done, and again, a very good read.
    • 06/11/2003
    • 20:49:35
    • Score: 22 out of 22 people found this comment useful.
  • Book Report on, "The Hatchet," by Gary Paulsen

    This could be very much improved, although it gets the main plot across. But instead of ending with "he survives" you should say how he survives, or if the book just ends there waiting for a sequel. Sentence structure and transition are the two main components you should work on.
    • 06/11/2003
    • 20:37:55
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • "Futuristic Automobiles"

    All though this new "speed stoppers" might be a good idea, it will have it's faults. There are emergencies, not necessarily medical either. My mom was once was boxed in by semi trucks, except for infront, they're in a zone where they can all do the same speed limit...well, she had to floor it when a truck started pulling into her lane, she couldn't brake since there were cars behind her. What would she have done with the speed stopper? I like this essay, I like the way you wrote it and put it together, and it was a great idea, but it would take a long time for this to ever occur.
    • 06/11/2003
    • 20:32:42
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Thin Clients vs. Thick Clients

    A good job of presenting the 'versus' in this essay between the two types of clients. Never heard of the two before.
    • 06/11/2003
    • 20:25:46
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Why Students Cheat on Tests

    Overall, a pretty good essay on the status of cheating students, and why they do it. But I found some spelling errors, and some typos. But, you got your point across.
    • 06/11/2003
    • 20:15:50
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • "It's Not Worth It"

    A good wake-up call essay. Very interesting.
    • 06/11/2003
    • 19:19:55
    • Score: 0 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Benjamin Franklin

    You sure this is an elementary school, 3rd grade essay? Although sentences could be improved, they certainly don't have the structure of a 3rd grade paper. This is more like a 7th, 8th, or 9th grade paper. A good paper, but some commas could be added in, in the correct places to make sentences a little more organized and easy to read. Overall, good info.
    • 04/11/2003
    • 22:28:16
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Buffalo

    Just as good as your 'snapping turtle' essay. Good basic info on Buffalo. Well-done, and fun to read.
    • 04/11/2003
    • 22:23:17
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Snapping Turtles

    A good essay covering all the basics of a snapping turtle. Well-organized and easy to read. Good Job.
    • 04/11/2003
    • 21:51:17
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Evils of Christianity, Is Christianity Good or Bad?

    There goes a saying that says you shouldn't read someone else's mail. If you read a personal letter from a friend, to a neighbor, you probably wouldn't know what was going on, am I correct? So don't read the bible and try to interpret it to your liking (the interpretation that won't offend you), and then "present the facts" in an essay as if you know how to interpret it. And Christianity isn't separate from Catholicism. That's why they're called 'Christianity' and 'Catholicism.' And most Christians don't find anything wrong with baptists. I know because I am a Christian myself. And even though the bible is "open to interpretation," there is only one interpretation that will make sense in accordance with the whole bible, or with the passage you're reading.And how did you figure that Christianity is discrimanitory? The bible says that homosexuality is wrong. That didn't descriminate. God said homosexuality is wrong, the human race was not created to be homosexuals, but function as a person is supposed to. And for true followers of the bible, what God says, goes. Now it isn't saying, "go out and kill homosexuals," we are to live with them, but not be like them, separate ourselves from them, but still love them and care for them.As for Christianity scaring people away, is not true either. People will be scared when they here a sermon that touches their heart and actually seems right, when all along they thought this other way was right. Catholics were the ones who did the scaring. Do the witch trials ring a bell? During the time-period of the Witch Trials, Catholics would scare people to their religion by saying that if you aren't Catholic, then you are a witch.One more thing about Catholicism. Catholics believe there are 7 sacraments. There are actually only 2 that are biblical, eucharist (communion) and baptism. One example of a sacrament that is unbiblical is Indulgences. They were brought about in the 15th or 16th century as a way to pay for the church's debt, and for the funding of St. Peter's Basilica in Rome. Catholic leaders made people go on a guilt trip if they didn't buy their parents out of "pergatory." And pergatory isn't even in the bible, Catholics came up with that one too. If you thorougly study the bible, you will not hear even a hint of some place such as 'pergatory.'I could go on and on, but I think this is really really long. Hope you read this and listen, and don't just assume I'm wrong, but actually do your research.
    • 04/11/2003
    • 15:59:00
    • Score: 9 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • "Terrorism and the United States"

    I liked your approach to this subject, but where does the 'Terrorism and the United States' fit in? This sounded like it was written in an hernest manner. Good job, even though it is not made from actual fact, it is still common-sense stuff.
    • 03/11/2003
    • 20:21:42
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Peer Pressure

    A good "wake-up" paper on peer pressure. Interesting, and in this case, I liked the fact that you brought in personal experiences and your surrounding environment. Hopefully someone out there will read this and realize what peer pressure is all about. Well-done.
    • 03/11/2003
    • 20:16:06
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Slave's Perspective Story in Ancient Rome

    Good use of dialogue. I wouldn't call it an essay, it is a story and a good one. Good job overall.
    • 03/11/2003
    • 20:07:24
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • George W. Bush and Re-Election

    Although this essay isn\'t worded the best, it is a pretty good assessment of what is going on. Some people might be upset with the personal opinion, but it wasn\'t that bad, it was \'in conclusion.\' The only other thing you need to work on is grammar, i.e. \'are\' to \'our\' and so forth.
    • 03/11/2003
    • 18:02:19
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • To Hoba, from the Author

    Hoba: I am certainly not Jewish. Not even my parents are jewish, or their parents. And I never mentioned anything against about being against the Palestinian people. Just because I person is Palestinian doesn't mean I'm agianst them. I just used facts given in the bible to prove my point as to the title question.
    • 03/11/2003
    • 17:28:03
    • Score: 16 out of 18 people found this comment useful.
  • Satelite Echelon

    Overall, a pretty good, organized essay. Very informative, yet it is still interesting to read. Good job.
    • 02/11/2003
    • 22:53:47
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Women in the Ministry

    Who is 'they'? And what is the intro talking about? It isn't very clear.
    • 02/11/2003
    • 22:50:49
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Heroes

    A pretty good essay, I liked your sum-up at the end, not much of a conclusion though.
    • 02/11/2003
    • 16:25:15
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • China Population

    It overall a good essay. But, the parts where your info was cited in the essay should be in parenthesis. Good info, a couple grammar mistakes but nothing major, just minor.
    • 02/11/2003
    • 16:21:39
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Study Experience

    A good essay on your study experience, but the grammar itself could be drastically improved. I liked the purpose of the essay however, so I don't mind the grammar.
    • 02/11/2003
    • 12:41:28
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Pholcidae Spiders

    A good informational essay on the Pholcidae spiders, but there were plenty of grammar errors. If you fix those, this would be a perfect paper, because the info is good. Good job.
    • 02/11/2003
    • 08:02:15
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • How to Write a Good Article

    A good, sum-up guideline. Good for those of us who need just the general, so we can actually try and write an article. Overall a good job.
    • 01/11/2003
    • 21:50:04
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • The facade essay on "The Great Gatsby"

    A very good essay on the deception of people in "The Great Gatsby." Pretty good support as well.
    • 01/11/2003
    • 18:13:56
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • "Hinduism and Buddhism"

    A good, however short, comparison essay. Good research tool.
    • 01/11/2003
    • 18:09:17
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Model United Nations for...

    Is this written by you? Whether it is or isn't, this is a good piece of writing. Well-done.
    • 01/11/2003
    • 11:48:20
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Lord of the Rings

    A good 'insight' and summary into the Lord of the Rings.
    • 31/10/2003
    • 22:10:03
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Difficulties of Parenting

    I liked your intro, especially since it contained a thesis. Well-done and thought out.
    • 31/10/2003
    • 21:58:46
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Celebration of Diversity

    Interesting essay on the diversity in America. Never thought of some things that you presented...interesting...
    • 31/10/2003
    • 21:54:21
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • "Okinawa"

    Very interesting essay. Well-written and easy to read.
    • 31/10/2003
    • 17:59:47
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Global Labor Union Climate

    A pretty well-written and organized paper. Well-done.
    • 31/10/2003
    • 17:28:58
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Of Mice and Men

    What happened to the introduction? Forgeting the formating error that could have occurred when submitting, this was a pretty good essay.
    • 31/10/2003
    • 17:26:47
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Capital Punishment

    I thought this was a pretty good essay. The fact that you stated both sides was good for the essay, even though it was a lot of personal opinion, it was commonsense.
    • 31/10/2003
    • 17:16:21
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Spanish Armada

    A short paper for something like the Spanish Armada, but it is still a good sum-up.
    • 30/10/2003
    • 16:27:55
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Thomas Campion

    A good, brief bio on Thomas Campion. Well-written, with a pretty good flow to it.
    • 29/10/2003
    • 18:00:04
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • "The Ocean"....

    I liked your writing style. Besides a few grammar errors, which are probably just typos, this is a good essay. Well-done.
    • 29/10/2003
    • 17:57:55
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Work Ethics

    A good, and well-written essay. Well-done overall. Couldn't find anything wrong.
    • 29/10/2003
    • 17:54:06
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Is Abortion Immoral?

    You didn't really address the question, 'Is Abortion Immoral?' You just touched on it a little. I liked the fact that you stated all views on abortion, and arguments against views. I caught some personal opinion added in here and there, but nothing significant enough to make an arguement out of. Well-done and well-written.
    • 29/10/2003
    • 17:52:26
    • Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Brief History and Background on Buddhism

    Interesting to read, but brief? It was a just a little long. I lost focus on the first paragraph, but the paper caught my attention again (I ended up having to go back and read the intro over again. LOL)
    • 28/10/2003
    • 20:34:31
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • The Mind and How it Acts

    If you went to Him, it wouldn't be by suicide. And there is no depression in Him, you should have security here on earth, with the thought of going to Him. That is if you know Him. This was weird, like you said, and definitely short,...but it gives an idea of what people are going through, what's going through their mind, and why they want to kill themselves or end up doing so.
    • 28/10/2003
    • 19:56:54
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • External and Internal Factors...

    A very good paper on external and internal factors. Well-organized, well-researched. Good job.Oh yeah...liked the fact that you included references, makes it even better! (Let's us know that you actually know what you're talking about, and that you didn't just make it up.)
    • 28/10/2003
    • 19:05:35
    • Score: 12 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • Critical Thinking Article Summary

    Well-written and supported essay. However, many of the paragraphs could be combined. Well-done overall.
    • 28/10/2003
    • 19:02:37
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Germany's View on the Proliferation of Weapons of Mass Destruction...

    However interesting this is, it still contains plenty of grammar errors, and the info you're trying to get across isn't always clear.
    • 28/10/2003
    • 18:46:23
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Switzerland's View on Trade Barriers in Africa

    Interesting essay, well-written.
    • 28/10/2003
    • 18:43:12
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • "Bubonic Plague"

    Interesting essay, but you could have gone to greater depths in explaining the Bubonic Plague. Examples: Which towns were affected? What were the geographic locations of these towns? Were they isolated? How was it expected to have died out? What were some symptoms?These questions, in order to make this an even better essay, should have been addressed, because the title simply is "Bubonic Plague." Otherwise, well-done.
    • 26/10/2003
    • 20:54:44
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Conversation

    You should bring in an example from the "lies" part of the book. That way you'd cover everything in your title. Well-done overall.
    • 25/10/2003
    • 16:57:37
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Big Bang Theory

    Interesting to think that the "Big Bang" theory was made up out of nothing. Just like they think the big bang came about.One thing...the big bang didn't create anything. The big bang isn't, for say, the "creator" of life. There had to be something around to create the big bang. That was the only problem I had with your essay. Otherwise...it was ok.
    • 25/10/2003
    • 16:48:55
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • "God Exists"

    Well done on this essay. Especially because you brought in both sides...even though the science was brief. I liked the religion part of your essay the best-very interesting. Well-done.
    • 25/10/2003
    • 16:43:57
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Diary Entry: Romeo & Juliet

    As I have never read the script of Romeo and Juliet...is this actually taken straight from the script...or is this your own journal entry meant to be by Juliet?
    • 25/10/2003
    • 07:46:54
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • George W. Bush

    I hate how this essay critisizes how "bad" Bush supposedly is...yet, there are no facts. I checked your info-the truth is much different. The fact that you have no works cited just proves that you have no real source...and your info just isn't accurate...period. Buy a biography of George W. Bush. Or better yet, find one on an actual factual website. Go to the White House website. Go to biography.com.P.S. Q: Why do people think that Clinton was so great, and Bush so horrible? A: Because libs can't give up critisizing...and the media is so stinkin' liberal it's sad. The only fair news site is Fox News...they've got dems and reps on their channel.
    • 22/10/2003
    • 18:15:04
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Book Report on "October Sky"

    A good book report on "October Sky," however, it is not without grammar errors.
    • 21/10/2003
    • 17:23:32
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Argument Opposing Capital Punishment

    Whether their family or friend is on death row is not the case. It is a bad example. Especially since I disagree with you on the example. If a family member or friend were on death row, and they did the crime...then justice was still being done.And you don't know that the death penalty is responsible for crime rates going up. A lot of different crimes are going up. But as I said to another "argument" against capital punishment, homeless people could murder someone because they could be in prison and be fed and taken care of-as well as having a cot to sleep in.And abortion...abortion is taking the life of a human being...why is that different? Abortion is legal, just likeCapital Punishment. I don't know if you support it or not...you shouldn't especially since you are against death penalty, but I don't see a difference...so that was another bad example.This essay...is composed of no facts...but so are essays for capital punishment. This is a subject that has no true or proveable facts or theories. Well-done for starting with nothing.
    • 20/10/2003
    • 15:29:45
    • Score: 4 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • The American New Deal

    Interesting on the "New Deal." I'm glad you said exactly what the 'New Deal' is. Amazingly, I didn't know what it was. Well-done and interesting to read.
    • 20/10/2003
    • 15:17:34
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Element Aluminum

    Good job on this essay. Just a little to add...Napolean used to serve his most important guests on plates of aluminum and silverware made of aluminum. He'd save the gold dinnerware for less-important guests. Interesting to read and a good research tool.
    • 20/10/2003
    • 15:08:14
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Euthanasia

    An interesting read and essay. Well-done.
    • 16/10/2003
    • 20:35:17
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "The Basis of My Belief in God"

    I agree completely with you on this. But I can predict right now that people will be complaining about 'no evidence' even though science has no evidence to support a "big bang." Not many grammar errors. Well-done.
    • 16/10/2003
    • 20:32:59
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • "The Plains of Siberia..."

    A very good descriptive essay. Well-done.
    • 16/10/2003
    • 15:54:23
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Why the British Settled in NSW in 1788

    You made a mistake right off the bat...a run-on sentence. It didn't give a good first impression, but you did recover yourself. A pretty well-done essay. Definitely interesting to read.
    • 16/10/2003
    • 15:51:22
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Wild, Wild West and David Lowenthal

    A pretty good of summing up the book and a good job of analyzing. There were a couple errors in your grammar, but other than that, well-done and good job.
    • 16/10/2003
    • 15:49:18
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Country Living vs. City Living

    I agree with you, I'd much rather live in the country. I also like how you pointed out the elements that made you make the decision that you've made. Well-done with a good point for everyone who is trying to decide where to raise their family.
    • 16/10/2003
    • 15:44:29
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Three Reasons of High Crime Rate in U.S.

    There was one slip-up that I found. You thought that drug abuse was a cause of crime because people can't think. But this depends on what type of drugs they're taking. If they're illegal drugs, then they've already committed a crime. If they're store bought drugs and they're over dosing, then that is a crime in itself. Besides this one thing, this is a good essay for something not backed with actual "evidence," but just common sense knowledge.
    • 16/10/2003
    • 15:31:40
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • "Electron Microscopes"

    In the very beginning you spelled 'allowed' as 'aloud.' That was the only error I believe I found. A pretty good essay though, covering and saying what an electron microscope is and how it works. Well-done.
    • 16/10/2003
    • 15:26:50
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • "Code of Hammurabi"

    It was overall a good essay, but you should have stated who the 'he' Hammurabi was.
    • 16/10/2003
    • 15:23:59
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "Be Thankful for What You Have"

    An essay with a really good point. As the bible says, 'give thanks and be glad, for this is a day the Lord has made.'
    • 16/10/2003
    • 15:16:23
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Biological Weapon Effects on Biological Diversity

    You could rephrase a couple of the sentences to make them make more sense. Otherwise well-done.
    • 16/10/2003
    • 15:13:04
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Info on: The Age of Discovery...

    Interesting...but the grammatical errors need to be fixed. A couple of words in the first paragraph need to be pluralized as well.
    • 16/10/2003
    • 15:08:15
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Persian Wars

    Interesting...but could be a lot more indepth. And the title should read 'Persian Wars' not 'Persia war.'
    • 16/10/2003
    • 15:06:08
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • "My Best Friend Radar..."

    This is a good descriptive story. Does a good job of taking you to the event that is happening. Feels like we are right there with you because we can picture what is happening. Well-done.
    • 15/10/2003
    • 18:48:12
    • Score: 50 out of 51 people found this comment useful.
  • Saddam Hussein Bio

    A simple, but good bio. This paper can be improved though...some paragraphs created and grammar corrected...just like you breifly mentioned in the description. Otherwise...interesting.
    • 15/10/2003
    • 18:42:21
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "What Problems Faced the Nation..."

    An interesting read on the time period after the Revolutionary War.
    • 15/10/2003
    • 18:39:22
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "The Strange Case of Dr. Jekyll and Mr. Hyde",...

    A good essay on human nature. It was virtually flawless. But one tip - if you are able to grab hold of a bible...it says the same thing. That man is born evil. It could help your paper even more than you've already done with the info in it. Well-done.
    • 15/10/2003
    • 18:34:37
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • "Great Expectations"

    Interesting to read. Extremely well-written. Another well-done piece.
    • 15/10/2003
    • 18:31:49
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • "Was Stalin and Ethical Leader?..."

    A good essay because you backed your opinion with real facts and events. Both well-organized and well-written. Well-done.
    • 14/10/2003
    • 21:50:27
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "Kingdom Protista and the Phyla Under It"

    This is a somewhat thorough paper but at the same time it touches only the surface of the Kingdom of Protists. Well-done overall.
    • 14/10/2003
    • 21:48:14
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • The Manifest Destiny

    This is a good essay for someone who is just curious as to what "The Manifest Destiny" is. It is surely helpful to people looking for some info (not indepth, just some info).
    • 14/10/2003
    • 21:44:10
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Persuasive Paper on Toilet Paper

    This essay is hilarious. I'd of never thought of writing an actual persuasive paper on which position for toilet paper is better. The part that is even more hilarious is the fact that I like it best in the front too! I hate it in the back. A weird topic to write a paper on, but never-the-less...hilarious and enlightening. Besides, we need some funny essays on this site. Who knows? A teacher just might assign someone a persuasive paper on which position the toilet paper should be put on the roller! (I'm not serious, but still, you never know!) LOL.
    • 14/10/2003
    • 21:41:36
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Shakespearean Comedy

    It's short, but it explains Shakespearean comedy, although not in depth. This only touches the surface...it'd be a good intro to a much longer and indepth paper.
    • 14/10/2003
    • 15:59:07
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Giuseppe Verdi the Opera Singer

    The paragraphs are short and lack transition so it makes the essay a little choppy, but it was a good essay on Guiseppe Verdi. A small, but good, research tool. (Assuming everything is accurate)
    • 14/10/2003
    • 15:56:15
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Greek god Hermes

    Good essay on the description of the Greek god Hermes. Greek Mythology is wierd, isn\'t it? (Sorry, that\'s just a random question :)
    • 14/10/2003
    • 15:53:49
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • "Lightless Night. An essay about the Blackout of 2003..."

    Interesting essay. Don't have much to say about it, besides it lets the reader know how one felt when it happened. A little more could have been done to make the reader feel like they were there with you. Otherwise, well-done.
    • 14/10/2003
    • 15:46:08
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "Abortion and Voluntary Euthanasia"

    Interesting paper...but as a true Christian I can disagree on some points, especially because you used terms that I never heard of, one being "Natural Law." I never heard of it as well as some other fancy names you gave to certain things. Also, I didn't like the fact that you took your bible verses out of context. Because sometimes, that changes interpretations as well. Other than these couple of things, a pretty good essay on Abortion and Voluntary Euthanasia.
    • 14/10/2003
    • 15:39:18
    • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Philosophy

    Ashes to ashes, and dust to dust. That's the way it is. I do believe God created us, but we do have a choice. That's the part where I do disagree...if you've read the bible thoroughly, then you'd know that we are given the choice between choosing good and evil. We can make a difference between the two. We are not totally powerless. In the end, however, everything will work out to God's plan. But we still have a choice. As slaves to God, that is true, but only for some people. Disciples of God are indeed in a way, slaves, but by choice. Other than these couple of things that I disagree with, it's a pretty good essay (although it has a few grammar problems which can easily be improved), you got your point across. It's an interesting way to look at life.P.S. Q: Why don't scientist look beyond the big bang? (A: Because there never was a big bang that created earth)
    • 14/10/2003
    • 15:30:23
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "My Kitchen. This is..."

    'My kitchen is to repetetive in the beginning. You could have replaced 'very cozy' to 'extremely/astonishingly cozy.' Some other words could have been replaced with better words, better diction, but overall it was fine. The essay also seemed too simple (writing was to simply written), didn't seem like a Senior's work.
    • 14/10/2003
    • 15:23:15
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Personal Expectations

    This could have been a little better written or stated (i.e. better grammar use), but overall...pretty good.
    • 14/10/2003
    • 15:18:26
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "How to Play Better Golf"

    Covers pretty much aspects of becoming better. But to make it even better than it already is to a person like me, I'd have explained what points take you to the negative, or par, or birdie and so on. Because I don't understand that part much. I know that isn't what this was about, but it would have made it better to me. Maybe you can make an essay on that aspect - teaching the reader how to keep score.
    • 14/10/2003
    • 15:14:42
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Ballad Poem

    Overall...a pretty good ballad poem. Well-done.
    • 08/10/2003
    • 17:54:39
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • A Brief Narration of the Pequod War

    A well-organized and well-written essay. Good-job.
    • 08/10/2003
    • 17:47:44
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Martin Luther King...

    You should change what you said from 'people have the right to disobey unjust laws' to 'people have a right to disobey laws that take away their rights.'Ex: Murder is against the law. That doesn't mean people have the right to disagree with it. It is wrong. Especially since a murderer is taking away the right of another. Don't get me wrong, I agree with you, and that African Americans were mistreated and all, but you should, to make this better, make it more specific. Overall...well-done.
    • 07/10/2003
    • 18:42:19
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Three Habits

    A good lesson or point in this essay on the habits someone should pick-up to help deal with tragedy. But, the grammar could be radically improved.
    • 07/10/2003
    • 17:20:30
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "The Golden Compass" by....

    A good essay. And good evaluation/analysis of Lyra. Well-done.
    • 07/10/2003
    • 17:18:20
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Biology AT1 - Osmosis in Potatoes

    Good job of stating the materials and writing the procedure. Some statements could be taken out.
    • 07/10/2003
    • 14:38:42
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Unix

    An average essay on the 'Unix.' A pretty good short summary.
    • 07/10/2003
    • 14:36:50
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Abortion

    Good job on stating both sides on abortion. But...abortion is wrong. If the girl chose to have sex at eighteen then so be it. That was her choice. She wouldn't be in such a dilemma if she thought about the consequences before-hand. The point is...if you don't know if you want a child...don't have sex! If you can't afford a child...don't have sex! Get married...wait until you're in a stable relationship with the needed funds. Even if you don't have the funds...you'll always find a way to make-do. My parents did. They weren't in the best of financial situations.
    • 06/10/2003
    • 15:55:19
    • Score: 4 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Is a bill of rights wrong?

    A well-argued argument.I live in the U.S.A. and I just wanted to make a point...the right to bear arms...even though it is a good right...it is very often misused (might or might not be due to the bill of rights). But who knows what it is that causes this abuse? It isn't neccessarily the bill of rights...maybe just the evil-intented minds that carry guns are the ones that abuse the right.Overall...a well-written essay-but the format could be changed to include a couple of paragraphs instead of one long one...it would help with the organization.
    • 05/10/2003
    • 21:58:59
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • "...Crime and Punishment..."

    Well-written essay. Good job on covering all the asked components for analysing the character.
    • 05/10/2003
    • 08:27:18
    • Score: 2 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Dance

    A very insightful paper. To me Basketball is important...and basketball teaches me what you also learn through dance. A good paper.
    • 04/10/2003
    • 12:29:44
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • CIA: World of Secrets

    Interesting and well-written paper. Never knew that much about the CIA. Well-done.
    • 04/10/2003
    • 10:59:51
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • From the Author

    Correction on the title...it's supposed to be Chemistry Study Notes. Sry.
    • 04/10/2003
    • 10:42:25
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • "Best Ideas Arise from..."

    Pretty good essay. Worded a little wierd in some places, but never the less, still good.
    • 03/10/2003
    • 15:31:15
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • The Xenophobia Police: Affirmative Action in Europe

    Informative but a little confusing. Maybe to organize a little better...you might want to split the two paragraphs into new paragraphs...so that the paragraphs aren't mixed with info. Other than that, pretty well-done, and of course, as usual, another interesting read.
    • 02/10/2003
    • 15:18:21
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Last Thoughts

    An interesting poem, but it confused me a little.
    • 01/10/2003
    • 18:39:59
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • A Walk in Life

    A good poem...with a good message. Well-done.
    • 01/10/2003
    • 18:34:36
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • The Lesson

    Well-written essay. Did a pretty good analysis of "The Lesson."But I would have made a stronger conclusion for all that you wrote.
    • 01/10/2003
    • 15:59:27
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • School Uniforms

    It sounded like you're writing about a school that is contemplating whether to ban the uniforms or not. Am I right? If so...since you're topic is in favor of the general idea of school uniforms, then you should have brought in the idea of regular schools, and the fact that maybe they should have uniforms as well.
    • 01/10/2003
    • 15:56:55
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Crimson Tide

    It'd didn't tell much about the roll of a Nuclear Submarine Captain, but it was interesting. You did a good job of explaining what the movie is all about.
    • 01/10/2003
    • 15:52:48
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Defense for Passanger Jets

    You used the wrong form of "whether" in the beginning paragraph, instead you wrote "weather," as if the condition outside.Other than that once mistake, a good essay on what the defense system is for passanger jets. Well-done.
    • 01/10/2003
    • 15:48:05
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • From the Author

    Sorry about how complicating it is...courlove7 is right. I should have thought of that and explained what RNA and DNA is a little more thouroughly. Again...sorry.
    • 30/09/2003
    • 20:27:37
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • How to Become a Successful Creative Writer

    A great could-be article. I have had some problems with my creative writing, but this essay has some tips that I can use to improve myself. Well-done.
    • 30/09/2003
    • 15:54:35
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Antigone: A Tragic Hero in Literature

    A pretty good paper on Antigone. I can't find or think of anything wrong with it. Well-done.
    • 30/09/2003
    • 15:29:02
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • The life of William Wordsworth

    A good short bio on William Wordsworth...however, you could have written an intro, then a body, then conclusion. It would have made it more organized...and overall...better.
    • 30/09/2003
    • 15:24:09
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Lady of Shalott

    A good summary of the poem "The Lady of Shallot. But I do think you could add an intro, then write a body paragraph, and then a conclusion.
    • 30/09/2003
    • 15:22:02
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Public Opinion

    A pretty good essay on the influence of T.V. to public opinion. Well-written, but a little choppy in transition from one of the paragraphs to the next.
    • 30/09/2003
    • 15:17:40
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Personal Personality

    Well-written and easy to read w/ only a couple typos. Well-done.
    • 30/09/2003
    • 15:09:23
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "I wish I did not Meet the Man"

    Interesting short story. Good lesson for all of us.
    • 30/09/2003
    • 15:02:34
    • Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Alzheimer's Disease

    A pretty good short essay on Alzheimer's Disease. Easy to read, and few to no grammatical errors.
    • 29/09/2003
    • 19:06:37
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Stress on the Body

    Well-written and easy to read. Good job.
    • 29/09/2003
    • 19:00:09
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • In under 10,000 words...

    Good job with the dialogue, not to mention a pretty good story.
    • 29/09/2003
    • 17:35:04
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Personal Tragic Event

    A good story with a good lesson. (I do think you have your priorities wrong though...nintendo games was all you were worried about?)
    • 29/09/2003
    • 17:33:35
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • A review of "Beaches"

    A pretty good summary (review) of "Beaches." Found only one grammatical error. Well-done.I didn't see "Beaches" so I took your word for it, that the info is true.
    • 29/09/2003
    • 15:31:09
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • A Salty High: Surfing

    A very descriptive essay. I was able to relate back to my own experiences. It did a great job of taking me to the place. Well-done.
    • 29/09/2003
    • 15:26:01
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Fascism in Germany and Italy (compare and contrast)

    A pretty good compare and contrast essay. A few sentences need to be fixed...sentence structure was a little akward. But other than that, good job. (I can't comment on the truth of this, since I know nothing about the subject)
    • 29/09/2003
    • 15:21:37
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Alexander the Great

    A well-researched and well-written paper. Just a few grammatical errors, and for a paper this long that's not bad. A few sentences were a little choppy. Other than these things a very good paper.
    • 29/09/2003
    • 15:17:39
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Personal Experience-Operation

    A good essay on the feelings of pre-operation, but the grammar needs to be improved drastically. I was confused about what the thing was that was in your hand - and I still don't know what it was.
    • 29/09/2003
    • 15:01:19
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Educational Progress

    You should have told us what "this far" means when you first mentioned it. There were a few grammatical errors, but other than that, a pretty good personal essay. A good encouragement to those who think there's no hope for them.Oh ya...one more thing...the title should be "My Educational Progress." It'd make it more clear to people about what this paper is about.
    • 29/09/2003
    • 14:57:23
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Vladimir Llyick Lenin (1870-1924)

    The intro was badly written, but other than that it is a pretty good summary of his life.
    • 29/09/2003
    • 14:49:42
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Effect of racism...

    Well-written and easy to read. There is plenty of truth to it. Good job.
    • 28/09/2003
    • 17:00:57
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "Theme of Ambition and Greed....."

    This essay is a little choppy and could be improved.
    • 28/09/2003
    • 16:53:24
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Augustine in Church History

    Well-written essay, easy to read...short and to the point.
    • 28/09/2003
    • 16:51:29
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • How to write a cover letter.

    When I saw this, I thought you'd just explain, but you gave us an example instead, good job.
    • 28/09/2003
    • 14:52:50
    • Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Metamorphoses on Broadway

    Good overview of the play. A well-organized and an easy read.
    • 28/09/2003
    • 14:51:11
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Abortion

    I liked your way of stating each person's belief, i.e. "to him" or "to her" or "according to." Good job on not making this essay personal until the end, then stating who you side with.
    • 28/09/2003
    • 14:47:16
    • Score: 16 out of 22 people found this comment useful.
  • The Benefits of Yoga

    Assuming this is true...you added to my knowledge of what yoga is. This essay is well-written and easy to read.
    • 28/09/2003
    • 14:37:47
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Dream of Crosses

    This has a good lesson to it. That none of us should bare a cross we can not handle, we are given the perfect one, we just need to pick it back up! Good job.
    • 27/09/2003
    • 10:06:55
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Streetcar Named Desire by Tennessee Williams

    This is a pretty well-written and put together analysis. Well-done overall.
    • 26/09/2003
    • 21:13:56
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Athenian Democratic System

    Just because millions of people don't excersize their right to vote, doesn't mean that this "isn't a democracy," which is what you seemed to imply when listing it directly after slaver.Besides this one flaw the paper was pretty good. Well-written and easy to read.
    • 26/09/2003
    • 21:12:08
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Strategic Marketing Management of Dell

    A very thorough essay...and well-organized. Good job on the info.
    • 26/09/2003
    • 15:05:57
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • The Life of John the Baptist

    Besides a few grammatical errors...this is a good paper (assuming the facts are true). Well-done.
    • 25/09/2003
    • 20:45:26
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • AP Essay - Passage from Czech writer....

    Overall...a pretty good essay but well-organized. Good Job
    • 25/09/2003
    • 20:42:58
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Notes

    Pretty good for notes...but they could be organized better to make them easier to read.
    • 25/09/2003
    • 20:34:29
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • In Defense of Gambling

    This was a very well-written essay. Good job on the organization of info.
    • 25/09/2003
    • 20:29:55
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • WWI Had Many Underlying Causes

    A pretty informational essay. Well-written. However, it needs a little bit of work on the transition from one sentence to another.
    • 24/09/2003
    • 15:26:07
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Ludmilla Alexyeva

    This is a very well-written essay. Also well-organized.
    • 23/09/2003
    • 15:24:18
    • Score: 10 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Divine Intervention

    I completely disagree with "your essay"...but I guess that's why this essay is under controversial issues. Well...your approach worked. Frankly, I'd hate a society with people that looked exactly the same. I'd hate to not have my own individuality. This essay was well-written and well thought out. Good Job.
    • 23/09/2003
    • 14:43:33
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Capital Punishment

    This is a good essay, pretty simple and to the point.My opinion is that all people, if they are proved guilty to murdering someone or people, they should be punished by death. They took somebody else's life, so their life should be taken away from them. It is not their choice as to whether or not the other person should live, but if they decide to take it into their hands and make the decision, then they should be punished for it. Just my opinion.
    • 22/09/2003
    • 14:06:31
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Some treaties w/ Australia held by Figi

    You showed that you had a lot of knowledge on these subjects. Well-written and easy to read. Good Job.
    • 22/09/2003
    • 13:59:44
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • The Influence of Beccaria and Voltaire

    A good essay, well-written, easy to read and to understand. Very informative, but not too long...informative papers, if long, for me tend to get boring...but this didn't. Well-done.
    • 22/09/2003
    • 13:04:57
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • God and death

    When I think of death, I don't think of it as a "new" life, but as a beginning to life. Not that it isn't a new life, but I always like to think of it as the beginning, and right now I am just being shaped, shaped in such a way as if I were in my mother's womb.Anyways...great essay...well-organized, and easy to read. Good Job.
    • 22/09/2003
    • 13:01:41
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Jesus - Who Do You Say That I Am?

    Pretty good essay...well-organized and clear.
    • 22/09/2003
    • 12:53:13
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Capital Punishment

    A very good persuasive essay. The best I've read yet on this site. You did a great job of pointing out all the "technicalities" that would have otherwised been questioned. If I had not been for capital punishment when I set out reading this, I would have at the end. The point is, I go into all my essays that I read with a somewhat open mind. I've read Capital Punishment papers that tried to go against it and persuade me, but they didn't even get close, they were poorly organized, not supported, etc. Well-done.
    • 21/09/2003
    • 22:22:54
    • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Pros and Cons of Media

    Good essay for a 9th grader. To be honest, I am quite surprised, even though I am only a little older. Well-written and organized. Very informative on the conditions of our media today and how people see it. Well-done.
    • 21/09/2003
    • 22:15:16
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • JFK

    This is in more of an article format. However, it is a good sum of JFK's New Frontier social program...Overall for such a short 'essay' it is ok.
    • 21/09/2003
    • 22:06:24
    • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • African Slaves in Virginia (1600's)

    Good essay. Flows well and very clear. Good job of getting your point across (your subject).
    • 21/09/2003
    • 14:21:36
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • The House on Mango Street

    This is a well thought-out and well-written essay. Good Job.
    • 21/09/2003
    • 14:15:03
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn

    Good essay overall. The paragraphs shouldn't be separated the way they are, but I believe that that happened because of the sight formating. Good job on the insight, I think,...I haven't read the book.
    • 21/09/2003
    • 14:06:34
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • The Prince

    Pretty good sum-up of the book, you included pretty much all key points. There are a few grammatical errors that you need to fix, these are mostly in the beginning of the essay. Well-done overall.
    • 21/09/2003
    • 13:56:24
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Acne, Facial Blemishes, etc.

    Well...now I know why I've never gotten acne. I drink loads of water and not a lot of soda. I have a brother who drinks more soda than me and not as much water, he has major acne problems, he always touches his face too. That's proof enough for me. I'm going to email this to him. Good Job.
    • 21/09/2003
    • 07:52:14
    • Score: 13 out of 14 people found this comment useful.
  • The Grapes of Wrath

    Pretty good essay. The intro needs a little work however.
    • 21/09/2003
    • 07:30:19
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "Group of Seven"

    Did a pretty good job of describing the Group of Seven and stating how they're influential in Canada. Just one or two grammatical errors. Well done overall.
    • 20/09/2003
    • 15:49:40
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Race and Ethnicity Paper

    A good informative paper on race and ethnicity. Written in a very personal way.There weren't any grammatical errors and it is well written.
    • 20/09/2003
    • 10:58:51
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Antartica - Polar Bears - Global Warming

    Overall...a pretty good essay. Good job on describing the polar bear...but you almost went off subject in the end with Global Warming...but then you indirectly connected it back.
    • 20/09/2003
    • 09:45:23
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Army Basic Training

    A good and personal essay through one person's eyes as to what Army basic training is like. There were plenty of grammatical errors, but I got the point.
    • 19/09/2003
    • 21:46:01
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Overall...

    Overall, it was an ok essay...but Nuns, Priests and Lays don't have much to do with any of the gospels...actually...they don't have anything to do with it.
    • 19/09/2003
    • 14:47:18
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Paintball FAQ

    Good essay on Paintballing. I knew nothing when I started, but you've answered all the questions I could of thought of. Well organized and in an easy-to-read format. Well-done!
    • 19/09/2003
    • 14:45:07
    • Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • From Life of Pain to Death

    Pretty good poem for an 8th Grader. Could use some change...make a reader understand a little more,....some of the lines should be fixed to make a little more sense. Good job overall.
    • 18/09/2003
    • 15:25:37
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Change Management by Shagun Jain

    Great essay on Change Management! I don't see how you could get just a 51%. This did a great job of keeping my attention as well as being extremely well-organized. Great Job!
    • 18/09/2003
    • 15:18:49
    • Score: 14 out of 14 people found this comment useful.
  • Suddenly the phone went dead........

    Good story...great hook in the beginning. However, I don't know exactly how to put it, but you did have quite a few run on sentences...but on the other hand, they got the point across. A very interesting story. Well Done.
    • 18/09/2003
    • 15:04:54
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Merlin movie critique

    Pretty well-written essay...however, organization could be improved. For a short essay you did a good job of summing up everything on Merlin. Well-done.
    • 18/09/2003
    • 14:58:06
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Wealth and Power

    This is a very passionate essay on one's own opinions. I agree with you. However...Who said life was fair?
    • 16/09/2003
    • 19:20:34
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Difference between revolution and war for independence.

    Well-written essay. You did a somewhat good job of getting your point across.
    • 08/09/2003
    • 14:56:35
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Brief report on Charles Darwin.

    Brief but good. Covers almost all aspects. He had one family member that wanted him to go into the church and serve the church. This played an important role in his life because he went against what his family member desired.
    • 04/09/2003
    • 14:30:11
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Machiavelli and Castiglione

    This essay was good, however, in order to make it better...you should of taken one of Castiglione's quotes from his book to show the contrast between his book and Machiavelli's. Overall, a very good essay.
    • 04/09/2003
    • 14:26:34
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Great Expectations

    Overall...a great essay, however, there are a few grammatical errors that need to be changed and just a little more organization. Other than that, it's a good essay.
    • 04/09/2003
    • 14:18:28
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • A Soldier's Heart

    Good essay overall, however, a bit choppy and the organization needs to be improved. Well done overall.
    • 03/09/2003
    • 17:24:07
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • "Catholic Christianity and Rastafarianism."

    The main components of Christianity are not rituals (Mass, Sacraments and the Sign of the Cross...that is Catholic), but the following the bible. That's all there is to it.There is no real relation between Christians and Catholics. Catholics depend on Mass, Sacraments, and all materialistic rituals - Christians don't. Oh ya...purgatory is a whole other area. Christians don't believe in Purgatory - Catholics do.Sure...you can say Christians came from Catholics...but that just means that's because their eyes were enlightened.In order to make this essay better...it should be fact and not fiction. If you have sources for where you got your info, I'd greatly apprectiate you giving it to me via mail here on cheathouse. Thank You.
    • 02/09/2003
    • 17:06:42
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • "The Age of Reform"

    This doesn't seem like a 10th grade level peice of work. I know that you didn't write this whole thing. In order to clarify, you should have cited this.
    • 02/09/2003
    • 16:41:51
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • America

    If you don't like America...then just move out. Let the God-trusting and loyal citizens live in America.
    • 01/09/2003
    • 07:37:09
    • Score: 8 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Comparison between poems...

    Overall...well done. However, there could be an improvement on the introduction. The flow of the essay is a little choppy but not completely.
    • 01/09/2003
    • 07:33:12
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • "Cystic Fibrosis and Gene Therapy"

    Another good essay. I took biology last year and learned about Cystic Fibrosis. Good organization with this essay. Great job of including all important imformation.
    • 01/09/2003
    • 07:28:47
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • "Italian Cuisine"

    Well-written essay. Organization could be improved a little. But overall a great job.
    • 01/09/2003
    • 07:24:47
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • "Romantic Love and True Love"

    Well written essay describing the difference between Romantic love and True Love. Flows well, and easy to read. Good Job.
    • 31/08/2003
    • 17:45:31
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "Flash Floods"

    Good essay. Perfect for a newspaper article. Well Done!
    • 31/08/2003
    • 17:39:07
    • Score: 4 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • "Intolerance"

    Well written essay on intolerance...flows well, and is easy to read.
    • 31/08/2003
    • 16:57:16
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • "Renaissance Education"

    Good Essay. Short and to the point, with plenty of detail. Good Job.
    • 29/08/2003
    • 19:50:44
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Biomechanics of a Tennis Racquet

    Very well done essay. I was actually interested, I'm not that much of a tennis player, but I do know the basics. I didn't know this much. Good Job.
    • 29/08/2003
    • 15:14:36
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • "Is money the root of all evil?"

    Good essay over all. However, you do need to correct some of your grammar.
    • 27/08/2003
    • 15:16:35
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Dissection of sheep heart.

    Does a thorough job of not only informing us about a sheep heart but of how the dissection was done. I dissected a frog, but my report wasn't this detailed. Good job overall, but you need to look at your grammar a little more closely, it could be improved.
    • 26/08/2003
    • 14:38:11
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Katherine Hepburn

    Too much repeating of 'she' especially in the beginning. Too simple to turn in to any High School teacher, especially for grade 13.
    • 23/08/2003
    • 18:57:13
    • Score: 6 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Capital Punishment

    What if the person murdered were you child, or a loved one, or a close friend? What would you do if you knew the murderer was still alive...and able to possibly go on parrol? These are questions to make you think about the other side of capital punishment. Of the 23 families affected because of it, don't you think the guilty put to death should be of more importance according to the number? The murdered people's family should be of more importance, because there are more of them. What if you had a little 5 year old daughter or son kidnapped and murdered? Would you want the kidnapper and murderer to live? They sure didn't obey human rights. THEY DIDN'T CARE! Why is it that you human rights people care for the murderer and not the murdered?
    • 23/08/2003
    • 15:39:15
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Good Essay

    I liked the fact that you left out any personal opinion. Good Job.
    • 23/08/2003
    • 15:28:33
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Disagree

    Did you every take into consideration the victims? Ever take into consideration somebody who was murdered just because they were there? I may not have questioned this essay so much if you had not composed this essay of opinion. But you did, so this is mine:Capital Punishment is a necessity...Serial killers or killers at all should not be able to live after what they've done, even if it is "beneficial" for humankind. That might mean people who are poor and don't have food might want to kill someone so they can go on trial and work, and be fed and taken care of for the rest of there life. If you ask me, no matter how beneficial it is for humankind, it isn't worth the life of another. And why the heck would you want them to join the army? I wouldn't want a bunch of evil murderers defending my country. I wouldn't trust them. Just as easily as they turned on the person they murdered, they'd turn on their country or the country they're defending. I'm sorry, well no i'm not, but your opinion is absolutely off base. If you're going to make an opinion at least state the ups and downs of it. Don't keep it in Black and White...make it full of color.
    • 23/08/2003
    • 15:18:15
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • I agree

    Capital Punishment is exactly the right thing to have. Forget about the human rights advocates,...they act as if the victim deserves no rights, and the murderer is just a poor misled miserable person. The fact is is that they diserve punishment for their acts!
    • 23/08/2003
    • 15:07:21
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Hitler and Germany

    Well-written essay. It sums up things really well for being so short. You did make one mistake, and if you\'re turning this in, I\'d make a change: You stated that Germany was in utter disorder - then in the next paragraph you said Germany was in absolute disarray...these are pretty much stating the same thing. Good job.
    • 23/08/2003
    • 07:39:58
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Theodore Roosevelt

    Too long for a paper composed of personal opinion and really no facts, even if it were your own paper.
    • 10/08/2003
    • 12:10:35
    • Score: 9 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Islam and Muslims

    Well...not completely true...based mostly on your own personal opinion. All the non-extremist muslims are the ones who "pick and choose" what fits them. The koran, the book of islam, is against Christianity and Jews...in which they are called the infadels. They believe the "infadels" must be eliminated. It's not that Christians don't understand or know, it's that the world makes it look that way. They make the Islamic religion look "angelic" and "peaceful" whereas Christians are a bunch of misinterpreters of the Islamic faith. I'm not saying that all Islamic and Muslim people are out to hurt other people, they're just misguided, and not at all informed of the truth. I believe you know what I'm talking about. The Koran was written to be against Christianity, it was said to be the "protector." Yet we are the main purpose in their lives in which Christians and Jews must be eliminated. I'm sorry, but if you read the Koran and the Bible - you'd find the two very much different, in purpose and in truth. The Koran contains much things concerning violence and hate...the Bible is of love.
    • 09/08/2003
    • 14:00:17
    • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Bill Gates

    Well-written, but does have some personal opinions. At least you didn't give Bill Gates ALL the credit.
    • 09/08/2003
    • 13:46:27
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • News Article

    It didn't sound completely like a newspaper article but I can tell that you did try, I know, it is hard, I had to do it. You might want to put in a quote or two, I think that's what it was missing. But good job overall.
    • 07/08/2003
    • 10:28:17
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Detail

    A good story with a good ending. Easy to read. I liked the detail and the picture you painted with words. Good work.
    • 06/08/2003
    • 22:30:04
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Clinton

    The only reason Clinton was elected is because people were mislead by the media. Very few news medias get the facts straight, an extremely low ammount. I do not believe Clinton was a great president as so many of you mislead people think, his views and morals were a definite wrong, his leadership skills were awful, and his decisions, weren't made to help the American people, just to disceive them and make himself more the "hero." He was an extremely selfish person. He thought of himself before the country. He didn't make decisions based on how they're going to help or make worse America, but how they were going to affect his political career, and his public outlook.
    • 06/08/2003
    • 20:39:07
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Ehh...Bill was a pill while on the Hill.

    This essay was good in the beginning, you seemed to be against Bill Clinton and was taking sides, then when you got to the end, you were all of a sudden for him. It just doesn't make sense, even after you laid out all the facts about what a really terrible person he really was (and still is) I was a teen at the time, but he wasn't gonna get my vote. His views were wrong. They are anti-american. The essay was, however, well-written.
    • 06/08/2003
    • 20:30:54
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • "The Quiet American" and "Bloods"

    Does a somewhat good job of explaining the books, but at a few points not all the sentences would link together. I think you started out saying something and you never finished, I believe that was just once though. Well-written essay. Good job overall.
    • 06/08/2003
    • 20:03:48
    • Score: 14 out of 14 people found this comment useful.
  • Good essay.

    First thing...in paragraph 5, sentence 1, you need to add some commas. Next, later on in your paper, I believe you're stating how many televisions there are to the amount of people in the area...I say you should add this...for example in Europe there are 442 "televisions" per 1,000 inhabitants against 50 per 1,000 in Africa.Overall, a well-argued point, however, there are some grammatical errors that need to be fixed.One more thing...I don't know if this is possible, but if there is a way to make it more 'interesting' than it already is, I'd do it. You need to also stay on subject a little more closely, at times I thought you wondering away from the subject a little, but not much.I hope this helps you out, because I don't know much about globalization, but I can help you on the grammatical technicalities.
    • 06/08/2003
    • 08:20:22
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Abortion

    I believe this essay has a really good point. My Mom told me when I was 14 or 15 that she had thought about getting an abortion because of her and my Dad's financial situation. But my Dad had talked her out of it. I'm sure glad she made the choice not to have one, and she knows now how wrong it is.I'm glad because here I am today writing this, I would not have known what life was or is like, I'm glad that I do. And I feel, that no matter what type of financial or physical situation the mother is in, abortion must be illegal. If you don't want the child or can't afford the child or can't handle it, then just put it up for adoption.This was a well-written essay, yes, there are personal opinions, but the author gave the reasons why he/she thought what they thought.
    • 05/08/2003
    • 21:41:40
    • Score: 31 out of 40 people found this comment useful.
  • Good Essay

    Good Essay with no opinions, easy to read, and well written.
    • 05/08/2003
    • 21:26:43
    • Score: 18 out of 19 people found this comment useful.
  • Abortion

    A well-written essay. Answers the question in the topic with hard facts. But, I do agree with maz2106 about the fact that you didn't state both sides' arguments to answer the question, you might have wanted to. That way you could have proven all the more that abortion isn't right.
    • 04/08/2003
    • 08:57:02
    • Score: 9 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • Bible

    You made some statements of the bible. But the fact is, you should have read more into it. Otherwise, you would not have written this essay. You used 2 verses, out of context, and from the old testament. You should have tried to find some of that from the new testament, you wouldn't have found anything but things banning premarital sex. And the slave part has nothing to do with it. Who in most cultures has a real slave? Servants yes, but legal slaves? Just a few.Who cares if he has already asked you to marry him, people break up, and now you have to explain to your real husband what you did. It leaves a life long affect that isn't always good.
    • 30/07/2003
    • 13:10:59
    • Score: 10 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • True or False?

    You are an atheist. Plain and simple. You wouldn't write this unless you were "trying" to "prove" something. If False...Try and prove how the earth came to be. Scientists say (I just took biology so you can't say I don't know this) thatchemicals and gases made contact somehow, exploded, and boom there was life. Well...what was around to create the chemicals or gases? What was around to create the explosion if there were no chemicals or gases? And how come humans aren't still evolving, or monkeys, or cows, or dogs? Sure you have different breeds, and races, but where are the huge differences? How come cows still need air to breath but sea cows don't? How come we came from something as small as bacteria? Frankly, I find that harder to believe than believing in God and having faith in him.Back to the explosion and gas and chemical stuff. If something was around to create the chemicals and gases, then what was around to create the stuff that created the chemicals and gases? Pretty tough question to address, don't you think? That's why scientists today just start and the "explosion," coming from a chemical and gas reaction. Why don't they go further? Why don't they tell us what created the chemicals or the gases?
    • 29/07/2003
    • 19:27:08
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Thanks

    Thanks, it did!
    • 29/07/2003
    • 15:46:18
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Pat Buchanan

    Does a great job of laying out the facts with hardly any personal opinions. (But a there are a couple) Well written essay, flows well, and is easy to read and follow. Good Work.
    • 24/07/2003
    • 12:36:49
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Research

    Overall...a good essay, however, it does contain a few errors. Might want to tell us how many miles or kilometers each city is from eachother, and not the driving time. Sometimes the roads are different and more slow-going than other roads.
    • 24/07/2003
    • 07:49:10
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • The Truth of Christianity

    I agree with HeatherlyAJ about the first couple of paragraphs being made of opinion. Also...you should have brought in the Christian view, it seems to me that you did research on everything else, but didn\'t actually look fully into the Christian belief.You asked a question in this essay that you didn\'t answer. You should have, that way we would have known if you knew or not.Also, all Christianity is doing is following the teachings of the bible. All the other religions today twist different aspects. They take it out of context, and that is why they are influenced by the world.It\'s not that Australian\'s are being told what and what not do, they do have a choice. And it isn\'t the church that is supposed to serve the Australians the Australians are the church. The Australians are to serve God. For that is what \"religion\" is all about.And the sexual abuse and percieved cover-ups didn\'t occur in the Christian church, but in the Catholic church. For if anyone in the Christian church did this, they wouldn\'t be a true Christian, they\'d be called a fake.You can probably tell by now that I am a Christian, one that doesn\'t believe in \"authority\" or \"power\" over other churches, but we use the authority in the bible to have faith in what we believe. That you have all wrong...like I said, you should have done some Christian research before writing this essay.Other than all this, the essay was well-done, well-written.
    • 23/07/2003
    • 06:49:15
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Death Row

    I believe there is truth in this. Even though the death row inmate has found God, or not, there is still a punishment for what he did. Once one person was let off the hook, everyone would be claiming to have found God. Well written essay with no mistakes.
    • 23/07/2003
    • 06:30:15
    • Score: 14 out of 17 people found this comment useful.
  • Alexander the Great

    This was a really good essay, it was interesting and the flow of it is great. I didn't get hanged up anywhere on a sentence that might have been worded badly. Great Job.
    • 23/07/2003
    • 06:24:07
    • Score: 9 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Wisdom

    You certainly used a little wisdom in this essay! Well written. But at the beginning I almost lost focus.
    • 22/07/2003
    • 15:53:24
    • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Describe

    This essay describes pretty well in the shortest way possible how Blacks were segregated from the whites. Except for a few mistakes this is a good essay, showing the problems we had so early in our country's history.
    • 22/07/2003
    • 15:43:06
    • Score: 15 out of 15 people found this comment useful.
  • Drunk

    This essay has a great point and a great lesson for all of us and for future generations. One problem though...there are too many gramatical errors. Might want to fix those.Overall it was a good paper.
    • 22/07/2003
    • 11:18:28
    • Score: 8 out of 14 people found this comment useful.
  • War

    Some sentences need to be shortened, a little less complex. Parts of this essay I did not understand, but, it was interesting.
    • 22/07/2003
    • 08:33:03
    • Score: 9 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Flow

    This essay does not flow very well, let alone make any sense. If you were to want this a better essay then you'd have to organize this a little more and add some more interesting points.
    • 22/07/2003
    • 08:17:59
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Everquest

    I didn't know much about this game, and this really would answer my questions if I were looking around to get it.
    • 22/07/2003
    • 07:49:14
    • Score: 19 out of 25 people found this comment useful.
  • Relation.

    For Everquest being a game, you made it clear that it has many relations to the world today. Described well and easy to read.
    • 21/07/2003
    • 14:56:00
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Well Covered.

    Did a good job of covering all the aspects of change, and how it affects people. However, due to the length of the essay, it needs to be made more exciting almost, to keep a reader's attention.
    • 21/07/2003
    • 13:29:46
    • Score: 18 out of 18 people found this comment useful.