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  • Porphyria and Vampires.

    I have given considerable thought to your comment, Garrett, and appreciate your bringing up the significance of Porphyria's name. It's possible that her name may be symbolic of that which is ghastly. Because of the physical manifestations of the disease called Porphyria, the connection to vampires of lore is sometimes made. However, there is some question as to whether the disease (which is associated with madness in addition to vampires) was even named Porphyria when Browning wrote his poem. Many would agree that there are few better symbols for the ghoulish than vampires, and Browning's poem clearly concerns that which is ghastly, such as necrophilia pursuant to murder of a lover.What is known is that the word "Porphyria" comes from the Greek "Porphura" which means purple. It is interesting that Browning gave Porphyria such an unusual name while her lover isn't directly named at all. Is the killer not given his own name because his characterization as Porphyria's lover is sufficient for careful readers to discern an important aspect of his nature? If so, the meaning behind the name "Porphyria" is essential in gaining a deeper understanding of the poet's message. In the Victorian England in which Browning lived, Porphyria was hardly a common name. Poets seldom choose words carelessly, which implies that Browning's choice of Porphyria's name is indeed significant.If Porphyria's name is accepted as symbolic of the ghoulish, the mystery is determining what exactly it means in relation to the poem. Porphyria's name might tell us much more about her lover than it does about her. Browning may have cleverly concealed an important message in his poem by directly giving Porphyria a ghoulish name which indirectly becomes her lover's. Besides social class, it is possible that another factor keeping the lovers apart is Porphyria's recognition in her lover of certain morbid fascinations that cause her unease. If her lover sensed that she had come to the cottage to break off their affair partly because of her unease, he might have felt a greater sense of urgency to act as he did. To the insane, such bizarre calculations probably make eminent sense.Thus, Browning may be advising caution about letting certain people get too close, namely, those who exhibit fascination with the ghoulish. The poet may also be cautioning against becoming overly absorbed with that which is ghoulish lest an obsession with it make you more susceptible to committing ghastly acts. If somebody makes you feel uneasy, perhaps you should trust your instincts and stay away. It might also be advisable to end such a relationship in a public place and make sure a friend is available to accompany you home. I wish Browning could be roused from the grave to clear up the mystery surrounding his choice of Porphyria's name (unless that's too ghoulish a thought to entertain).
    • 24/10/2005
    • 23:22:01
    • Score: 50 out of 52 people found this comment useful.
  • How ignoble!

    Your critique of a noteworthy experiment deserved the perfect score it received from your teacher. It takes an unusual researcher, to say the least, to insert cat mites in his own ear and document the results. What makes the experiment noteworthy is that it led to the award of an Ig Nobel prize in entomology to the veterinarian who conducted it, Robert Lopez. The Ig Nobel awards were instituted almost fifteen years ago at Harvard to recognize those whose contributions can be considered whimsical yet thought provoking. For those who would like to read the article which was the basis of your essay, they may be able to find it in the archives of a nearby university library (the cleverly titled article was published as "Of Mites and Man," in The Journal of the American Veterinary Medical Association, vol. 203, no. 5, Sept. 1, 1993, pp. 606-7).
    • 24/10/2005
    • 23:14:18
    • Score: 31 out of 33 people found this comment useful.
  • The Hewitt African American Art Collection.

    I share your love for music and art, which is why I found your commentary on Romare Bearden's painting "Jammin' At The Savoy" especially appealing. The artist has a wonderful talent for combining colors on a canvass in a way that is truly eye catching. Your observation about gender roles in art is poignant. It is ironic that some of the world's most beautiful paintings serve as enduring reminders of a most ugly inequity regarding the way women have historically been treated. For those who would like to see for themselves a representation of the painting you've written about, I've included below the URL of one of the many websites where a photo of the painting can be found (the website also has photos of several other paintings in the same motif by Romare Bearden):http://en.easyart.com/art-prints/prints/Romare-Bearden/Jammin-At-The-Savoy-181128.html
    • 24/10/2005
    • 23:11:22
    • Score: 16 out of 16 people found this comment useful.
  • Congenital Adrenal Hyperplasia.

    Thank you for an informative essay about a tragic condition that I was unaware existed. Based on your extensive discussion of this unfortunate birth defect, your grade of 98% seems well deserved. Your paper was enlightening and well researched. I appreciate your internal citations and extensive bibliography which will be helpful to those who wish to do further research in this area. Good job!
    • 24/10/2005
    • 23:08:02
    • Score: 13 out of 14 people found this comment useful.
  • My love for her

    I enjoyed reading the prologue to your new story. You have effectively captured some of the pain and awkwardness than can accompany the teenage years. Creative writing is one of the more difficult genres to master but you seem to have a talent for it. It is especially difficult to write believable dialogue, although your dialogue is generally realistic. It will be interesting to find out where you take your characters in future chapters. Keep writing!
    • 05/07/2005
    • 11:22:19
    • Score: 35 out of 39 people found this comment useful.
  • Summer Terror

    Your first chapter got off to a quick and effective start with a concise treatment of setting. Your use of dialogue was realistic. Chapter 1 ended with a note of mystery which led nicely into Chapter 2. The intriguing questions which end the second chapter impel the reader on to Chapter 3. The third chapter left the door open to more chapters with which you can add more layers of mystery or simply resolve what you've begun. You obviously have a talent for creative writing and I look forward to reading more of your work. Nice job!
    • 05/07/2005
    • 11:19:07
    • Score: 16 out of 16 people found this comment useful.
  • Tommy

    Your story begins with an intriguing introduction which effectively pulls the reader in. It makes the reader want to delve deeper into the story to learn if your protagonist really is mad. His behavior certainly seems at the very least eccentric. I've heard of writer's block, but spending an entire day fixating on a single word seems strange indeed. His electoral and messianic activities go beyond the merely strange. As you had suggested, I read your story all the way to the end and did find it humorous. Comedy writing is difficult because not everybody shares the same sense of humor, but you seem to have pulled it off. Keep smiling!
    • 05/07/2005
    • 11:15:40
    • Score: 19 out of 20 people found this comment useful.
  • Video games--good and bad

    You've written an interesting essay about video games and you may want to expand your report a bit. While I love to play video games, I tend to avoid them because they can be so addictive. It's so easy to start out thinking you'll only play one or two games, only to find hours later that one or two so easily became one or two dozen. Unfortunately, I have too much else to do to spend much time playing games. Time is more valuable even than money. I can spend money knowing that it can be replaced with future earnings. But once time is spent, it can never be recovered. There's nothing wrong with playing video games if done in moderation. I know how much fun they can be and there's nothing wrong with having fun. Your enthusiasm for playing video games is apparent and I'm glad that you've found something you enjoy so much. Have fun (but not so much your grades suffer). Good effort!
    • 05/07/2005
    • 11:11:43
    • Score: 25 out of 25 people found this comment useful.
  • Gold

    Yours is an enlightening paper on gold and its properties. I find it interesting that efforts are still underway to create gold from other substances. It would certainly be quite a coup if anyone succeeds in synthetically producing gold in large quantities at low cost. My only suggestion for your essay would be to include a bibliography so that others know where some of the details used in your report come from, such as the facts in your next to last paragraph. A bibliography also helps others who are interested do further research on the topic. Your essay was concise and informative. Well done!
    • 05/07/2005
    • 11:07:16
    • Score: 16 out of 18 people found this comment useful.
  • Zeus

    You've done a good job in writing your essay about the Greeks' chief Olympian. While most don't believe any of the tales about the Greek gods and goddesses, there is no denying that they make great story telling. The stories are valuable for extolling virtues such as courage, integrity, and ingenuity. It is interesting that the ancients invested their gods with human foibles. The Greeks of old must have taken solace in knowing that their gods had the same sort of character flaws which mortals possessed. For example, Zeus was notoriously moody and lecherous, hardly characteristics one would expect to find in a chief god.The Romans so admired Greek culture that they adopted their gods, while giving them different names. We admire both the Romans and the Greeks to such an extent that it is doubtful that their myths will ever be allowed to die. Thus, their mythical gods and goddesses will infact be immortal so long as humans love stories of wondrous deeds and adventures--and that will be a very long time indeed. Fine work!
    • 05/07/2005
    • 11:03:35
    • Score: 15 out of 18 people found this comment useful.
  • Your comment

    I appreciate your taking the time to write a comment, jessaes, and am pleased that your overall reaction to the essay was positive. You're right when you say that professors frown on run-on sentences. I also agree with you when you indicate that we all make mistakes occasionally. I'm only human and certainly make my share of errors.After seeing your comment, I read my essay again in an attempt to find any run-on sentences. I wasn't able to find any and was wondering if you would be so kind as to specifically identify those sentences which you believe are run-on sentences. I certainly don't claim to be an expert in grammar and would like to do better. Thank you.
    • 07/05/2005
    • 00:50:21
    • Score: 31 out of 34 people found this comment useful.
  • Thank you, Janissary

    I appreciate your comment, although in my responses to Danii and waitingtosmile24 I had hoped to put to rest the issue you raise about using the first person. In the uppermost comment to my essay about "My Last Duchess" I have excerpted a portion of an online essay-writing tutorial by a British professor who has no problem with students starting their essays with phrases such as "In this essay I will...." While it may be undeserved, British professors are known for being sticklers regarding the Queen's English and apparently some Australian teachers want that dubious reputation also. Fortunately, not all teachers are as arbitrary as yours regarding the use of the first person in essays and I sympathize with you.For you (and for your teachers if you care to show them), I have excerpted the paragraph below from the fourth page of a book called "Essay Writing: Step-By-Step." The book is subtitled "A Newsweek Education Program Guide for Teens" and was published a couple of years ago by Kaplan/Simon and Schuster. Kaplan has published a series of helpful books for students covering everything from studying more effectively to improving vocabulary. You may also find the following excerpt at: http://www.newsweekeducation.com/online_activities/essay1.php"Second, an effective essay contains vivid images, descriptions, and personal reflections. It may even include direct quotes to add to the veracity and flow. Depending on your purpose for writing, use of the word "I" is acceptable. Of course if the essay is a journalistic piece, where personal opinions are unwarranted, that doesn't apply, but if not, it is perfectly acceptable to speak in the first person. Writing with a first-hand perspective will add the personal touch readers are looking for. Just be careful not to use I in too many sentences."I wish some teachers wouldn't try to brainwash students into believing it is unacceptable to use the first person in essays, especially if the essays involve personal interpretations of poetry. It is wrong to fill students' heads with misinformation and no country has a monopoly on bad teachers. I question the value of an education which makes students intolerant of acceptable practices, even if some teachers believe that everything should be done their way only.
    • 19/03/2005
    • 12:17:03
    • Score: 35 out of 41 people found this comment useful.
  • First Crusade

    You've done a good job of explaining what caused the First Crusade and answering the question as to its success. Its success was short-lived and led to several failed Crusades which followed, including the famous Children's Crusade which was perhaps the most tragic of all. Nothing much was accomplished, except the loss of life and limb as control of Jerusalem (the city of peace) passed back and forth between the opposing sides.The terrible suffering and death on both sides far overshadowed any benefits gained. You mention the expansion of trade routes, but returning Crusaders also brought back to Europe medical advances which they learned from their opponents in the Middle East. Religious wars have plagued mankind throughout history and any possible gains seem dwarfed beside the huge and awful bloodshed borne of battle. Your report was interesting and informative. Good work!
    • 01/02/2005
    • 17:01:54
    • Score: 20 out of 22 people found this comment useful.
  • Cruel and Unusual?

    You are to be congratulated for taking a controversial stand on a topic over which reasonable people may disagree. It took courage for you to set forth your opinion knowing that some readers would disagree with your point of view. I'll leave the final resolution over what is cruel and unusual punishment to the constitutional scholars and to the courts, but it is worthwhile to reflect on methods to make the punishment more closely fit the crime. I tend to sympathize much more with victims than with criminals, especially when their victims are often so vulnerable and the crimes so heinous. Your report was concise and to the point. Keep writing!
    • 01/02/2005
    • 12:25:53
    • Score: 14 out of 15 people found this comment useful.
  • Disease or Addiction?

    You have written a very good essay on a malady which has destroyed many lives. After reading your report, I am more inclined to view alcoholism as an addiction rather than a disease, although that may not be politically correct (as if we should all be in absolute dread of ever appearing not politically correct). Whether alcoholism is a disease or an addiction, I think we can all agree that it is vitally necessary to seek out help as soon as possible. Your report was well researched and documented. The internal citations nicely complement the extensive bibliography which you have provided and will be of help to those who wish to do more research on alcoholism. Well done!
    • 01/02/2005
    • 12:13:42
    • Score: 11 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • Media Effect on Policing

    Yours is a well written essay on a topic of importance to each of us. I agree with you that the police are on the side of law abiding citizens and are here to protect us. I shudder to think what our communities might be like without police officers, the vast majority of whom are capable and dedicated professionals. Unfortunately, the media finds it more appealing to dwell on the minority of officers who stray from their duty to serve and protect. Nonetheless, we all owe the police a debt of gratitude for keeping our streets and neighborhoods safe. Your essay was concise and timely. Nicely done!
    • 01/02/2005
    • 11:58:30
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Coronary Heart Disease

    Thank you for a very educational essay on coronary heart disease. Many believe that heart disease is an ailment exclusively of the elderly, but as you point out it can afflict young people also. This has been borne out in autopsies of 18 and 19 year old soldiers, some of whom had already developed arteriosclerosis before dying in combat.People of all ages can benefit from heeding the timely information which you provide in your essay. I liked your use of headings which made your report easier to read. You may want to remove references to Fig 1 and Fig 2 or indicate where they may be found. Your paper was informative and interesting. Excellent work!
    • 23/01/2005
    • 12:41:30
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Literary Analysis

    This is a well written essay on what is arguably Shirley Jackson's most famous story. "The Lottery" is a compelling account of the power of myth and the grip it can have on our lives. As much as we claim to value life, we may value our pet notions and rituals even more. It's easy to criticize ancient people for their tribal superstitions, but some of our own beliefs may also be grounded in superstition, though we may not realize why we cling to them so stubbornly. Sharing a group mentality may make us feel comfortable, but it is no guarantee of the validity of our beliefs. Your report was interesting and convincing. Well done!
    • 13/01/2005
    • 16:35:46
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Yossarian

    Yours is a good essay about Joseph Heller's popular novel and its central character. Catch 22 is well exemplified by the policy that pilots could be exempted from flying missions if they were mentally unfit, but the very act of asking to be exempt from flying dangerous missions indicated that they were indeed mentally fit, which meant nobody could be exempted on those grounds.Although the policies may not have been as outrageous, most of us have probably experienced similar paradoxical situations, particularly when dealing with bureaucracies, and you have chosen some apt examples relating to the unsung heroism of resisting the stupidity of such mindless policies. I agree with you that Yossarian was a hero, although not in a typical sense. Your report was focused and thought provoking. Commendable!
    • 13/01/2005
    • 16:22:13
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • George Washington

    Thank you for a good biography of George Washington. As important as his military service was in the American Revolution, equally important was his leadership as America's first president. He didn't have an example to follow but set a fine example for all other presidents to emulate who came after him. He was certainly one of the country's best presidents, and many believe that no other president served the nation better. Your report was informative and fact-filled. With so many facts, dates and details, you might consider listing any sources you consulted in writing your paper. Nice work!
    • 13/01/2005
    • 16:00:20
    • Score: 12 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • Imagery in Macbeth

    You've written an interesting essay on Shakespeare's classic play of ambition. I liked the way you focused on blood as a symbol which is used in the play to reinforce key elements which Shakespeare wanted to convey. You have supported your points well with apt textual references from the play. Your report was analytical and concise. Fine effort!
    • 13/01/2005
    • 15:53:10
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Constitution

    You've written a good essay on the history of the formation of the United States Constitution. What I find most amazing about the Constitution is that it has only been amended twenty seven times and the first ten amendments or Bill of Rights were instituted contemporaneously with the document's ratification. Accordingly, there have only been seventeen amendments to the Constitution since 1791, although the country has changed enormously from what it was in the eighteenth century. This is a tribute to the foresight and wisdom of the founding fathers. Your paper was interesting and informative. Good work!
    • 12/01/2005
    • 21:17:23
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Martin Luther

    It was a pleasure to read your very well written biography of the man who was arguably the preeminent leader of the Protestant Reformation. Martin Luther ultimately found the peace of mind which he desperately sought in the pages of the Bible and in so doing has enabled countless others to find peace also. The Biblically based doctrine of salvation through grace by faith alone and not through works is central to the truth which Luther pointed out to a benighted world, most of whom couldn't even read the Latin Bible which was prohibited from being translated into their native tongue. Your essay brings to life the struggles and eventual triumph of Luther in a way which I found most compelling. Excellent work!
    • 09/01/2005
    • 21:20:29
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • The Four Davids

    You've written an informative essay on how Donatello, Verrocchio, Michelangelo, and Bernini each designed sculptures of David which were drastically different from one another. Most people are probably aware that Michelangelo created a famous sculpture of David, but may not know that three other artists did likewise, while bringing their own unique perspectives to the work. Your report was well researched with a bibliography which nicely complemented the paper's internal citations. Your documentation will be helpful to those who wish to do further research on this topic. Good job!
    • 09/01/2005
    • 17:16:57
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Music Critique

    This is an interesting critique of the Iwakuni concert performance of Charpentier's Monsieur de Mauroy. You have obviously learned a great deal from your music appreciation class and it shows in your paper. Many people find classical music boring because they haven't learned what to listen for. More than other forms of music, appreciation of classical music places special demands on the listener which requires the sort of training which your class has imparted to you. I hope that what you've learned will provide you with a lifetime of listening pleasure. Bravo!
    • 09/01/2005
    • 17:13:29
    • Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Bicycling

    This is a nicely written creative writing piece. The essay's subtitle, "Landslide of Fun," descriptively portrays the good time to be had while racing a bike downhill. Creative writing is one of the more difficult genres to master but the author has done well in conveying the love for bicycling which is shared by many. The author did such a good job describing the biking expedition that I could visualize myself along for the ride. I look forward to reading more of the author's creative writing pieces. Good going!
    • 06/01/2005
    • 20:29:10
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Critical Outline

    I enjoyed the first compare and contrast essay in Psychology which the author submitted and found this Sociology paper to be equally compelling. This report succeeds as a critical outline of Functionalism, Symbolic Interactionism, and Marxism. It's not difficult to see why the essay earned a perfect grade. I liked the author's use of the first person early in the essay which lent a personal touch to the paper. Good support has been provided for the conclusion that the three theories discussed were derived in response to the societal situation at the time they were formulated. My only suggestion is that a bibliography to complement the internal citations would have made a good essay even better. Fine job!
    • 05/01/2005
    • 10:30:41
    • Score: 12 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • Competing Schools of Thought in Psychology

    This is a classic compare and contrast essay which could serve as a model for others. The author has provided a great deal of useful information on the behaviorist and psychoanalytic areas of study. The author's points were made more vivid by focusing on Watson and Freud, representing the two major psychological approaches discussed. The paper was well researched with pertinent internal citations and an extensive bibliography which will be helpful to those wishing to do further research on this topic. Great work!
    • 05/01/2005
    • 09:13:59
    • Score: 15 out of 15 people found this comment useful.
  • The Meaning of Christmas

    In the above essay, the author does a good job of providing much interesting information about the origin of some Christmas traditions. Although nobody has previously commented on this essay in the over eight years it has been on the site, we should reflect anew at this time of year on the meaning of Christmas. While there are various versions, Dr James Allan Francis has been credited with writing the following about Jesus approximately seventy-five years ago and expressed far better than I ever could why Christmas is celebrated."He was born in an obscure village, the child of a peasant woman. He grew up in still another village where He worked in a carpenter's shop until He was thirty. Then for three years He traveled and preached. He never wrote a book. He never held an office. He never had a family or owned a house. He did not go to college. He never visited a big city. He never traveled more than two hundred miles from the place where He was born.He did none of the things man usually associates with greatness. He had no credentials but Himself. He was only thirty-three when the tide of public opinion turned against Him. His friends ran away. He was turned over to His enemies and went through the mockery of a trial. He was nailed to a stake between two thieves. While He was dying, His executioners gambled for His clothing, the only property He had on earth.When He was dead, He was laid in a borrowed grave through the pity of a friend. Twenty centuries have come and gone and today He remains the central figure of the human race and the leader of mankind's progress.All the armies that ever marched, all the fleets that ever sailed, all the parliaments that ever sat, all the kings that ever reigned, put together, have not affected the life of men on this planet so much as that One Solitary Life."
    • 24/12/2004
    • 07:31:49
    • Score: 9 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Impact of Substance Abuse

    It was courageous of you to share your family's experience with drug and alcohol abuse. Personal accounts such as you've provided are powerful testimony to the detrimental impact of substance abuse. I'm glad your mother was able to recover and start a new life free of dangerous addictions. Hopefully, the recovery will be permanent but your mother may need the continuing support of the entire family to stay drug free and sober.The only difference I can detect between this and your other essay of the same title is that it includes the following final sentence: "If you would like to use me as a personal source in your paper cite me as: Meagan Vogel of Memphis, TN." Of course, anybody who cites the above paper would have to use CheatHouse as the source because once the essay is accepted, it becomes the site's property. Nonetheless, the information you provide is important and it is kind of you to allow others to refer to the paper's author by name. Since both of your essays contain substantially the same information, it may be that one of them will not be accepted as a duplicate.
    • 18/11/2004
    • 16:21:44
    • Score: 13 out of 15 people found this comment useful.
  • Personal Account

    It was courageous of you to share your family's experience with drug and alcohol abuse. Personal accounts such as you've provided are powerful testimony to the detrimental impact of substance abuse. I'm glad your mother was able to recover and start a new life free of dangerous addictions. Hopefully, the recovery will be permanent but your mother may need the continuing support of the entire family to stay drug free and sober.The only difference I can detect between this and your other essay of the same title is that it does not include the following final sentence: "If you would like to use me as a personal source in your paper cite me as: Meagan Vogel of Memphis, TN." Of course, anybody who cites the above paper would have to use CheatHouse as the source because once the essay is accepted, it becomes the site's property. Nonetheless, the information you provide is important and it is kind of you to allow others to refer to the paper's author by name.
    • 18/11/2004
    • 16:17:36
    • Score: 11 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Critical Thinking

    Thank you for an interesting essay on the role of organizing in critical thinking. Some people might find your paper somewhat short and you may want to expand on it a bit. Since you set out to explain the important role organizing plays in the critical thinking process, you may want to further support your conclusion that organizing ideas may be the single most important concept behind critical thinking. Your report was concise and informative. Nice effort!
    • 15/11/2004
    • 09:00:27
    • Score: 12 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • Intro to Computers?

    Please try to find something better to do with your time.
    • 05/11/2004
    • 15:52:27
    • Score: 15 out of 15 people found this comment useful.
  • Agar Cubes

    You've obviously put some time and effort into your experiment involving surface area size and magnitude of absorption. Unfortunately, the HTML tags make part of your report hard to read. Furthermore, you allude to problems involving human error in your lab which suggest that the experiment should possibly be redone in order to substantiate your results. Nice effort though!
    • 01/11/2004
    • 14:53:45
    • Score: 8 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Rebel Without a Cause

    It was interesting to read your essay about the groundbreaking film of the 1950's which made James Dean a teen idol. Your report functions as a good summary of the movie as well as the backdrop for a discussion of what young people are looking for. I agree with you that young people, like people of all ages, are looking for sincerity, acceptance, and friendship. I would also concur that the rebelliousness which seems characteristic of the teen experience may be a function of normal brain development. Your paper was informative and relevant. Good effort!
    • 29/10/2004
    • 12:47:43
    • Score: 12 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • Health Care

    You provide some interesting information concerning health care in the United States, particularly in regard to the manner in which the managed care system is perceived. Your use of headings made your report easier to read. The sources which you provided at the end of your paper should be helpful to those who desire to do further research in this area. Your essay was timely and concise. Keep writing!
    • 28/10/2004
    • 05:18:21
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Piagetian Tasks

    It was interesting to read how you tested your son and daughter on number conservation as well as conservation of liquid. As bright as your son is, your daughter seems to be quite intelligent also and you should be proud of both of them. You end your report by giving an internal citation which indicates that it would probably have been a good idea to include a bibliography as well. Your essay was concise and to the point. Nice effort!
    • 27/10/2004
    • 22:17:20
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Best Joke of the Decade

    You make some good points about how the minimum wage has deteriorated in real terms due to inflation over the past several years. Many would agree with you that an increase in the minimum wage is long overdue. It does seem unfair that someone who works full time while drawing the minimum wage would fall below the poverty line while trying to raise a family. I'm not persuaded by arguments that hiking the minimum wage would lead to a lot more unemployment or that the minimum wage was never intended to be a living wage. However, your report might have seemed more balanced had you mentioned some of the arguments against increasing the minimum wage. Nonetheless, your essay was concise and timely. Fine effort!
    • 27/10/2004
    • 17:13:01
    • Score: 23 out of 26 people found this comment useful.
  • Reminiscence sessions

    Yours is a good essay in which you clearly set out the advantages and potential difficulties of running some reminiscence sessions involving the elderly at a day center. I liked your use of the first person which lent a personal touch to your essay. Your internal citations were nicely augmented by an extensive bibliography which will be helpful to those who wish to look further into this area. Your paper was well researched and documented. Good work!
    • 27/10/2004
    • 16:31:06
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Light in August

    Thanks for a nicely written analysis of the first forty-one lines in Chapter Three of Light in August. William Faulkner, along with John Steinbeck and Ernest Hemingway, is one of my three favorite American authors from the twentieth century. Faulkner has been criticized as being wordy, but I don't think the criticism is warranted. The passage you've chosen to analyze is a good example of how Faulkner uses words effectively to richly describe one of the more pitiful characters in literature and I agree with your interpretation of the novelist's symbols. Your report was in depth and meaningful. Nice job!
    • 27/10/2004
    • 16:07:00
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • A diminished reflection

    You have written a good creative writing piece on a sad but important subject. As the population ages, largely due to advances in medical science, more and more people are facing the agony of senility. At the present, diseases such as Alzheimer's can be managed for a time, but there still is no cure. This thief of time and memory takes a huge toll on the afflicted as well as on loved ones. Your story does a good job of personalizing a dehumanizing condition which any one of us might face if we live long enough. Well done!
    • 25/10/2004
    • 14:16:45
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Toussaint L'ouverture

    You provide some good information in your biography of Toussaint L'ouverture. It was interesting to read how a former slave rose to lead a revolt against his oppressors. Although he was later betrayed and died miserably, his death was not in vain as he served as an inspiration to those in Haiti who came after him. Your report was informative and concise. Fine effort!
    • 25/10/2004
    • 12:28:47
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Power and manipulation

    I agree with you that power and manipulation are evident as themes in George Orwell's Animal Farm and William Golding's Lord of the Flies. You have supported your position well with pertinent examples drawn from the novels, supported by apt textual passages. Fear can indeed bring out the worst in people. Your essay was analytical and thoughtful. Good job!
    • 25/10/2004
    • 07:23:39
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • "What I meant to say"

    I enjoyed reading your personal account about the experience which you had the summer before your senior year in high school. Congratulations on getting accepted into such a prestigious program as South Carolina Governor's School for the Arts and Humanities. You have a talent for writing and are lucky to have discovered it soon in life. I'm sure you'll enjoy college a lot more than high school and wish you the best of luck. Perhaps someday you will "get to experience the standing ovations and red roses" that elude most writers. Keep up the good work!
    • 22/10/2004
    • 04:36:52
    • Score: 17 out of 17 people found this comment useful.
  • CSR

    Thank you for a report on corporate social responsibility which was as comprehensive as just about anyone could hope for. Some might dispute your statement that: "Traditionally the main purpose of business has been to achieve profitability by providing consumers with goods and services." Often the objective of business is said to be to maximize shareholder wealth, which is a more difficult goal than achieving profitability although the two are related. Importantly, maximizing shareholder wealth is not necessarily inconsistent with the proper exercise of social responsibility. At any rate, your use of headings made your paper easier to read. Your use of internal citations was nicely complemented with an extensive bibliography. Your report was well researched and documented. Great job!
    • 21/10/2004
    • 20:55:52
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Critical Analysis

    Yours is a good essay on William Golding's widely read novel. You seem to have hit nicely on the major theme in Lord of the Flies. In his novel, Golding seems to be saying that man's nature is essentially dark and that the civilized front most people put on is merely a facade. He seems to feel that without laws and the ability to enforce them, society would deteriorate into anarchy. It's a disturbing thought but he may have been right. Your report was well expressed and thought out Well done!
    • 18/10/2004
    • 13:06:56
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Letter from Birmingham Jail

    It was a pleasure to read your good essay on the famous letter which Martin Luther King, Jr. wrote from his cell in the Birmingham Jail. Most people are aware that Martin Luther King was one of the foremost champions of civil rights in the 1960's but he is not as well known for being a skilled essayist. His first person account in the form of a letter while incarcerated is one of the finest examples of a persuasive essay (despite some minor typographical errors) and writers can learn much from studying it. Your essay was well expressed and thought out. Keep up the good work!
    • 16/10/2004
    • 15:51:54
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Marginalized groups

    I'm glad that you conducted the interview described in your essay. You have effectively explained how your interviewee has fought issues such as age, gender, and religion to become the person she is today. It was inspirational to read how she found something strong and determined inside herself which enabled her to face life head on and finally succeed. Your report was well researched and documented, with helpful internal citations and a list of references which will be useful to those who want to look further into some of the issues you have written about. Recommended reading!
    • 14/10/2004
    • 14:59:51
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Global warming

    You've written a good essay on a troublesome environmental danger which threatens to alter the climate on the planet adversely. You have done a good job in describing the harmful effects which are predicted to occur with increased temperatures and the disastrous consequences of global warming that should be taken seriously by all. In your concluding paragraph, you point out that there are many ways to help prevent both global warming and the greenhouse effect, but your report could have been made even better had there been a more detailed discussion of the needed preventative measures. Your use of internal citations indicates that a bibliography should have been provided also. Your essay was timely and important. Commendable!
    • 13/10/2004
    • 20:41:35
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Power and Management

    This is a good essay on how managers should use their power effectively to create a better working environment. With their power to influence others comes the responsibility to treat others fairly, especially their subordinates. Often managers will find that their influence actually increases if they are willing to involve those whom they supervise in the decisions that affect them. The headings made your report easier to read. You made effective use of internal citations and quotes to support your points. The bibliography will be helpful to those who wish to do further research. Good work!
    • 12/10/2004
    • 16:16:00
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Unemployment

    You have done a good job of discussing unemployment from both a functionalist and conflict theory perspective. I liked how you explained how family, education, government and health are affected by unemployment. For those not directly affected, unemployment can become just another in a seemingly endless stream of statistics, but it's important to understand that it can result in tragic consequences for those unable to quickly rejoin the work force. Your internal citations were nicely complemented by a list of references which should prove useful to those who wish to further study this topic. Your report was well structured and organized. Nicely done!
    • 12/10/2004
    • 16:13:52
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Social Conventions

    Yours is a good essay in which you effectively explore the importance of following established rules of conduct in Homer's classic story of Odysseus' fate following the Trojan War. In discussing the social conventions in Homer, you did well to focus on the interaction of men and women. I liked how you used aptly chosen passages from Homer's text to support your points. Social conventions were so important to the ancients that even the mythical gods and goddesses were not spared the necessity of conforming to custom. Your report was well expressed and thought out. Bravo!
    • 12/10/2004
    • 06:43:00
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Excellent

    Thank you for a really good discussion of various investments and how they may be appropriate to different groups of investors. Investing wisely is absolutely important especially in achieving a secure retirement. What you've written provides vital information even for people who are intimidated by financial planning. Your use of headings and captions made your report easier to read. Your paper was well organized and skillfully presented. Excellent job!
    • 11/10/2004
    • 18:22:54
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Siddhartha

    You have written a good essay on Herman Hesse's widely read book. You are correct when you observe that many consider Siddhartha to be his best book, better even than his popular Steppenwolf. The biographical information which you provide about the author was pertinent because of the many experiences which Hesse incorporated into his text. While I don't agree with much of Hesse's philosophy, there is no denying the appeal of his writing. Your report was analytical and insightful. Good going!
    • 11/10/2004
    • 17:47:25
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Chemistry Experiment

    You've conducted what appears to be an effective experiment into the heat released during a displacement reaction. I liked the manner in which you documented your experiment and found your report to be well organized and skillfully presented. Your use of headings made your paper easier to read. I particularly liked the analysis and evaluation sections. Since your graph was not presented along with your results, you might consider deleting reference to it. Fine work!
    • 11/10/2004
    • 13:46:44
    • Score: 10 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Informative

    This is an interesting essay on a problem which most of us should be glad we've never had to deal with. You are correct when you point out that it's just a basic paper, but I believe it did provide some important information. Still, some readers may find it a bit short and you might be able to expand on what you've written by providing additional information about prevention of the infection. Your report was concise and enlightening. Fine effort!
    • 10/10/2004
    • 10:39:16
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Illegal Drugs

    I agree with you when you state that taking illegal drugs can ruin people's lives. You are also correct in observing that the effects go beyond just the drug user and often adversely affect family members and others. This issue is so important that some people may believe that it is nearly impossible to do the subject justice in only 317 words. The first and last few sentences of this essay are the same as in your other essay of the same title. I note that you have added approximately ninety words to your other essay to produce this one, but you may want to further expand what you've written by doing additional research. The Department of Justice and emergency room statistics which you cited are informative but indicate that you should have included a bibliography also. Keep writing!
    • 10/10/2004
    • 08:53:07
    • Score: 14 out of 15 people found this comment useful.
  • Doing Drugs

    I agree with you when you state that taking illegal drugs can ruin people's lives. You are also correct in observing that the effects go beyond just the drug user and often adversely affect family members and others. This issue is so important that some people may believe that it is nearly impossible to do the subject justice in only 226 words. You may want to expand what you've written by doing additional research. The Department of Justice and emergency room statistics which you cited are informative but indicate that you should have included a bibliography also. Keep writing!
    • 10/10/2004
    • 08:50:53
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Memories

    I enjoyed reading your poem. You may be overly modest when you say that you're not really good in expressing words, especially in poetry. I found that your poem expressed well some feelings which plague us all from time to time. One of the hardest things to do in moving on is to deal with memories which just do not want to fade. There are plenty of self-help books which teach various techniques for forgetting, but I've concluded that memories, even painful ones, can be important. We can learn from even the most painful of experiences and memories serve to keep those lessons alive, despite the heartache. Because good poetry is the ultimate in economy of language, I prefer one word titles and would simply name your poem "Memories."
    • 10/10/2004
    • 06:03:03
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • English Grammar

    Many people could probably benefit from reading your informative essay on the use of the subjunctive and the conditionals. Misuse of the subjunctive and the conditionals is quite common in everyday speech and also not infrequently shows up in so called standard written academic English. Your report should serve as a useful guide to those who want to properly use the troublesome subjunctive and conditionals. Your paper was educational and helpful. Well done!
    • 08/10/2004
    • 16:51:18
    • Score: 11 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Fighter

    I enjoyed reading your creative writing piece. Creative writing is one of the more difficult genres to master but you seem to have a good handle on it. I especially liked the dialogue which seemed natural and not forced. Writing believable conversation is one of the harder parts in creating good fiction. What you submitted was highly readable and engaging. Way to go!
    • 08/10/2004
    • 16:39:17
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Choices

    Yours is an interesting essay on the bard's popular play of ambition, choices and consequences. Not only could Shakespearean characters not often escape the consequences of their choices, but also most of us cannot either. Macbeth is thus yet another of Shakespeare's tales which rings true to life. I liked how you concentrated on Macbeth, Macduff, and Lady Macbeth because it lent focus to your paper. You nicely supported your points with aptly chosen examples from the text. Your report was perceptive and concise. Fine work!
    • 08/10/2004
    • 16:18:05
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • The Yellow Wallpaper

    It was a pleasure to read your good essay on Charlotte Gilman's powerful story. Since one interpretation of The Yellow Wallpaper is that it is semi-autobiographical, the background information about the author which you gave was appropriate. You did well to illustrate how the metaphors, images and plot of this story underlay its meanings. Your report was well researched and skillfully presented. The bibliography will be helpful to those who wish to do further reading about the story and its author. Thumbs up!
    • 08/10/2004
    • 16:04:53
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Vietnam

    You have done a fine job of describing the anti Vietnam War movement (I don't think you meant to title your report "Anti-Vietnam Movement" as people were opposed to the war, not the country). I typically don't comment on grammar or spelling and am glad that your professor was willing to overlook sentence fragments and run-on sentences as well. I wish more professors could focus on an essay's content. I would only point out that some of your paragraphs were somewhat long and could probably have been broken up. You effectively used internal citations which were complemented nicely by an extensive bibliography. Your report was well researched and documented. Commendable!
    • 07/10/2004
    • 11:06:18
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Loveliest of Trees

    The beautiful poem you write about is one of the first I memorized as a very small child. Housman is saying something more than merely that life is short and that we should make the most of it. He is specifically addressing the beauty of Nature which might easily be overlooked as we pursue our busy lives seeking material things. However, the cherry tree is symbolic of more than simply the beauty of Nature which should be enjoyed while we can.Christians may discern a deeper meaning in Housman's poem. Housman found it difficult to reconcile his homosexuality with "traditional" Christianity and struggled mightily to find inner peace. Easter is the most important Christian holiday, more important even than Christmas, and it may be no coincidence that Housman refers to the cherry tree in connection with Eastertide. The cherry tree takes on almost a spiritual significance and contemplating the beauty of Nature can lead to a sort of spiritual enlightenment as we ponder the origin of such wondrous beauty. As you point out, white is indeed symbolic of purity, just as red symbolizes blood. As we mortals age, we pass from life to death. Easter commemorates the one that was innocent as snow who passed from death to life and through His blood sacrifice on a "tree" made it possible for us who accept Him to live forever.We aren't given forever to make the choice. Christians believe that if we are to pass from death to life everlasting we must accept Jesus as our personal savior. And we must make that choice while we still live, for once we die it is too late to choose. Many never make that choice while they can, and could there be any greater lost opportunity than that? Housman took to his grave the secret of whether he accepted through faith the free gift of salvation and I can only hope that he chose wisely.
    • 06/10/2004
    • 12:54:13
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Document comparisons

    You've submitted an interesting essay on comparing different documents in order to see if they have any common characteristics. Since the documents you chose were dissimilar, it is not surprising that you concluded that they generally differed in such attributes as font size, layout, color, position and orientation of the page. It also seems intuitive that the target audience of the document has a great deal to do with its characteristics. Nonetheless, your report was well expressed and presented. Fine effort!
    • 05/10/2004
    • 17:40:59
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Public Morality

    This is an interesting essay on the efforts by Christians to affect public policy so that a more equitable society is achieved. If other Christians were to more actively exert an uplifting influence on public policy, then we could anticipate that society would change for the better. In fact, positive results may be expected if upstanding people of many faiths were to take a more active role in their communities. Your use of headings made your report easier to read. The quotes you cited were effective in supporting your points but indicate that a bibliography should have also been provided. Your paper was well organized and concise. Nice effort!
    • 05/10/2004
    • 09:28:18
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Japan

    You've written a good essay on ancient Japan which contains much detailed information about the country's history. Japan has a long and rich history which is a source of great interest to many. It would have been helpful if you could have provided a bibliography in support of the facts and details you provided in your report. Such references would be useful to those wishing to do further research in this area. Your paper was in-depth and well written. Good job!
    • 04/10/2004
    • 16:53:45
    • Score: 10 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Attica

    Thanks for a good essay on the Attica prison riot and its impact on reform. Although it happened over thirty years ago, the widely publicized four day riot at Attica seems to have been seared into the public memory. Despite the tragic deaths that occurred because of the rioting, the reforms which the uprising spawned have been a positive development. Your report was well documented and researched. The references which you have cited will be helpful to those who wish to do further research in this area. Fine job!
    • 30/09/2004
    • 06:26:42
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • The Ersatz Elevator

    You have formatted your book report on the sixth installment in Lemony Snicket's adventure series in an interesting manner. It seems that the three Baudelaire orphans may never escape the clutches of the evil Count Olaf. The series has an appeal to many readers which almost rivals that of the Harry Potter books. Your report captures some of the delightful predicaments with which the unfortunate orphans must contend in an attempt to keep their family fortune. I found what you've written to be highly readable and engaging. Good effort!
    • 29/09/2004
    • 19:46:16
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Age of Innocence

    You give some interesting information with regard to Edith Wharton's novel of social mores among New York's upper class during the gilded age. During an age of marked excess, many were envious of the wealthy but failed to realize that the lives of the rich and famous might be every bit as circumscribed by strictly enforced standards of behavior as their own lives were limited by a lack of money. It was easier for individuals such as Archer to go along with societal norms than pursue what he really wanted. His wife, May, is one of literature's more underestimated heroine's who kept her husband through tact. The scene toward the end of the novel in which Archer walks away rather than meet the Countess is one of the more heartrending depictions of lost opportunities in fiction. Your report was perceptive and engrossing. Fine effort!
    • 29/09/2004
    • 10:44:27
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Shakespeare's plays

    Indeed, many of Shakespeare's plays do revolve around killing the king, and you have written a good essay in response to the central question of regicide. Shakespeare was interested in writing plays that would be commercial successes. As a consequence, he knew he had to tailor them to the interests of his Elizabethan audience which was quite taken by royalty and murder, although most would never dream of committing murder themselves. Of course, Shakespeare's plays did much more than spark vicarious thrills in his audience. They are masterpieces which illuminate topics of enduring interest such as human nature, power, and ambition. While the bard's language has become somewhat archaic for a modern audience, his themes have not. Your report was well expressed and thought out. Quality job!
    • 29/09/2004
    • 10:24:31
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Macbeth

    Yours was a good essay on Shakespeare's enduring play of ambition and greed. The question with which you ended your report was an interesting one. While the question cannot be answered definitively as to whether Macbeth would have resorted to murder had Lady Macbeth not urged him on, I believe he would not have. This is not to say that Macbeth had anyone but himself to blame for what he did, but Lady Macbeth relentlessly employed powerful tactics to prod her somewhat more irresolute husband along. Her most effective ploy appeared to have been questioning whether he really was a man because of his reluctance to seize the throne. Your essay was informative and engaging. Good work!
    • 29/09/2004
    • 10:03:20
    • Score: 9 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Corrie ten Boom

    You provide some good information in your book report on The Hiding Place. The courage of the ten Boom family in being very active in the Dutch underground and hiding refugees during World War II is to be admired. It must have been terrible for Corrie ten Boom to have been arrested along with her family and sent to Germany's notorious Ravensbruck concentration camp. Sadly, her sister Betsie didn't survive imprisonment but luckily Corrie did. She put her freedom to good use by preaching throughout the world and writing several books, including the one which you describe in your report. Her life was indeed an inspiration to us all. Although some may find it a bit short, your essay was concise and informative. Nice effort!
    • 29/09/2004
    • 09:46:04
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Duplicate Submission

    I'm appreciative of your good essay on Gandhi's philosophy of non-violence and how it spread in the United States under the influence of such men as Martin Luther King, Jr. Mohandas Gandhi and Martin Luther King were two of the more prominent spokesmen in the twentieth century for change. Although some advocated violent means for bringing about reforms, time has proven these two men to have been correct in their approach to improving the lot of their people. Your report was extensive and well structured. The use of headings made your paper easier to read. The works cited should be useful to those who wish to do further research in this area and would have been more helpful if additional bibliographical information could have been provided. Impressive! Of course, you only need to submit your paper once.
    • 28/09/2004
    • 07:49:16
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Duplicate Submission

    Thank you for a good essay on the main character in Francis Ford Coppola's epic movie. The Godfather is one of the greatest films ever made and one of my all time favorites. In a career filled with stellar roles, Marlon Brando's portrayal of the Mafia don was perhaps his most memorable.The background information you provide on Vito Corleone was interesting and helped put your report in context. I had not before felt that Vito Corleone could serve as a model for business executives to emulate because of his questionable scruples. However, if you focus only on his speaking skills, there is much of value to be learned as you point out.I liked your use of the first person which lent a personal touch to your essay. Your report was probing and incisive. Bravo! Of course, you only need to submit your paper once.
    • 25/09/2004
    • 19:04:49
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • DSS Company Addendum

    I find it interesting that the above paragraph was accepted for 350 points, especially after I had pointed out that it was only the first paragraph of a report which you were subsequently able to successfully submit in full (for which you also received credit). At this point, I can only reiterate the statement I made yesterday my again remarking "I'm not sure what happened" but congratulations on receiving an extra 350 points.
    • 24/09/2004
    • 09:09:28
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Duplicate Submission

    The information which you have given on the Pauline Brothers and how they have contributed to Australian society is enlightening. You begin your essay by saying "This is the symbol used by the Pauline Fathers to identify themselves" but the symbol doesn't show up in the report. It might be better to merely mention that the symbol consists of a cross bearing the letters MSSP on which is superimposed the globe. You mention that certain information is taken from the MSSP home page, such as the mission statement, but it would probably be a good idea to place that information in quotes and provide the web address which is http://www.mssp.it/missionstatement_en.html. The information you provided was interesting as well as informative and I encourage you to fully cite your sources. Of course, you only need to submit the paper once.
    • 24/09/2004
    • 02:09:00
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Pauline Brothers

    The information which you have given on the Pauline Brothers and how they have contributed to Australian society is enlightening. You begin your essay by saying "This is the symbol used by the Pauline Fathers to identify themselves" but the symbol doesn't show up in your report. It might be better to merely mention that the symbol consists of a cross bearing the letters MSSP on which is superimposed the globe. You mention that certain information is taken from the MSSP home page, such as the mission statement, but it would probably be a good idea to place that information in quotes and provide the web address which is http://www.mssp.it/missionstatement_en.html. The information you provided was interesting as well as informative and I encourage you to fully cite your sources.
    • 24/09/2004
    • 02:06:01
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • DSS Company

    I'm not sure what happened but it seems that only the first paragraph of your essay appears above. I'm glad to know that you were able to resubmit your report in full. Since your full report has been successfully submitted now, the above paragraph is not needed and will probably be deleted by the site admin when they clear pending essays.
    • 23/09/2004
    • 19:25:45
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Television

    You've obviously put some time and effort into your essay on television's impact on youth. Without a doubt, this is an important topic. If violence on television affects some young people as much as it seems, then it is only natural for concerned individuals to want to control it. Research suggests there is a link between violence in the media and the propensity of some individuals to behave more violently. You may want to expand your report by documenting your research and incorporating the results of your findings in your paper. Your essay was timely and impassioned. Nice effort!
    • 23/09/2004
    • 09:37:40
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Count Of Monte Cristo

    You provide some good information in explaining how Edmond Dantes might be considered as evil or immoral based solely on his actions. In his famous book, Alexander Dumas does create an intriguing account of how a good man can be changed for the worse through the actions of others and by what he does as a consequence. The desire by Dantes for revenge is understandable but in the end he does not achieve anything of value. His newly found riches which could have done so much good are wasted on a petty desire to get even, when none of us really gets even by allowing ourselves to become consumed with revenge. Revenge takes its toll on our enemies and on us, which is why it's better left alone. I wonder if Dumas wanted his readers to conclude that a character can ever be truly good while seeking revenge. Your report was lucid and thought provoking. Recommended reading!
    • 23/09/2004
    • 09:21:08
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Alexander

    You make some interesting points in your biography of the legendary conqueror from ancient Macedon. Many historians doubt that any man could have conquered the entire world, no matter how long Alexander the Great had lived. Of course, we'll never know for sure and it can be entertaining to speculate what Alexander might have achieved had he not died at a relatively young age. Legend has it that Alexander thought he had conquered all and sighed that there were no more worlds left to conquer. His greatest contribution might have been spreading the Greek culture which he revered so much. Your essay was informative and knowledgeable. Nicely done!
    • 23/09/2004
    • 09:06:22
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Hamlet

    You have succeeded in showing how gaining revenge was an empty achievement for Hamlet in Shakespeare's popular play. The play mirrors the reality which consumes many people who become so obsessed with seeking revenge that little else matters. Obtaining revenge can set in motion a whole series of unintended consequences which are often far worse than the original act being avenged. Revenge is truly folly, for even when it is obtained nothing of value has been achieved. People who allow themselves to become consumed with revenge miss the joy of life and few could make the point more forcefully than Shakespeare. Your report was convincing and thought provoking. Thumbs up!
    • 23/09/2004
    • 08:50:21
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • JFK

    I enjoyed reading your biography of America's thirty-fifth president. John F. Kennedy was a president of outstanding promise and it is tragic that his life ended through assassination. Although Kennedy's assassination was a grave misfortune, something good did come out of it.His successor, Lyndon Johnson, felt that he was obligated to get as many of the slain president's proposals through Congress as he could. Having served as Senate Majority Leader, Johnson was an expert at Capitol Hill politics while Kennedy was not. Kennedy had been unsuccessful in ushering civil rights legislation through Congress, but Johnson effectively used his political skills and sympathy over Kennedy's death to get key civil rights legislation passed. Today, the nation is a better place because of the civil rights legislation of the 1960's.Your report, which was enlightening and interesting, could have been made even better with the inclusion of a bibliography. Way to go!
    • 23/09/2004
    • 08:39:45
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Industrial Statesmen?

    It was a pleasure to read your informative essay in which you address the question as to whether three pioneering American businessmen may be best described as robber barons or industrial statesmen. Men like Cornelius Vanderbilt, Andrew Carnegie, and John D. Rockefeller were certainly tenacious competitors in the business world and made their share of enemies. But you are correct in observing that they also made notable contributions to our economy. Some might disagree with your conclusions. A number of people believe that whether Vanderbilt, Carnegie, and Rockefeller were industrial innovators or robber barons cannot be definitively answered. Perhaps they were a little of both. At any rate, your report was concise and highly readable. A bibliography would have nicely supported your use of facts and details in providing brief biographies of Vanderbilt, Carnegie, and Rockefeller. Good effort!
    • 23/09/2004
    • 08:22:38
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Suicide Prevention

    More people need to be made aware of the tragic problem of suicide and your essay does a good job of accomplishing that objective for those who read it. Your paper has much helpful information to aid in the prevention of suicide including the warning signs. We all need to be more attuned to the warning signs that somebody may be considering suicide so that we may help ensure that a person in need gets help. Your paper was well expressed and thought out. A bibliography would have nicely complemented the use of internal citations. Well done!
    • 23/09/2004
    • 08:02:14
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Danger to the environment

    You have written a good essay on an environmental hazard that poses a major danger if left unsolved. The ecosystem isn't a superfluous resource to be misused by those in search of the quickest and least costly means to make items that can be marketed profitably. In that the peril is so large, it would have been useful to have provided a more extensive mention of possible remedies to mitigate the problems of acid rain. Nice work!
    • 23/09/2004
    • 07:48:47
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Twelfth Night

    Thanks for a good essay on how language is used in Act 2, Scene 4 and Act 3, Scene 1 to mislead characters in Twelfth Night. You have demonstrated well with apt textual examples how Shakespeare uses language skills such as puns and double meanings to deceive some of his characters in his well loved comedy. As you point out, this was in keeping with the customary playing of tricks of the season featured in the play's title. Your report was perceptive and to the point. Fine effort! The content of your paper appears to be the same as that for your other essay titled "12th Night- How Viola Reveals Her True feeling To People Shown Around Her In Act 2 Scene 4 And Act 3 Scene 1."
    • 23/09/2004
    • 07:23:16
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Samurai

    You have done a good job of describing the background and history of Japan's legendary warriors. Some may find that their romantic images of samurai are somewhat shattered upon learning that during times of peace many samurai took on the role of government bureaucrats, which runs contrary to Hollywood's portrayal of them as dedicated soldiers who would feel ill at ease behind a desk shuffling papers. Your essay was extensive and informative. Your use of headings made your report easier to read. A bibliography would have been helpful to those who wish to do further research in this area. Recommended reading!
    • 20/09/2004
    • 06:39:17
    • Score: 14 out of 14 people found this comment useful.
  • Dreams

    You've written a good essay in which you have effectively compared and contrasted Sandra Cisneros' "The House on Mango Street" and Langston Hughes' "A Dream Deferred." Given the subject of their literary works, it may be no coincidence that both Ms. Cisneros and Mr. Hughes are members of minority groups.Although dreams are important to us all, they have special poignancy for minorities because their dreams for a better life are often tinged with the realization that they may forever go unfulfilled. It is especially heartbreaking to come to the knowledge that one's dreams may go unrealized because of minority status and watch as the dreams of others come to fruition.Your report was analytical and thoughtful. Commendable!
    • 18/09/2004
    • 11:01:37
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • To Kill A Mockingbird

    Thank you for a good essay on why Harper Lee's widely read book is a classic. To Kill a Mockingbird must be considered a classic by teachers as it is one of the more frequently assigned books for high school students to read. It is one of the more important novels of the twentieth century as well as one of the more popular topics on this site.The book promotes important qualities such as courage and tolerance. It took great courage for Atticus Finch to defend a black man accused of raping a white woman given the book's setting. To Kill a Mockingbird also effectively cautions us against judging by appearances.Your report was highly readable and engaging. Given the importance of an essay's title, you may want to make sure that the name of the book is capitalized (also, mockingbird is one word). Nice job!
    • 02/09/2004
    • 08:04:57
    • Score: 12 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • Air Pollution

    This is a good essay on what you rightly describe as a major problem which is yet to be solved. Air pollution poses an alarming threat to our environment if solutions cannot be found. Manufacturers and consumers must take responsibility for the pollution of the air which we depend on for survival. Your report was valuable and interesting. The quotations and internal citations suggest that a bibliography would have been helpful. Quality work!
    • 26/08/2004
    • 01:09:50
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Battle of the Bulge

    You provide some good information on Hitler's last ditch effort to stem the Allied advance on Germany in the western front during World War II. Although some readers may feel that your report was a bit short, you have given a useful overview of the conditions, warfare, and objective of the Battle of the Bulge. Your essay was succinct and informative. Nice effort!
    • 22/08/2004
    • 15:29:33
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Virtual Private Networks

    You've written a good essay in which you give an extensive explanation of what virtual private networks are and how they operate. You've succeeded in putting a technical subject in layman's terms so that just about anybody should be able to gain a better understanding of virtual private networks even with a rudimentary foundation in computer systems. Your use of headings made your report easier to read. Your paper was well documented and researched, with a comprehensive bibliography which will be useful to those who wish to explore this subject further. Good job!
    • 22/08/2004
    • 08:54:17
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • A Serious Problem

    You have succeeded in writing a good essay on an environmental danger that poses a substantial threat if left unchecked. The environment isn't a replaceable resource to be abused by those in search of the easiest and least expensive ways to produce goods that can be sold at a profit. In that the threat is so great, it would have been helpful to have seen a more detailed discussion of proposed solutions to lessen the hazards of acid rain. Your report was valuable and knowledgeable. Commendable!
    • 19/08/2004
    • 06:17:56
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Influenza

    Thanks for an interesting essay on the flu. The statistics regarding the illness which you provided in your opening paragraph were enlightening and suggest that sources should probably have been cited. Of particular help were the recommendations which you provided in the end of your report on preventing those around you from getting sick. Your paper was useful and highly readable. Good effort!
    • 19/08/2004
    • 05:52:57
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Challenge/response System

    You convey some interesting information in your essay on what a challenge/response system is. Technical topics such as this are often difficult to explain in layman's terms, but you seem to have done a good job of getting your major points across. This report was concise and clear, but some readers may find it a bit short. Fine effort!
    • 18/08/2004
    • 22:33:41
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Research assignment

    Thank you for an interesting essay on the Guggenheim Museum in Bilbao. What you have written gives readers a good description of the museum including its physical layout and architectural design. Your report was well documented and researched, with a helpful bibliography which will be useful to those who wish to do further research in this area. Nice effort!
    • 18/08/2004
    • 07:26:19
    • Score: 11 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Modern Day Slavery

    You provide some good information in this essay on human trafficking. You describe one of the more deplorable practices which has plagued mankind. Tragically, there are yet today parts of the world in which young women and even girls are sold into a miserable life of servitude and that is totally unacceptable. Good work! Much of the content appears to be similar to that of your other paper titled "Human Trafficking and Forced Child Prostitution."
    • 17/08/2004
    • 19:55:58
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Forced Child Prostitution

    This is a good essay on human trafficking. Forced child prostitution is one of the more despicable institutions which has burdened mankind. Unfortunately, there are still parts of the world in which girls are sold into a miserable life of degradation and that must change. Nicely done! Much of the content appears to be similar to that of your other paper titled "Human Trafficking and Modern Day Slavery."
    • 17/08/2004
    • 19:51:53
    • Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Australia

    I'm glad that you submitted this good essay on poetry and national identity. I have a special fondness for Australians, whom I greatly admire. You have summarized well my view of Australians as a people "having the courage to face difficulty, the ability to bounce back from adversity, to stick up for what is right and fight against what is unfair, to accept difference in others and to value family and friends." Surely, these are traits that any nation should be proud of. Your report was cogent and incisive. Well done!
    • 12/08/2004
    • 11:46:56
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Social Experience

    It was a pleasure to read your good essay on the importance of social experience. While it seems intuitive that social isolation could be detrimental to one's development, the discovery that interaction itself is what counts, no matter who the caregiver is as long as basic human needs are met, is of great significance. I found it interesting that if needs are not met at the appropriate age, children may never have the ability to use part of their brain again, which means they might not be able to learn certain skills. The issue is vital in that social isolation can have enduring and devastating effects, which is especially tragic with regard to children. Your report was well documented and researched, with helpful internal citations. Good going!
    • 11/08/2004
    • 12:27:25
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Culture Jamming

    You have written a good essay on the practice of interfering with the typical media messages which bombard us daily. I had not known there was a word (subvertising) to describe mimicking the look or feel of targeted advertisements. Culture jammers who utilize techniques such as subvertising may be doing us all a favor by attempting to awaken in us a healthy skepticism of the image of the good life promulgated by the media. Your report was well documented and researched. The bibliography will be useful for doing further research in this area. The use of headings made your paper easier to read. Nicely done!
    • 10/08/2004
    • 06:13:38
    • Score: 10 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Hiroshima

    Yours is an interesting essay on John Hersey's famous book. By focusing on the individual stories of several survivors, Hersey succeeds in bringing to life the tragic events surrounding the dropping of the atomic bomb on Hiroshima on August 6, 1945. It is reassuring to know that people can overcome even the most catastrophic events and regain some degree of normalcy in their lives. Let us all hope that atomic warfare is never resorted to again. Your report is informative and descriptive. Nice effort!
    • 06/08/2004
    • 12:05:11
    • Score: 11 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Leadership

    You've submitted a good essay on the Fiedler Leadership Model, which still has relevance today although it was developed in the 1960's. I agree that managers may have to adapt their leadership styles to best fit a given situation. A bibliography would have been helpful. Your report was enlightening and detailed. Nice work!
    • 05/08/2004
    • 17:07:53
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Transgenic species

    You have written a good essay on an interesting topic. I agree that transgenic technology has value and a great deal of potential. Of course, the possibility of abuses also exist and safeguards need to be instituted to prevent them. Your report was well documented and researched. The bibliography should prove useful to those who wish to do further research in this area. Your use of headings made your paper easier to read. Quality work!
    • 04/08/2004
    • 08:43:46
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Movies

    I'm glad that you wrote this good essay in which you explore whether modern war movies are better. I agree that special effects have made today's war movies more realistic. However, what attracts me most is an interesting plot and many of the older war movies had excellent story lines. Your report was highly readable and engaging. The bibliography will be helpful to those who wish to do further reading in this area. Way to go!
    • 02/08/2004
    • 14:40:29
    • Score: 7 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • To snakeblood

    Thank you for the nice things you have said about my essay in your comment. I was especially pleased that you felt the essay was well structured. In answer to your question, I titled my essay Robert Browning's "My Last Duchess." By choosing a title containing the name of the poet and poem, I had hoped to help members locate the essay easily using the site's search function. All of my essays are similarly titled in this manner.
    • 02/08/2004
    • 07:43:40
    • Score: 62 out of 69 people found this comment useful.
  • Base Instinct?

    I appreciate your good essay on Erich Maria Remarque's monumental book about World War I. All Quiet on the Western Front has a powerful anti-war message and you have done well in showing how the book characterizes the needs and instincts of man based on his primal nature. Your report was analytical and thoughtful. Good going!
    • 02/08/2004
    • 00:15:49
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Life span

    This was a good essay in which you discussed the seven main stages of a person's life span. I liked the way that you chose one stage and discussed the needs of a person at that stage. Of particular importance was your mention of various influences which impact growth and development. Your report was informative and interesting. Recommended reading!
    • 01/08/2004
    • 10:28:47
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Genetic Engineering

    You've written a good essay on genetic engineering which is certainly a controversial topic. Yours was an informative discussion of how the different types of genetic engineering can assist with human reproduction. This is a field which holds great promise while harboring the potential for abuse. Your report was well expressed and thought out. Commendable!
    • 01/08/2004
    • 10:26:15
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Unformatted version

    You have succeeded in writing a comical religious parody script. The conversational format is effective in holding the reader's interest. This is a good example of how a touchy subject may be successfully handled in a non-threatening manner through the use of humor. Good job! Because of the HTML tags, this unformatted version is somewhat more difficult to read than the formatted version.
    • 01/08/2004
    • 07:51:58
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Heavens Above

    You have succeeded in writing a comical religious parody script. The conversational format is effective in holding the reader's interest. This is a good example of how a touchy subject may be successfully handled in a non-threatening manner through the use of humor. Good job!
    • 01/08/2004
    • 07:47:00
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Wholly evil?

    I agree that it is unusual to find a character in drama who is entirely evil. Perhaps of all Shakespeare's characters, Iago comes closest to pure evil. Shakespeare does not want us to see Macbeth as wholly evil and that explains why the bard has him speak some of the most beautifully poetic lines in the play. Your essay is convincing and thought provoking. Well done! I believe that your other, longer paper titled "'Macbeth'- It is unusual to find a character in drama who is entirely evil" is more thorough and some people may question why both reports are necessary.
    • 01/08/2004
    • 07:25:14
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Macbeth

    I agree that it is unusual to find a character in drama who is entirely evil. Perhaps of all Shakespeare's characters, Iago comes closest to pure evil. Shakespeare does not want us to see Macbeth as wholly evil and that explains why the bard has him speak some of the most beautifully poetic lines in the play. Your essay is convincing and thought provoking. Well done!
    • 01/08/2004
    • 07:23:23
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Fitness

    Thanks for your easy-to-follow study notes on fitness. The notes at the end on alcohol and drinking could constitute a separate submission. The definitions and other fundamental information which you provide will undoubtedly be helpful to those seeking a basic understanding of the topic. Your report was well structured and informative. Nice work!
    • 31/07/2004
    • 05:31:44
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Women's Rights

    I'm appreciative of your very good essay on how women in developing countries frequently have their rights ignored or violated. There's nothing developed, or even developing, about the practices you describe which are appalling. The human rights abuses directed against women and girls cry out for reform. Your last sentence of the essay was powerful and bears reiterating. I share your hope that one day "women will be able to chart their own futures and wield the power to be what they are." Let's hope it happens soon and do what we can to help bring that day about.
    • 27/07/2004
    • 20:02:19
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Bloody Battles

    I'm glad that you submitted your good essay on "The Godfather" because it is one of my favorite movies too. I liked the plot summary you provided and, if you wish to expand on your report, you might consider adding more analysis of the movie. In your final paragraph, you state: "The Godfather is considered the best movie of all time, and by some, it is in the top ten of many movie reviewers' lists." Perhaps you meant: "The Godfather is considered the best movie of all time by some, and it is in the top ten of many movie reviewers' lists." Fine job!
    • 27/07/2004
    • 19:07:17
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Professional Writing

    Thank you for your essay on the six phases of the communication process. While I normally don't comment on spelling, please note that the proper spelling is "Professional Writing" for your title, which is an especially important part of an essay. Perhaps a better title would be "A Miscommunication Experience" with which you have begun the body of your essay. I liked the way in which you exemplify the six phases of the communication process by using one of your personal experiences. Nice effort!
    • 27/07/2004
    • 18:49:58
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Immortality

    You have written a good essay on Salmon Rushdie's allegorical work. You have shown how Rushdie uses the characters in his book to symbolize not only the dreams but also the frustrating realities of newly found freedom. Your report was informative and interesting. The addition of your list of works cited to this paper means that your other essay of the same title is unnecessary. Good work!
    • 27/07/2004
    • 14:57:11
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Nazi soldiers

    You've obviously put some time and effort into this, but the piece would have benefited from a little extra effort. It's rather short and you may wish to expand on it by elaborating on how Nazi soldiers were brought into the military, how their training went, and what they did when not on duty. Each of these could form a separate paragraph. The presence of internal citations suggests that a bibliography should be provided also. Nice effort!
    • 26/07/2004
    • 13:36:48
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Decision-Making

    I'm glad that you wrote this well researched analysis of a decision-making model because many people would benefit from having a more structured approach for arriving at choices. The seven steps which you delineate in critically thinking through decisions are valuable and well expressed. I particularly liked how you used a job-related decision that you had to make in order to illustrate how the model might be applied. The bibliography will be useful in delving deeper into this subject. First rate!
    • 26/07/2004
    • 09:28:23
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Strengths and Weaknesses

    You've submitted a good essay on personal strengths and weaknesses. Many of us realize that we have to work on our weaknesses, but your point about working on strengths as well was insightful. Your skills in leadership, organization, and teamwork must stand you in good stead in the business world which prizes such attributes. I especially liked your determination as expressed in your optimism that you can achieve any goal. Well done!
    • 26/07/2004
    • 09:13:42
    • Score: 8 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Fallacies

    It was a pleasure to read your classic five paragraph informative essay on fallacies. Your paper contained a clear explanation of the fallacies of Personal Attacks, Red Herrings, and Questionable Causes, with illuminating examples of each. Your report was not only well structured and skillfully presented, but also well documented and researched with an extensive bibliography which will be a good resource for those who wish to study this topic further. Great work!
    • 26/07/2004
    • 07:54:39
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Education

    I appreciate your good essay on the value of a college education. I have read many essays on this topic on the site but yours is unique. I liked the vivid imagery which you employed. Instead of citing dreary facts and figures about the benefit of a college education, you gave your dreamlike piece almost a poetic quality which effectively got your message across. Bravo!
    • 26/07/2004
    • 07:44:40
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Title

    Thanks for your paper on Edward Said. Although I haven't read it, I am aware that the late Dr. Said's "Orientalism" is considered by some to be one of the more influential books on the topic of postcolonial studies. The title of this report is the same as that of your previous submission and should probably be changed to something more specific such as "Edward Said" or "Orientalism." Your essay was informative and well written. Good effort!
    • 26/07/2004
    • 06:02:28
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • No One's A Mystery

    It's pleasant to read your report on Elizabeth Tallent's short story. I wish that all young women would read and reflect on this story. Unfortunately, many of us have known or we will at some point meet individuals such as the male protagonist of the story who only wish to manipulate others. Your essay is highly readable and engaging. Fine effort!
    • 25/07/2004
    • 17:16:36
    • Score: 11 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Comparing texts

    You've written a good essay in which you show how the novel "The Simple Gift" by Steven Herrick, the film "Catch Me If You Can" by Steven Spielberg and the film "Harvey Krumpet" by Adam Elliot communicate aspects about how people enter new worlds and experiences. You have provided good examples in support of your thesis. Your report was well expressed and thought out. Way to go!
    • 25/07/2004
    • 10:08:49
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Inaugural Address by John F. Kennedy

    Yours is a good essay on President Kennedy's Inaugural Address. Not only was the inaugural address well written, but JFK could deliver speeches with the sort of polish and style that few presidents could. John F. Kennedy was a president of enormous potential and it sad that his life ended through assassination. Your paper was enlightening and insightful. Good going! This appears to be the same report as your other one titled "Inaugural Address."
    • 24/07/2004
    • 13:52:14
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Odyssey

    You have written a good essay on the Odyssey, but you need to correct the spelling in the title in particular, which is an especially important part of an essay. You might also consider breaking up the second and third paragraphs into smaller paragraphs. You have provided adequate support for your thesis that Odysseus was a clever hero who formulated ingenious strategies. Your report was informative and interesting. Nicely done!
    • 24/07/2004
    • 13:35:11
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Duplicate Submission

    Thank you for a good analysis of Emily Dickenson's popular poem. For someone who lived a relatively sheltered life, Ms. Dickenson had remarkable insights and "Because I could not stop for Death" is a poem which has universal appeal. Your report is highly readable and engaging. Other than for the fact that death was capitalized in the title of your prior essay on the same topic, this appears to be the same report as the one you submitted three days earlier. Commendable!
    • 24/07/2004
    • 06:32:04
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • When I am Dead, My Dearest

    You've submitted a good essay on Christina Rossetti's poem. "When I am Dead, My Dearest" is a truly haunting poem of love and death. I liked the headings which made your report easier to read. Your paper was well structured and skillfully presented. A bibliography would have been helpful, particularly in support of the critical comments which you cite. Recommended reading!
    • 23/07/2004
    • 12:35:19
    • Score: 11 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Causes of the Great Depression

    This could have been worse. Certainly, it would be difficult to discuss the many and complex reasons for the Great Depression in only 397 words (I realize you got the word count to just over 400 by reiterating the title in the body of the essay). A listing of any sources consulted would have been helpful.Your thesis statement is not supported very well. You claim that the "main cause of the Great Depression was a lack of understanding of economic systems." You need to discuss, not merely mention, the Great Depression's other causes and show why a lack of understanding of economic systems was the main cause. Instead, you have largely provided an extremely brief historical overview of the Great Depression.There are errors in all six paragraphs, some of which I'll point out. Avoid redundancies, especially ungrammatical ones, such as in the first paragraph in which you state that Hoover was not reelected "for doing not doing enough." Avoid run-on sentences such as the second sentence of the second paragraph. Avoid shifting tenses between past and present, such as in the third paragraph. Avoid errors involving apposition such as "October 1929," in the fourth paragraph. Avoid wordiness such as in the fifth paragraph in which you refer to "money saved in banks" rather than simply money in banks. Avoid introducing into your essay new concepts, such as the circular flow of money (which you have oversimplified) in your concluding paragraph.You obviously put at least some time and effort into this piece. More time and effort would have resulted in a much stronger essay regarding one of the more important economic events of the twentieth century. Because of the catastrophic nature of the Great Depression, you needed to do the subject justice.
    • 23/07/2004
    • 07:46:42
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Great Depression

    I'm appreciative of your good essay on what was arguably the most catastrophic economic event of the twentieth century, and perhaps even in American history as you suggest. The effect of a depression can be devastating, especially in human terms, and hopefully another such economic catastrophe can be averted.I liked your discussion of causes such as investing on margin, speculation, a long agricultural recession, irresponsible policies by banks, protectionism in restraint of free trade (e.g., the Smoot-Hawley Tariff Act of 1930) and a lack of regulation of capital markets. I also liked your discussion of some of the effects of the depression such as years of extended economic downturn, decline and unemployment. One of the worst consequences was the rise of tyrants like Adolf Hitler who took advantage of the hard times to manipulate their countrymen into placing trust in them.There is no question that FDR's New Deal helped to solve some of the problems of the depression, as you point out. It's somewhat ironic that World War II and its aftermath led to a fuller recovery from depression. Your report was well documented and researched. Good job!
    • 20/07/2004
    • 19:03:27
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Best laid plans...

    This is a good essay on John Steinbeck's classic novel. The Robbie Burns quote with which you began your report is as apt as the title Steinbeck chose for his story of failed dreams. I liked the way you constructed your paper around the theme of unfulfilled dreams as it lent focus to what you've written. Your last sentence about giving up dreams just to survive nicely sums up a central message in "Of Mice and Men." Your essay was analytical and thoughtful. Fine work!
    • 20/07/2004
    • 15:18:12
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • To p4sc4l

    Thank you for saying this is a very good and detailed essay. It seems "you missed a good introduction" in which I state the poem relates to the shortness of life and the inevitability of death that should not be easily accepted. I can think of no better way to introduce a poem which contains what I have described as "Thomas' powerful message." It is precisely because of the poet's powerful message that most people like this poem.You say that you "find it difficult to understand why the author decides to write this poem." When discussing the first stanza of the poem, I state that Thomas beseeches his ailing father to fight for life. I underscore the point by stating that Thomas urges his father not to submit meekly ("do not go gentle") to a death which may seem a welcome prospect ("that good night"). Based on my statements, most people would "understand why the author decides to write the poem" even if you cannot.You have apparently also missed the conclusion in the essay's final paragraph which states in part: "Choosing life over death can be especially difficult for the terminally ill....Thomas has decided for himself where he stands on the issue and each of us must do the same." Others who have commented have not missed the concluding paragraph. For example, Peps stated: "I totally can see the issues you have wrote about. Having just finished a research project on terminally ill patients and assisted suicide i can reflect really well with what you have wrote."In a comment to another essay, you state that you are "not really a poem reader." That is unfortunate because you are missing out on a great deal. I encourage you to read more poetry because it can contain powerful messages concerning life and death, about which we could all benefit from gaining deeper insights.
    • 20/07/2004
    • 09:31:22
    • Score: 54 out of 56 people found this comment useful.
  • Small Business

    You've written a very good essay on small business opportunities which are currently available to entrepreneurs. The information on the three top small business opportunities available today which you provided should be helpful to those who have an interest in breaking into the Herbal Vitamins, Foot Care, or Organic Food fields. I found it interesting that all three business opportunities were related to health care, which should continue to be a growth area given the aging of the population.Your paper was well structured and skillfully presented, with helpful headings which made it easier to read. Your report was also well documented and researched with an extensive bibliography that will aid in further study. Well done!
    • 19/07/2004
    • 10:05:05
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Craft and Credibility

    It was pleasant to read your good essay on the article "I Just Wanna Be Average" by Mike Rose. You have demonstrated quite well how the author conveys his message that individuals placed on the vocational education track have potential, which can only be cultivated under the guidance of devoted teachers. I agree that students tend to be as good as the effort put forth by the teacher who instructs them. Your report was highly readable and engaging. Recommended reading!
    • 18/07/2004
    • 09:38:34
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Class and Identity

    This was a good essay on how class influences an individual's identity. It was interesting to read how the issue was addressed by Horatio Alger in "Ragged Dick," Toni Cade Bambara in "The Lesson," and Gregory Mantsios in "Class in America: Myths and Realities." Your illustrations from their works effectively shows how each of them confronted this topic in different ways. In America, we tend to believe that anyone can rise to any height with hard work and perseverance, which may be more hope than reality. Your paper was convincing and thought provoking. Good going!
    • 18/07/2004
    • 09:36:30
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • ADHD

    Thanks for a good essay on a problem that plagues many, especially children, with tragic consequences. A diagnosis of attention-deficit hyperactivity disorder may indeed serve as the means by which the complexities of undesirable behavior are conveniently explained away, relieving teachers and parents of concerns that the behavior may be due to their own shortcomings. Your report was well documented and researched. Quality work!
    • 18/07/2004
    • 07:34:07
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Psychology

    In that the whole point of the notes was to give the most basic introduction possible, you have succeeded in achieving what you set out to do. The definitions you have provided will undoubtedly be quite useful to those who want an overview of some of the key aspects of psychology. I liked the headings which you included which will aid in quickly finding the information of most interest to those reviewing your notes. Your notes were well structured and skillfully presented. Good job!
    • 16/07/2004
    • 17:18:36
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Mormons

    I'm glad that you found this essay on your hard drive from way back in 6th grade because I enjoyed reading it. Even in the 6th grade, you had good writing skills. I liked the biographical information on Joseph Smith with which you began your report. You've also done a good job in describing how the Church Of Latter-Day Saints was founded. Your description of the westward move of the Mormons was interesting. Nicely done!
    • 16/07/2004
    • 17:15:17
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Religious Tolerance

    I appreciate your essay on the importance of religious tolerance. There can be little doubt that religious intolerance has led to widespread strife and conflict in the world. One of the reasons why America has been spared the tragic consequences of religious infighting is because the founding fathers were tolerant of the beliefs of others. Your report was analytical and thoughtful. Commendable!
    • 16/07/2004
    • 00:08:40
    • Score: 8 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • The Melody of Maya

    Yours is a good essay on Maya Angelou's "I Know Why the Caged Bird Sings.". By focusing on the literary elements in her autobiographical book, you have shown how the author achieves a lyrical tone and style. Circumscribed by the constraining influences of social conventions, Ms. Angelou was nonetheless able to craft a sweet yet sorrowful account of a life well spent. Her story is inspirational and you've captured some important messages which the author conveyed in her book. Impressive!
    • 16/07/2004
    • 00:05:17
    • Score: 9 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Summative Analysis

    It was a pleasure to read your essay in which you compare Li-Young Lee's "Persimmons" and Eamon Grennan's "Pause." You've done a very good job in illustrating how the imagery and symbolism in these two poems effectively supports the poets' message. When reading these poems on the web, I couldn't help but think of my father and how true the themes of the poems were. Your point about getting more out of each poem by reading them together was insightful and cogent. Wonderful work!
    • 16/07/2004
    • 00:01:47
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Title

    You make some interesting points in your essay, but based on the title I was expecting to read a biography of Fyodor Dostoyevsky. Instead of any mention of the notable Russian author, your report concerns your views of human beings. You either need to change the title or try again to submit your paper on Dostoyevsky.
    • 14/07/2004
    • 16:50:14
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Madness

    When I read this, I thought of a poem by Robert Browning called "Porphyria's Lover." The poem's narrator also lost his sanity though apparently "he acted normal, looked normal, and talked like a normal" person, at least until he resorted to murder. "He can pretend" as you point out and bear a seductive mask of seeming reason which disguises the horror which may "be just around the corner." We may not really know even those who are closest to us. In fact, some may harbor insanity and our ignorance of it may result in tragedy. Indeed, "Who knows where madness lies..."
    • 14/07/2004
    • 11:36:48
    • Score: 27 out of 28 people found this comment useful.
  • Persuasive Speech

    You have written a good outline for a persuasive speech on why the American educational system needs to be improved. I liked the way that you compared the educational system in the United States to that of other countries and suggested ways it could be made better. Your outline was well structured and interesting. The internal citations would have been more useful had a bibliography been included as well. Good going!
    • 13/07/2004
    • 22:34:50
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Julia Kristeva

    Thank you for a good overview of the major beliefs of the noted French-Bulgarian author. The theories which Julia Kristeva espouses in her writing are not the easiest to comprehend but your explanation of some of her major themes will be helpful to those desiring a clearer understanding of her principal tenets. Your paper was valuable and enlightening. Recommended reading!
    • 13/07/2004
    • 13:23:48
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Aristotle

    You've submitted a good biography of one of the preeminent thinkers of all time, focusing on his beliefs. Like his predecessors, Socrates and Plato, Aristotle did much to advance what was in ancient Greece the burgeoning field of philosophy. Aristotle's teachings are somewhat abstruse but you have done well by making them more accessible. Your report was informative and interesting. Thumbs up!
    • 13/07/2004
    • 13:00:17
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Gender Bias

    I'm appreciative of your good essay on gender bias expressed in women's literature. Your opening quote from Susan B. Anthony was quite effective. I particularly liked the way that you chose examples of gender bias from the literature of several different countries. I concur that literature can give the problem of gender bias needed exposure and that more needs to be done in this area. Your report was well documented and researched. First rate!
    • 11/07/2004
    • 21:57:18
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Trigger happy

    You provide some good information in your essay on gun ownership and laws that should restrict it. This is a controversial topic which people tend to have strong opinions about, especially in America with the constitutional right to bear arms. Your report was informative and interesting. The presence of internal citations in your paper suggest that a bibliography would have been helpful. Fine effort!
    • 10/07/2004
    • 22:09:31
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Ridley Scott

    It was pleasant to read your good essay on director Ridley Scott's thought provoking science fiction film. "Blade Runner" made me reflect on how mankind's ability to evolve technology (in this case to create amazingly lifelike automatons) may well outstrip the ability to resolve the moral dilemmas which ensue from doing so.I think Scott was intrigued by whether we will treat our creations as disposable machines or recognize that artificial intelligence may become so highly developed that androids deserve special treatment commensurate with their unique status as copies of us imbued even with qualities such as self awareness and human aspirations.The movie does make one wonder if our intelligence in developing human replicas will be greater than our wisdom in knowing how to accord them appropriate treatment. The film conveys the director's view that mankind cannot expect to create a class of robotic slaves without the tragic consequences which slavery brings.
    • 10/07/2004
    • 21:43:09
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Racism

    You make some interesting points in your essay on racism and modern culture. Your use of an obscenity in the first and last paragraphs might be offensive to some readers. When citing statistics, you should include a bibliography. This appears to be the same paper as your report titled "RASICSM (sic) AND THE MODERN CULTURE."
    • 09/07/2004
    • 18:00:52
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Science Experiment

    Yours is a well conducted investigation into how the drop height of a marble affects the size of the crater it makes in sand. While most of us would intuitively expect that there would be a direct relationship between drop height and crater size, your report does a very good job in documenting the results of your experiment. Your paper was well organized with helpful headings. I particularly liked the theoretical background you provided before describing the methodology of your science experiment, as well as your overall evaluation. Nicely done!
    • 09/07/2004
    • 11:25:48
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Understanding Plot

    You provide some good information in your essay on the difficulties students have in understanding plot. Laurence Perrine's "Sound and Sense" is a classic academic text which is particularly helpful in the way the editor organizes short stories in the first part of the anthology by the major elements of literature and provides a brief overview of each element. I liked your mention of "Japanese Quince" and "Miss Brill" but wish you had gone into more detail regarding their plot. Good effort!
    • 09/07/2004
    • 05:08:18
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Louisiana Purchase

    This is a good essay on Donald Barr Chidsey's book about the Louisiana Purchase. The Louisiana Purchase was one of the wisest acquisitions in American history, although President Jefferson felt that his action in obtaining the huge expanse of land was unconstitutional. Fortunately, his reservations didn't prevent him from adding the territory to the United States, although the impact on the lives of native Americans was tragic. Your report was highly readable and enlightening. Good job!
    • 07/07/2004
    • 19:02:44
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Studying History

    You've written a good essay on the importance of studying history, although it certainly isn't everybody's favorite subject. Part of the problem may be the emphasis which some teachers give to dates and facts, at the expense of valuable lessons which history provides that are relevant to today's world. My favorite quote on the importance of history is from the famed philosopher George Santayana who said, "Those who cannot remember the past are condemned to repeat it." Your report was valuable and engaging. Way to go!
    • 07/07/2004
    • 18:50:02
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Communication Process

    Thanks for a good essay on the importance of effective communication in the workplace. I agree with you that communication in the workplace is vital and the foundation for success. Your headings made your report easy to read. Your paper was informative and interesting. Nicely done!
    • 07/07/2004
    • 18:32:32
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Nursing Heritage

    I appreciate your concisely written essay on Florence Nightingale and Jean Watson. These two women have made important contributions to health care and serve as worthy role models. I liked the way in which you related Florence Nightingale's battlefield experience to your own experience in treating victims of car accidents.I agree with your observation about the value of Jean Watson's emphasis on human caring. Medical workers are trained to be dispassionate, but that shouldn't preclude showing empathy for patients.The web address you provided will undoubtedly be of help to other nursing students. We need good health care workers such as you. Well done!
    • 07/07/2004
    • 18:18:51
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • A Shortage of Care

    Yours is a very good essay on the nursing crisis. You've done a really good job of describing the nursing shortage and have come up with some wonderful recommendations to address the problem. Your report was well documented and researched, with a helpful bibliography to complement your internal citations. Impressive!
    • 07/07/2004
    • 18:03:47
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Again?

    You've obviously put some time and effort into documenting the results of your investigation. Your report could have benefited from a clear statement at the very beginning as to the purpose of your investigation. You need to capitalize the title of your paper. It would be advisable to delete references to pages containing diagrams (e.g., scatter diagram, histogram and box plot) which have not been provided. Commendable effort! This is now the third time this information has been provided, although I note the slight change in your title.
    • 06/07/2004
    • 16:45:48
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Abuse

    You've submitted a good essay on a very disturbing topic. You have provided an informative overview of the tragedy concerning sexual, physical, and emotional abuse. I agree that child abuse prevention is one of the most important steps that can significantly reduce the number of cases. I share your hope that one day the problem of child abuse and all its forms will be eradicated. Your report was cogent and forceful. Recommended reading!
    • 04/07/2004
    • 16:44:04
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Lord of the Flies

    You provide some good information in your essay on William Golding's popular novel. You have shown how Piggy's symbolism goes beyond that of his name. I liked your discussion of what other aspects of symbolism are linked to him. Your report could have benefited from a stronger concluding paragraph in which you sum up your main points in a more focused manner. Nice effort!
    • 04/07/2004
    • 15:27:38
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Tess of the d'Urbervilles

    This is a good essay on Thomas Hardy's classic novel. I liked your comparison of Angel to Alec in which you discuss how each is used as a vehicle by Hardy in "Tess of the d'Urbervilles" to examine different aspects of society. The author used these two characters well to effectively symbolize the timeless dichotomy between good and evil. It's not necessary to start your concluding paragraph by saying "In conclusion." Quality work!
    • 04/07/2004
    • 15:19:43
    • Score: 12 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • Erin Brocovich

    You've written a good essay on one of Julia Robert's more substantive movies. In examining the film, you have shown how this media text has been used to display social class and prejudices within American society. Progress has been made in reducing societal bias since the time frame which the film portrays, but more needs to be done and movies like "Erin Brocovich" can be helpful in raising social awareness.What she lacked in formal legal training, the real-life Erin Brocovich more than made up for in persistence and compassion. These qualities gained the trust of the plaintiffs and were instrumental in helping them recover damages. Your report was enlightening and interesting. Good going!
    • 04/07/2004
    • 14:58:24
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Gustave Courbet

    Thank you for a good biography of one of the most influential artists of the 1800's. I particularly liked your in-depth discussion of Gustave Courbet's "A Burial at Ornans" and "The Painter's Studio." Your personal reaction to these two paintings was illuminating. Your essay was well documented and researched. Thumbs up!
    • 03/07/2004
    • 10:27:03
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Indonesia

    You make some interesting points in your essay on the period leading up to Indonesia's independence in 1949. You have provided good support for your assertion that independence was not simply given, but was something for which Indonesia had to fight. Your report was well documented and researched. The presence of internal citations suggests the need for a bibliography also. Fine effort!
    • 02/07/2004
    • 04:18:38
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Frankenstein

    Yours is a thoughtful discussion of the many themes in Mary Shelley's timeless novel which are also present in contemporary society. You have provided good support with apt textual references demonstrating how the themes in Frankenstein of playing God, parenting, and perpetrator-as-victim are still relevant today. Your essay was probing and incisive. Great job!
    • 01/07/2004
    • 14:48:00
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • The Constitution

    You've submitted a good essay on the history of the creation of the United States Constitution. What I find most amazing about the Constitution is that it has only been amended twenty seven times and the first ten amendments or Bill of Rights were instituted contemporaneously with the document's ratification. Thus, there have only been seventeen amendments to the Constitution since 1791, although the country has changed significantly from what it was in the eighteenth century. This is a tribute to the foresight and wisdom of the founding fathers. Your report was well documented and researched. Commendable!
    • 01/07/2004
    • 14:44:51
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • The American Businessman

    I'm appreciative of your well researched essay in which you address the question as to whether the American businessman of the latter part of the nineteenth century can best be described as industrial innovator or robber baron. Men like Andrew Carnegie and John D. Rockefeller were unquestionably fierce competitors in the business world and made many enemies. However, you are right in pointing out that they also made valuable contributions to our economy and thus the question as to whether they were industrial innovators or robber barons cannot be definitively answered. Perhaps they were a little of both. At any rate, your report was engrossing and well written. Your internal citations could have been made more valuable with the addition of a bibliography. Good work!
    • 01/07/2004
    • 14:41:23
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Literature

    This is a concisely written essay on the importance of reading and studying literature in our modern world. I agree with you that we should take advantage of the many valuable lessons which past generations of authors have written down for us. I also share your love for good books and wish that more people would learn to appreciate the value of great works of literature. Jane Austen is one of my favorite authors also. Your paper is insightful and knowledgeable. Quality work!
    • 01/07/2004
    • 14:34:27
    • Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • The Hiding Place

    You've written an excellent analysis of the book concerning the story and life of Corrie ten Boom. I admire the courage of the ten Boom family in being very active in the Dutch underground and hiding refugees during World War II. It was horrible for Corrie ten Boom to have been arrested along with her family and sent to Germany's infamous Ravensbruck concentration camp. Tragically, her sister Betsie didn't survive imprisonment but it was fortunate that Corrie did. She used her freedom well by preaching in many countries and writing several books, including the one which you review in your report. Her life was indeed inspirational. Your essay was well expressed and thought out. Nicely done!
    • 01/07/2004
    • 14:28:59
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Jane Eyre

    Thanks for a very good objective analysis of Charlotte Bronte's classic novel. You are correct in pointing out that Jane Eyre has stood the test of time. In fact, it is one of my favorite books. Most of all, I enjoyed the novel's message about the value of perseverance and hope. Your essay was highly readable and engaging. Liked it!
    • 01/07/2004
    • 14:24:28
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Thanks, maryd

    I appreciate your honest explanation about rating the essay incorrectly. There's no need to apologize. The rating buttons are close together, especially those near the bottom of the screen. It can be easy to click on the wrong one, especially when you are new.As for referring to Dylan Thomas by name, it's worth noting again that the poem was addressed to his father. Consequently, I thought it might be confusing to some readers if I were to use pronouns such as he and his since it may have been difficult in some cases to tell if I was talking about Thomas or his father. I did switch to "the poet's" in the third line of the essay, which is why I didn't use "the poet's" in the second line as you suggest. Sometimes it's awkward to avoid referring to the poet by name, which is the most direct way to talk about him. Simply saying Thomas is less wordy than saying "the poet's" or "his poetry."Thank you for saying that you enjoyed the essay and that it was great work. "Do Not Go Gentle Into That Good Night" has long been one of my favorite poems, which made it more enjoyable to write the essay.
    • 29/06/2004
    • 11:12:28
    • Score: 42 out of 46 people found this comment useful.
  • Communication Protocols

    You provide some good information in your report on communication protocols. Most of us use modems but don't have much knowledge of some of the basics pertaining to them. Your paper contained some useful definitions which will undoubtedly be helpful to those who desire a basic understanding of this technical area. Nice effort!
    • 28/06/2004
    • 11:25:27
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Sir Francis Chichester

    It was a pleasure to read your biography of Sir Francis Chichester. Your report contains an interesting description of this courageous aviator. I'm glad that you didn't omit mentioning that he was diagnosed with lung cancer and given a short time (six months actually) to live. You are right that the doctors advised that he must have one lung removed but he refused. With his wife's help and prayer, he regained his health naturally and lived for almost another fifteen years. Your paper was as inspirational as was the life of Sir Francis Chichester. Well done!
    • 25/06/2004
    • 11:31:17
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Supply Side Case Study

    You make some good points about affirmative action which is a controversial topic likely to spark spirited debate. Although affirmative action is not perfect, we must do what we can to ensure a more equal society even if the means of doing so has some inequities. Hopefully, temporary measures such as affirmative action will someday no longer be necessary because we will have at last achieved the goal of equal opportunity for all. Commendable!
    • 22/06/2004
    • 21:21:36
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Acid rain

    Yours is a good essay on an environmental nightmare which poses an enormous threat if left unaddressed. Our environment is not a disposable resource to be exploited by manufacturers looking for the cheapest way to produce profitable products. Our delicately balanced ecological system must be respected because we only have one and it is irreplaceable. Because the dangers are so great, I would have particularly liked to have seen a fuller discussion of any remedies you might propose to alleviate the hazards of acid rain. Your report was enlightening and interesting. Quality work!
    • 21/06/2004
    • 14:59:24
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Blade Runner

    You make some interesting points in your film review of Blade Runner. Whether the character of Harrison Ford was or wasn't a replicant provided some intrigue but wasn't the main point of the movie for me. I was struck with how mankind's ability to advance technology (in this case to create amazingly lifelike automatons) will probably outstrip the ability to resolve the moral dilemmas which ensue from doing so.At some point in the future, robotic science fiction will undoubtedly become science fact. I wonder if we will treat our creations as disposable machines or recognize that artificial intelligence may become so highly developed that androids deserve special treatment commensurate with their unique status as copies of us imbued even with qualities such as self awareness and human aspirations.None of us may live long enough to see the development of robots which closely resemble humans. Still, it does make one wonder if our intelligence in developing such marvels will be greater than our wisdom in knowing how to accord them appropriate treatment. Can mankind expect to create a class of robotic slaves without the tragic consequences slavery brings?
    • 21/06/2004
    • 14:15:36
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • COLLEGE STUDENTS WHO BINGE DRINK

    Thanks for a good discussion of college students who binge drink. Your essay is well researched and documented. Binge drinking is a potentially fatal problem which only seems to be getting worse. It's vital to know what to do if someone passes out from alcohol poisoning. Don't let legal worries about any underage drinking prevent you from calling 9-1-1 to get help (it's another good reason to have a cell phone). A person's life is more important than legal concerns. If necessary, have one person go for help and try not to leave the affected person alone. Learn how to perform CPR as help cannot always arrive in time. Nicely done!
    • 19/06/2004
    • 15:47:35
    • Score: 26 out of 26 people found this comment useful.
  • Is Boycotting the Answer?

    You make some interesting points in your essay about a disturbing problem. While there are those who would agree that boycotting is not the answer to the exploitation of child laborers, I am interested in learning what you think might be the way to address the problem. While finding the "complex solution...could still be many years into the future" isn't there anything that can be done to help alleviate the problem in the meantime? Nice effort. Of course, it's only necessary to submit your essay once.
    • 19/06/2004
    • 05:14:09
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Macbeth

    These are very good summary notes on masculine values in "Macbeth." What I especially liked about your notes was that it was quick and easy to get through them. Your notes are also well focused on a topic of importance in Shakespeare's frequently read play of the ambitious pursuit of power, which is indeed a value more often associated with men than it is with women.Your notes would serve as a valuable tool for someone taking a test or for reference purposes. Readers should be able to efficiently spot what they need because of the summary format you have chosen to present the information. It was also helpful that you provided the source for your material so that those who wish to learn more about masculine values in "Macbeth" may do so. Great work!
    • 19/06/2004
    • 04:29:55
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Plagiarism

    You have concisely stated your point of view on plagiarism and have done a very good job of getting your message across. There are those on this site who plagiarize, while the majority of members work hard to write their own essays so that they can attain Super User status. It's unfortunate something isn't done about the few who plagiarize, some of whom have been members of the site for some time, because they set a very poor example for the newer members especially. Plagiarism is taking something that doesn't belong to you and claiming it as your own. It cheats the rightful owners out of their due credit for what they labored to create. It's theft and I was taught that stealing was wrong.
    • 18/06/2004
    • 13:46:57
    • Score: 14 out of 14 people found this comment useful.
  • Blake and Byron

    You have submitted a superior essay in which you compare and contrast Blake's "The Schoolboy" and stanzas 37-48 of Byron's "Don Juan." Because William Blake and Lord Byron are two of the more famous poets of the Romantic tradition, it is not surprising that parallels can be found, although they may not at first seem readily apparent because of stylistic differences. You have done well to illustrate with aptly chosen textual examples not only the similarities but also the differences in the works of these two eminent poets.I agree that formal education can deaden a child's natural curiosity to learn. Formal education does not have to be harsh and dull, but too often it is. You've underscored this point effectively in one particularly well turned remark which bears repeating: "Blake is pleading for an approach to learning in which natural experience will not be subjugated to insensitive classroom rules."Your report appears to have been expertly edited and proofread. If you have a tutor, you should pay him more. Although you somewhat exceeded the 1,500 word requirement, it shouldn't be a problem because there is no extraneous material in your report and nothing should be cut. Excellent job!
    • 18/06/2004
    • 13:22:11
    • Score: 27 out of 27 people found this comment useful.
  • Sci Fi Part 9

    As your science fiction series winds down, it's interesting to see how some of the plot points that were introduced in previous parts get resolved. It has thus far been an enjoyable story and Part 9 is a good addition to it.Some of the questions I had from preceding parts have been cleared up with the addition of your latest installment. Of course, more mysteries remain to be worked out in your next and concluding part.You have me on the seat of my hover chair awaiting what comes next. As you had earlier indicated this was a ten part series, it should be enjoyable to see how everything ends up in your final installment.
    • 18/06/2004
    • 13:00:17
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Verycrazygirl

    Thanks for your comment about the introduction, structure, and organization of my paper. I'm sorry if you missed the conclusion but it was contained in the final two sentences of the concluding paragraph. "Porphyria's Lover" reminds us that we may not really know even those who are closest to us. In fact, some may harbor insanity and our ignorance of it may result in tragedy. By the way, I'm glad my teacher was more generous than you or I might not have received an A.
    • 17/06/2004
    • 14:55:46
    • Score: 47 out of 51 people found this comment useful.
  • Alexander the Great

    You have submitted a well written essay which was interesting and informative. The vignettes about the Gordian knot and the horse afraid of his own shadow are legendary. We still refer to a direct and decisive solution to a complex problem as cutting the Gordian knot. Concerning the exploits of Alexander the Great, it seems ironic that he or anyone else should sigh because there were no more worlds to conquer. His greatest contribution may have been spreading the Greek culture which he admired so much. This biography of the most famous Macedonian was valuable and well structured. Good work!
    • 17/06/2004
    • 14:00:51
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • High Jump

    This was a good essay on a track and field event which I always found challenging. I liked how you began your report with a brief history of the high jump. Your explanation of how it's done was thorough and informative. The training tips provided were particularly useful. Your headings made the essay very easy to read. Great job!
    • 17/06/2004
    • 13:40:06
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Business Communication

    Thank you for a very good essay on recommendations for improving communications at a manufacturing facility. Your report is well documented and researched. Your effective use of headings makes your paper easy to read. I appreciate your bibliography which will help those of us who wish to do further research in this area. Superior work!
    • 17/06/2004
    • 09:54:39
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Sci Fi Part 8

    I liked the humor with which you began this eighth part of your science fiction series. With such a tension filled story, a bit of comic relief can be a welcome change of pace. The dialogue remains quite realistic.I also liked how you added a bit of mystery to this part by describing the claw marks on the side of the downed spaceship. An equally intriguing mystery is why Jason wheeled Charlie to the site of the wrecked spaceship and why Bryan couldn't locate them once he got there.Mystery along with science fiction can be a potent combination. You have certainly demonstrated that in your multi-part series and I am looking forward to Part 9 to learn how some of the mysteries might begin to be resolved.
    • 17/06/2004
    • 08:30:57
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Sci Fi Part 7

    This seventh part of your exciting science fiction series got off to a suspenseful start. The reader can almost feel the pain of the crash survivors. As in earlier parts, your dialogue is quite effective in telling the story.I noted in this part that you displayed much more of your descriptive abilities as, for example, when you describe the planet on which the craft crashed. Your words made it easy for the reader to visualize the planet.You ended this part well with some mysteries to tantalize the reader's imagination. It should be enjoyable to see how the mysteries unfold in the eight part of your intriguing fiction series.
    • 16/06/2004
    • 13:06:23
    • Score: 8 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Sci Fi Part 6

    The was an excellent way to lead off the second half of your science fiction series. I noticed that this part was predominately dialogue, which is a good choice since you are particularly adept at crafting believable conversation.This part had a great deal of action which was skillfully presented. I liked the tension which you incorporated into the scene describing the impending crash landing of the ship.It will be interesting to find out the aftermath of the crash in your next installment. I am looking forward to the new developments in Part 7 of your exciting series.
    • 16/06/2004
    • 08:53:31
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Sci Fi Part 5

    At the halfway mark of your ten part science fiction series, the suspense continues to build and the story line remains interesting. The light banter in this part which preceded the trouble the ship encountered made the tension more palpable by contrast.As with the prior parts, the dialogue between Bryan, Charlie, and Jason is quite realistic. The dialogue is also effective in helping the reader learn more about the story's main characters. This is in keeping with the sage writing advice of "show don't tell."It will be interesting to see how the story is resolved in the second half of your series. You've kept my interest throughout the first part and the rest of the story should prove intriguing. I'm looking forward to seeing Part 6.
    • 15/06/2004
    • 11:00:20
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Duplicate Submission

    You make some interesting points in your essay focusing on Costa Rica's form of government. I found it particularly interesting that Costa Rica has two vice presidents and would have liked to have known why. It was also interesting that Supreme Court justices in Costa Rica are elected to eight year terms. In some countries, they are appointed for life to shield them from political pressures and I would have been interested to find out if Costa Rican justices have had any trouble remaining independent. If you would like to expand your report, these might be two points you could provide more information about. Nice effort! Of course, you only need to submit your paper once.
    • 14/06/2004
    • 21:50:03
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Sci Fi Part 4

    After reading this and the prior three parts of your entertaining science fiction series, I have concluded that you have a real talent for writing dialogue, which is one of the more difficult skills for a fiction writer to master. Your dialogue is quite believable and effectively moves the story along.The appearance in your story of a new character, Jason Bollo, adds an intriguing element to the mix. It will be interesting to see who gets the girl. You have drawn Jason expertly and your skills at characterization are every bit as good as are your abilities at crafting convincing dialogue.This is becoming a really interesting series in which I am becoming more of a science fiction fan all the time. The hover chairs which you describe as floating in air demonstrate that you have the sort of creative imagination necessary for this genre. I am looking forward to reading Part 5.
    • 14/06/2004
    • 09:46:17
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Two people separated by a common history

    Please forgive my paraphrase of Oscar Wilde's famous quote about the English and Americans being two people separated by a common language. I found the comment by diamondize1 delightful and got quite a chuckle from Mark Steel's humorous quote which she cited. It does underscore how two countries can view history in markedly different ways. What's important is that the American Revolution has long since ended and England and America are close allies now. In fact, there's no ally I would rather have than England, nor possibly any country which would prove a more formidable foe.
    • 13/06/2004
    • 15:45:18
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Adolescent Suicide

    You have written a good essay on a tragic problem which people need to be made more aware of. Your report has a great deal of useful information to help in the prevention of adolescent suicide. We all need to be more acutely aware of the warning signs that someone may be contemplating suicide so that we can help make sure someone in need gets help. Your paper was well documented and researched. Thumbs up!
    • 13/06/2004
    • 11:59:42
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Women and World War II

    Thank you for a good essay on how the roles of women changed during World War II. One of the more worthwhile results of the Second World War was the acknowledgement that women were capable workers. The outstanding contributions women made at home while men were away fighting shortened a tragic war. It is only proper that women should have been rewarded for their contributions and it is unfortunate that it took so long. Commendable!
    • 13/06/2004
    • 11:44:05
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Acid rain

    I'm appreciative of your good essay on an environmental problem which poses great danger if left unchecked. I especially liked the remedies you discussed to mitigate the hazards of acid rain. Your report was well documented and researched. Thumbs up!
    • 13/06/2004
    • 11:29:29
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Jay Gatsby

    This is a good essay on F. Scott Fitzgerald's classic novel of the Jazz Age. You have shown how through the character of Jay Gatsby, jealousy leads to death and destruction. Of course, ambition and acquisitiveness played leading roles in the novel's tragedy as well. Your report is informative and interesting. Along with the internal citations, I would have liked to have seen a bibliography. Nicely done!
    • 13/06/2004
    • 11:20:05
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Pharaoh

    You've written a good essay on the importance of the Pharaoh in New Kingdom Egyptian society. You have illustrated well how the Kings of New Kingdom Egypt were able to maintain their dominant position in society by using propaganda to depict themselves as vital in many areas of Egyptian life, including the practice of religion. Your report was insightful and knowledgeable. Quality work! .
    • 13/06/2004
    • 11:11:15
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Macbeth

    Thanks for an interesting essay on Shakespeare's well known play of greed and ambition. Many will agree that Macbeth and his wife caused their own downfall but your contention that the same is true of all of the characters you mention is somewhat more controversial. Still, you've provided support for your position and your report is valuable and enlightening. I liked the closing quote with which you effectively ended your paper. Fine effort!
    • 13/06/2004
    • 10:59:32
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • ABA

    I'm appreciative of your good essay on the American Basketball Association and how it helped shape the history of the sport. In sports as is true in other areas, innovations are often made by upstarts and later integrated into the mainstream. Your report was well documented and researched. The bibliography you provided will help fans of the sport and others find out more about this interesting topic. Well done!
    • 13/06/2004
    • 10:43:54
    • Score: 12 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • Imperialism

    This is a fine essay on British imperialism in India and some of its unfortunate consequences. England benefited more than India from its "jewel in the crown" but, as you point out, India did derive at least some positive aspects from its relationship with Great Britain such as technology and capital.India has for some time been the world's largest democracy and can make real strides in the twenty-first century if it can overcome some daunting problems it faces stemming from overpopulation and economic problems. One can only hope.I would have liked to have seen a somewhat longer concluding paragraph in which you sum up your key points. Your report was balanced and enlightening. Good job!
    • 13/06/2004
    • 10:08:43
    • Score: 8 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Cuba

    You've written an informative essay on Cuba's role in the development of the Cold War. In your first paragraph, you state that in 1962 Cuba became a communist country. In your second paragraph, you state that: "In 1961 after a long period of mutual help between Cuba and the USSR, Fidel Castro declares officially that the island will be ruled under the doctrines of communism." Other sources indicate that it was in 1959 that Fidel Castro overthrew Fulgenico Battista and initiated communist rule in Cuba. At any rate, your report was interesting and I would have liked to have read more. Nice effort!
    • 13/06/2004
    • 09:18:53
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Great Depression

    You make some interesting points in your essay on the causes and consequences of the Great Depression but I would have liked to have read more. For example, you might have devoted a separate paragraph or two explaining each of the following causes: investing on margin, land speculation in Florida , a decade long agricultural recession, irresponsible loan policies by banks, and a lack of regulation of capital markets.I agree that some of the consequences of the Great Depression were years of extended economic downturn, decline and unemployment. You might also have mentioned other consequences such as the rise of tyrants like Adolf Hitler who took advantage of the hard times to manipulate their countrymen into placing trust in them. It is widely agreed that passage of the Smoot-Hawley Tariff exacerbated the situation, but you need to change the year of its passage from 190 to 1930.What you've written isn't bad, but you need to provide more detail and explanation as the Great Depression was one of the more momentous events of the twentieth century, causing widespread human misery, and merits a fuller discussion. I hope that what I have said helps you with revision and I will forego rating your essay for now.
    • 13/06/2004
    • 08:43:39
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • English

    Thanks for a good discussion of how the English language has changed over time. I particularly liked the examples you chose in support of your points. Your essay was informative and interesting. I appreciate your inclusion of references to aid those who wish to do further research. Nice work!
    • 13/06/2004
    • 01:47:01
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Environmental justice

    I appreciate your good essay on environmental justice regarding fish farms and the First Nation communities of British Columbia. The position of the United States Environmental Protection Agency that all people should be treated fairly with regard to environmental laws is a reasonable one. Unfortunately, achieving lofty ideals is not as easy as setting them down on paper. More attention should be paid to this important area in order to mitigate the harm done to any group of people who are disproportionately affected by harmful environmental influences. Your report could have been made even better by the addition of a bibliography. Recommended reading!
    • 13/06/2004
    • 01:39:01
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Thomas Paine

    Yours is a good biography of one of the more influential writers who was instrumental in the birth of the United States. While wars are waged with guns, their commencement can be hastened with words. Few men of his time captured in print the revolutionary spirit as did Thomas Paine. Your report was enlightening and interesting. Quality work!
    • 13/06/2004
    • 01:01:25
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • A Response

    In an ideal world "empathy and reason" would abound. In a utopian society, they would indeed be "essential to keeping us civil." Unfortunately, William Golding did not view the world as being ideal because of human nature. We may not agree with Golding's views, but it is essential to understand what he was saying if a mature appreciation of his novel is to be gained.We may all hope for a world filled with empathy and reason, but Golding felt that laws kept mankind civil. The island setting of his novel was a microcosm of what Golding felt the world would become in the absence of laws because of what he viewed as the darker nature of mankind.
    • 13/06/2004
    • 00:45:33
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Huckleberry Fin

    You have written a good essay on Mark Twain's popular novel. Huckleberry Fin is not just a children's book and I liked how you explored how Twain's work questions humans and their relationship with social authority. I agree with you that one reason people may resent authority is related to unfamiliarity with the need for it. It is only human nature to fear what we dont't understand. You are also right that this has broader implications. Prejudice is often based on unfamiliarity. It's ironic that Twain may have been trying to make a point about tolerance when he is often criticized for some of the language he used in his books in order to add a touch of realism. Nicely done!
    • 13/06/2004
    • 00:25:19
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Different Aspects Of Science

    Thank you for a good science essay focusing on the properties of matter. Your paper did a nice job of covering the basics of matter and also delved a bit deeper into physics and chemistry. Your report was thorough and informative. Well done!
    • 13/06/2004
    • 00:10:23
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Designer Babies

    I'm appreciative of your good essay on whether designer babies will be changing the nature of Mother Nature. I am in substantial agreement with your position that genetic engineering should be used to fight disease and deformity, rather than achieving the goal of having "perfect" children. However, it does seem inevitable that those who can afford it will pay for genetic engineering in order that their children might have every advantage money can buy starting from birth. I'm not sure this will lead to doom and destruction, but I would certainly not view it as a positive development. Your report was probing and incisive. Good going!
    • 12/06/2004
    • 23:58:45
    • Score: 11 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Communication

    This is a good essay on how to use four communication responses appropriately. I particularly like your discussion relating to the importance of effective listening. Too often when we listen to others, we're thinking about what we want to say rather than really paying attention.Active listening involves really hearing what the other person is saying so that appropriate feedback can be given. Too few people realize that the best communicators tend to be the best listeners. Your report is well expressed and thought out. Thumbs up!
    • 12/06/2004
    • 23:40:18
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Goals

    You've written an interesting essay on a subject which many people acknowledge is important but few get around to. Goal setting is quite important and those who set realistic goals have taken a first step toward achieving them. I hope you attain all of the goals that you have set out in your paper. Your use of the first person in your essay was appropriate and your candid expressions can be quite colorful. Way to go!
    • 12/06/2004
    • 14:45:08
    • Score: 11 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Animal Farm

    Thanks for a good essay in which you focused on one topic from Orwell's classic novel and explored that topic well. Illiteracy can indeed be a huge problem for those unfortunate to be unable to read and I liked how you related a fictional component in the novel to real life. Your paper was informative and interesting. Nice job!
    • 12/06/2004
    • 14:34:28
    • Score: 12 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • Duplicate Submission

    You make some interesting points in your essay on traffic problems in China. Your discussion of the causes of the problems and your recommended solutions are well expressed. I would have liked to have read a bit more on the subject. Nice effort! Of course, it's only necessary to submit your paper once.
    • 12/06/2004
    • 14:12:10
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Basketball

    As a basketball fan, I can appreciate the effort you put into your essay. I liked your use of the first person which lent a personal touch to your paper. In some places, I might have explained the rules of the game a bit differently but I know what you meant.When I read Rule 5, I thought of something that former Boston Celtic center Bill Russell used to say regarding the commonly held belief that football is a contact sport. Although he may not have said it first, he liked to quip that basketball is a contact sport but football is a collision sport. I've suffered injuries from playing both sports and the rules never helped with healing.I liked the way that you briefly mentioned the history of basketball before you provided your overview of the rules and then wrapped up explaining how the rules had changed over time. Your report had effective transitions and a smooth flow. Fine effort!
    • 12/06/2004
    • 14:07:19
    • Score: 18 out of 18 people found this comment useful.
  • Sci Fi Part 3

    As was true of the prior two parts, you've done a very good job with this installment as well. The dialog continues to have a real life quality. I liked how you provided an interlude from the suspense of the first two parts while you allowed the relationship between Bryan and Charlie to build. I am looking forward to seeing your next submission. Recommended reading!
    • 12/06/2004
    • 14:04:16
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Affonso I

    Yours is a well documented and researched biography of King Affonso I of the Congo. I confess to not knowing as much about African history as I probably should which is why I enjoyed learning about Affonso's life and accomplishments, particularly his anti-slavery work. After reading your report, I can see now why King Affonso I came to be known as the people's king. Your paper was enlightening and interesting. Quality work!
    • 11/06/2004
    • 19:12:02
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Basketball

    You have written an informative essay comparing and contrasting the rules of the NBA and WNBA. I liked the way that you not only mentioned the similarities and differences, but also discussed the ramifications. Your report was interesting and knowledgeable. Fine effort!
    • 11/06/2004
    • 18:59:01
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Pasteur

    You make some interesting points in your biography of one of the most famous scientists in history. Louis Pasteur's contributions to science were so important that they affect our lives even today. I noted that your paragraphs tended to be short and you may want to expand on them. Pasteur was such an eminent scientist that many others would probably want to read more about him also. Nice effort!
    • 11/06/2004
    • 18:49:27
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Organizational Analysis

    Thank you for a very good essay on organizational analysis and I particularly found valuable your discussion of business ethics. For the long-term benefit of the organization, it is a wise managment policy to practice good ethics. The collapse of many large companies recently can be attributed to a lapse in ethics. Apart from it making sound business sense, dealing with others ethically is simply the right thing to do. Your paper used effective transitions and had a smooth flow. Great job!
    • 11/06/2004
    • 18:39:00
    • Score: 9 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Creativity

    I'm appreciative of your good essay on creativity in management. As business becomes increasingly competitive, it will be more important than ever that managers formulate innovative strategies to ensure that their organizations succeed. You used headings well and that made your paper easy to read. Your report was well documented and researched. Nice work!
    • 11/06/2004
    • 18:25:05
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Racial profiling

    This is a fine essay on why racial profiling is wrong and why it should end in America. You make some good points on a controversial topic. I found your paper incisive and thoughtful. I would have liked to have seen your concluding paragraph in which you sum up your key points come last. Your report would also have benefited from the addition of a bibliography. Good effort!
    • 11/06/2004
    • 18:17:53
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • The Metamorphosis

    You've written a fine essay on Franz Kafka's ground-breaking novel. It's difficult for me to think of the hapless Gregor Samsa without reflecting on how an unexpected circumstance can dramatically alter our well ordered lives and make us question the meaning of our existence. Your report was informative and interesting. Commendable!
    • 11/06/2004
    • 18:03:58
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Miss Havisham

    Thanks for a fine essay on how Charles Dickens explores the theme of isolation in his portrayal of Miss Havisham in "Great Expectations." Miss Havisham is one of the more tragic figures in literature who serves as a reminder to us all of the danger of living in the past and refusing to move on. Your report was analytical and thoughtful. Nice effort!
    • 11/06/2004
    • 17:51:12
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Irving

    I appreciate your extensive biography of a great author. Many have heard of Washington Irving and have read one or two of his classic short stories which are commonly assigned in American grade schools, but your report has provided a wealth of valuable and interesting information about the writer. Your detailed and in-depth report could have benefited from a bibliography. Recommended reading!
    • 11/06/2004
    • 17:40:41
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Mark Twain

    Yours is an informative biography of one of the greatest American writers of all time. Mark Twain's books and short stories were highly entertaining in no small part because of his piercing wit. The presence of internal citations in your report suggests the need for a bibliography. Good job!
    • 11/06/2004
    • 17:27:30
    • Score: 11 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • Gandhi

    You have written a good biography on one of the truly outstanding figures of the twentieth century. Mahatma Gandhi's nonviolent approach to achieving social change would serve as the model for a number of noteworthy reformers who followed him. Your report was interesting and descriptive. Well done!
    • 11/06/2004
    • 17:13:24
    • Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Ben Harper

    Thank you for an interesting biography on a talented performer. Your essay on Ben Harper's life and artistic style was informative and interesting. I would only suggest that you break up your second paragraph which is somewhat long into smaller paragraphs. Quality work!
    • 11/06/2004
    • 17:04:34
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Spielberg

    I'm appreciative of your fine biography of one of my favorite directors. From lowly beginnings, Steven Spielberg has certainly risen to master his art as few others have. I can't think of anyone who has in recent times directed a higher percentage of quality films than Spielberg. Your essay was enlightening and interesting. Commendable!
    • 11/06/2004
    • 16:54:10
    • Score: 12 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • Divorce Rate

    You make some interesting points in your essay on the causes of the rise in the divorce rate in the US. Divorce is a growing problem and one of the reasons our parents and grandparents tended to stay married longer is that they didn't have such unrealistic expectations. Now, many people expect to be happy all of the time, which is not going to happen. Marriage inevitably brings some unhappy times and it is ironic that in an age of communications, people seem less able to convey their feelings. Fine effort!
    • 11/06/2004
    • 16:39:23
    • Score: 10 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Colleen

    You've written a good essay on a debilitating condition. Anorexia Nervosa afflicts many young women especially and can have tragic consequences. Centering the report around your friend gave it a human interest quality which was quite effective in sustaining interest. Your paper was well documented and researched. Great job!
    • 11/06/2004
    • 16:14:29
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Charisma

    Thanks for a good essay on charismatic leadership. The introduction was effective in sparking interest in your topic. Your use of headings made this an easy read. The report was well structured and skillfully presented. Your conclusions, with which I agree, were well founded. Nicely done!
    • 11/06/2004
    • 16:06:36
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • College Essay

    Yours is a good college essay and I especially liked your introduction which effectively pulls the reader in. My positive impression of your essay was not hurt by the fact that J.D. Salinger's "The Catcher in the Rye" is one of my favorite books. The book you've chosen to center your essay around provides focus and unifies the essay well. Fine effort!
    • 11/06/2004
    • 15:54:31
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Gender roles

    I appreciate your good essay on a compelling film which underscores the importance of individuality regardless of gender. "Bend It Like Beckham" is a movie which I would recommend any parent to see ("bend it" means not only a hooking soccer shot but also has another meaning when applied to parents who tend to be too controlling).Many parents have tried to force children to accept roles in keeping with societal expectations as to what's appropriate for males and females, while children should decide what they want to be with the guidance, not the mandate, of parents. Nicely done!
    • 11/06/2004
    • 15:52:23
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Military Ethics

    You have written a well documented and researched essay on ethics in the military. Although West Point cadets have not been immune from dishonesty, I have always admired their code which reads: "A cadet will not lie, cheat or steal, nor tolerate those who do."It's the "tolerate those who do" part that's most tricky. There are those who think that they are honest while knowing that their friends lie, cheat or steal. I beg to differ. Dishonesty is contagious and nobody is immune from catching it from one's friends.If our friends lie, cheat or steal, maybe it's time to find new friends. Nice work!
    • 11/06/2004
    • 10:16:11
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Terrific

    Thank you for a very good essay on George Orwell's memorable novel. To paraphrase Orwell, some essays are more equal than others, but yours definitely is not. Your report on Animal Farm stands on its own two feet, so to speak, as an excellent summary of the book. I found what you have written to be valuable and engaging. Fine job!
    • 11/06/2004
    • 09:50:30
    • Score: 12 out of 13 people found this comment useful.
  • Animal experimentation

    This is a good essay on a controversial topic which reasonable people can disagree on. I can understand the concern over using animals in experiments to determine the safety of products such as cosmetics. After all, is human vanity more important than an animal's well being? Still, products need to be tested for safety before exposing people to possible danger through their use. I wish some better way could be found to protect both humans and animals. Well done!
    • 11/06/2004
    • 09:40:36
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Wal-Mart

    You've written a good essay on a company which has been widely praised by some and criticized by others. I liked your SWOT analysis and would only suggest that you devote a separate paragraph to the organizational strengths, weaknesses, environmental opportunities, and threats to the company. Your case study was informative and interesting. Wonderful effort!
    • 11/06/2004
    • 09:31:22
    • Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Rip Van Winkle

    Yours is a good essay on Washington Irving's memorable story. I first read "Rip Van Winkle" as a child and didn't at first appreciate the richness of Irving's storytelling. It is not just another children's story and much is to be gained from a second reading when one becomes a little older. Great job!
    • 11/06/2004
    • 07:46:46
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • John Updike

    You have written a good essay on the works of the famous author. John Updike's character of Rabbit Angstrom has become synonymous with middle aged suburban angst. Your report was well documented and researched. Nicely done!
    • 11/06/2004
    • 07:38:53
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Brown v. Board of Education

    Thank you for a good essay on a landmark Supreme Court decision. Brown v. Board of Education not only impacted your life, but also the lives of many others. The separate but equal doctrine of the prior Plessy ruling was inherently unfair and it is unfortunate that the High Court didn't strike it down earlier. Fine effort!
    • 11/06/2004
    • 07:29:49
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • The Secret Life of Bees

    This is a good essay on Sue Monk Kidd's important book. The Secret Life of Bees conveys a vital message about tolerance whcih we would all do well to heed. Your paper is interesting and descriptive of the book. Nice work!
    • 11/06/2004
    • 07:14:12
    • Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Genres

    You've written a fine essay on the issue of whether genres tend to develop as audiences become bored with formulaic films. You chose good examples in support of your position. Your report was well expressed and thought out. Good job!
    • 11/06/2004
    • 07:04:44
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Sam Adams

    Thanks for a good biography of a true American patriot. Rather than for his acts of patriotism, most people associate the name of Sam Adams with a popular brand of Boston beer. Shortly after he graduated from college, Sam Adams and his father set up a brewery and the rest is history. Your essay is highly readable and engaging. Well done!
    • 11/06/2004
    • 06:55:51
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Death of a Salesman

    Yours is a good essay on Arthur Miller's tragic play. Although fictional, the story is quite believable and is the sort of thing that could very well happen. Your report was highly readable and engaging. Wonderful effort!
    • 10/06/2004
    • 23:45:42
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • St Francis

    You have written a good essay on the life of St Francis of Assisi. Few people born to wealth would give it up to suffer a harsh life of poverty. His story is an inspiration to us all. St Francis served as an example that true meaning in life doesn't come from helping oneself but rather from helping others. Quality work!
    • 10/06/2004
    • 23:28:23
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Ethics

    Thank you for a good essay on ethics in business. Based on recent scandals from Enron to Worldcom, this is certainly a timely and important topic which can have widespread impact. Many ordinary people lost their retirement accounts and undiversified personal portfolios because of the lapse of personal and organizational ethics at Enron. If you lie, cheat, and steal in lesser ways you are likely to lie, cheat, and steal in big ways. I wonder how many of the big crooks at Enron started out as petty thieves. Recommended reading!
    • 10/06/2004
    • 23:10:24
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • All the President's Men

    This is a good essay on the popular movie starring Robert Redford and Dustin Hoffman. Their real life counterparts, Bob Woodward and Carl Bernstein, did outstanding work in helping to uncover details surrounding the Watergate break-in. What struck me when I saw the movie long ago was how tenacious reporters have to be in order to surmount the many obstacles that can be placed in the way of their coming up with the facts behind a monumental story. Great job!
    • 10/06/2004
    • 22:49:54
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • A Comparison

    You've written a good essay on the similarities between Adolf Hitler and Napoleon Bonaparte. I am struck by the amazing parallels in your comparison (please note the correct spelling for your title which is an especially important part of an essay). Whenever I read about such similarities, whether it's Hitler and Napoleon or Lincoln and Kennedy, I can't help but wonder at the uncanny coincidences. Of course, not all of the parallels are coincidental as both Hitler and Napoleon had dreams of conquest, but still some of the similarities are thought provoking. Nice work!
    • 10/06/2004
    • 22:16:08
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • A Poem for Emily

    Thanks for a fine poetry analysis of Miller Williams' beautiful "A Poem for Emily." You are right when you say it is a simple poem and easily understood, yet touching. To me, it is a tribute not only to a grandparent's love but also to the enduing quality of poetry which will survive long after we die. By the way, the rhyme pattern of the last stanza is ABAAB. Good job!
    • 10/06/2004
    • 21:59:55
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Communication

    Yours is a good essay on the importance of communication in the workplace. Effective communication is vital for success in the workplace and your convincing and thought provoking report discusses a number of key factors that affect communication. I would have liked to have seen a listing of any works consulted in support of some of the facts cited in your essay. Well done!
    • 10/06/2004
    • 21:36:05
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Honda Corp

    You have written a good essay on the type of high level report which the chief executive officer of a major corporation such as Honda would benefit from reviewing. Although the report is not too long for a CEO, many high level corporate officers like such reports to begin with a section titled Executive Summary which encapsulates the key findings. Based on the quality of the Executive Summary, the CEO whose time is very limited may not feel the need to read the remainder of the report. Your use of headings is exactly what top officers like to see in a report. Your report was analytical and thoughtful. Wonderful effort!
    • 10/06/2004
    • 21:24:05
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Comparative Study

    Thank you for a good essay on two men whom I would not have thought to compare. You draw some interesting comparisons between Nelson Mandela and Adolf Hitler, but what stands out most in my mind is their fundamental difference. Adolf Hitler used his ability to bring his nation to the brink of ruin by 1945, while Nelson Mandela used his talents to lift his country up. One man worked for evil and the other for good. Fundamentally, these two men are far more different than they are similar and so too was the impact they each had on the world. Quality work!
    • 10/06/2004
    • 21:09:58
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Men in Wigs

    This is a good essay on the causes of the American Revolution. I agree that economics was a leading cause of the Revolutionary War and so too was the desire for liberty. It's hard to say which was more important and at this point it is largely an academic exercise to speculate.Lest we forget that there were plenty of men in wigs in England who were all too willing to tax the American colonists as much as they could get away with, much of the blame for the American Revolution lies with an insensitive policy toward the colonies by King George III. Had a more reasonable man sat on the throne in 1775, war might have been averted. Great job!
    • 10/06/2004
    • 20:52:32
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Study Skills

    You've written a good essay on study skills and I think that many of the things you say would apply to non adults as they do to adults. You have provided a great many valuable study tips which I'm sure many on this site will benefit from. Your well documented report made good use of effective transitions which gave it a smooth flow. Nicely done!
    • 10/06/2004
    • 17:41:55
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • The Birds

    Thanks for a good essay on one of Alfred Hitchcock's more frightening movies. At least it was frightening when I saw it as a small child. Perhaps one of the things that makes the movie so scary is that danger emanates from a source which we take for granted as being so harmless. They didn't call Hitchcock the master of suspense for nothing and his skills were in full display in "The Birds." I liked the way that you covered the movie more deeply than just as a suspense thriller. Fine effort!
    • 10/06/2004
    • 17:31:34
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Frankenstein

    Yours is a good essay on Mary Shelley's timeless classic. The question which you explore of whether Mary Shelley attempts to shape the values of her society more than she attempts to reflect them is an interesting one. In your probing and incisive report, you have provided substantial support for your conclusion that the latter was her objective. I agree with you about the novel's relevance even today. Outward ugliness is not as repugnant as the ugliness that can reside inside. Nice work!
    • 10/06/2004
    • 17:20:00
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Rome

    You have written a good essay on why Rome fell. Some ask not why Rome fell, but rather why did it take so long given the many weaknesses which plagued the western part of the empire in the waning days of Rome's glory. At any rate, your paper is convincing and thought provoking. I agree with you that Rome's fall may have implications for some of today's leaders. Good job!
    • 10/06/2004
    • 17:07:23
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Scarlet Letter

    Thank you for a good essay on Nathaniel Hawthorne's immortal novel. Your report was skillfully presented and well structured. Your use of headings made your presentation easy to follow. You've covered the most important elements of literature (theme, plot, characterization, etc.) and have done so in a well organized fashion. I liked the brief biographical information on the author but might have placed it early in the paper. It's of little consequence and you've done well.
    • 10/06/2004
    • 16:56:16
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Strategic Plan Development

    This is a good essay on a strategic plan for a privately owned Canadian manufacturing company specializing in biodegradable personal hygiene products. The strengths, weaknesses, opportunities and threats are laid out in clear fashion. Your use of headings makes your report easy to read. Well done!
    • 10/06/2004
    • 16:44:59
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Employee Benefits

    You've written a good essay on employee benefits. The value of personnel benefits to employees is undeniable and the cost to companies providing the benefits is skyrocketing, especially in the area of health care. Unfortunately, many employers are therefore requiring employees to bear an increased share of the cost of benefits. In the worst cases, companies are eliminating benefit packages altogether when efforts to scale them back do not produce the desired savings.This seems to be an area where the government should take increased responsibility in encouraging companies to provide benefits. This could be done most readily through more generous tax incentives. Employees whose companies do not provide benefits should also receive more generous deductions for picking up the cost themselves.
    • 10/06/2004
    • 16:34:59
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Entrepreneurs

    Thanks for a good essay on the motives for entrepreneurs to set up a business. Your report was analytical and thoughtful. I liked the personal touch which your use of the first person lent to your paper. Great work!
    • 10/06/2004
    • 16:22:51
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Sociology report

    Yours is an analytical and thoughtful essay which looks at cosmetics and explains what it says about consumers and society. It's unfortunate that women especially are burdened with a portrayal of attractiveness which is usually unattainable for any but the most fortunate. Men increasingly are also being targeted by advertisers who know how to appeal to human vanity.It's too bad that more attention is not paid to developing a beautiful interior because even the most glamorous super model will find that one day beauty fades no matter how much is spent on cosmetics. Our priorities are definitely misplaced when more may be spent on improving exterior appearances than on inner beauty, which doesn't fade as easily with time. In fact, it may even be enhanced with the passing years.
    • 10/06/2004
    • 16:01:06
    • Score: 13 out of 13 people found this comment useful.
  • Slavery

    You've written a good essay on one of the more despicable institutions which has burdened mankind. When we read a historical account of slavery, and yours is well structured and skillfully presented, we may fall into the false notion that slavery is a thing of the past. Unfortunately, slavery is yet changing while it is still with us today. There are parts of the world in which young women and even girls are sold into a miserable life of servitude and degradation.It may be a twenty-first century world but we have regrettably still not fully cast off the deplorable practices of past centuries. The one change I'd like to see occur is for slavery to be abolished once and for all throughout the world, but that might be hard to do for economic reasons, which do not justify one human being owning another. There's no justification for that.
    • 10/06/2004
    • 15:44:28
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Personnel management

    Thanks for a good essay on reducing turnover and keeping the best practices in human resource management. Your proper use of headings made the information more accessible. It may be best to delete any references to figures which are not readily available. Your essay was well documented and researched. Good job!
    • 10/06/2004
    • 15:23:53
    • Score: 12 out of 13 people found this comment useful.
  • Newspapers

    Yours is a good essay on whether newspapers have become a medium of the past or if they still play a role in people's lives. I'm of the opinion that newspapers still play a role in people's lives, although it is not as important as it once was. Younger people especially get their news from the Internet or other nontraditional sources for staying up to date. Your report was highly readable and engaging. Well done!
    • 10/06/2004
    • 15:13:32
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Lord of the Flies

    You have written a good essay on William Golding's timeless novel. I'm an admirer of Franklin Roosevelt, who was arguably the greatest president of the twentieth century, and I agree with the famous quote of his with which you conclude your report. Golding, however, might not have agreed. He might have remarked, "We have nothing to fear but human nature itself."Regardless, a different quote comes to mind when I think about this book: "We have met the enemy and they are us." Golding did not have much faith in human nature and felt that society would deteriorate into anarchy without rules to constrain conduct. It's a disturbing thought but he may have been right. At any rate, yours is a wonderful effort!
    • 10/06/2004
    • 15:02:16
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • To Kill a Mockingbird

    Thank you for a good essay on Harper Lee's classic novel. To Kill a Mockingbird is one of the most important books of the twentieth century and I do not easily tire of reading essays on it, even though it is one of the more popular topics on the site. Your summary was insightful and knowledgeable. Quality work!
    • 10/06/2004
    • 14:49:59
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Animation

    This is a good essay on the history of animation. Your report was in-depth and well written. The paper contains a wealth of detailed information on the subject which would make it an excellent research tool. Great job!
    • 10/06/2004
    • 14:41:26
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Comedy vs. Tragedy

    You've written a good essay on certain parallels which can be drawn between William Shakespeare's plays, "A Midsummer Night's Dream" and "Romeo and Juliet." Because one is a comedy and the other a tragedy, I have never thought to compare them before. However, you point out some interesting similarities and I am in general agreement with you. Any internal citation should probably be accompanied by a bibliography. Nicely done!
    • 10/06/2004
    • 14:33:24
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Reformation

    Thanks for a good essay on the Reformation and Counter-Reformation. Your essay was detailed and fact filled. I particularly liked the art examples you chose to illustrate your points. With the dates and facts you cite, I would have liked to have seen a list of any sources consulted. Fine effort!
    • 10/06/2004
    • 14:16:44
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Music

    Yours is a good essay on whether music downloading should be banned. Your presentation is well expressed and thought out. This can certainly be a controversial topic and hopefully some middle ground can be arrived at which will be fair to the music industry and to those who wish to download music. A bibliography would have been a welcome addition when statistics and quotations are used. Nice work!
    • 10/06/2004
    • 14:05:52
    • Score: 12 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • Environment

    You have written a good essay on international environmental institutions and committees. Your paper was thorough and informative. The internal citations suggest that a bibliography should have been included also. Good job!
    • 10/06/2004
    • 13:53:28
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • MRP

    Thank you for a good essay in which you give an overview of material requirements planning. Like everyone else, I make mistakes and can overlook a typo or grammatical error if the content is informative. Your report was interesting and descriptive. Well done!
    • 10/06/2004
    • 13:45:40
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • World War I

    You have written a good essay about the horrors of trench warfare and the gruesome misery that was the lot of the World War I soldier. When I read your discussion of death by poison gas and machine gun fire, I thought of one of the most famous poems written in "The Great War." For some idea of how ghastly it was to die from a gas attack, I recommend the poem "Dulce et Decorum Est" by the famed British officer Wilfred Owen who died of machine gun fire at the age of 25. It's hardly bland.
    • 09/06/2004
    • 14:25:56
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Sci Fi Part 2

    This is a good follow-on to the first part and is an interesting lead-up to your next installment, as you've left unresolved the tense situation which concluded Part One. Although I must admit to not being much of a science fiction fan, I liked this as much as Part One. Well done!
    • 09/06/2004
    • 14:22:20
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Sci Fi Part 1

    You're off to a good start with your science fiction story. In referring to the protagonist's late girlfriend, I liked the slight foreshadowing of "A freak accident people thought." I also liked the suspenseful ending which made me want to read Part 2. Good job!
    • 09/06/2004
    • 14:18:09
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Hills

    You've written a good analysis of Hemingway's classic short story. My main suggestion would be to change "knieving" to "conniving" as it appears more than once in your essay. You are right when you observe that the man in the story is manipulative while Jig wants to please him, although she has reservations about having an abortion. Toward the end of the story, she seems to begin seeing through him and may have the baby after all. Hemingway's dialogue is true to life and the story's situation is quite believable. Nicely done!
    • 08/06/2004
    • 21:45:38
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Lincoln Douglas Debates

    Yours is a good essay on one of the most momentous, yet underrated, events in American history. Were it not for the debates, Lincoln may not have been elected president and the entire course of events that followed would have been altered. Rather than the joint press conferences that are called debates in current presidential races, the Lincoln Douglas debates were marathon affairs in which the candidates engaged each other at length. I appreciate that you included a bibliography which will make further research easier. Fine job!
    • 08/06/2004
    • 21:07:19
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Dr Seuss

    This is a very good biography of Dr Seuss (please note the correct spelling of his name for your essay's title). Theodore Geisel was a great deal wiser than many people give him credit for. My favorite quote which is attributed to him is, "Be who you are and say what you want, because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind." I've long thought that was pretty good advice. You report seems well researched and has a helpful bibliography. Nice job!
    • 08/06/2004
    • 20:48:36
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Jackie Robinson

    Thank you for a very good biography of a true sports pioneer. It's somewhat hard to believe that less than sixty years ago talented players such as Jackie Robinson were prevented from playing Major League baseball because of the color of their skin. Fortunately, we have come a long way since.I appreciate the bibliography which you included at the end of your well documented report so that those of us who wish to do further reading may do so. Great job!
    • 08/06/2004
    • 20:00:39
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • British Plans

    You have written a good essay on British policy in the Middle East during World War I and its effects long after the war ended. You have illustrated how political intrigue can have lasting consequences, which can be especially dangerous in one of the more explosive regions of the world. Great job!
    • 08/06/2004
    • 16:40:09
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Hegel

    You have written a good biography of one of the more famous German philosophers. I particularly liked the way that you provided headings within the essay to make it easier to read. Nice job!
    • 08/06/2004
    • 15:25:01
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Unhelpful

    I didn't start the essay by saying, "This essay is about." Unfortunately, your comment is not very helpful, pixel_for_life. Rather than telling the author of an essay what not to do, you should state specifically what you believe should have been written instead. General statements such as yours are too vague to be of much use. For the most part, I find it hard to trust the judgment of someone who dogmatically uses the word "never." To speak in such absolutes is not often associated with careful reflection. Many of us can learn from the late President Reagan who was known for saying, "Never say never."It's not your fault if you were indoctrinated into thinking narrowmindedly, but you may find that your horizons expand if you're more open to other ways of doing things than merely what you have been taught. Before you write a comment, I suggest you read the previous comments, such as the one I wrote to Djiraaphe titled "Your comment." Had you read that comment, you might have realized that the point you raise has already been addressed. I do appreciate, however, your telling me that the essay was well written.
    • 07/06/2004
    • 18:44:18
    • Score: 77 out of 89 people found this comment useful.
  • Eggy

    I enjoyed reading your comment. While we may start an essay differently, I understand and respect your position. Given the subject of my essay, I'm tempted to paraphrase Thomas and say, "Do not go gentle into that teacher's plight. Rage, rage against the dying of your right (to be different)."I only wish that some teachers wouldn't be so dogmatic in insisting that there is only one right way to begin an essay. Of course, the one right way is what they like best. A more commonsense approach would be to recognize that there are several acceptable ways to begin an essay. It would be pretty boring if everyone were forced to conform to some arbitrary rule as to how to start an essay merely to please someone's personal preference.I know that you're not in favor of mindless conformity, but I've been in classes in which the teacher was. It just seems a bit silly to be so rigid when we're all different. Some of us like to get right down to business and others prefer to take a more leisurely approach. I wouldn't much enjoy a world populated with all of one type or the other. Differences in writing style can be interesting. I hope we're never forced to all be the same. Cheers!
    • 07/06/2004
    • 01:06:19
    • Score: 59 out of 61 people found this comment useful.
  • College essay

    This was a fascinating college essay which I thoroughly enjoyed reading. As I read what you've written, it's difficult for me to believe that you're not a native speaker of the language. This is a tribute to your high intelligence, not to mention what must be a rare talent for quickly learning a new language. I just have one complaint. I wanted to see the photo. Oh well, I guess I'll just have to be satisfied with your enjoyable and engaging essay. Great work!
    • 06/06/2004
    • 23:49:14
    • Score: 13 out of 15 people found this comment useful.
  • Diamondize1

    I appreciate your comment and assure you that you are being far from shallow when you remark about Dylan Thomas' use of the expression "blinding sight." Employing an oxymoron such as blinding sight can be an effective poetic device. An oxymoron is a form of paradox and Thomas was a master of the paradoxical. Perhaps Thomas' most famous paradox can be found in the last two lines of his semi-autobiographical poem of lost innocence, "Fern Hill," in which the poet writes: "Time held me green and dying / Though I sang in my chains like the sea."Like you, I also find Thomas' use of expressions such as "blinding sight" to be quite appealing. Since a villanelle only contains nineteen lines, and eight of the nineteen lines serve as refrains, it is essential that the words in the remaining eleven lines be chosen with utmost care. Blinding sight is an excellent example of how Thomas obtained economy of expression by using a paradox to create stunning imagery. Thomas' unparalleled ability to combine words for maximum effect makes this one of my favorite poems and a real pleasure to read aloud. Audiences particularly enjoyed Thomas' oral rendition of this poem.
    • 06/06/2004
    • 09:23:57
    • Score: 46 out of 51 people found this comment useful.
  • Nick

    Thanks for your kind comment. I'm not a great writer and probably never will be, but it was nice of you to say so just the same. Since most people probably don't fully appreciate how highly structured a villanelle is, I thought it would be worthwhile to devote a little less than two hundred words explaining the form. What Dylan Thomas accomplished in his poem is all the more remarkable because of the constraints of the villanelle.Villanelles require the repetition of lines and that often introduces an air of monotony. Thomas overcame that by composing lines to be repeated which would be powerful, both in imagery and message. Largely through the expert use of enjambment, Thomas achieved a conversational tone in his villanelle which not many others have succeeded in doing. Attaining a natural tone is one of the more difficult objectives to achieve with a villanelle, which often ends up having a sing song quality.But much more than a natural tone, Thomas achieved a magical quality in his poem that I haven't come close to emulating in the villanelles I've written. Few have come close to accomplishing what Thomas achieved in his villanelle which is considered one of the finest ever composed. It's not hard to write a villanelle, but it's extremely difficult to write a really good one. Last year marked the fiftieth anniversary of the tragic death of Dylan Thomas at the age of 39, but nobody celebrated the loss of a great talent who had mastered a poetic form as few others have.
    • 05/06/2004
    • 16:05:35
    • Score: 57 out of 63 people found this comment useful.
  • Your comment

    Thank you, Djiraaphe, for your comment. Because this was a personal interpretation of a poem, you might expect it to differ somewhat from a typical argumentative, persuasive, or informative essay. To address your concerns, I have excepted below the original text of a tutorial on essay writing (you may find the complete text at http://www.liv.ac.uk/sspsw/online_mods/soci102/essay-writing/1stperson.htm)."One question that many students ask is whether they are 'allowed' to use the first person in their essays and assignments i.e. to include phrases such as:In this essay I will outline the main evidence for…I think that in order to answer this question it is important to …To some extent, opinion is divided on this one. There are still some researchers and lecturers who think that it is inappropriate to use 'I' or 'We' within a piece of academic writing. However, within the social sciences there are many well-respected authors who use the first person."I could have cited other examples, but the above seems to specifically address your personal aversion to using phrases such as "In this essay" and "I will." Some essayists would consider your observation about using such phrases to be a bit dogmatic and rigid, although there are a number of inflexible pedants who would agree with your insistence that phrases which you don't like not be used in essays.
    • 03/06/2004
    • 14:53:08
    • Score: 133 out of 139 people found this comment useful.
  • Plastics

    You have written a highly informative essay on a material that is all around us. Despite the ubiquitous nature of plastic, many people are relatively uninformed about it and your fine essay will be particularly useful in providing needed background information. I learned a great deal from your enlightening discussion of plastic manufacturing methods. Nicely done!
    • 03/06/2004
    • 11:08:31
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Romeo and Juliet

    Yours is a very well written essay on the role of the nurse in Shakespeare's Romeo and Juliet. You have provided a thorough and well thought out character study of someone in the play who is not generally given as much attention as she deserves. I especially liked the way you interwove appropriate portions from Shakespeare's text into your interesting analysis. Great job!
    • 03/06/2004
    • 10:55:26
    • Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Tess of the D'urbervilles

    Thank you for a great essay on Thomas Hardy's classic novel. You have done a really good job in analyzing Hardy's use of symbolism and his presentation of rustic characters in Tess of the D'urbervilles. Your essay is thorough, well written, and clearly presented. Excellent work!
    • 03/06/2004
    • 10:38:00
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Marketing Plan

    Thank you for a well thought out marketing plan for a system management consulting firm. Top management would especially find the executive summary useful. In fact, the entire report was written from a top level viewpoint and you were correct to relegate many of the details to a supporting presentation for lower levels of management. Your use of headings throughout your report made it highly readable. I particularly liked the keys to success with which you concluded your paper. Nice work!
    • 02/06/2004
    • 13:52:12
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Short Circuit Calculations

    Yours is a good essay on the basic calculations and transformer sizing relating to short circuit capacity. You've done well in explaining a highly technical topic in an understandable manner. I appreciate your inclusion of a bibliography following your well researched report so that those who wish to do further research in this area may do so. Great job!
    • 02/06/2004
    • 13:49:54
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Computer Purchase

    You've done a good job in detailing the process you went through to find a replacement computer. While it's always possible to find a better price, at some point the endless shopping around for the best deal must end. After all, one's time is valuable too. What's most important is that you obtained the features you wanted at a price you could afford. Many people could benefit by reviewing the systematic procedure you followed to find the right computer for you. Well done!
    • 02/06/2004
    • 13:47:13
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Questions

    Thanks, hoba, for your comment. I'm glad my teacher was more generous than you, as this was an A paper. To respond to your questions, the poem never was meant to be "received by its medieval audience" as it had no such audience since it was written some 170 years ago, long after the medieval age ended. Is it controversial? Most people would probably agree that for a husband to have his wife killed because she didn't pay him enough attention is controversial, to say the least. Is it humorous? Not too many people find a wife's murder to be a laughing matter.
    • 02/06/2004
    • 08:39:53
    • Score: 92 out of 103 people found this comment useful.
  • Chapter 3: A Culture-full Mutt.

    Great, I finally get to learn what your middle initial stands for. It was interesting to be introduced to the other members of your family. You've painted a very convincing picture of domestic life in your third chapter. As was true in the prior two chapters, the dialogue continues to be quite believable. This chapter is a particularly good example of the old writing adage about "show don't tell." By how they interact, we learn a lot about the family members and want to learn even more. I've really looking forward to the next installment. Excellent effort!
    • 02/06/2004
    • 00:36:17
    • Score: 11 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Chapter 2: Teachers and Sisters

    This is a really good follow on to the first chapter. I liked the description of teachers which began the chapter and could think of some instructors I've had who came close to your description. As was true of the first chapter, your second chapter also had well written dialogue with which you effectively moved the story along. When I read near the end of the chapter about the on-line relationship, I thought about your essay titled, "A Hard Lesson In Love." I really liked that essay and it made me want to read the third chapter all the more. Nice work!
    • 02/06/2004
    • 00:33:30
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Chapter 1: Rogue-Jane and I

    This is a very nice first chapter to your book. I especially liked the natural sounding dialogue. Writing believable dialogue is one of the more difficult tasks that faces a fiction writer, but you seem to have mastered it. I know writers who say that they can't get published because editors tell them that their dialogue is not credible, but you're not going to have that problem. Your first chapter was so well done that I eagerly wanted to read the second chapter to see what would happen next. Great job!
    • 02/06/2004
    • 00:30:41
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Intriguing

    Thank you for an interesting essay on historical events which I have not previously known about, and I'm a student of history. I liked your summary of the book's chapter on "The Jewish Conspiracy." I agree with you that the story puts an exciting spin on history. I will be looking into where I can pick up a copy of Norman Cantor's book, "In the Wake of the Plague," as your essay has piqued my curiosity enough that I want to read more. Fine work!
    • 01/06/2004
    • 20:20:45
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Thanks, waitingtosmile24

    I appreciate your kind words. Although I am American, writing in the first person isn't uniquely "an American thing." I take it you're not American but I notice that your comment is written in the first person, as is mine. It's a very natural way to write.Some of the greatest essayists of all time have written in the first person. I learned this from my best English prof who dispelled many myths about writing. He certainly wasn't stuffy and felt that writing shouldn't be stuffy either. It seems that he permanently misplaced his copy of "The Pedant's Guide to English Do's and Don'ts" and I have benefited greatly from his absentmindedness.My prof wanted his students to write with a personal touch, even in essays. He was not only a great teacher but also a fine writer whose advice I intend to follow, even if it irritates some people whose teachers may have been more rigid.
    • 01/06/2004
    • 17:57:59
    • Score: 65 out of 68 people found this comment useful.
  • Superb

    For your story to have won only second place, the first place story must have been beyond belief. Your spellbinding essay is tops in my book. That you could have composed such a story in only thirty minutes is quite a tribute to your composition abilities. I loved the suspense which you skillfully built throughout your great story. You have demonstrated a marvelous ability to effectively tell a fascinating story. I especially liked the heartwarming ending. Wonderful job!
    • 01/06/2004
    • 08:58:24
    • Score: 18 out of 18 people found this comment useful.
  • Nice job

    Thank you for a really good essay in which you demonstrate why Atticus Finch was a hero. It took great courage for Atticus to defend a black man accused of raping a white woman given the book's and film's setting. The American Film Institute thought so too and last year named him as number one in their listing of the top 100 film heroes of the past. This was one of the rare books which translated effectively to the screen as Gregory Peck in his timeless performance of over forty years ago personified the qualities which made Atticus a hero. Well done!
    • 31/05/2004
    • 23:53:27
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Pardoner's Tale

    Thank you for a very good essay analyzing an interesting passage from Chaucer's Canterbury Tales. You've succeeded in showing in your well researched paper why Chaucer's satire of the Pardoner was so powerful. I appreciate your inclusion of a bibliography so that others may follow up on your research. Great job!
    • 31/05/2004
    • 23:16:28
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Wonderful

    Thank you for an engrossing essay on a pirate whom you have made come alive with your talent for retelling history. I'm glad to know that you are an assistant teacher for children aged 4 through 6 because you have a real flair for recounting history in a way that likely enchants your students. You have shown that history doesn't have to be about boring facts and dates, but rather can be entertaining and fun when told by someone with a talent for making olden times entertaining.I hope you stick with education because we need teachers like you. You've displayed an ability to write in an interesting yet informative manner which undoubtedly captures the interest and imagination of your students. Your closing questions were quite effective in sparking further interest. Great job!
    • 29/05/2004
    • 16:14:16
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Danni

    Thanks for the nice things you say in your comments. Instead of "the purpose of this poem" I think you mean "the purpose of this essay." I'm sure there are teachers who say it's a no no. Teachers who said similar things weren't my best teachers. I've also had teachers who said not to write in the first person. Fortunately, my best English prof said it was perfectly alright. He wasn't stuffy and said to write in the way that comes most naturally to you. He was widely published, while the stodgy pedants with all of their bookish rules were not.My introduction wasn't meant to be formal. In general, I don't even like formal writing. I like writing with a personal touch. Writers tend to pull me in when they seem to be talking to me directly by using natural language. I often find that the worst writers are those who seem to have before them a book of English rules rather than having before them the audience they are trying to reach. I guess it all comes down to who you had for a teacher. Luckily, I had one of the best although I'll probably never be able to write as well as he.
    • 27/05/2004
    • 10:20:07
    • Score: 73 out of 79 people found this comment useful.
  • Danii

    Thank you for the nice things you say about my essay. I'm sure you mean to say Browning's not Downings. I can appreciate that you were taught not to use "I" in your essays and that's fine. Many instructors teach the same thing. My finest English prof hated being pedantic. He said that we should write in the way that comes most naturally for us, not others.He also said that some of the finest essayists used "I" and that it would be silly to ban a very useful personal pronoun from essays. My prof said that it shouldn't be overdone, but using "I" once or twice in an essay of over 1,000 words is not excessive. He liked a personal touch in writing and deplored stodgy conventionality. I guess it all depends on who your teacher was.
    • 27/05/2004
    • 09:54:43
    • Score: 83 out of 86 people found this comment useful.
  • Danii

    Thank you for your nice comments about my essay. I'm sure you mean Browning not Downing. Your suggestion to relate my essay to Browning's other work is a good one. That's why I included in my introduction mention of his most famous dramatic monologue, "My Last Duchess." It was the subject of the first of the three essays I submitted to the site.Browning's "Porphyria's Lover" is a variation on a typical dramatic monologue in which it is generally agreed that the speaker requires an implied audience. In "Porphyria's Lover" it's debatable who the speaker is talking to. I didn't want to give away in the introduction too much about the poem, as I wanted to maintain suspense in my essay for those unfamiliar with "Porphyria's Lover."Any teacher who would insist that the personal pronoun "I" should be forbidden in an essay is being a bit pedantic. Some of the greatest essayists who ever lived used "I" also. If I am sinning rhetorically, at least I have very illustrious company.
    • 27/05/2004
    • 09:32:56
    • Score: 63 out of 67 people found this comment useful.
  • Romeo and Juliet

    I really appreciate the time and effort you obviously put into this well thought out paper on how Baz Luhrmann's "Romeo and Juliet" opens up Shakespeare's text to a wider variety of meanings, at the expense of some characters and themes. Like the other two papers of yours I've read, it's extensive and very well written. I can't believe the grade was only 80% on what I think is an A paper and am beginning to wonder about the professor. I admire your wonderful writing style which is so highly readable. Outstanding work!
    • 25/05/2004
    • 09:06:50
    • Score: 8 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • A Streetcar Named Desire

    Thank you for a great essay on another of Tennessee Williams' enduring plays. Like your essay on "The Glass Menagerie," this essay also does a wonderful job of capturing one of the play's central messages. It is always a pleasure to read whatever you write because your writing style is so highly polished. Your paper is not only very well written, but also is thorough and very well researched. There's one thing I disagree with. The grade of 85% seems low and if I turned in a paper of this quality, I would expect an A. Marvelous work!
    • 25/05/2004
    • 09:04:57
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Thank you

    Thanks to all of you for taking the time to write comments. Your comments are uniformly good and add a lot to the essay. Thank you especially, diamondize1, for making the connection between the narrator of the poem and serial killers like Jeffrey Dahmer. Although Browning doesn't indicate that Porphyria's lover is a serial killer, the mentality is the same. Browning wrote his poem some 170 years ago when serial killers didn't receive as much publicity as they do today. The murder of at least five London prostitutes by Jack the Ripper wouldn't occur until more than fifty years after Browning wrote his poem. The poet-husband of Elizabeth Barrett Browning had an uncanny ability to write poems which would retain their relevance long after his death.
    • 22/05/2004
    • 09:03:40
    • Score: 72 out of 80 people found this comment useful.
  • Well done

    Yours is a good essay written at the sixth grade level of elementary school. I wish that when I was in the sixth grade I could have written as well as you do. Please don't get discouraged as you show great talent for your age level. Keep writing as much as possible (daily if possible) and your writing skills will get even better over time. Fine effort!
    • 20/05/2004
    • 23:20:08
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Responsibilities of the individual

    Thank you for an excellent discussion of the ideas about the responsibilities of the individual that three examples might be used to illustrate. This is a well researched and well thought out essay about an interesting topic which has been approached with clarity and depth. I appreciate your inclusion of a bibliography so that those of us who wish to do further research may do so. I have learned a great deal by reading your essay which was fresh and original. Marvelous work!
    • 20/05/2004
    • 22:58:28
    • Score: 12 out of 13 people found this comment useful.
  • Two vastly different texts, or are they?

    Thanks for a terrific essay which made me relate two novels that I had never before compared. After reading what you wrote, I entirely agree with you that while Orwell and Golding use vastly different writing styles, their message is the same. Man's true nature may not constitute a pleasant message, but you have eloquently made your case for the similarity between "Animal Farm" and "Lord of the Flies." I especially liked the thought provoking questions which came at the end of your wonderful essay. Great job!
    • 20/05/2004
    • 22:20:42
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Dostoyevsky

    Thank you for a wonderful biography of one of the greatest authors who ever lived. With conciseness and clarity, you have conveyed what's most important to know about the man who penned such outstanding books as Crime and Punishment. Your essay was well written, cogent, and interesting. Terrific job!
    • 20/05/2004
    • 22:09:08
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • The Eternal City

    Yours is a good essay and I agree with the suggestions for improvement made by the prior reviewers. I particularly liked the way you linked the past and the present. Fine effort!
    • 19/05/2004
    • 15:26:27
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Nick

    I appreciate your kind words regarding the essay. As for the poem, you may locate it easily by going to Google and typing in "My Last Duchess." In fact, the original text of just about any classic poem is readily available in this manner. Thanks and good luck!
    • 19/05/2004
    • 12:19:39
    • Score: 71 out of 82 people found this comment useful.
  • American Revolution

    You have written a very good essay exploring whether the US was better before or after the American Revolution. As an American, I agree that the US was better off after the Revolutionary War, but many of the positive effects were not immediate. This was a thought provoking and well written essay. Nice job!
    • 19/05/2004
    • 11:53:34
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • The Glass Menagerie

    Thanks for a wonderfully written essay on Tennessee Williams' memorable play. Like Laura, we are all fragile and vulnerable to some extent. Life hands even the most successful of us our share of defeats which we must struggle to overcome. There is no lasting escape in a glassy world of make believe as reality has a way of intruding and breaking our illusions. Your essay does a marvelous job of capturing the play's central message. Your writing style is exemplary and your skills at literary analysis are enviable. Magnificent work!
    • 18/05/2004
    • 14:29:13
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • William Golding

    Like your other essay of the same name, this is well focused but you might like to give it another name to distinguish it from your other submission. Perhaps you could call this essay "A Chapter's Evil in the Lord of the Flies." You might want to consider writing another longer essay also as evil pervade's William Golding's timeless novel.
    • 17/05/2004
    • 20:09:02
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Lord Of The Flies

    Thank you for an interesting essay on William Golding's timeless novel. Your essay is well focused but you might like to expand on it in order to explore if what happened to the boys on the island isn't solely a result of not having parents around. Perhaps Golding is saying something about the dark side of human nature which seems to become even darker in the absence of societal constraints.
    • 17/05/2004
    • 19:58:28
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • All That Bleeds Is Not Dead

    You've written a unique essay on Shakespeare's classic play of ambition. I liked the way you focused on blood as a symbol which is used in the play to reinforce key elements which the bard wanted to convey. Good effort! Of course, it's only necessary to submit your essay once.
    • 17/05/2004
    • 19:50:01
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • John Steinbeck

    You have written a good essay on John Steinbeck's classic novel. The effect of a depression can be devastating, especially in human terms, and hopefully another such economic catastrophe can be averted. Great work! Of course, it's only necessary to submit your essay once.
    • 17/05/2004
    • 19:41:46
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Madame Bovary and Therese Raquin

    Thanks for a good essay comparing Flaubert's use of the organ grinder and the blind beggar in Madame Bovary and Zola's use of Camille's ghost in Therese Raquin. Flaubert and Zola were two masters of using characters symbolically and your fine essay underscores that point. Nice work! Of course, it's only necessary to submit your essay once.
    • 16/05/2004
    • 13:38:25
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Kitchens of the Kentucky Derby

    I hope you understand that any minor criticism is partly intended to ensure that no prior reviewer kill herself. Your essay is fine but please take special care regarding the title which is an especially important part of an essay. Although I don't normally comment on spelling, you may want to correct the spelling of derby and capitalize it, along with kitchens and Kentucky. I might even retitle your essay to something more attention grabbing such as "You Won't Believe What I Saw in the Kitchens of the Kentucky Derby." It may seem unfair, but initial impressions count and some people decide if an essay seems worthy of their time by the title. Hopefully, this is enough positive criticism to keep everyone breathing and I'm going to rate your essay as good.
    • 16/05/2004
    • 12:40:59
    • Score: 12 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • Rise of Adolf Hitler

    You've written an interesting historical essay on the events which led up to Hitler seizing power in Germany. I disagree that Hitler had excellent leadership skills. Rather, he had the single mindedness of a madman who saw no other way than his distorted vision. His "excellent leadership skills" led Germany to ruin by 1945. Hopefully, the strange confluence of events which led to the rise of such a tyrant will not be repeated and we must constantly be vigilant to ensure that nobody is again able to cause the death and destruction which comprise Hitler's lasting legacy. Although I disagree wtih certain parts of your essay, I am still going to give it a good rating.
    • 16/05/2004
    • 11:39:22
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Nagasaki

    You have written an OK essay about the fateful atomic bomb which fell on the Japanese city of Nagasaki. The injuries and loss of life were tragic but had Japan surrendered after the bombing of Hiroshima, Nagasaki could have been spared. It was a controversial decision that may have saved a great many Japanese and American lives by making unnecessary the invasion of Japan in 1945. Not only Americans but Japanese as well feel guilt for what happened because it was Japan which attacked Pearl Harbor and then declared war on the United States, not the other way around.
    • 16/05/2004
    • 10:54:59
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • A Third Journal

    You've written an upbeat sequel to your account of what life was like for a serf in Medieval Times. In that this is a follow up to your other essay in which the serf wasn't doing quite so well, I suggest you give it a different title. Perhaps you might like to include the dates in your essay's titles to distinguish them.
    • 16/05/2004
    • 09:07:12
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • A Serf in Medieval Times

    You've written an interesting account of what life was like for a typical serf in Medieval Times. We now tend to romanticize kings and overlook how many of them lived off of the hard work of peasants who were kept in fear lest they revolt.
    • 16/05/2004
    • 08:59:52
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Sabriel

    Yours is an interesting essay on Garth Nix's Sabriel. The next to last paragraph is somewhat long and you may want to look for an opportunity to break it up. Good work! Of course, it's only necessary to submit your essay once.
    • 16/05/2004
    • 08:50:38
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Ophelia

    Thank you for a fine character study of Shakespeare's tragic heroine from Hamlet. Many readers will probably appreciate the feminist perspective on Ophelia's plight and, to paraphrase Gertrude, you won't find me protesting too much either. Great work! Of course, it's only necessary to submit your essay once.
    • 16/05/2004
    • 08:39:05
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Free trade

    Yours is a good essay on Australia's movement toward free trade. I see that you have corrected the spelling of movement in your essay's title. Consequently, your other essay titled "Australia's movememt to free trade" which has text that is similar should probably be deleted. Nice job!
    • 16/05/2004
    • 08:12:01
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Surprises

    You have written a good essay about Mark Twain's enduring book. Indeed, life is full of surprises and you have chosen some apt examples from Huckleberry Finn to illustrate your point. Fine effort! Of course, it's only necessary to submit your essay once.
    • 16/05/2004
    • 07:41:37
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Goodbye, Mr. Chips

    Yours is an interesting report written at the ninth grade level, although I don't agree with your conclusion that teachers should be strict in an attempt to gain respect. Still, I'm glad you chose for your essay James Hilton's heartwarming fictional account of what it takes to be a good teacher. I have never believed that great intelligence was the most important characteristic of a good teacher. Certainly, it helps if a teacher is intelligent but far more important is that the teacher possess humanity. A good teacher shows compassion and understanding toward students. A teacher is dealing with young people who are impressionable and vulnerable. A teacher can be a force for great good or can be a destructive influence. Teaching is an easy job only if it is done poorly. Too many people seek careers in teaching so that they can have an easy life, but the best teachers don't have an easy life. They take an interest in the problems that plague the young people they are entrusted to help. Ole Chippings was merely a highly intelligent, yet mediocre, teacher until he learned what it meant to be a human being and his students benefited immeasurably from his transformation. Goodbye, Mr. Chips--your memory lives on in the heart of every good teacher who cares for the young people who are our future.
    • 13/05/2004
    • 10:47:01
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Truman's Decision

    You have written an interesting essay about some of the background preceding Harry Truman's fateful decision to drop atomic bombs on the Japanese cities of Hiroshima and Nagasaki. It was a controversial decision that may have saved a great many Japanese and American lives by making unnecessary the invasion of Japan in 1945. Your essay seemed to end a bit abruptly and I would suggest adding a concluding paragraph in which you sum up your main points. The presence of internal citations also suggests that a bibliography should be included.
    • 13/05/2004
    • 10:32:00
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Lincoln's Role

    Thank you for a wonderful biography of our nation's sixteenth president. I have written a number of essay comments alluding to the quote you cite of Abraham Lincoln. Unfortunately, I haven't always received a positive reception because not everyone realizes that Lincoln's priority was preservation of the Union. Lincoln subordinated for a while his personal opposition to slavery to his duty as president to hold the nation together. He was a wise man who made the right decision. Had the border states seceded, it is questionable whether the North could have prevailed. Our nation's capital would have been surrounded by rebel territory. I consider Lincoln to be one of our nation's greatest presidents and will continue to honor him, despite what others might do or say.
    • 13/05/2004
    • 10:21:01
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Poetry Comparison

    You've analyzed two poems which most people wouldn't think to compare. I might compare "My Last Duchess" to Browning's other famous dramatic monologue "Porphyria's Lover." Also, I would more likely compare Shelley's "Ozymandias" to "On the Tombs in Westminster Abbey" (please note the correct title of Francis Beaumont's poem). You've got the rhyme scheme wrong of "My Last Duchess" which uses heroic couplets. I also disagree that the tone of Browning's poem is calm and relaxed. Browning uses caesura and enjambment to lend a sort of unbalanced haste to the Duke's practiced speech. The tone is unnerving as a despicable man brags shamelessly of the murder of his wife so that his bride to be might be informed to behave herself. Unlike you, I am not likely to partly agree with the Duke, who was a monster in every sense of the word. As for Beaumont's poem, it uses full end rhymes, not half rhymes. It speaks of the vanity of human ambition which is laid waste by death. I'm going to rate your essay as average but I think it needs more work.
    • 13/05/2004
    • 09:55:38
    • Score: 7 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Titanic

    You make some good points about the tragic sinking of the Titanic on her maiden voyage. The tragedy was so great that there is enough blame to go around and it is debatable whether any one person should bear all of the blame. Some will find your conclusion controversial but it is obvious that you have done a great deal of research.
    • 13/05/2004
    • 09:21:48
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Frank Lloyd Wright

    Thank you for an extensive biography of one of the great architects of modern times. Unfortunately, some people might not want to read one long paragraph of almost three thousand words. I suggest you break your essay up into smaller paragraphs so that nobody skips reading your fine account of Frank Lloyd Wright because they may find the format somewhat unappealing. I appreciate your inclusion of a bibliography which also needs to be reformatted.
    • 13/05/2004
    • 09:13:17
    • Score: 12 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • League of Nations

    You've written a good essay about the successes and failures of the League of Nations. With the United States not a member and lacking genuine enforcement ability, the League seemed destined to ultimately fail. Happily, the League's successor, the United Nations, has been a more effective organization although the UN has also frequently failed. When you have any internal citation, you should probably include a bibliography as well. Overall, great job!
    • 13/05/2004
    • 09:03:38
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Estella

    You have written a good character study of one of the more memorable figures in literature. Estella's portrayal by Dickens is a good illustration of how upbringing can have an enormous affect on a child. Naturally, people can change in adulthood but it may not be easy. Nice job! Of course, it's only necessary to submit your essay once.
    • 13/05/2004
    • 08:33:24
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Good or bad?

    You make some good points on a subject very much in the news. Please note the proper spelling of "genetically" for your title, which is an especially important part of an essay. I don't believe that we have had sufficient time to do the necessary testing to determine that genetically altered foods are safe. Economics seems to be driving the rush to market genetically altered foods with consumers, especially those in third world nations, being used as guinea pigs. This is one area in which caution needs to be exercised. I suggest you expand your essay to include a more balanced discussion of the negatives rather than limiting your discussion to the positive aspects of genetically altered foods. Of course, it's only necessary to submit your essay once.
    • 13/05/2004
    • 08:02:10
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Courtney

    Yours is an interesting comparison of tabloid and broadsheet newspapers. I liked how you focused on the story of a girl who by the age of 18 had three children with three different men. Because of less sensational coverage, many would probably agree with your preference for the broadsheet The Sunday Times over the tabloid Daily Mail. Nice work! This seems virtually the same as your previous essay which is similarly titled "Comparison on tabloid and broadsheet newspapers: On Courtney mother of three at the age of 18. Gcse work by vanita suthar."
    • 13/05/2004
    • 07:44:27
    • Score: 11 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Amy Tan

    You have written a good essay on Amy Tan's popular book. The book's theme relating to the cultural clash between the Americanized daughters and their traditional Chinese mothers is an interesting one. Great job! While it is not strictly speaking a duplicate submission, other than for the first and last paragraphs this is essentially the same as your other essay having the same title.
    • 13/05/2004
    • 07:20:04
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Joy Luck Club

    You have written a good essay on Amy Tan's popular book. The book's theme relating to the cultural clash between the Americanized daughters and their traditional Chinese mothers is an interesting one. Great job!
    • 13/05/2004
    • 07:11:12
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Hills Like White Elephants

    Thanks for choosing to do your essay on an ever important Hemingway short story (you should delete mention of a poem in your title). Though the story was written over 75 years ago, it's still relevant today and I wish every young woman would read it. From a feminist perspective, the woman has less power in making the decision about the abortion, even though it's her own body, because she loves the man a lot more than he loves her, if he loves her at all. She wants to please him while he wants to use her. You've supported your interpretation of the story's symbols well and I would like to focus on the story's title. You are right that hills might be viewed as being similar in shape to a pregnant woman's abdominal area, but they also might symbolize obstacles in the couple's relationship because of the unwanted pregnancy. By way of background, white elephants were given in ancient Thailand by the royal family to out of favor court members who would have great difficulty affording their maintenance. The "gift" of a white elephant would be as unwanted as a baby to the story's irresponsible father who only wants things to return to "normal" by which he means sex with no strings attached. The flighty man in the story is not named because he stands for all such unreliable men. The woman in the story, Jig, seems near the story's end to start seeing him for the glib manipulator he is. She may yet choose to have the baby, if for no other reason than to find out if the jig is up and he will run (you can count on it).
    • 12/05/2004
    • 09:57:48
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Timber

    Thanks for your help, redlauren, and I also appreciate your writing this fine life cycle and cradle-to-grave analysis of timber. I also appreciate your writing a comment about your similarly titled essay as it saved me the effort of doing so. Issues such as recycling, waste minimization and ecological restoration are vital to maintaining our delicately balanced ecosystem. Good essay!
    • 12/05/2004
    • 09:47:29
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Frank Herbert

    Yours is a good essay written at the 10th grade level of an imaginative book that many people love besides you. Although Frank Herbert died almost twenty years ago, he left notes for his son who has collaborated in the writing of fascinating Dune prequels. Fine effort! Of course, it's only necessary to submit your essay once.
    • 12/05/2004
    • 09:43:19
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Introduction of color TV

    You have written an extensive case analysis of Samsung's entry into China's color TV market. Although I don't normally comment on spelling, because of the importance of an essay's title, you might want to change Samaung to Samsung. Good job! Of course, it's only necessary to submit your essay once.
    • 12/05/2004
    • 09:29:10
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Duplicate Submission

    Thank you for your informative essay on importing chocolates from Belgium. A Salmonella poisoning outbreak can indeed be a serious management issue and one does not normally associate a box of chocolates with a dangerous illness. Good job! Of course, it's only necessary to submit your essay once.
    • 11/05/2004
    • 10:47:17
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • The Quick Fix

    This is a good essay on a growing problem. Perhaps one of the reasons that our parents and grandparents tended to stay married longer is that they didn't have such unrealistic expectations. Now, it seems that a great many people expect to be happy all of the time, which is clearly not going to happen. Marriage inevitably brings some times of unhappiness and it is ironic that in an age of the proliferation of communications media, people seem less able to communicate their feelings to others. Commendable effort! Of course, it's only necessary to submit your essay once.
    • 11/05/2004
    • 09:42:24
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Non-Jewish Victims

    You have written a good essay on the Holocaust. As horrible as was the murder of millions of Jews, equally terrible was the death of countless more people of many races and religions. We must be ever vigilant to guard against a repeat of any such tragedy. Fine job! Of course, it's only necessary to submit your essay once.
    • 11/05/2004
    • 09:14:47
    • Score: 14 out of 14 people found this comment useful.
  • Duplicate submission

    Thank you for a good essay on species endangerment. Our delicate ecosystem is interrelated to such an extent that the disappearance of any species could upset the delicate balance. Great work! Of course, it's only necessary to submit your essay once.
    • 11/05/2004
    • 08:59:54
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Again?

    You have written a good biography of Adolf Hitler and I suggest that you include a listing of any works consulted in support of your facts. This is now the third time this report has been submitted.
    • 10/05/2004
    • 01:50:12
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Columbus

    This is a good essay on Christopher Columbus but I suggest that you add a bibliography to go along with your internal citations
    • 10/05/2004
    • 01:33:06
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Drugs

    You've written a good essay on drugs in professional sports and I would only recommend that you include a bibliography as an addition to your internal citations.
    • 10/05/2004
    • 01:30:04
    • Score: 6 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Asian economies

    Yours is a good essay on the development of the Asian miracle economies but you need a bibliography to supplement any internal citation. You should also either include Table 1 or omit any reference to it.
    • 10/05/2004
    • 01:26:56
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Start of the Civil War

    You have written a good report but in a "complete" essay which traces the period from the 3/5ths compromise to the start of the Civil War, I would expect to find a listing of any works consulted in support of your details and dates.
    • 10/05/2004
    • 01:15:11
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Trench Warfare

    This was a good essay on the horrors of trench warfare in the First World War and I would only suggest that you include a bibliography to augment your internal citations. Of course, you only need to submit your essay once.
    • 10/05/2004
    • 01:08:34
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Children

    You have written a good essay on the children of the Jewish Holocaust but you should include a bibliography to accompany your internal citations.
    • 10/05/2004
    • 00:55:38
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • North and South

    You've written an interesting essay on the advantages and disadvantages of the North and South as the Civil War began. Of all the strengths the South had, perhaps the greatest was excellent generalship. Robert E. Lee and Stonewall Jackson were the two greatest generals the South had and their military genius turned what might have been a short war into a long one.
    • 10/05/2004
    • 00:49:56
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Civil War

    Yours is a good report but in a "complete" essay which describes the events that lead up to the start of the Civil War, I would expect to find a listing of any works consulted in support of your details and dates.
    • 10/05/2004
    • 00:40:08
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Melanoma

    This was a good essay on the treatment of melanoma and would have been even better had you included a bibliography to go along with your internal citations.
    • 10/05/2004
    • 00:32:40
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Why read Pride and Prejudice?

    You have written another good piece involving Jane Austen's classic novel of manners. I liked your conversational style and how you focused on one paragraph. Your advice on reading Austen slowly is excellent. One of the great writers of all time deserves to be read with care in order to more fully appreciate how she masterfully relates her story. Great work!
    • 10/05/2004
    • 00:20:02
    • Score: 15 out of 15 people found this comment useful.
  • Langston Hughes

    Yours is a good biography of a great Harlem Renaissance poet. It would be advisable to include a listing of any works consulted in writing your detailed essay.
    • 09/05/2004
    • 23:54:32
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Drinking

    You've written an interesting essay on a potentially fatal problem which only seems to be getting worse. A bibliography would have been nice. It's important to know what to do if someone passes out from alcohol poisoning. Don't let legal worries prevent you from calling 9-1-1 to get help (it's another good reason to have a cell phone). If necessary, have one person go for help and try not to leave the person alone. Learn how to perform CPR as help cannot always arrive in time.
    • 09/05/2004
    • 23:35:57
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • A Hard Lesson In Love

    Thanks, Lee, for a touching story. Creative writing is one of the more difficult types of writing to master but you seem to have a good handle on it. Not only was your story compelling, but also it had an important message that many of us can learn from. This might also be fine source material for another of your great poems. Good job!
    • 09/05/2004
    • 23:26:59
    • Score: 27 out of 29 people found this comment useful.
  • Documentary Proposal

    This is a good report and much better than your shorter essay of the same name containing the same opening paragraphs. Ned Kelly should make for an interesting documentary.
    • 09/05/2004
    • 05:08:44
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Ned Kelly

    I'm not sure if you were having computer problems because what you've written is fine but it seems to have been truncated.
    • 09/05/2004
    • 05:02:37
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Charlie

    Thank you for an interesting discussion of the book and movie versions of "Flowers for Algernon." Charlie is one of the more tragic figures in literature. What happens to him underscores the truth of that old saying about being careful what you wish for. It is ironic that the operation that was successful in making him a smarter person, at least for a little while, also made him incapable of happiness by transforming him into someone who became resentful, self-centered and contemptuous of others. We should take to heart the simple but powerful message to be content with what we have if we wish to be happy.
    • 09/05/2004
    • 04:25:49
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • William Wordsworth and Ovid

    Thank you for an interesting discussion concerning how both Ovid, from David Malouf's book "An Imaginary Life," and William Wordsworth eventually come to appreciate their new surroundings, enabling them to reassess life in civilized societies. Good report!
    • 09/05/2004
    • 04:19:15
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Surface area and rate of reaction

    This appears to be another well planned and nicely documented experiment. You have succeeded in investigating the effect of increasing surface area on the rate of reaction. Nice job!
    • 09/05/2004
    • 04:05:26
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Motion experiment

    This seems to be a well planned and nicely documented experiment examining some of the factors affecting the motion of an object undergoing uniform circular motion. I also liked your determination of the quantitative relationship between the variables of force, velocity and radius. Of course, you only needed to submit your report once.
    • 09/05/2004
    • 03:59:34
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Electoral Politics

    Yours is a fine essay but I suggest that you identify in your first paragraph by title and author the book you are discussing. A listing of any works cited in doing your report would also be helpful.
    • 09/05/2004
    • 03:43:50
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Human Resource Planning

    Yours is a good essay on how changes in the business environment and labor market affect Human Resource Planning and you only need to add a bibliography to go along with your internal citations.
    • 09/05/2004
    • 03:34:11
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Transaction Database

    Yours is a good essay and I would only recommend that you delete the last sentence. Because there is no illustration provided, you should omit saying, "Below is an illustration of the payroll system showing the relationship between entities."
    • 09/05/2004
    • 03:30:15
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • The Cuban Missile Crisis

    This is a big improvement over your 183 word essay of the same name. You can take care of the misspelling in the title by renaming your essay "The Cuban Missile Crisis." Your current title is too broad as there have been many clashes between America and communism. Other than the title, you've done a good job.
    • 09/05/2004
    • 03:23:41
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • The Choosing

    Yours is a good analysis of Liz Lochhead's poem. "The Choosing" brings to mind Robert Frost's "The Road Not Taken," yet Lochhead's poem has a greater impact on me. All we know about the path taken from Frost's poem is that the narrator "took the one less traveled by, / And that has made all the difference." It could be argued that "The Choosing" is a better poem in that the greater specificity drives home the poet's message about the consequences of choices.
    • 09/05/2004
    • 02:48:06
    • Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Dating Violence

    Thank you for a well researched essay on an important topic. Dating violence is not the sort of thing people like to talk about but unless the subject is discussed openly, the problem is unlikely to get better. Great job!
    • 09/05/2004
    • 02:37:42
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Italy

    Yours is a good essay on the effects of World War I on Italy and the growth of Fascism. It is often said that one of the main causes of World War II was the First World War and this can be seen clearly in the situation regarding Italy. Good job!
    • 09/05/2004
    • 02:27:05
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Good or bad?

    Your essay is alright and I agree with you that we really can't say that any one religion is good or bad. I'm not at all certain that such labels are helpful in any meaningful way in this context. What I would have liked to have seen in your essay was a discussion as to why the question is important. Of course, you only needed to submit your essay once.
    • 09/05/2004
    • 02:21:40
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • The Crucible

    Thank you for a well thought out discussion of Arthur Miller's classic play. Although many believe that the days of McCarthyism are far behind us, it does us well to be reminded of how suspicion and innuendo can destroy lives. Good job!
    • 09/05/2004
    • 01:38:42
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Workplace Drug Testing

    You have written a good essay in support of your point of view against workplace drug testing. There are probably a number of people who are undecided on this issue who might have found your arguments more compelling had you devoted more space to presenting the opposing viewpoint and rebutting it fully. I am rating your essay as good for what it is, an opinion piece.
    • 09/05/2004
    • 01:30:33
    • Score: 10 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Amazon

    You've chosen a clever title for your well written essay on the on-line giant. I suggest you add a bibliography to accompany your internal citations. Of course, you only needed to submit your essay once.
    • 09/05/2004
    • 01:22:38
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Geography of Amazon.com

    You've chosen a clever title for your well written essay on the on-line giant. I suggest you add a bibliography to accompany your internal citations.
    • 09/05/2004
    • 01:18:20
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • The Most Useful (or Important) Scientific Invention?

    Your essay is alright but your title makes one think you will be discussing the most useful (or important) scientific invention while your thesis statement says only that you will be discussing one of the most useful and important scientific inventions. Your thesis statement is accurate but your title is not well supported and should probably be changed to something a bit less absolute. I suggest you simply call your essay, "A Most Useful and Important Scientific Invention." Titles are especially important in essays and care should be taken in selecting them. I liked your discussion of the microscope.
    • 09/05/2004
    • 01:11:45
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Health Care Reform

    You have written a good essay on mental health care reform from a historical perspective and your report would have been even better had you included a bibliography to go along with your internal citations.
    • 09/05/2004
    • 01:02:21
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Theory of the Soul

    Thank you for a thought provoking discussion of how three renowned philosophers viewed the soul. What I find most interesting in essays such as this is the author's own input on the subject. I'm rating your essay as good but would have liked to have known your thoughts on which of the three viewpoints you find most compelling.
    • 09/05/2004
    • 00:57:11
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Medicine

    Yours is an interesting essay on medicine in the Middle Ages but I would have liked to have seen a bibliography to complement your internal citations.
    • 09/05/2004
    • 00:49:59
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Should Condoms be Distributed in Schools?

    I'm not a Jamaican student and feel that your essay would be well suited for students of just about any nationality because STD's don't discriminate. This is a difficult issue and probably cannot be adequately addressed in just over 300 words. I would have liked to see the results of any research studies done at schools where condoms are handed out and will reserve judgment on this issue until we can better assess the impact of such a policy.
    • 09/05/2004
    • 00:45:46
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Mental Health

    You have written a good history of mental health in America and I would only suggest that you add a bibliography so that others might do further research should they do desire.
    • 09/05/2004
    • 00:36:45
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Nature Vs. Nurture

    I liked the way you approached this subject. Frankly, I have never known whether nature is more important than nurture or vice versa and never really cared to ponder the question at length, because I had come to the conclusion early on that both were important. I don't mind saying I don't know. What I do know is that this is the second good essay of yours in a row which I have read and I'm looking forward to reading more.
    • 09/05/2004
    • 00:33:09
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Irony

    Yours is a good essay in which your personal experience contributes greatly to adding support for your assertions. Your writing style is highly readable and is well suited for this type of essay. Good job!
    • 09/05/2004
    • 00:26:10
    • Score: 8 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Angela's Ashes

    Thank you for a good analysis of the narrative and film versions of Frank McCourt's popular book. McCourt's work has touched the hearts of a great many people and you have shed light on some important aspects of it. Fine effort!
    • 09/05/2004
    • 00:11:45
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • W. H. Auden

    Thank you for a good biography of one of the finest poets of the twentieth century. One of my favorite Auden poems is "Epitaph on a Tyrant." It's only six lines long but conveys with great power Auden's ability to move us with the simplicity of his verse. I liked your chronology of key events in Auden's life at the end of your essay.
    • 08/05/2004
    • 23:47:51
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Montgomery Bus Boycott

    Yours is a good essay which rightly praises a hero of the twentieth century. She didn't hold a high position in life or make some amazing medical breakthrough, but in her way Rosa Parks has affected all of our lives here in America for the better. She is an excellent example of one ordinary person whose extraordinary fortitude led to a more equal and just society. One person truly can make a difference, and we owe Rosa Parks our gratitude for helping to change American society for the better.
    • 08/05/2004
    • 23:34:22
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Berlin Wall

    You've written a fine description of the Berlin Wall, which was surely one of the more hated symbols of communist oppression. Ronald Reagan's clarion call comes to mind, "Mr Gorbachev, tear down this wall." Thankfully, the wall did come down and many who were long denied freedom and opportunity were given a chance for a new life. Our world is a much better place without such barriers to keep people in who so desperately want to get out.
    • 08/05/2004
    • 23:15:24
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Argentina

    Thank you for an interesting discussion of the recent political and economic situation in one of the more important countries in South America. Many of us have read in the newspapers or heard on the news about Argentina's many problems, but you have provided important background information to help us better understand the underlying causes of the unrest. Great work!
    • 08/05/2004
    • 23:06:38
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Second Treatise of Government

    You've given a good account of John Locke's views on the subject of justice and equality. Those who cherish democratic traditions owe much to the seminal thinking of Locke. In a civilized society, we cannot live by our own rules which are in contravention to the laws of society or there would be anarchy. It is incumbent on each of us to take an interest in seeing to it that the laws by which we live are fairly administered.
    • 08/05/2004
    • 23:00:57
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Causes of the First World War

    You have written a good explanation of the underlying causes of the First World War. Too often the cause is said to be an assassin's bullet in Sarajevo, but you have shown that simmering nationalism and entangling alliances were crucial to the outbreak of the "war to end all wars." Good job!
    • 08/05/2004
    • 22:53:18
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Rousseau and Kant

    Yours in an intriguing discussion of how two notable philosophers approached the creation of laws. It's interesting that while they take different paths in order to reach agreement, both Rousseau and Kant concur that laws which are agreed to by everyone within the state (my position is that a majority is sufficient to make a law binding) are the only to which one can be bound. Good work!
    • 08/05/2004
    • 22:47:56
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Justification by Faith

    Thanks for an interesting discussion of faith. One of my favorite books of the Bible is Ephesians for in it we read, "By grace are ye saved through faith...." Of course, the Bible also teaches us that faith without works is dead. Inspiring work!
    • 08/05/2004
    • 22:38:16
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Concentration camps

    Thank you for a moving account of life under Nazi terror. For those who entered the concentration camps and left all hope behind, the ordeal was surely beyond anything I could imagine. Good job!
    • 08/05/2004
    • 22:32:30
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • The Handmaid's Tale

    Yours is a wonderful essay on Margaret Atwood's classic story. You've done a great job of exploring the limitations imposed by gender, power and religion in "The Handmaids Tale." Superb effort!
    • 08/05/2004
    • 04:15:04
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Australian Migrants

    You have written an excellent account of Australian migrants and their experiences in the 20th century. You have provided solid support for your thesis that Australia was not always the lucky country for all of its inhabitants in the 20th century. Nice work!
    • 08/05/2004
    • 04:09:43
    • Score: 5 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Women's movement

    Thank you for an informative look at the women's movement in the 1920s. Much important progress toward liberation was made in the jazz age and you have summed up the key trends nicely. Good job!
    • 08/05/2004
    • 04:04:39
    • Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Australian Federation

    I confess to not being as familiar with Australian history as I should be and thank you for your informative report which does a wonderful job of filling in some of the gaps in my knowledge. I have always had a special fondness for Australia as well as for its people and hope someday to visit. Excellent effort!
    • 08/05/2004
    • 02:51:23
    • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Macbeth

    You've written a very good character study of one of Shakespeare's more tragic figures. I believe monkeycalvertharry meant to say Macbeth, not Hamlet, in the prior comment. Readers need to keep in mind that your stated objective was to provide a concise, not exhaustive, character study, which you have done with appropriate textual references. Fine work!
    • 08/05/2004
    • 02:44:05
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Weaker sex?

    Yours is not a bad paper and I was in agreement with most of what you said until the end of your essay. I'd like to first answer your question as to "why is a woman not able to handle the stress of actually being President?" You have provided not one bit of compelling evidence to support your implication that a woman couldn't handle the stress. Women are able to handle the stresses of the highest political offices and the fact that no woman has yet been president results from lingering discrimination, not any inability in women to handle stress. In addition, people do not always say that the "first lady really runs everything" and I don't even know what basis you have to make such a statement. Here's another statement that may raise hackles: "No matter how far women have come over time, they are still the lesser sex and will always be shown as weaker than men." Accompanying as it does your implication that women are less able to handle stress than men, I find this statement disturbing. Women can only be considered the lesser sex in connection with how they have been treated. Women may be physically weaker than men, but they are every bit as strong emotionally. I suggest you be more mindful of how you phrase your thoughts so that you are not misunderstood.
    • 08/05/2004
    • 01:23:56
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Hudson Bay Company

    You have written a fine and detailed report on the Hudson Bay Company but it would be advisable to cite any works you consulted.
    • 08/05/2004
    • 01:19:28
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • LeTourneau

    You've written a good essay about the Mary Kay LeTourneau case but you should include a bibliography since you have internal citations.
    • 08/05/2004
    • 01:10:40
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Compare two brands

    You have written a good essay but as the appendices you mention in your report aren't provided, it might be a good idea to either include them or omit reference to them.
    • 08/05/2004
    • 00:52:31
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Financial modelling

    Yours is a good essay on how financial modelling techniques can be used by a CPA but you need to include a bibliography to augment your internal citations.
    • 08/05/2004
    • 00:46:16
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • 1984

    You've written a good essay but I would suggest dividing it up into smaller paragraphs. Some people might not want to go through one long paragraph of almost 1,300 words and it would be a shame if anyone missed out on reading your fine account of George Orwell's classic novel.
    • 08/05/2004
    • 00:35:45
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Human Resource Responsibilities

    You make some interesting points but your concluding paragraph consisting of a single sentence might seem a bit abrupt to some readers. Because of the importance of an essay's concluding paragraph, I suggest you expand it to include a brief summary of why you feel these are four aspects of Human Resource Management that are some of the most important for the success of an organization
    • 08/05/2004
    • 00:04:17
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Managing

    This is a good report but the only difference I detect between this essay and your previous one of the same title is that this has a bibliography, which is a useful addition. Therefore, the prior essay is not needed also and should probably be deleted
    • 07/05/2004
    • 23:25:15
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Customer Service

    This is a good essay containing much useful information about the management of the customer service function, but it would be more useful had a bibliography been included.
    • 07/05/2004
    • 23:17:36
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Edna's Suicide

    Thank you for a good essay and please don't forget the bibliography next time.
    • 04/05/2004
    • 21:54:29
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • My Enemy, the Stranger

    Yours is a good essay which could have been improved with the addition of a bibliography,
    • 04/05/2004
    • 21:48:27
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Machiavelli vs. Thoreau

    This is a good compare and contrast essay which would have been even better with a bibliography.
    • 04/05/2004
    • 21:24:08
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Lee

    You've written a good biography of Robert E. Lee and it only needs a bibliography to be complete.
    • 04/05/2004
    • 20:57:21
    • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • A Doll's House

    You make some interesting points about Ibsen's classic play but I wish you had added a bibliography.
    • 04/05/2004
    • 20:32:48
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Catch 22 and The Atonement

    I liked your comparison of the works of Heller and McEwan, but would have liked it even more had you provided a bibliography.
    • 04/05/2004
    • 20:17:50
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Expansionism

    You have written a good paper on American expansionism but I would have liked to have seen a bibliography to go along with the textual quotes.
    • 04/05/2004
    • 20:09:01
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Guns

    I think you've written a good essay and am not sure what specifics your teacher thought were lacking. Had I been your teacher, I would have wanted to see a bibliography though.
    • 04/05/2004
    • 19:50:14
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Drug abuse

    Thank you for a good essay on teen drug abuse but you still need a bibliography to go along with your internal citations.
    • 04/05/2004
    • 19:39:13
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Love

    You make some interesting points but when you use internal citations you really should include a bibliography also.
    • 04/05/2004
    • 18:34:42
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • ED

    You've written an interesting report and some readers might like to see a bibliography.
    • 04/05/2004
    • 17:37:35
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • American Revolution

    You've written a good essay but I would suggest dividing it up into shorter paragraphs. Some people might not want to go through one long paragraph of over 1,500 words and it would be a shame if anyone missed out on reading your fine account of the Revolutionary War.
    • 04/05/2004
    • 17:31:35
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Child Abuse

    You have written a good essay but submitting it twice is not the best use of the reader's time.
    • 04/05/2004
    • 17:27:27
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Civil War

    Yours is a good essay but I would suggest breaking it up into smaller paragraphs. Some people might not want to go through one long paragraph of over 2,000 words and it would be a pity if anyone missed out on reading your fine account of the role of African Americans in the Civil War.
    • 04/05/2004
    • 17:22:39
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • My Last Duchess

    I agree with most of your analysis of Robert Browning's poem, but I do have a few minor points to make. Although Browning got his inspiration from events in the life of the Duke of Ferrara, his poem is fictional not proven fact. The real duke's wife, Lucretia, died three years after marrying Alfonso, but history cannot determine if she was murdered. The portrait is at the top of the staircase, not downstairs. We know this because the Duke and the count's agent descend the staircase to join the assembled guests after the Duke has finished telling the agent the story of his dead wife. Other than that, I agree with you and rate your overall analysis as good.
    • 04/05/2004
    • 17:12:11
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Discrimination

    I agree that discrimination is a continuing problem. You end by indicating that people shouldn't tolerate having their rights violated, with which I agree also, and your essay could be improved by stating what recourse victims of discrimination have.
    • 04/05/2004
    • 15:55:02
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Magnetism

    You've written a good history of the study of magnetism, but you can probably drop the reference to Figure 1.1.
    • 04/05/2004
    • 15:50:02
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Heineken

    You have written a helpful strategic analysis of Heineken, but you may want to remove your parenthetical references to charts in the text.
    • 04/05/2004
    • 15:40:51
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • IBM

    This is a useful chronology of key events in the history of Big Blue, but you may want to update it for the last twenty years or so.
    • 04/05/2004
    • 15:36:07
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Germs

    Yours is a good essay on microbes and it could be improved by including a bibliography.
    • 04/05/2004
    • 15:14:46
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Social and economic policies

    You've written a good essay on the impact which the Nazis had on pre World War II Germany. The best way to make it an even better essay would be to add a bibliography.
    • 04/05/2004
    • 14:14:31
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Hanging

    Yours is a good essay on the problems associated with using hanging as a form of execution. The internal citations would be more useful with an accompanying bibliography.
    • 04/05/2004
    • 13:21:18
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Justifications of WW1

    You have written a good essay on the lead up to World War I and as long as your report was, it would have been a good idea to make it a bit longer by adding a bibliography.
    • 04/05/2004
    • 13:16:35
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Satellites

    You have written a detailed report on the satellite (please note the spelling as the word appears in your title, which is an especially important part of the essay to get right) industry and international trade, of which I had wished to read more. Assuming some of the facts and details didn't come out of your head, a bibliography would be advisable to round out internal citing.
    • 04/05/2004
    • 12:14:24
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Three issues

    You've written a good essay, but it would have been even better had you included a bibliography.
    • 04/05/2004
    • 11:44:03
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Giovanni and Lusanna

    You have written an interesting essay relating to social class and justice. What you need to make it more complete is a bibliography.
    • 04/05/2004
    • 11:37:56
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Managerial and Financial Accounting

    Yours is a succinct yet nicely done discussion of the differences and similarities between financial and managerial accounting. I would like to add that there are a number of certifications available to professional accountants other than the CPA and CMA certificates. For example, a newer designation, CFM (Certified in Financial Management), is available from the same organization that issues the CMA certificate, namely, the IMA (Institute of Management Accountants). I noted an internal citation (2004) which suggests that there should probably be a bibliography.
    • 04/05/2004
    • 11:28:35
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Thesis

    What you've written is alright but I wish you would have written more. For example, you could have chosen a poem, play, or short story which you like and analyze it. That way, your essay would seem more complete.
    • 04/05/2004
    • 11:17:27
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • American government

    You have written a good, current perspective on American government and politics. A bibliography at the end of your interesting discussion would nicely complement your internal citations.
    • 04/05/2004
    • 11:07:17
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Death and living

    Yours is an interesting discussion of the relevance between a character's philosophy of death and his way of living. With internal citations, a bibliography is all you need to complete your fine essay.
    • 04/05/2004
    • 11:01:35
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Pride and Prejudice

    Thank you for an excellent, in depth analysis of an interesting passage from Jane Austen's classic book. Ms. Austen is one of my favorite authors and is arguably one of the five greatest writers of all time. I always look forward to reading an essay on one of her works, especially when it is as well done as yours. It should come as no surprise to you that I appreciate your inclusion of a bibliography.
    • 04/05/2004
    • 10:54:07
    • Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • It's a pleasure to have you here

    You're welcome. You're definitely not a plagiarist. In the future, you can always add a bibliography which was unintentionally omitted by adding a comment to your own essay.
    • 04/05/2004
    • 10:18:43
    • Score: 15 out of 15 people found this comment useful.
  • Effective Leadership

    Thanks for using internal citations but you need a bibliography also. Yours is an informative discussion of self-managing work teams. I'm a big fan of self-directed work teams which have been shown in practice to have many positive benefits. A democratic work place is not only more fair and open, but also it seems more productive. Workers want to be involved and worthwhile improvements can be implemented if their suggestions are heeded. I have never agreed with those who view most workers as basically lazy. Rather than wanting merely to do only enough to get by, most workers want to make valuable contributions. Effective leadership is about providing the necessary guidance which allows subordinates to excel.
    • 04/05/2004
    • 09:14:43
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Roald Dahl's Boy

    Aside from your essay being good, I take exception with your teacher's comments. I don't think the summary was too long at all. I won't comment on a few language errors, unless they appear in the essay's title (you might have capitalized "boy" and british) and only then if I have a more important comment to make about an essay. Lastly, if your teacher only gave you 75%, that seems a bit too low.
    • 04/05/2004
    • 08:54:43
    • Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Gladioli by Monet

    You have written a good essay on Monet's painting. Please permit me to fill in the blank in the fifth paragraph by suggesting the word "Chiaroscuro." Nice job!
    • 04/05/2004
    • 08:32:49
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Michelangelo

    Thank you for an informative biography of one of the greatest artists of Renaissance times. A bibliography would have been a good idea.
    • 04/05/2004
    • 08:22:34
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Women in the Media

    Thank you for an insightful discussion of the portrayal of women in the media. It can be devastating to young women to realize they will probably never achieve the deceiving images of glamor and beauty which are so glorified in the media. Rather than chasing a buck, the media would be doing a great service by honoring the efforts of ordinary women who work hard and achieve their goals. A bibliography would have been nice.
    • 04/05/2004
    • 08:11:27
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Abraham Lincoln

    Thank you for providing such a complete description of the events surrounding the tragic assassination of the man whom many consider to be America's finest president. I particularly appreciated your assassination source analysis. Outstanding work!
    • 04/05/2004
    • 07:44:39
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Copyright

    Thanks for a detailed discussion of copyright law and related issues. I consider the following statement to be the most important in your essay: "Many people have felt the economic repercussions of piracy, but few take the time to contemplate the ethical and moral issues behind the theft of intellectual property." A listing of any sources used would have been helpful.
    • 04/05/2004
    • 07:36:17
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Ode on a Grecian Urn

    Thank you for an outstanding analysis of John Keats' immortal ode. Your analysis of the poet's work is about as thorough and well thought out as anyone could hope for. I thought that the three essays I submitted on poetry analysis were good (surprise!), but your take on "Ode on a Grecian Urn" is second to none. Keep up the good work!
    • 04/05/2004
    • 07:29:20
    • Score: 8 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Auschwitz

    Yours is an interesting essay on one of the more infamous Nazi death camps of World War II. I'm sure many readers would appreciate it if you would list at the end of your essay the sources you used.
    • 03/05/2004
    • 18:59:34
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Hell Renovated

    This was a good summary of Dante's Inferno which lacked only a bibliography at the end of your essay.
    • 03/05/2004
    • 18:16:46
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Che

    You have written a good biography of the famous revolutionary leader but I would have liked to have seen a bibliography also.
    • 03/05/2004
    • 18:12:43
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Sacco and Vanzetti

    Yours is an interesting essay about a controversial trial and you should include a listing at the end of your references consulted.
    • 03/05/2004
    • 18:02:09
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Hoover vs. Roosevelt

    This was an enlightening comparison between the conservative Herbert Hoover and liberal Franklin Roosevelt. The documents you mention in your essay need to be further clarified.
    • 03/05/2004
    • 17:56:34
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Constitution

    Yours is a good essay about the Constitution but some people might be helped by a more thorough description of the various documents you make reference to.
    • 03/05/2004
    • 17:50:58
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Technology

    This is a good essay and an improvement over your earlier essay on a similar subject. Keep practicing your grammar skills. Please remember to include a bibliography at the end of your essay.
    • 03/05/2004
    • 17:39:33
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Thirteen

    Your movie review is alright but I think it would be a good idea to break it up into smaller paragraphs because some people prefer not to read one paragraph essays.
    • 03/05/2004
    • 17:29:33
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Leukemia

    You have written a good report on a deadly disease but you need to include a bibliography at the end of your essay so that others may be better able to review your sources.
    • 03/05/2004
    • 17:13:35
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Resistance

    Yours is a good essay on slave resistance but you need to include a bibliography as a help to those who would like to review your sources.
    • 03/05/2004
    • 17:05:46
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Character Comparison

    Your detailed comparison of characters in three of Roddy Doyle's books is well supported but you should include a listing of your references at the end of your essay.
    • 03/05/2004
    • 16:57:01
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Snowboarding

    You have written an interesting history of snowboarding and your essay would be even better if you would add a bibliography.
    • 03/05/2004
    • 16:27:39
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Diseases

    Yours is a good essay on diseases in America in the 1800's. The essay would benefit with the addition of a bibliography.
    • 03/05/2004
    • 16:21:19
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Social Darwinism

    You've written a good essay on Social Darwinism and I would only recommend that you add a bibliography to help others who might like to review your research.
    • 03/05/2004
    • 16:15:38
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Same privileges?

    You've written an interesting essay on a very controversial topic. One thing that should be added is a bibliography at the end of your essay.
    • 03/05/2004
    • 15:36:02
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Banning of Foods

    You've written a good essay on the banning of hormone injected and genetically engineered foods, but you need to add a bibliography so that others can do further research should they so desire.
    • 03/05/2004
    • 15:29:37
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Great Expectations and Frankenstein

    Thank you for a good discussion of genre as it relates to two of the classic novels of Dickens and Shelley. I particularly liked how you focused on two main characters from each novel and thoroughly explained with apt textual examples how genre conventions affect the portrayal of their origins. Great work!
    • 03/05/2004
    • 15:12:42
    • Score: 15 out of 16 people found this comment useful.
  • Sonnet 73

    You make some compelling points in your analysis of Shakespeare's sonnet of loss. There are two interpretations which make sense and there is strong support for your view that Shakespeare is describing impending physical death. I would like to suggest another possibility. Sonnet 73 might also be seen as a lament over the loss of youth. You correctly point out that Shakespeare's first 126 sonnets were addressed to a man, meaning that after Sonnet 73 the bard would write 53 more. As the sonnets are generally viewed as being autobiographical, Sonnet 73, which was written when Shakespeare was in his mid 30's, was not written near the end of his life. He had though lost his youth. In expressing his regret over his loss of youth, Shakespeare may be cautioning the young man to make the most of his. Thus, Shakespeare may also be talking of the death of youthful vigor as a natural progression toward physical death.
    • 03/05/2004
    • 15:08:23
    • Score: 16 out of 17 people found this comment useful.
  • For No One

    You've written an interesting analysis of one of the sadder Beatles songs. I liked the way you related how each of the musical instruments supported the song's melancholy message of lost love. It's especially heartbreaking when one person seems to forget so easily while the other can't seem to forget at all "a love that should have lasted years." I was somewhat sad when your essay ended because I had wanted you to say a little more.
    • 03/05/2004
    • 15:02:50
    • Score: 22 out of 26 people found this comment useful.
  • Mussolini

    You've written a good essay but you need to include a bibliography which will help others do further research should they desire.
    • 03/05/2004
    • 09:11:17
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Stephen Hawking

    You essay is alright but I suggest you break it up into smaller paragraphs. Some people might not want to read one long paragraph and would miss out on your report on Stephen Hawking should they skip it because of an unappealing format.
    • 03/05/2004
    • 08:51:34
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Pyramid Construction

    You have written a good report but you should include a bibliography at the end of your essay. Also, because of the importance of the title, you should change "Contruction" to "Construction" although I typically don't comment on spelling errors.
    • 03/05/2004
    • 08:44:41
    • Score: 11 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • A Half Century of Progress

    Yours is a good essay but you need to add a bibliography. Also, because of the importance of the title, you should change "Hald" to "Half" although I normally don't comment on typos.
    • 03/05/2004
    • 08:27:04
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • America's Poor

    You make some good points but you need to add a bibliography at the end of your essay.
    • 03/05/2004
    • 08:21:34
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Brands

    Your essay was alright but submitting it twice is not the best use of the reader's time.
    • 03/05/2004
    • 08:10:34
    • Score: 6 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • What is Terrorism?

    You've written a good essay and I would only suggest that you spell terrorism correctly in the title because of its importance in an essay, although I normally don't comment on typos.
    • 03/05/2004
    • 07:36:24
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Is Everything Political?

    You make some good points but when you have even one internal citation you should also include a bibliography at the end of your essay. Although I don't normally comment on spelling, you should change "Access" to "Assess" because of the importance of the title in an essay.
    • 03/05/2004
    • 07:14:19
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Social Disorganization

    You have written a good essay but when you have internal citations you should also include a full bibliography at the end.
    • 03/05/2004
    • 07:05:45
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Saving Private Ryan and Band of Brothers

    Your topic is an interesting one but I think you should cite any sources used. Also, you probably don't need a listing of the cast members from each film because it does little or nothing to advance your thesis which is to show that the two films are similar.
    • 03/05/2004
    • 06:48:22
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Uneducated

    You make some good points but some may chuckle at your title given your topic. There should not be an apostrophe in Americans because it is not the possessive form. While I normally do not point out spelling or grammar mistakes, some may think (wrongly) that the title is a product of someone whose education was deficient (unless that was your point). The title is also hyperbole. Perhaps a more accurate representation of the state of affairs would be "Americans Are Undereducated."
    • 03/05/2004
    • 06:38:59
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • I have a dream

    You have written an interesting essay and I especially like how you used Martin Luther King's "I Have a Dream" speech as a guide. The opening quote was effective and I consider it to be one of the best expressed thoughts on the subject of equal opportunity. However, I would take exception with your relating affirmative action to racism. Racism is a highly charged word and should be used carefully. I share your dream that temporary measures such as affirmative action will someday no longer be needed because we will have at long last achieved the goal of equal opportunity for all. We are not there yet.
    • 03/05/2004
    • 06:26:59
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Machiavelli

    You've written a good biography of Machiavelli but I suggest that you include a bibliography at the end since you do include citations with your essay.
    • 03/05/2004
    • 06:11:31
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Management Functions

    Yours is a good essay but I would modify the title slightly. While you do mention the four managerial functions, as defined by Robbins, your report focuses on only one of them: planning. Therefore, I suggest you title your report either "Planning" or "Management Functions: Planning."
    • 03/05/2004
    • 06:04:13
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Management Information Systems

    You have done a good job of discussing the primary qualitative characteristics of management information but I would add to your list two secondary characteristics: comparability and consistency. Comparability allows an entity's financial information to be examined side by side with that of other firm's, particularly in the same industry. Consistency indicates that the same methods have been used to generate the financial information period after period. Comparability allows for meaningful comparisons across firms while consistency allows for meaningful comparisons across time.
    • 03/05/2004
    • 05:54:05
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Financial statements

    You have provided a lot of good information about financial statements but I would define the accrual basis differently. Regarding the accrual method, you state that "you record your expenses when the obligation arises" but that is a legal definition. An accountant would record expenses when incurred. Incurred means that the company received the benefit of the expense in the current accounting period. For example, you don't record depreciation expense when the obligation arises. Rather, you record it when use of the fixed asset helps to generate revenue, which is to say when the expense is incurred.
    • 03/05/2004
    • 05:18:15
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Vietnam

    You have written a good comparison of the documentary "Hearts and Minds" and the book "Dispatches." The Vietnam Conflict was one of the more trying events in American history. One lesson that America has hopefully learned from Vietnam is that once the nation has committed to war, whether one agrees or disagrees with the decision, the young men and women who serve in the military to protect our freedoms deserve our full support. They are truly America's finest and their sacrifice should never be allowed to go in vain.
    • 02/05/2004
    • 11:48:04
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Dubliners

    Thank you for a good discussion of James Joyce and his ground breaking "Dubliners." I agree that Joyce was a great writer. Like many visionaries, he was not accorded a fuller appreciation until after he died a little over sixty years ago. Great work!
    • 02/05/2004
    • 11:37:12
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • King Henry VIII

    Thank you for an enlightening biography of one of the more famous kings of Britain. His impact on the Church of England remains to this very day. A bibliography would have been helpful.
    • 02/05/2004
    • 11:27:24
    • Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Adult Content on the Airwaves

    Thank you for a thorough discussion of an always controversial issue. Free speech rights obviously do not include putting anything imaginable on the airwaves but evolving technology is making this an increasingly perplexing problem. I would have liked to have seen a bibliography.
    • 02/05/2004
    • 11:22:26
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • A Play with Two Heads

    Thank you for an interesting discussion focusing on Tom's role in "The Glass Menagerie." Your analysis will likely help many gain new insight into Tennessee Williams' classic play. Fine work!
    • 02/05/2004
    • 11:16:44
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Can America Handle the Trigger?

    Thank you for an informative discussion of a very controversial topic. What to do about guns is a problem which has been plaguing us for some time and is not likely to go away soon. I particularly found interesting the five alternatives you listed. Good job!
    • 02/05/2004
    • 11:08:13
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • 1950's

    This is a well researched essay focusing on the movie "Stand By Me" and what it reveals not only about growing up but also about a decade which is quickly becoming forgotten for many. I'm sure a number of us can relate to the problems of growing up which the boys in the movie faced. The problems are not unique to any particular decade and we often look back with nostalgia at times gone by which weren't as pleasant as we would like to remember.
    • 02/05/2004
    • 11:02:24
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Ethics matter

    Thank you for an informative essay into one of the more widely publicized corporate scandals in history. Many ordinary people lost not only their retirement accounts but also their personal portfolios which were not diversified because of the lapse of personal and organizational ethics at Enron. Ethics matter and if you lie, cheat, and steal in lesser ways you are morally deficient and are likely to lie, cheat, and steal in big ways. I wonder how many of the big crooks at Enron started out as petty thieves.
    • 02/05/2004
    • 10:50:26
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Legal Process Outline

    Thanks for providing a useful overview of the workings of the Equal Employment Opportunity Commission. The EEOC plays a vital role in ensuring that companies utilize fair employment practices and I'm sure many will benefit from your legal process outline. Great job!
    • 02/05/2004
    • 10:24:33
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Brown v. Board of Education

    This is a landmark ruling of the Supreme Court and deserves a more detailed analysis than you have provided. You might have explained that Warren is Chief Justice Earl Warren. Please do additional research and resubmit a more thorough essay.
    • 02/05/2004
    • 10:18:35
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Duddy

    Thank you for an interesting analysis of Duddy as portrayed in Mordecai Richler's "The Apprenticeship of Duddy Kravitz." You really have shown how Duddy's family plays a key part in Duddy's objectives, attitudes and actions. Fine work!
    • 02/05/2004
    • 10:11:36
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • The Annals

    Thanks for an absorbing analysis of Nero as portrayed in Book XV of "The Annals" by Tacitus. Nero was a truly infamous Roman emperor who personifies that absolute power really does corrupt absolutely. Excellent work!
    • 02/05/2004
    • 10:02:02
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Jacques

    Thank you for your detailed description of Jacques in Act 2 Scene 1 of Shakespeare's play "As You Like It." I'm sure many will benefit from the depth of your analysis. Way to go!
    • 02/05/2004
    • 09:55:51
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Dracula

    You have done a good job explaining how Stoker sets up Mina as the quintessential Victorian woman. After reading your essay, people should better understand how she serves as the counterpoint to the vampire. Nicely done!
    • 02/05/2004
    • 09:48:11
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • An Inspector Calls

    Thank you for your in depth character study of Priestley's famous inspector. The inspector is a classic character whom you have done a good job shedding light on. Great going!
    • 02/05/2004
    • 09:42:12
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Hero and Leander

    Thanks for a good poetic analysis. You seem to have a good grasp of the poem's meaning. Nicely done!
    • 02/05/2004
    • 09:34:12
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Loose Yourself

    Thank you for an interesting piece. You definitely have a knack for writing. Good job!
    • 02/05/2004
    • 09:30:05
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • CFO

    You've written a good essay on today's CFO, but I would suggest that you break it up into smaller paragraphs. Some people may not want to read one long paragraph. It would be unfortunate should anyone skip your fine report on the changing role of the modern CFO.
    • 02/05/2004
    • 02:02:27
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Gender in society

    You make some interesting points but you have to break this up into smaller paragraphs. Some people may not want to read one long paragraph of over 3,400 words. You also need a bibliography.
    • 01/05/2004
    • 22:34:39
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Adrenoleukodystrophy and Encephalitis

    Submitting the same paper twice is a waste of the reader's time.
    • 01/05/2004
    • 22:24:47
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • The Handmaid's Tale

    You provide a good summary of Margaret Atwood's classic story. Your essay would benefit from a deeper analysis of theme, characterization, and symbolism. Although I typically don't comment about spelling, you need to change "Tail" to "Tale" in the title.
    • 01/05/2004
    • 22:16:22
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Two problems

    You make some interesting, though unfinished, points. I would just like to remind you that if citations appear within the text of your essay, you should include a bibliography at the end. You also need to expand on your essay by more fully developing your ideas.
    • 01/05/2004
    • 22:07:45
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Pornography

    I normally try not to comment on grammar but yours is so bad it detracts from your message. I'm not sure that there are any pros to pornography, but at least you are against it as are most people. This essay needs a complete rewrite and I would hope that you would expand on the negative aspects of pornography by researching any studies which shed light on the subject.
    • 01/05/2004
    • 09:40:33
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Women in business

    This sounds very much like a press release. You need to expand on this by telling us more than what we could read in a newspaper. To be named Goldsboro's American Business Woman of the Year is an honor which deserves a more thorough essay describing her unique contributions.
    • 01/05/2004
    • 09:28:43
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Crime and Punishment

    Thank you for such an in depth discussion of one of the more famous characters in literature. Your detailed character analysis of Raskolnikov reveals that you have spent a great deal of time thinking about what makes him act as he does. Great job!
    • 01/05/2004
    • 09:19:23
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Parenting

    Yours is a good discussion of parenting themes in the movie "The Fellowship of The Ring." Being a good parent has to be about the toughest job in the world and I'm still trying to find out where the school is that they teach you how to do it well. Other than the cliched school of hard knocks, perhaps one good venue might be film, especially good movies such as "The Fellowship of The Ring" because they reach such a wide audience. I'm not sure Hollywood has always portrayed parenting in a positive light and would welcome the voluntary contribution of any producer to make more parent friendly films.
    • 01/05/2004
    • 09:11:24
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • In opposition

    You make some good points on a very controversial topic. While I am personally opposed to the idea of gay marriage, I am less certain about the issue when viewed from the standpoint of equal rights for all. In the end, I made up my mind on the matter based on some of the same Biblical principles which you cite in the essay. I do understand, however, why some people feel deeply conflicted about the thorny issue of gay marriage.
    • 01/05/2004
    • 08:59:18
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Madam Rolands

    You've written a good account of Madam Roland's letter to a friend describing her reaction to the massacre at the Champs de Mars. In the title, you give the date as 18/7/1891. Should the year be 1791 instead of 1891?
    • 01/05/2004
    • 08:29:58
    • Score: 12 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • Duplicate Submission

    Submitting the same essay twice is a waste of the reader's time and will not earn you an extra 350 points.
    • 01/05/2004
    • 08:17:17
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • China

    You make some good points as to why the Communists gained control of China in 1949. While I would not defend any corruption which may have existed in the regime of Chiang Kai-shek, I find communism an unacceptable form of government which has a history of generally repressing the citizenry as badly as, or worse than, that of even the most corrupt regime If given a choice between corruption and communism, I would choose neither.
    • 01/05/2004
    • 07:55:01
    • Score: 8 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Duplicate Submission

    Submitting the same essay more than once is wasteful of the reader's time.
    • 01/05/2004
    • 07:44:21
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • The Handmaid's Tale

    Thanks for your extensive discussion of Margaret Atwood's "The Handmaid's Tale" and for focusing on the historical notes to the book. Too often historical notes are disregarded by readers even though such notes can contain a wealth of information which enhances the experience of reading a work of literature. Nicely done!
    • 01/05/2004
    • 07:28:52
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Animal experimentation.

    You've made some good points regarding the advantages of animal experimentation. While I would agree that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, it is important that every reasonable step be taken to ensure that animals don't suffer unduly in experiments that undoubtedly benefit humans. We need to be sensitive to the pain suffered by all creatures, as humans are not the only ones capable of experiencing discomfort.
    • 01/05/2004
    • 07:21:14
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Eat it up

    Thanks for your critique of the performance called "Eat it up" by the dance company "Steps." Your review was the next best thing to being there to see the dance performed on stage. Fantastic!
    • 01/05/2004
    • 07:11:47
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Corruption

    Thank you for giving us a well written discussion of corruption in relation to Robert Cormier's "I am the Cheese" and the movie "Witness." Corruption is similar to a cancer that eats away at morality until there's nothing left but putrid decay. Good job!
    • 01/05/2004
    • 07:03:21
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Dougy

    Thank you for providing some good insights into James Moloney's book. Your summaries and commentaries on the significant chapters are sure to be helpful to students who have been assigned the book to read. Well done!
    • 01/05/2004
    • 06:20:13
    • Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Leadership

    You've written a good essay, although it's difficult to imagine who would disagree with the suggestion that being familiar with the various theories of leadership would help to improve modern management. Also, it would be helpful to have a complete bibliographical entry at the end of your essay for any source cited within the text.
    • 30/04/2004
    • 23:40:24
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Moby Dick

    You've obviously put some effort into this but your essay would benefit if you could spend some additional time on it. There is not much in your essay on theme, characterization, symbolism, or any of the other major elements of literature besides plot. Moby Dick is a richly textured piece of literature and plot is perhaps the least intriguing aspect of the novel to cover. What you've done may be alright for a plot overview but you really need to expand on your essay.
    • 30/04/2004
    • 23:04:44
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Waiting for the barbarians

    Submitting the same essay two times is not the best use of the reader's time.
    • 30/04/2004
    • 22:08:43
    • Score: 8 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Duplicate Submission

    This is now the third time I have seen essentially the same text in three of your essays all of which are titled "Duchenne Muscular Dystrophy." It is wasteful of the reader's time to look at all three essays.
    • 30/04/2004
    • 21:59:28
    • Score: 7 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Muscular Dystrophy

    This appears to be virtually the same as your prior essay of the same title. It is not necessary to submit both as it isn't the best use of the reader's time.
    • 30/04/2004
    • 21:53:19
    • Score: 5 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Bombing of Darwin

    Rather than this essay being on the bombing of Darwin in 1942, you appear to have included the text of your previous essay on "To Kill a Mockingbird."
    • 30/04/2004
    • 21:45:16
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Frankenstein

    You make some good points but I suggest you break your essay up into smaller paragraphs. Some people might not care to read one long paragraph and would miss out on your good effort if they skip your essay because of an unappealing appearance.
    • 30/04/2004
    • 19:53:48
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Animal Farm

    You've written an interesting analysis of Orwell's famous book but I would suggest you break this up into smaller paragraphs. Some people might see one long paragraph and choose to read no further, which would be unfortunate since you've obviously put some effort into your essay.
    • 30/04/2004
    • 19:44:20
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Lord of the Flies

    You make some interesting points but I had a somewhat different take on the novel's main theme. In his novel, Golding seems to be saying that man's nature is essentially dark and that the civilized front most people put on is merely a facade. He seems to feel that without laws and the ability to enforce them, society would deteriorate into anarchy.
    • 30/04/2004
    • 19:39:46
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Change

    This is virtually the identical text of your paper titled "How have the texts you have studied this year effectively shaped your understanding of the meaning of ?change?? Includes "The Door" by Miroslav Holub and others..." Submitting the same essay twice is a waste of the reader's time.
    • 30/04/2004
    • 19:21:09
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Elia Kazan

    Yours is a good biography of a terrific director, but you need to cite your sources so that others may do follow up research should they so choose.
    • 30/04/2004
    • 18:56:15
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Space Race

    You have written a good essay on the space race and I would only recommend that you include a bibliography so that others may do further research if they wish.
    • 30/04/2004
    • 18:42:02
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Nuclear energy and the environment

    Yours is a good essay on the relationship between nuclear energy and the environment. I would only suggest you place your thesis statement at the beginning, if you choose to keep it in the essay, rather than at the end after the bibliography.
    • 30/04/2004
    • 18:37:55
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Nuclear energy

    You've written an extensive essay but I would suggest that you break it up into smaller paragraphs. Some people may not care to read one long paragraph of over 7,800 words and it would be a pity if they passed up your fine report on nuclear energy.
    • 30/04/2004
    • 18:30:45
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Breaking Boundaries

    Submitting the same essay more than once is not the best use of the readers' time.
    • 30/04/2004
    • 15:18:00
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Atticus

    You make some good points and I agree with you that Atticus Finch was a hero. The American Film Institute thought so too and last year named him, as played by Gregory Peck in the movie version of "To Kill A Mockingbird" of over forty years ago, as number one in their listing of the top 100 film heroes of the past. It took great courage for Atticus to defend a black man accused of raping a white woman given the book's and film's setting.
    • 30/04/2004
    • 14:48:40
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Theme of Beowulf

    You make some good points about this seminal work of literature. There is no doubt that there is an underlying theme that good will triumph over evil. I would like to add that there is a related theme of no lesser importance that a hero is someone who acts in a strong, courageous, and loyal manner. Beowulf underscores how crucial it is to believe in oneself if great deeds are to be achieved.
    • 30/04/2004
    • 14:36:08
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Symbolism and metaphor

    You've written an interesting essay on Golding's famous story. However, I would have liked you to have gone into more detail about specific symbols and their meaning. For example, the island is symbolic of society as a whole as Golding feels his message has universal applicability. The Beast represents man's darker nature. Ralph, the chief who sets rules for the other boys to follow, represents law and order. There are other symbols as well and you may wish to expand your essay by giving a more in depth account of individual metaphors in the novel.
    • 30/04/2004
    • 14:29:01
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • William Styron

    Yours is an interesting essay on the life of an author who stirred considerable controversy, especially with his famous "The Confessions of Nat Turner." He is one of my favorite novelists because he combines history with social commentary. I have always liked his "Sophie's Choice" which I thought was one of the rare movies that did justice to the book. It is one of the better works on the Holocaust because it captures in such vivid detail the horrible toll on a survivor of a ghastly period which still haunts many.
    • 30/04/2004
    • 14:22:39
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • To Autumn

    You have written an interesting poetry analysis of John Keats' beloved ode. It's not so much that Keats says anything truly important in his tribute to Autumn, but the way he says it is truly beautiful. I especially like the poem's last stanza in which Keats expresses with sad acceptance the season dying or ending. I have trouble accepting the sad death at only age 26 of a poet whose great potential was only fractionally fulfilled when his life ended too soon.
    • 30/04/2004
    • 14:19:40
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Groups as Decision Makers

    Yours is a good essay on the group decision making process and related issues. I believe groups do tend to make riskier decisions when compared to individuals who would have to bear sole accountability if things did not turn out as planned. Group members can always spread the blame around for bad decisions. Because there seems to be a greater tendency on the part of group members to believe that consensus decisions are inherently better, it seems natural to expect groups to accept greater risk. Riskier decisions are not necessarily a bad thing when arrived at after serious consideration as they can often lead to bold steps which benefit the organization by reaping rewards which outweigh the risks.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 22:58:57
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Consumerism

    You have written a good essay on the pitfalls of consumerism. Most people would probably agree with the points you make about consumerism, but the more difficult issue is how to find a way out of the spending cycle. We all buy things we don't really need from time to time. Advertisers bombard us endlessly with enticing messages to spend even more. With some people, the urge to spend can even be a form of obsessive compulsive disorder. Help is available for those who recognize they have a problem. Unfortunately, most of us don't even realize that the chronic urge to buy ever more things is a problem because so many people are under the spell of consumerism that it seems absolutely normal.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 22:35:07
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • The Media

    Yours is a good essay on the media, which seems to be growing in power and influence in our lives. Advertising won't end as long as it is seen as a way to boost profits. Advertisers target young people in the belief that buying patterns and brand loyalty are established early in life. Hook them early and they will be customers for life. I think one of the reasons infomercials are often shown in the wee hours of the morning is that people are only half awake and are not discerning consumers when sleepy. Showing infomercials at odd hours is not such a bad thing because they can be so boring and repetitive that they can even put insomniacs to sleep.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 22:14:23
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Revolutions

    This is an interesting essay comparing the French and Russian Revolutions, but I'm wondering what the source of your information was. You need to include a bibliography so that readers can look at your sources if they wish.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 21:47:13
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Shakespeare

    This is an interesting biography of William Shakespeare, but I'm wondering what the source of your information was. You need to include a bibliography so that readers can look at your sources if they wish.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 21:41:38
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Gender Equality

    You've written a good essay on a couple of interesting articles. I don't believe any woman should be excluded from a combat role which she desires merely because she is a woman. Time and again, women of many nations have distinguished themselves in battle and will do so in the future. As far as binge drinking is concerned, I agree with you about women's motivations. Some may over analyze a phenomenon which just comes down to having some fun, although binge drinking can be a serious problem. We will be a better society when women have achieved equality with men.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 17:08:03
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Kennedy and Johnson

    Yours is a good essay on the efforts of Presidents Kennedy and Johnson to improve civil rights in America in the 1960's. Kennedy's assassination was a tragedy but something good did come out of it. President Johnson felt that he was duty bound to get as much of the slain president's initiatives through Congress as possible. Having served as Senate Majority Leader, Johnson was an expert at Washington politics which Kennedy was not. Because of prejudice, Kennedy could not have successfully ushered civil rights legislation through Congress, especially the Senate where a filibuster would have likely resulted. Johnson effectively used his political skills and sympathy over Kennedy's death to get important civil rights legislation passed and the nation is a better place today because of it.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 16:55:10
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Religious Belief Systems

    You've written a good essay which contains some interesting facts about Islam. I note that no grade is given and if you haven't turned this in but intend to, I have one suggestion. Since you only briefly mention Hinduism in the opening paragraph, you might want to consider dropping mention of it in your title. If you wish to retain your original title, you might consider expanding your discussion of Hinduism so that it has more equal coverage with Islam.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 16:45:59
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • FEMALE INVOLVEMENT IN POLITICS

    I agree that women are every bit as capable as men to hold political office. It is unfortunate that because of long held prejudices women have traditionally not had access to high positions in politics. That is slowly changing and the trend is positive. Sandra Day O'Connor has been joined on the high court by Ruth Bater Ginsberg for several years now. Hopefully, a third woman associate justice will be appointed to the Supreme Court when the next vacancy occurs. What I am really looking forward to is the day when a woman will be elected president. When that happens, I expect many of the old, unfair barriers at all levels of politics to break down.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 16:31:03
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Men and Women

    You may find that there are a great many women and men who take offense at some of the things you say in your essay. Some of what you say is reminiscent of the old myth that women aren't interested in politics or, worse, aren't suited for it. A woman would make every bit as good a president as any man, although there is a tendency to vote for men only for the highest office in the land. I welcome the day when we have our first woman president. Women have for too long been excluded from positions of power not because they are unsuited but rather because of lingering prejudices which will hopefully soon end.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 15:52:23
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Is College Still Worth It?

    Yours is a good essay on the importance of a college education. As college tuitions continue to rise, I suspect an increasing number of people will question whether college is worth the expense. Unfortunately, tuitions will rise more than the overall cost of living because higher education is labor intensive. Colleges compete for the best professors, some of whom are well compensated. I agree that college is still worth it for many people despite the rising costs, but would emphasize that many people can still have rewarding careers without pursuing a traditional four year degree.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 15:30:57
    • Score: 13 out of 13 people found this comment useful.
  • Affirmative action

    You've made some interesting points about affirmative action and are likely to spark some heated discussion. No program such as affirmative action is perfect but we must do what we can to ensure a more equal society even if the means of doing so has some disparities. I look forward to the day when we no longer need affirmative action because all will be judged according to their character and not the color of their skin. Martin Luther King had such a dream as expressed in his famous speech in Washington and we should all do what we can to hasten the day which he lived and died for.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 15:22:19
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Battle of Britain

    You've written a good essay about one of the most momentous battles in military history and need only to add a bibliography. When most people think of battle, they imagine armies and armored units. As you point out, the Battle of Britain was an air war which England won because of the stupidity of the German high command in changing tactics just when the British defenses were about to break. For the Luftwaffe to switch from military to civilian targets because of retaliation for the bombing of Berlin was fortunate for England indeed. After the Nazi conquests early in World War II, England stood alone against Germany in 1940 with the valiant flyers of the RAF as security against any invasion of the island by the Nazis. In referring to the stalwart RAF aviators who flew mission after grueling mission though terribly fatigued, Churchill was correct in observing that never have so many owed so much to so few.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 15:14:02
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • School Prayer

    You began your essay quite well with a wonderful poem. You also developed your points well and concluded with an intriguing question. There are those who are trying to have any reference to God removed from the Pledge of Allegiance. I hope the efforts fail and also am a proponent of prayer in school, as long as nobody is forced to pray against his or her will. It's a contentious issue and sparks lively debate. I'm not sure how it will ultimately be resolved but would favor a moment of silence during which all students could pray or not pray as they choose.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 14:58:10
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • The Lottery

    You've done a good job in explaining the symbolism in Shirley Jackson's famous story. As is often the case, symbols in literature relate to the theme which the author is trying to convey. I also believe that Ms. Jackson wants us to recognize that we may be victims of rituals and superstitions though we believe that we have progressed so far. Native tribesmen are not the only ones with ritualistic practices, which can be harmful when they substitute for independent thinking.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 14:46:52
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Blind dates

    Having been on one or two blind dates myself, I can readily relate to what you are saying. It is only natural to try to get an idea of what someone looks like when hearing a voice on the phone. And you are so right when you observe that there's just no way of knowing for sure. Fortunately, blind dates are a thing of the past as far as I'm concerned, but I thank you for bringing back some memories, not all of which were bad.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 14:38:23
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Scarlet Letter

    When I see something like this, I regret that there is not a fourth rating for a level below poor.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 14:29:58
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • The Yellow Wallpaper

    You've written a good essay on Charlotte Gilman's classic story. I can't help drawing a parallel between "The Yellow Wallpaper" and Ibsen's "The Doll's House." In Ibsen's play, Nora is also treated as if she were a child by her husband, Torvald. I am glad that women are treated more fairly now than they used to be, as so effectively portrayed in these two pieces of enduring literature. Like you, I realize that more needs to be done to ensure all are treated equally.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 14:23:55
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Women in Afghanistan

    You have written a good essay, even if it is a bit dated, about how conditions used to be in Afghanistan under a despicable regime. Fortunately, members of the former regime have taken up new residences in mountainside caves and are being hunted as the criminals which they are. Change won't happen overnight, but already great progress has been made since the overthrow of the Taliban. Things are improving daily and progress will continue to be made in a number of areas, including women's rights.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 14:07:33
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Delegation

    You have written a good essay on a key managerial skill. New managers in particular have trouble delegating tasks to others. Perhaps their reluctance to do so stems from their strong desire to demonstrate that they are good at their jobs and feel that they can perform tasks best which would be more appropriately assigned to subordinates. To some, it seems ironic that the best managers are those who tend to delegate the most. Delegation works very well when managers surround themselves with competent people who are willing to grow and capable of assuming greater responsibilities.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 11:56:13
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Tobacco

    Yours is a good discussion of the dangers of tobacco, but you need a bibliography at the end of your essay so that others can review your research.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 11:27:40
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Accountants in the 21st Century

    You have written a good essay about the changing role of accountants in the 21st century. The accounting profession is likely to come under increasing scrutiny as people expect more and more of accountants and auditors. Much of the scrutiny is justified based on recent scandals from Enron to Worldcom. Of course, the recent failure of Arthur Andersen, once a proud member of accounting's Big 5, underscores the heavy toll that accountants face when they do not comply with professional standards. It's definitely going to be increasingly difficult in the 21st century to be an accountant or to attract the best and brightest to the profession.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 10:54:17
    • Score: 15 out of 15 people found this comment useful.
  • Predictions

    Yours is a good essay about a widely read book from the man some have demonized and others glorified. Bill Gates has not always been correct in his predictions about computer technology. It was Gates who said that 640K ought to be enough for anybody. It is risky to make predictions in such a rapidly changing field as information technology and Gates probably wishes he could delete his statement from memory.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 10:39:28
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Ethics in Business

    You have written a good essay but I suggest that you break it up into shorter paragraphs. Some people may not want to read one long paragraph of approximately 2,300 words and would be missing a fine discussion of business ethics should they skip your essay because of its appearance.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 09:40:47
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Social Security

    Yours is a good essay about a controversial issue which is increasingly in the news. With so many aging baby boomers retiring in the near future, and with a relatively smaller pool of workers to support Social Security, some changes to the system seem inevitable. It is not in the best interests of anybody for the system to go bankrupt and modifications now may make unnecessary more drastic changes later on. Having long been called the third rail of politics, Social Security has been something politicians have traditionally been unwilling to touch. However, the entire system may be in jeopardy unless reforms are instituted in order to save an important safety net for the retired who paid into Social Security all of their working lives.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 09:34:05
    • Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Two Kinds

    You have written a good essay but I recommend that you break it up into shorter paragraphs. Some people might not want to read one long paragraph of approximately 3,500 words and would be missing out should they skip your fine essay because they find the format unappealing.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 09:22:33
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • The Lottery

    Yours is a good essay about Shirley Jackson's famous story. What strikes me about Jackson's work is how well she portrays the ritualistic practices of humans. We traditionally associate such practices with native tribesmen but don't realize that they can also be part of modern life. Acting without thinking based on tradition or superstition is as deserving of criticism in a seemingly sophisticated urban setting as it is anywhere else.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 09:11:11
    • Score: 6 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • World War II

    You have written a good essay which details some of the positive consequences of a terrible war. Women were also instrumental in the American war effort and their valuable contributions made many aware that they deserved to be treated equally. Australians fought valiantly in World War II, as they did in Vietnam, and America is fortunate to have the friendship of such a worthy ally as Australia.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 09:01:37
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • A Separate Peace

    Yours is a good essay about a book I had to read in high school and am glad I did. Rivalry can be a good thing as it enhances performance, but taken to an extreme as portrayed in John Knowles' book it can have potentially damaging consequences. Just a moment's thoughtless act can affect an entire lifetime and we would all do well to think about the consequences of what we do before we act.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 08:50:06
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Duplicate Submission

    This is now the third time I have had to look at the same essay and feel my time has been wasted.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 08:36:18
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Roles of parents

    Submitting the same essay more than one time is not the best use of the reader's time.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 08:23:29
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Reality Television

    You make some interesting points about what draws so many people to reality television. Perhaps one reason reality TV is so popular is that it allows viewers to see others in situations they would not want to be in. It's somewhat the same mentality with daytime talk shows. Some like seeing others whose lives have become totally messed up so that they can take satisfaction that at least they're not as bad off as those who don't mind airing their dirty laundry in public. And the inevitable shoving matches are always a real crowd pleaser.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 01:34:23
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • FDR

    Yours is a good essay but I suggest that you break it up into smaller paragraphs. Some people might not want to read one long paragraph of nearly 4,300 words and would miss out on reading about one of America's greatest presidents if they skip your fine essay.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 01:18:27
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Contradictions

    Submitting the same essay more than once is not the best use of the reader's time.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 00:44:18
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • First amendment

    You have written a good essay on first amendment rights but it is worth noting that the right to free speech is not absolute. The Supreme Court has the power to interpret the Constitution and declared long ago that there are limits to the right to free speech. For example, one does not have the right to falsely yell "Fire!" in a crowded theater as doing so may endanger the lives of others. We may not like the fact that our right to free speech is limited, but it is a fact nonetheless.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 00:37:21
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Parallels

    You draw some interesting parallels between the Spanish American War and the war in Iraq. I wasn't able to find proof in your essay for your opening assertion that "the planning went back many years" by "today's conservatives" for control of Iraq. Perhaps you would care to add a footnote so that readers could verify a statement which many would find controversial. Of course, argument by analogy doesn't prove anything. Analogies can be useful to clarify complexities but don't provide the evidence your essay needs if your implications are to be taken seriously.
    • 29/04/2004
    • 00:26:10
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • The Tell Tale Heart

    Yours is a good essay on The Tell Tale Heart. Poe certainly was able to write in a way which captivated most readers. I believe part of his success in prose was related to his great ability as a poet. Such devices as imagery, rhythm, and sound are common to poets and Poe was one of the best. Poe was able to successfully draw from his intimate knowledge of words to create just the effect he desired in his short stories.
    • 28/04/2004
    • 23:55:34
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Pearl Harbor

    You've written a good essay on that day which will live in infamy. As bad as it was, the attack on Pearl Harbor could have been much worse for the United States. The Japanese didn't destroy America's aircraft carriers which were later crucial in winning the war in the Pacific. Pearl's repair facilities escaped relatively undamaged also, allowing a rather speedy recovery from the wreckage of the Japanese attack.
    • 28/04/2004
    • 23:46:59
    • Score: 14 out of 14 people found this comment useful.
  • Positive influence

    I can see why you got a 90 on this essay as it is touching. I enjoyed reading about your mother and am sorry about the loss of your father. You end your essay strongly and I'm sure your mother is also proud to have you for a son.
    • 28/04/2004
    • 23:38:43
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Japanese Culture

    Yours is a good essay about a culture with a long and proud tradition. Westerners have traditionally found the Japanese inscrutable, but that has been based on unfamiliarity rather than anything truly strange about Japan. Thank you for an enlightening essay which will hopefully make Japan seem a bit less strange to those who don't know as much as they would like to about a great culture.
    • 28/04/2004
    • 23:26:43
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • A Doll's House

    You raise some interesting issues but I had a somewhat different take on Ibsen's play. Money was only symptomatic of the much deeper problems with the marriage of Nora and Torvald. It was a very unequal relationship in which Nora was patronized as a naive child unable to act responsibly and in need of guardianship. In fact, she was a wife in need of love from a husband incapable of giving it. Sometimes people who are hurting emotionally overspend, but money and the material things it can buy are no substitute for love. Nora's story is a sad one which has been played out on the stage of real life countless times over the ages.
    • 28/04/2004
    • 23:13:46
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Barbara Allan

    Barbara Allan (or Allen) is one of the most beloved of all ballads and there are several variations on the wording. It has been set to music and even featured in films. In fact, it was the haunting parlor melody which was sung near the end of the 1951 version of "A Christmas Carol" in which Alistair Sim played Scrooge. The sad ballad has given rise to the myth that out of the lovers' graves sprung a red rose and briar which became intertwined forever.
    • 28/04/2004
    • 22:40:44
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Planned vs. Free Market Economy

    I agree with your conclusion that a free market economy is better than a planned economy. However, you may want to expand your concluding paragraph to more fully explain why you think a free market economy is better, especially in light of some of the advantages that you claim a planned economy has over a free economy.
    • 28/04/2004
    • 22:26:09
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Ruling hand

    You've written a good essay but instead of a ruling hand I prefer to think of it more as a guiding hand. Or at least that's how it should be. I've known professors who felt that they ruled in the classroom and more often than not students resented it. You state, "Students are minds to be molded," but I wonder how many students would agree. Molding of minds almost sounds like forcing students to conform to some arbitrary standard. I would agree that a more cooperative approach wherein the students and instructor work together to create the best learning environment is an appealing approach.
    • 28/04/2004
    • 18:08:03
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Waiting for the Rain

    Considering that you wrote this while you were in the seventh grade, I would say it is not bad. There are probably a number of seventh graders who wish they could do as well.
    • 28/04/2004
    • 17:26:57
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Violence in Entertainment

    While it is true that violence existed in the world long before the advent of television, that's not to say that television violence does not aggravate the problem. If violence on television makes a bad situation worse, then it is only natural for concerned individuals to want to control it. You may want to do some research to determine if studies suggest there is a link between violence in the media and the propensity of some individuals to behave more violently.
    • 28/04/2004
    • 17:11:45
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Frankenstein

    Yours is a good essay but I would suggest that you break it up into smaller paragraphs. Some people might not want to read one long paragraph of approximately 900 words.
    • 28/04/2004
    • 16:59:32
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • The American Dream

    You've written a good essay but I recommend you break it up into smaller paragraphs. Some people may not care to read one long paragraph of approximately 800 words.
    • 28/04/2004
    • 16:53:23
    • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • New Deal

    As was the case in your prior essay, this one has the wrong title too. At least the content is different from your previous two submissions. I suggest you rename your essay something such as "The New Deal."
    • 28/04/2004
    • 16:45:30
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Organ Donor

    You've written a good essay concerning a topic many of us would just as soon avoid facing, namely, our own mortality. It's well worth considering that our death could mean life to others who are desperately in need of an organ or tissue transfer. Thank you for sharing your personal stories which lend a very human touch to this issue. The need for organ donors should be given much more publicity so that people can find out how relatively easy it is to become an organ donor not just in Florida but in virtually any state.
    • 28/04/2004
    • 16:20:50
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Of mice and men

    You've written a good essay but I suggest you break it up into smaller paragraphs. Some might find one long paragraph of approximately 1,600 words somewhat unappealing to read and it would be a shame if they missed out on your fine effortl
    • 28/04/2004
    • 15:52:21
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Ray Kroc and Walt Disney

    You make some interesting points about two of the most famous American business entrepreneurs. The two men had much in common. Each demanded excellence in customer service from company employees. Each was hardworking and driven to be the best. And each strove to deliver a quality product at a fair price. They proved that relatively simple business models when properly managed can achieve tremendous success. I would have liked to read more about the personal side of these two men and if you plan on expanding your essay that might be one avenue to explore.
    • 28/04/2004
    • 15:48:08
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Truth Naked

    Submitting the same essay a second time is not the best use of the reader's time.
    • 28/04/2004
    • 14:56:11
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • The Catcher in the Rye

    I agree with you that Salinger's novel is one which a great many young people can relate to. Perhaps that's the reason "The Catcher in the Rye" is one of the most frequently assigned novels to read in high school. The book's message of alienation touches on emotions most of us have in adolescence. What's sad is that Holden Caulfied wasn't able to overcome his loneliness even though he did try to reach out. I would have liked to read more of your analysis of the book and you may want to expand on your essay by discussing the novel's broader implications for American society.
    • 28/04/2004
    • 14:49:17
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • The worlds evil

    You've written an interesting essay but I recommend that you break it up into smaller paragraphs. Some people might not care to read one long paragraph of approximately 1,900 words and would miss out on your good effort if they passed your essay by because of its format.
    • 28/04/2004
    • 14:17:45
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • EU Parliament

    You've written an informative essay on the EU Parliament but I would suggest that you make your concluding points in paragraph form using complete sentences rather than listing them.
    • 28/04/2004
    • 11:42:15
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • D-Day

    You've written a good essay on one of the more momentous days in military history. It is hard to overstate the importance of the successful Allied invasion in Normandy. Much of the reason the bloodshed wasn't far worse on the beaches of Normandy is that Hitler had been thoroughly hoodwinked into believing that the invasion would occur at the Pas de Calais. Field Marshall Rommel, who had been assigned overall responsibility for the German defenses of the French northwestern coast, knew that the invasion had to be defeated on the beaches or all would be lost for Germany. History at least proved him right on this point.
    • 27/04/2004
    • 12:24:14
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Jealousy

    Yours is a good essay and I can tell you've put some thought into this subject. What people seem to want most is just to be happy. Advertisers are expert at producing commercials which associate the products they're trying to sell with all sorts of positive emotions, especially happiness. With so many unhappy people in the target audience, the deceptive job of advertisers becomes much easier. True happiness lies in being content with what we have. Jealously fixating on things which others possess but that we don't have is a sure path to unhappiness. No matter how many things we possess, there will always be more items to acquire. The endless pursuit of material possessions leaves us little time for spiritual reflection from which knowledge and joy may be sought.
    • 27/04/2004
    • 12:05:33
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Guillotine

    You make some interesting points. It is ironic that a form of execution designed by a man, Dr Joseph Guillotine, to be more humane than previous methods became one of the more inhumane ways of execution. Once placed face down on the execution bench, death did seem to come quickly (although some would deny it), but it was the fear that led up to the execution that many saw as barbarous. While some did control their fear admirably, as you point out, many more of the thousands of victims during the French Revolution could not. Hopefully, Madame Guillotine will forever more remain an awful thing of the past.
    • 27/04/2004
    • 11:37:49
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • The Bride of Frankenstein

    You've written a good essay on a classic movie. As is true of most arguments between a husband and wife, Mary Shelley found a way to win. The product of her imagination adapted into film makes winners of us all. The movie's director was a master of the old adage, "Show, don't tell." Some films were meant to be shown in black and white. In this film, color would only detract from the lighting You are correct to observe that the human heart can be more ugly than even the most fearsome monster.
    • 27/04/2004
    • 11:15:17
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Reflection on Learning

    Einstein was considered a poor student as have many of the other great minds in history. School can be boring especially when some teachers seem to want to do the bare minimum to get by and apparently have an innate dislike for students. Fortunately, there are a number of good teachers as well who care and your science teacher sounds like one of them. The real challenge is to find something to stimulate your mind when presented with even the most mind-numbing task.
    • 27/04/2004
    • 10:28:48
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • One Flew Over the Cuckoo's Nest

    Yours is a good essay about Ken Kesey's classic book on freedom and oppression. The author's portrayal of the manipulative Nurse Ratched is one of the more memorable depictions in literature of the controlling personality gone completely amuck. Her subjugation of her patients is made all the more contemptible when you consider how vulnerable the mentally ill are and how it is her job to help them. Those who behave as Nurse Ratched have a deep seated psychological problem of their own and it is ironic that one such as she is placed in charge of the patients. Kesey's theme that oppressors may win petty victories while the human spirit will eventually triumph is indeed a message of hope.
    • 27/04/2004
    • 10:11:19
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • One Art

    You've written a good poetry analysis involving one of the more difficult forms to master, the villanelle. Few have written a villanelle better than Dylan Thomas' "Do Not Go Gentle Into That Good Night," but Elizabeth Bishop comes close. She does well to deviate somewhat from the traditional villanelle as the adaptation of the form serves to enhance her message. I'd just like to mention that the villanelle can be a love poem as you indicate, but the form is suited for other purpose as well. When I think of a love poem, the first form which comes to mind is the sonnet. Many of us can identify with the poet's message about lost love which is poignantly expressed in "One Art."
    • 27/04/2004
    • 09:52:18
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Dali

    Yours is a good biography about a pioneering artist. He is one of the many who after being expelled from school went on to achieve greatness. I don't recommend expulsion as a motivator for success, but I sometimes think about how schoolmasters can get things so wrong when they see their job as crushing the spirit of the young. Dali was a free spirit who nonetheless came to a sad end. However, his unique perspective will forever shine through brilliantly in his artistry.
    • 27/04/2004
    • 09:35:20
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Frank McCourt

    You've written a good essay with an effective opening quote from a man who taught us all about the power of passive resistance. The hardships of being born into a shunned social class can sometimes seem almost unbearable. America has long presented treasured opportunities for the outcasts of other nations. I would have liked to read more about the similar situation you allude to and how you eventually triumphed.
    • 27/04/2004
    • 09:20:36
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Othello

    Yours is a very good essay about one of the more suspenseful scenes Shakespeare crafted. The scene you've chosen to write about made me feel sadness for both Othello and Desdemona, as well as anger at Iago for setting this whole tragic affair in motion. It's heartbreaking and illustrates how well the master bard was at creating emotion-filled tension.
    • 27/04/2004
    • 08:59:33
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Seven Habits

    You've written a good essay with a title no serious student can easily resist. I agree that it's vital to be proactive and stop making excuses. School can be an excellent place to start building the habits which will be useful in achieving success later in life.
    • 27/04/2004
    • 08:37:30
    • Score: 5 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Two Moons

    You've written a good essay with an attention getting title. Astronomy is an ever changing science which often reminds us not to be too sure about what we think we know for a fact.
    • 27/04/2004
    • 08:28:20
    • Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Propaganda

    Your essay is interesting but I suggest you break it up into smaller paragraphs. Some may not care to read a single paragraph of over 3,400 words.
    • 26/04/2004
    • 23:40:18
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Title?

    As your essay deals with international monetary matters, I suggest you change the title from "Religion in American by James Luther" to something more appropriate for the content.
    • 26/04/2004
    • 23:36:19
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Ccmustangs...

    Thanks for letting me know about your plans for a sequel. If it's anything like the original, it will be well worth waiting for.
    • 26/04/2004
    • 20:48:29
    • Score: 30 out of 31 people found this comment useful.
  • Ghost Ship

    Creative writing is not easy, but yours is one of the better essays of this genre I've seen on this site. Looking forward to a sequel.
    • 26/04/2004
    • 19:45:08
    • Score: 28 out of 30 people found this comment useful.
  • CIvil Rights

    Some people might look at your long paragraph of almost 1,500 words and not read any further because of the format. I suggest you break this up into smaller paragraphs to make it look more appealing. It's unfortunate but true that appearances matter.
    • 26/04/2004
    • 08:44:43
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Interest rates

    Submitting your essay more than once is a waste of the reader's time
    • 26/04/2004
    • 08:21:11
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Religions

    Submitting your essay more than once is a waste of the reader's time.
    • 26/04/2004
    • 08:03:28
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Kitchener

    I enjoyed reading your informative biography of Lord Kitchener. Before reading your essay, I hadn't realized what a central role Kitchener played in mobilizing England for World War I. It was interesting to learn that he didn't repeat his great success as a soldier when he had to fight the much tougher foe of bureaucracy. He was not the first and won't be the last war hero who could not translate the skills which led to battlefield success to the treacherous world of politics. You did well to convey a lot of information with relatively few words.
    • 26/04/2004
    • 02:57:44
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • World War I

    You've written a great essay on the most important events of The Great War. I liked the way you began with a capsule summary of the key events and then provided much more detail of the war's chronology. It's incredible that a war of such devastation could have started over an assassin's bullet. Beyond the ghastly bloodshed, the war didn't really settle much and only led to a far more deadly war a generation later. Anyone who wants to learn of the key details of the war to end all wars would do well to read your fine report.
    • 26/04/2004
    • 02:53:09
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Battle of Hastings

    Beginning your excellent essay with the interesting fact that England hasn't been conquered for almost one thousand years underscores the historical importance of the last time it was invaded at the Battle of Hastings. It's a fact well worth repeating in your overview. You've done a very good job of portraying the complex marital and ancestral relationships which led to the fight to determine the rightful heir to the English throne. For a king to die without an heir was an open invitation to bitter struggle which in this case was won by William the Conqueror whose Norman invasion was to have a profound effect on England for centuries. Good job!
    • 26/04/2004
    • 02:49:18
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Peasant Revolts

    You've written a very good essay on England's peasant revolts. You've succeeded in making what might otherwise have been a dull historical account come alive for the reader. Those who don't believe history can be fascinating should read your excellent version of strife brought about by greed. It's a history lesson that is as relevant today as it was when the peasant revolts broke out over six hundred years ago. Great work!
    • 26/04/2004
    • 02:45:00
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • War Effort

    It's a pleasure to read an essay written by someone with a real understanding of Civil War history. Of all the strengths the South had, perhaps the greatest was excellent generalship. Colonel Robert E. Lee was offered command of the Union army and when he turned it down out of loyalty for his state of Virginia, a long war that would drag on until 1865 was inevitable, although nobody could have envisioned it at the time. Both sides thought they were right and both fought bravely. The carnage was awful and too many people of courage and conviction were lost on both sides.
    • 25/04/2004
    • 23:44:03
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Corrections Manager/Administrator

    I liked your essay and would suggest simply that you consider breaking it up into smaller paragraphs. Some people don't like to read one long paragraph and it would be a shame if they miss out on your good effort over something such as format.
    • 25/04/2004
    • 22:45:39
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • English

    I understand your point of view and there are probably a number of people who would agree with you. However, I don't see any compelling need to make English the official language of the US. To do so might send the wrong signal about a nation that has traditionally welcomed immigrants. America will always be a great melting pot where people from all over the world will come seeking a better life. Most will learn English of their own volition. Frankly, it doesn't bother me when people speak in foreign languages. It reminds me that one of America's greatest strengths is its unique diversity.
    • 25/04/2004
    • 22:37:38
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Martin Luther King

    You've written a fine essay but I would suggest breaking it up into smaller paragraphs. Some people don't like to read single paragraph essays and it would be a shame if anyone missed out on yours.
    • 25/04/2004
    • 21:22:07
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Macbeth

    You've written a good essay and I would like to fill in the two blanks. For the blank in the first paragraph, may I suggest "shame" and for the blank in the second paragraph, how about "ambition?"
    • 25/04/2004
    • 20:11:43
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • The Great Emancipator

    You've written an excellent biography of Abraham Lincoln which reveals you have a greater understanding of history than most. The facts you recount aren't always pleasant but they are substantially true. I would like to emphasize that Lincoln was personally opposed to slavery, but you are right that his prime concern was preservation of the Union. Despite his faults, I judge him by the times in which he lived and believe him to be one of America's greatest presidents.
    • 25/04/2004
    • 19:53:52
    • Score: 6 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Civil War

    You've written an interesting essay but you need to better explain what Documents A through H were because some readers may feel a bit lost.
    • 25/04/2004
    • 18:01:35
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Crimes Against Humanity

    I do not agree that the Nazis who "took extreme measures against the Jews" were justified on the grounds that they were just following orders. The trials at Nuremberg made it clear that complying with orders is no excuse. I don't think the Nazis were exterminating Jews out of self defense. You need to rethink your essay.
    • 25/04/2004
    • 17:27:59
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Capital Punishment

    Yours is a good essay which has a fairly balanced treatment of the pros and cons of capital punishment, along with a concise historical perspective. If you wish to expand on what you have done, you may like to give your opinion as to whether capital punishment is a good or bad idea. Most people tend to have an opinion on the subject and would likely be interested in knowing yours and the rationale behind it.
    • 25/04/2004
    • 17:04:31
    • Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • What makes a good teacher

    You make some solid points and I agree with the qualities you've listed which good teachers possess. Of all the qualities in your essay, those in your fourth paragraph seem the most important. A good teacher cares about students and we need more teachers such as the ones you describe.
    • 25/04/2004
    • 15:46:31
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Lithuania

    Submitting the same essay twice is not a good use of the reader's time.
    • 25/04/2004
    • 15:37:50
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Charles Darwin

    This is a good essay, but the format may seem unappealing to some. It would be a shame if someone chose not to read it because the text of approximately 1,700 words wasn't broken into smaller paragraphs.
    • 25/04/2004
    • 04:36:32
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Genre conventions

    Although this essay is good, it duplicates the information of your other essay of the same title except that this one omits the bibliography. Therefore, this essay should probably be deleted.
    • 25/04/2004
    • 03:29:50
    • Score: 11 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • Jane and Bingley

    Submitting an essay twice is a waste of the reader's time.
    • 24/04/2004
    • 07:55:59
    • Score: 5 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Higher

    Submitting two essays which are essentially identical is a waste of the reader's time.
    • 23/04/2004
    • 20:06:10
    • Score: 6 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • To Kill A Mockingbird

    This is virtually the same as your other essay titled "Everything Has a Price." Submitting it again is a waste of the reader's time.
    • 22/04/2004
    • 19:29:19
    • Score: 5 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Great Expectations

    This is virftually identical to your other essay titled "Looks Aren't Everything." Submitting it more than once is not a good use of the reader's time.
    • 22/04/2004
    • 19:19:42
    • Score: 5 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Great Gatsby

    It is a waste of the reader's time to submit the same essay more than once.
    • 22/04/2004
    • 18:49:32
    • Score: 6 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Socrates

    I found this interesting and wish you had written more. Of course, Socrates didn't corrupt the youth of Athens, but he did irritate the powers that be by exposing their faults and hypocrisies. His fate was sealed from that point on. It seems Socrates wasn't fond of opinions just because they were popularly held. His enemies viewed his unorthodoxy as a threat. Athens judged him unjustly but history has rendered a more just verdict. Socrates faced death bravely for what he believed in and perhaps that was his greatest lesson of all.
    • 22/04/2004
    • 16:37:36
    • Score: 6 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Juvenile Death Penalty

    This was a very good essay, but one long paragraph of over 2,000 words may seem a bit unappealing to some readers. I'm not sure if it's a computer formatting problem, but it should be broken up into smaller paragraphs. While you have cited sources in the text, a full listing of works referenced at the end of the essay would be helpful.
    • 22/04/2004
    • 15:44:32
    • Score: 6 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Richard Wilbur

    You've written a great piece on an outstanding poet and translator. You point out that Wilbur has translated Moliere. I'd just like to add that I own several of his translations of Moliere's plays such as Tartuffe, The Misanthrope, and The School for Wives. Wilbur masterfully captures Moliere's wit and humor. His metrical translations from the original French are made to rhyme beautifully in English and are a joy to read.
    • 22/04/2004
    • 14:49:17
    • Score: 5 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Music

    One doesn't have to be a music lover to appreciate a well written essay. There's poetry in your melodious prose. Play on!
    • 22/04/2004
    • 14:30:49
    • Score: 5 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • White collar crime

    You've written a good essay, but one long paragraph of over 2,700 words may seem a bit intimidating to some readers. It would be a shame of such a good essay as yours were not read by someone who felt that it was unappealing because it wasn't broken up into smaller paragraphs.
    • 22/04/2004
    • 12:37:45
    • Score: 7 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • To His Coy Mistress

    You're right in your analysis of the poem. Andrew Marvell's message is not shocking by today's standards but would have been thought daring when the poem was written in the 1600's. We're fortunate that good poetry withstands the test of time.
    • 22/04/2004
    • 10:44:14
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Duff Brenna

    The two examples you've chosen are consistent with the Duff Brenna quote you cite, but I find the quote rather broad. Some might observe that Brenna should have qualified the statement by specifying all "compelling" literature as opposed to all literature, which is quite sweeping. Rather than the generalization, "It is emotion, not reason, that motivates characters in literature," Brenna might also have said that it is primarily emotion rather than reason that motivates most characters in literature. By adding the foregoing qualifiers, Duff Brenna's quote would be more acceptable to those who find it a bit too broad.
    • 22/04/2004
    • 09:14:07
    • Score: 9 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Lufthansa

    This is a good essay but appears to be identical to your other essay titled: "Lufthansa Product line." Submitting the same essay more than once is not the best use of the reader's time.
    • 22/04/2004
    • 04:58:42
    • Score: 7 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • League of Nations

    You've written a good essay about the League of Nations which was doomed to fail for two main reasons. First, the League had no power to enforce its findings. Second, the United States was not a member. Lacking one of the world's leading powers and without enforcement ability, the League didn't have credibility and could all too easily be ignored. Fortunately, the League's successor, the United Nations, has been a more effective entity although the UN has also frequently failed.
    • 21/04/2004
    • 14:01:15
    • Score: 5 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • President Lincoln

    You've written a fine biography of the man who was arguably the nation's greatest president, and America has had some great ones such as Washington and Jefferson. You state, "During his second year in office, on April 16, 1862, Lincoln finally signed a bill that abolished slavery throughout the land." Lincoln's Emancipation Proclamation was dated September 22, 1862, and took effect January 1, 1863. Lincoln freed the slaves only in those states in open rebellion against the Union, that is, the Confederacy. His Emancipation Proclamation did not free the slaves in the border states which remained loyal to the Union. Lincoln, who personally opposed slavery wherever it existed, made his position on the subject clear. He said he would keep slavery or abolish it, whichever would better preserve the Union.
    • 21/04/2004
    • 09:24:31
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • The operation was a success but...

    You've written a good essay concerning one of the more tragic figures in literature. What happens to Charlie underscores the truth of that old saying about being careful what you wish for. It is ironic that the operation that was successful in making him a smarter person, at least temporarily, also made him incapable of happiness by transforming him into someone who became resentful, self-centered and contemptuous of others. We should take to heart the author's simple but powerful message to be content with what we have if we wish to be happy.
    • 21/04/2004
    • 08:12:40
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Down Syndrome

    You've written a good essay on the disease but I suggest you change the title to "Down Syndrome" and list your works cited at the end of your essay.
    • 21/04/2004
    • 06:56:06
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Stopping by woods on a snowy evening

    Your poetry analysis is good but I suggest changing the essay's title to "An Analysis of Robert Frost's 'Stopping by Woods on a Snowy Evening'" in order to help users who are looking for this topic.
    • 21/04/2004
    • 06:18:49
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Ozymandias

    Overall, your analyis is fine but I suggest mentioning to your theme statement something about the vanity of ambition. I also recommend changing the title to "An Analysis of Shelley's Ozymandias."
    • 21/04/2004
    • 06:11:54
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • To His Coy Mistress

    You've written a good poetry analysis but I suggest you change the title to "The Philosophy and Theme of Andrew Marvell's poem 'To His Coy Mistress.'" In that way, users looking for this topic will be better helped in doing so.
    • 21/04/2004
    • 06:02:59
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Sonnets 18 and 130

    You've written a fine analysis but I suggest you change the title to "Comparative Study of Sonnets 18 and 130" in order to better help users who are looking for this subject.
    • 21/04/2004
    • 05:56:58
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Canada's First World War Poet

    You've written a great essay about the brave man who wrote arguably the most famous poem of World War I, "In Flanders Fields." John McCrae was one of the three most famous poets to die in the First World War. The other two were England's Wilfred Owen ("Dulce et Decorum Est") and America's Joyce Kilmer ("Trees"). Every casualty of war is tragic, but the death of these three poets of such outstanding promise underscores the terrible loss brought about by "The Great War."
    • 20/04/2004
    • 12:52:24
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Canadian Heroes

    This is an outstanding essay concerning the events surrounding one of the most momentous days in history. As an American, let me say how very much I appreciate the brave Canadians who risked their lives not only on the beaches of Normandy but also on many World War II battlefields where they distinguished themselves as courageous fighters in the cause of liberty. We are fortunate to have such fine allies and I am proud to have Canada as a friend and neighbor.
    • 20/04/2004
    • 12:00:46
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Psycho

    I'm not sure this merits an essay separate from your longer and better essay titled, "How did Hitchcock create fear and tension in the original audiences of Psycho before they entered the cinema and whilst they were watching the film?" Combining the two similar essays would not have resulted in an essay that was overly long.
    • 20/04/2004
    • 11:46:56
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Hitchcock

    This is a good essay and seems to make unnecessary having a much shorter essay titled, "How does Hitchcock create fear and tension through the structure of the story line in Psycho?" Incorporating the material from that essay of a few hundred words wouldn't have made this one overly long.
    • 20/04/2004
    • 11:45:20
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Laws

    What you've written so far is fine but you need to finish your essay which ends with the phrase, "The laws of Canada state." Some readers might be particularly disappointed to have read to the end only to find that the information they were most interested in is missing. I look forward to reading more information about Canadian law also, especially since your country is Canada.
    • 20/04/2004
    • 11:30:18
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Feedback

    It's unclear whether most users on this site would be able to determine the usefulness of what you've submitted.
    • 20/04/2004
    • 01:51:44
    • Score: 8 out of 13 people found this comment useful.
  • Critical Issues

    In that this is basically the first paragraph of your much longer essay of the same title, it's really unnecessary to have posted both essays.
    • 20/04/2004
    • 01:45:35
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Heat Exchangers

    This contains only the first few hundred words which are identical to those at the beginning of your longer essay of the same title.
    • 19/04/2004
    • 19:49:18
    • Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Grades

    For a piece to be submitted more than once is a waste of the readers' time
    • 19/04/2004
    • 19:43:26
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Lose the hatred for others

    Based on some of your comments, you may need seek anger management therapy. Some of the comments you wrote after your essay was posted are every bit as hateful as the people you are trying to portray. Until reading your comments, I did not realize that your positions in the essay sprang from hatred. As you mature, you will learn that it is more effective to base your comments on logic than emotion. By the way, you've misspelled racist again.
    • 19/04/2004
    • 12:26:29
    • Score: 30 out of 35 people found this comment useful.
  • Tolerance isn't just a word

    At long last you admit that not all Southerners share the same set of beliefs. I was generous when I rated your essay as good. Had I known how prejudiced you seem based on your comments to your essay, I would have changed my rating. Nobody should be expected to easily tolerate the hatred and oppressive attitude you have displayed in some of your previous comments. By the way, oppression is spelled with two p's.
    • 19/04/2004
    • 11:55:43
    • Score: 33 out of 38 people found this comment useful.
  • Try researching tolerance

    You claim you are only prejudiced against hatred, but your comments to your essay seem hateful toward Southerners. Southerners are people too. No amount of research you claim to have done can justify libeling an entire section of America. I can't believe Southerners, or any group of people for that matter, are as bad as you imply. You must try to understand the times and circumstances in which people have lived before you succumb to sweeping generalizations. Thinking carefully about issues is difficult, and may challenge long held beliefs, but it is also worthwhile.
    • 19/04/2004
    • 11:25:50
    • Score: 33 out of 40 people found this comment useful.
  • Prejudice

    Your narrow-minded bias toward Southerners is apparent from your comments concerning your essay. I have always thought that prejudice of any sort was a sign of fundamental stupidity. Based on your comments to your essay, you seem every bit as prejudiced as the people you are slandering. It is illogical to imply that all Southerners are the same, as you have in your comments. Had you written your essay with greater care, you wouldn't need to clarify it. After reading your dogmatic remarks, I believe that you may benefit from counseling in order to overcome what seems to be a deep-seated prejudice on your part. Counseling may help you realize that people are basically the same no matter where they live. Perhaps if you read what I've written more carefully you wouldn't misinterpret it so terribly.
    • 19/04/2004
    • 11:00:15
    • Score: 35 out of 41 people found this comment useful.
  • Experience

    You are right that our life's experiences shape who and what we are in both positive and negative ways. You are lucky to have such a good father. Most people learn about parenthood from observing their mother and father. That's why mothers and fathers need to be mindful that their actions mold the next generation of parents. Your essay also underscores the importance of staying attentive to what's going on around us so that we may take advantage of opportunities for self improvement. You have already acquired a number of valuable skills which should serve you well throughout your life.
    • 19/04/2004
    • 10:51:50
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Gymnastics

    Your essay includes some interesting information about gymnastics. Actually, gymnastics is approximately twice as old as you indicate. It dates back about 4,000 years. Perhaps what you meant to say is that gymnastics has been around for more than 2,000 years as an activity sport. Gymnastics has been around about twice as long as it has been practiced as an activity sport. I do agree with your statement that it has been practiced as a competitive sport for a little over 100 years.
    • 19/04/2004
    • 10:38:28
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Rollerblading

    Rollerblading can be great fun, but it can also be dangerous. That's why safety gear is especially important. It's a good idea for those who rollerblade to wear helmets, wrist guards, and pads for knees and elbows. It's also important to rollerblade only where it is safe and lawful to do so, which is why it's recommended to do a little homework on rollerblading regulations in one's area before getting too carried away having fun.
    • 19/04/2004
    • 10:16:33
    • Score: 6 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • The Lottery

    You've written a good essay on what is perhaps Shirley Jackson's most famous story. The Lottery is a gripping story of the power of myth and the hold it can have on our lives. As much as we say we value life, we may value our pet notions and ritualistic thinking even more. It's easy to criticize ancient and not so ancient peoples for their tribal superstitions, but some of our own beliefs may be equally grounded in superstition, though we may not realize why we cling to them so stubbornly. Sharing a group mentality may make us feel comfortable, but it is no guarantee of the validity of our beliefs.
    • 19/04/2004
    • 10:05:07
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Frank Lloyd Wright

    You've written a good biography on the man who might arguably be called the greatest architect of modern times. Perhaps the reason he lived into his 90's is the same one that prevented him from officially retiring. He loved designing buildings and from that passion we might all learn a valuable lesson about seeking a career in a field which we may truly enjoy for a lifetime.
    • 19/04/2004
    • 09:55:09
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Catch 22

    Catch 22 is well exemplified by the policy that pilots could be exempted from flying missions if they were mentally unfit, but the very act of asking to be exempt from flying dangerous missions indicated that they were indeed mentally fit, which meant nobody could be exempted on those grounds. Although the policies may not have been as outrageous, most of us have probably experienced similar paradoxical situations, particularly when dealing with bureaucracies, and you have chosen some apt examples which relate to one of Heller's themes concerning the stupidity of mindless policies.
    • 19/04/2004
    • 08:59:31
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Habeas Corpus

    Your essay raises some interesting questions about controversial topics. Tough decisions need to be made in wartime and steps were taken to restore liberty after the war had been won. Habeas corpus was reinstated in 1866, the year following the war's conclusion. I can't find fault with Abraham Lincoln for considering that holding the Union together was more important than the temporary suspension of certain rights such as habeas corpus.
    • 19/04/2004
    • 08:26:20
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Amelia Earhart

    You've written an informative biography on a pioneering pilot. It is interesting to note that Amelia Earhart wasn't impressed when she first saw a plane as a child. However, when she saw a stunt flying exhibition years later, "Lady Lindy" was hooked on planes and the rest is history.
    • 19/04/2004
    • 07:57:09
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Tax

    You've written a good essay on a complex topic. Aside from such provisions as a value added tax, it is interesting to note the similarities to American tax law. At the end of your essay, you can delete the second occurrence of thecaption "Stability of Tax Regime."
    • 19/04/2004
    • 06:50:08
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Ignorance

    Your emotional remarks reveal a prejudice on your part, as well as an inability to spell. In addition to using a dictionary to look up definitions, you will find that a dictionary can also help you properly spell. Misspelling simple words can make you appear uneducated. Likewise, resorting to "straw man" arguments can make you appear illogical, as can jumping to conclusions. It is ridiculous that you repeatedly proclaim your opinion as fact, as though you were somehow superior.
    • 19/04/2004
    • 05:42:56
    • Score: 29 out of 43 people found this comment useful.
  • Industrial Revolution

    For an essay to be submitted more than once is a waste of the readers' time
    • 19/04/2004
    • 00:04:08
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Greyhound Racing

    Yours is a good essay although it may not be clear to everybody why it was classified under the History category. I'm aware your persuasive essay contains the phrase "Once the favorite pet of pharaohs and kings" in reference to greyhounds, but the essay doesn't focus on this historical aspect.
    • 18/04/2004
    • 23:56:19
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Arrogance

    Thanks, but I don't think we need a patronizing lecture on dictionary definitions. Your opinion is not fact. The opinion of some would be that the most infamous reason the South seceded from the Union was jealousy of Northerners who were regarded as disproportionately rich and influential. Still others would believe the most infamous reason lies elsewhere. What makes perfect sense to one does not necessarily make perfect sense to all. Some would say it is an utter conceit to even think so. Indeed you should have made yourself clearer (more clearer?) as words matter.
    • 18/04/2004
    • 22:35:31
    • Score: 35 out of 39 people found this comment useful.
  • World War I

    This is much better than your previous essay of the same title. I suggest you change the title of one of the two essays to prevent any possible confusion. For example, you may want to call this essay: "World War I Causes and Aftermath." You indicate sources within the essay itself, but it would be helpful to also include a complete listing of references at the end of your essay.
    • 18/04/2004
    • 19:33:39
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • The Causes of World War I

    Unfortunately, your essay doesn't do all that you say it will in your opening lines. It would probably be difficult for anyone to accomplish all you set out to do in less than 200 words. Had you accomplished your goals, it might have been a very informative essay, but you have more work to do before the essay is complete.
    • 18/04/2004
    • 19:24:51
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Culture of Pakistan

    You've written a good essay but some readers might be a bit intimidated by the fact that it is all one long paragraph. It would make your essay more appealing if it were broken up into smaller paragraphs. It would be a shame if some people chose not to read what is really a fine essay because the look of it is somewhat uninviting.
    • 18/04/2004
    • 17:28:31
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Democracy and Neoliberalism

    Submitting two nearly identical essays which differ by only a couple of words is a waste of the reader's time.
    • 18/04/2004
    • 15:29:03
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Tess Galagher

    For a piece to be submitted more than once is a waste of the readers' time.
    • 18/04/2004
    • 14:53:17
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Binge Drinking in College

    You've written a good essay on a potentially fatal problem which only seems to be getting worse. It's vital to know what to do if someone passes out from alcohol poisoning. Don't let legal worries prevent you from calling 9-1-1 to get help (it's another good reason to have a cell phone). If necessary, have one person go for help and try not to leave the person alone. Learn how to perform CPR as help cannot always arrive in time.
    • 18/04/2004
    • 10:35:03
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Statistics

    Your essay contains some interesting information. In your essay, you ask: "Where are the statistics of cocaine and crack use?" Someone might also ask where are your statistics supporting the claim that "more than three quarters of the population in the United States have tried marijuana." According to the 2001 National Household Survey on Drug Abuse, more than 37 percent of Americans over the age of twelve have tried marijuana. It's doubtful the percentage has more than doubled in the past few years.
    • 18/04/2004
    • 10:12:56
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • James Monroe

    You've written a fine biography of a great president whose famous proclamation known as the Monroe Doctrine still has relevance today. It's worth noting that he was such a popular president that when he ran for reelection he received every electoral vote except one. Monroe would have received that vote too except that an elector felt that only George Washington should be so honored with a unanimous electoral win.
    • 18/04/2004
    • 09:47:57
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Gambling

    Gambling can certainly be a serious problem when it becomes an addiction. It is ironic that state governments which are supposed to help citizens have become involved in hooking them on a potentially dangerous activity in order to increase tax revenues. Your essay could be improved by discussing what can be done to help those for whom gambling has become an addiction.
    • 18/04/2004
    • 09:23:36
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Causes of teenage' drug abuse

    Yours is a good essay which would benefit by a more thorough discussion. While they are certainly three important reasons, it is debatable whether "low-esteem, parental ignorance and peer pressure are the three fundamental causes of drug abuse among teenagers." You may wish to discuss other causes such as alienation, boredom, and hopelessness. I agree it's "high time to do something really effective about this problem" and your essay could be improved by sharing your thoughts as to how specifically drug abuse should be remedied.
    • 18/04/2004
    • 09:02:34
    • Score: 8 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • A growing international problem

    I agree that this is a problem which appears to be getting worse but your essay seems a bit dated, especially regarding your references to the Iraq situation. You may want to update your essay, especially in light of recent events, in order to make it more relevant.
    • 18/04/2004
    • 08:33:30
    • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Advertising

    You state that: "Sex in advertising has been the theme of much 20th Century American Advertising" but isn't it true that this phenomenon is not uncommon in other parts of the world also, especially Europe? If you are trying to imply this is a uniquely American occurrence, your essay would benefit by discussing why you think this is so.
    • 18/04/2004
    • 08:14:16
    • Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • The Yellow Wallpaper

    I agree that it's unfair to treat men and women differently but you may wish to expand your essay. It's true that women can feel enormous pressure because of societal expectations but the vast majority don't go insane following postpartum depression, which isn't that uncommon. It would be helpful to discuss if there are any indications in her speech which give clues as to why this particular woman was especially vulnerable to the same sort of stresses most women successfully deal with.
    • 18/04/2004
    • 07:54:22
    • Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • 'Requiem For Dream'

    A piece submitted more than once is a waste of the readers' time.
    • 18/04/2004
    • 06:22:17
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Access is an excellent tool

    This isn't an essay and the category chosen is inappropriate for what you've done.
    • 18/04/2004
    • 06:13:06
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • What Makes an Excellent Teacher?

    Yours is a very good essay on what it takes to be an excellent teacher. Fairness, empathy, and a passion for teaching are certainly important qualities excellent educators share. Perhaps it all comes down to a commitment to help others succeed, accompanied with the knowledge as to how to best go about achieving that sometimes difficult goal. Unfortunately, excellent teachers seem to be more the exception than the norm. We certainly need more teachers such as you describe.
    • 18/04/2004
    • 01:17:02
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Persuasive Essay

    You've written a good essay but many historians would take issue with your statement that: "Slavery was the infamous reason the South seceded from the Union." Southerners seceded from the Union for a host of reasons, but mainly because they viewed that the delicate balance of power which held the Union together had been disrupted to such an extent that they no longer felt assured that their rights in several areas would be protected. Southerners felt they would do better outside of a Union dominated by a much more populous and markedly different North. The issue of slavery, while an important consideration, was not "the infamous reason the South seceded" although it isn't difficult to find sources to contradict this fact. Some would also take issue with your statement that: "In this day in age, there is no room for division." What makes a democracy vibrant is the free expression of competing ideas; totalitarian regimes are more likely to declare that there is no room for division.
    • 18/04/2004
    • 00:41:26
    • Score: 35 out of 39 people found this comment useful.
  • Where are the cons?

    Regarding what you call the "Death Penalty System," your essay does not "prove that without this system, we will have no control over our justice system." In fact, other countries without capital punishment have well controlled justice systems. It is highly questionable whether even a longer, more comprehensive essay could prove your point. It is untrue that: "This system exists in the sole purpose of eliminating criminals and over the past hundreds of years; it has done its job." Besides punishment, deterrence is often cited as a principle reason for the death penalty. Some may feel that your advocating a monetary justification for killing criminals is crude. Things aren't always fair in court, although you believe that guilt "is best decided in the courtroom where everything is fair." For example, DNA evidence has shown that someone was wrongly convicted of a crime more than once. You should consider rewording the essay's title which implies a more balanced presentation of the issues in this complex area.
    • 18/04/2004
    • 00:12:01
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • The Different Uncle

    You've written an original essay which would seem to more properly belong in the Creative Writing category rather than Humanities.
    • 17/04/2004
    • 23:51:35
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Principle Rules of Law

    You've written a fine essay. Since you discuss seven, not just four, principle rules of law in your essay, perhaps you should amend the essay's title to read: "The Seven Principle Rules of Law."
    • 17/04/2004
    • 23:40:19
    • Score: 9 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • John Dewey

    You've written an outstanding essay and I agree with your philosophy. You seem to respect students which sadly is something that is not universal in educators. Some of the best learning occurs when the lesson plan is deviated from in order to explore topics which the students are interested in. I am a strong advocate of Dewey's learn by doing philosophy. You sound like a great teacher to me and I think your students are lucky to have someone who seems as committed to them as you are.
    • 17/04/2004
    • 15:35:32
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Different Views

    I agree that there is no one American Dream. What the various types of the American Dream have in common is a desire for a better life for oneself and for one's family. I'm glad you mentioned the poem by Oliver Wendell Holmes because it is so effective in stirring patriotic feelings. Holmes' poem was instrumental in saving the USS Constitution from being scrapped. Anyone who doesn't believe in the power of poetry might care to visit Boston Harbor where Old Ironsides proudly rests, having served her nation well in several conflicts. The ship was made of such strong wood that cannonballs really did bounce off her sides.
    • 17/04/2004
    • 15:15:44
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Accounting Scandals

    You've written a fine essay about the accounting scandals which have been happening with alarming frequency in recent years. It seems that financial frauds proliferate when economic times get tough. While it is true that the SEC has overall regulatory authority over the financial reporting of US corporations, it doesn't have the resources to adequately do its job, which is typical for a government agency subject to budget constraints. If the problem is going to be addressed, the company's external auditors must accept a greater role in ferreting out fraud than they have been willing to accept in the past. Auditing standards for public accounting firms need to be strengthened. Also, greater oversight must be exercised over the outside auditors to discourage any more scandals such as happened at Arthur Andersen.
    • 17/04/2004
    • 15:04:18
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • California

    You've written an excellent essay on California that the state tourist bureau would probably be proud of. I'd just like to mention one crisis that deserves to be discussed and that's the states huge budget deficit. Concerned about being reelected, politicians don't want to raise taxes or cut spending. Some think that making the state more friendly toward business will encourage companies to stay in California or move there, enlarging the tax base. The problem is so large that it will take at least a combination of all three approaches to address. The question is whether politicians will have the courage to raise taxes and cut spending enough.
    • 17/04/2004
    • 14:23:55
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • The House and the Senate

    Yours is a good essay on the legislative branch of government. America has a bicameral legislature but it isn't "mainly done for tradition." When the nation was being formed, the small states did not like the idea of deciding the number of seats in the legislature based soley on the relative population of each state. Consequently, an additional legislative body was designed, the Senate, which gave equal representation to each state regardless of population. Senators would serve six years to better insulate them from political considerations and to make the Senate a more deliberative body than the House, or at least that was the intention of the nation's founding fathers.
    • 17/04/2004
    • 14:11:32
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Women in the military

    Your statement that "women lack the emotional strength to be a solder (sic)" is sure to raise hackles. Women fighting for a number of countries have proven that they possess the emotional strength to be a soldier, and that's not rhetoric but a fact which has been proven many times in actual combat. They have shown courage under fire. You mention the expense of providing logistical support for women, but what price should we place on the lives saved by women through their actions in war? When you say, "it is not at all sensible for them to join the military due to their physical and emotional weaknesses," would you exclude women even from support roles in the military? I think you'll find a number of men and women who take exception to your comment about physical and emotional weaknesses, as well as to much of the rest of your essay.
    • 17/04/2004
    • 11:03:51
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Crittenden Compromise

    It's not difficult to understand why Lincoln and others wouldn't be in favor of the Crittenden Compromise which many saw as an abandonment of principle. The so called compromise would have required half a dozen constitutional amendments. In the over 200 year history of the Constitution, it has been amended relatively few times. It was naive on the part of Senator Crittenden to believe that wholesale changes to the Constitution, which would have had the effect of forever preserving slavery in the land of the free, could be accepted in late 1860. The country had changed a great deal since its founding, and many were unwilling to embrace slavery, even if to oppose it meant war.
    • 17/04/2004
    • 10:10:40
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Melanie and Bob

    It might be a good idea to remove the parenthetical comments and rewrite this so that you may submit more of a finished product. In your numerical listing at the end, you haven't identified what #5 is, which I presume is your conclusion. You may wish to put the listing first, along with an explanation, as some readers might be slightly confused as to what it is you're trying to accomplish with this presentation.
    • 17/04/2004
    • 09:49:28
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Dietary Fat

    Your balanced perspective makes sense. Almost everyone has probably heard the saying "fat makes us fat" but there isn't agreement among dieticians if this is in fact the case. Advocates of the Dr. Atkins diet, which has been discredited in the eyes of some but certainly not all, claim that it is actually excessive carbohydrates which make people fat. I'm not in favor of loading up on fat as long as I consume little or no carbohydrates, but would recommend adherence to another bit of time worn advice, "everything in moderation."
    • 17/04/2004
    • 09:34:36
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Ronald Reagan

    Perhaps Reagan's greatest asset was his affable optimism which won over even many of his political enemies. Some disagreed strenuously with his policies, but few disliked the man. Even those who opposed his agenda seemed to recognize that Reagan acted out of deeply held beliefs. Much of the reason his presidency was considered largely a success has to do with his ability to get along with others, even those of opposing political viewpoints. It's tragic that Alzheimer's has robbed him of many of the pleasures he could have otherwise enjoyed in retirement, but I'm glad his beloved wife, Nancy, is taking good care of him.
    • 17/04/2004
    • 03:25:04
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Woodrow Wilson

    You made a wise decision to write in the first person what might otherwise have been a dry biography. You've done a good job in making history come alive concerning one of America's most learned presidents. History's judgment of Wilson has been much kinder than was the attitude toward him by many of his contemporaries. Although the League of Nations was a failure, its successor, the United Nations, has made some important contributions to world peace. Wilson was a decent man of vision who suffered greatly because of poor health late in life, but his failing health did not prevent him from successfully guiding the nation through World War I.
    • 17/04/2004
    • 03:09:44
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • 2nd American Revolution

    You've written a good essay on the Civil War, which Southerners viewed as a fight for their rights. They saw President Lincoln in much the same way colonists looked upon King George III. You've described the extraordinary war actions Lincoln took which Southerners especially called tyrannical. In fairness, difficult decisions need to be made in wartime and steps were taken to restore liberty after the war had been won. I cannot fault Lincoln for putting the preservation of the Union over the temporary suspension of certain rights.
    • 17/04/2004
    • 02:40:33
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • The American Dream

    You've done a good job in describing the American Dream. There's nothing wrong with wanting a better life, both for yourself and for your family. Nor is there anything wrong with wanting to be free, which is one of the most universal human desires. Jay Gatsby sought to achieve his dream in the wrong fashion. Many have wrongly interpreted the novel as an indictment of the American Dream, when in actuality Fitzgerald's book is a criticism of the blind acquisition of material goods which cannot bring true happiness.
    • 17/04/2004
    • 02:12:58
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • D-Day

    You may not have turned this in because you didn't like it, but the essay has a great deal of potential. You already have an attention grabbing opening paragraph to build on. Field Marshall Rommel knew that any invasion had to be defeated on the beaches of northern France or all would be lost for Germany. You may find this is an appealing topic if you focus on the Allies' monumental struggle over consolidating their tenuous Normandy beachheads that bleak June day sixty years ago. The outcome was in doubt for a while, which is the sort of tension that can make for an interesting essay.
    • 17/04/2004
    • 01:51:44
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Awakening

    You've written a good essay, but I would recommend you change the first sentence as I was not able to tell that you were talking about World War II until the end of your introductory paragraph. Since the first several sentences of your opening paragraph could equally apply to World War I, I suggest you change your first sentence to read, "All throughout the war, people hadn't heard much from the U.S. until the end of December, 1941." Sometimes it's alright to keep your readers in the dark, but seldom is this so in an informative essay.
    • 17/04/2004
    • 00:57:17
    • Score: 7 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • A True Hero

    I'm not sure why some might say your sister wasn't brave because she most assuredly was based on how you have described her. Bravery isn't the lack of fear when facing a dangerous situation. Rather, bravery is acting courageously despite being afraid. Your sister faced death with a great deal of maturity for one so young. It's touching that you consider her your hero and I agree that she acted heroically. Thank you for your touching account from which we may all learn how to face extreme adversity with strength, humor, and bravery.
    • 17/04/2004
    • 00:06:07
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Physical fitness

    Yours is a good essay on the benefits of goal setting and perseverance in an area which almost all of us can relate to. We know that regular exercise is important but also know how to find a million other things to do instead. You have shown how exercise does not have to be boring drudgery that we must force ourselves to do. I especially liked the idea of a log to monitor progress toward goals as a further means of motivation. You're right that this same sort of discipline can be applied to many areas of life and, if you do so, you are likely to achieve success.
    • 16/04/2004
    • 23:51:26
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • The Great Gatsby

    For an essay to be submitted more than once is a waste of the readers' time.
    • 16/04/2004
    • 12:45:03
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Words and more words

    In general, authors should not comment on their own essays, especially with an insult stating that a user who took the time to leave a legitimate comment just looks at things in black and white. Comments are intended for essays written by others. Having to write a lengthy comment about one's own essay may indicate to some readers that the author's essay was not sufficiently clear. It's bad enough that the essay was wordy; the problem should not be made worse by the addition of a wordy comment by the author. Authors also should not rate their own essays as good. The essay's grade of 58% seems a bit low, but justifiable.
    • 16/04/2004
    • 09:53:11
    • Score: 16 out of 20 people found this comment useful.
  • Euthanasia

    An essay submitted more than once is a waste of the reader's time!
    • 16/04/2004
    • 08:05:34
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Is man inherently evil?

    This expansion of your two earlier essays is an improvement. You have apparently spent more time thinking about your topic and it has paid off in your rewrite. Whoever felt the essay deserved a grade of 100% thought it couldn't be better. I won't argue over a paper that has already received a perfect score.
    • 16/04/2004
    • 01:33:22
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • One for all?

    Yours is a fine essay and your concerns are understandable. I've addressed some of these issues in another essay but I would like to respond to one of your points. In answer to your question about a single police force for both the University of Wyoming and the city of Laramie, let me say that the university police are employed by the state which is proper for a state campus. The city of Laramie employs municipal police officers who really have to cede authority regarding a state-run facility to the state police. The various branches of law enforcement tend to be somewhat jealous over jurisdictional issues.
    • 15/04/2004
    • 15:04:09
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  • Where's an editor when you need one?

    It's also a bit like motorcycle cops parking in the shade of an underpass on a sunny day waiting for speeders to whiz by on the freeway so that they can ticket them. I doubt that practice will change anytime soon and it's likely you're just going to have to get used to the presence of police wherever they believe lawbreakers may be found. As for campus police, there have probably been more than a few young women taking night classes who have felt comforted to know that they're around. The police will probably tell you that there is no such thing as responsible underage drinking. In this era of tight budgets, we might expect the police to be even more vigilant in bringing in revenue through handing out tickets.
    • 15/04/2004
    • 14:47:26
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Winston Smith

    You've written a fine essay which contains a number of insights about Winston Smith's interest in the past. Fundamentally, he is interested in the past because the present under Big Brother is so miserable. Because Winston is more sensitive and intelligent than most, he is especially pained by the oppression which weighs down upon him daily. He yearns for a return to a distant day long ago when people had freedom and dignity. It is precisely these qualities of life which totalitarian regimes routinely deprive of the citizenry and for which Winston yearns so desperately.
    • 15/04/2004
    • 14:35:55
    • Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Lender of Last Resort

    You've written a fine essay. While the term "Lender of Last Resort" does appear in your essay's title, its generally thought to be a good idea to explain an acronym the first time it is introduced, especially when it is not an acronym which is likely to be familiar to most readers. The following is how your first sentence might have been changed: "The idea of Lender of Last Resort (LOLR) was introduced by Walter Bagehot in 1873."
    • 15/04/2004
    • 13:33:24
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Employee shareholders

    You've written an excellent essay. I would like to emphasize that for employees to buy shares in the company they work for is inherently risky as they stand to lose not only their investment but also their jobs should their employer go bankrupt. It's questionable whether the incentives corporations tend to offer employees to motivate them to buy shares outweigh the risks.
    • 15/04/2004
    • 13:11:54
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Monet

    Yours is a well written essay. I would only point out that an essay of over 1400 words should be broken up into paragraphs so that it will be more appealing to readers. It would be unfortunate if such a good essay as yours weren't read by those who might find one long paragraph somewhat uninviting.
    • 15/04/2004
    • 11:07:40
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  • Do you agree?

    I find it ironic that Marx argued capitalism was the cause of the "exploitation of the many by the few," as that is exactly how I have always viewed communism. The Soviet Union and Eastern Europe were once prime examples of how communism not only exploited the many by spreading misery widely, but also ensconced the relatively few who ruled in luxury. I can't think of a single capitalist society in which dissenting citizens and other "undesirables" have been tortured and butchered, perhaps in the millions, as Stalin ordered.
    • 15/04/2004
    • 10:58:51
    • Score: 14 out of 17 people found this comment useful.
  • Internment

    You've written a thorough essay on a tragic time when fear led people to do things which they otherwise would not have done. On a related topic, it is interesting to note that the most decorated American unit which served in World War II, the "Purple Heart Battalion," was made up of Japanese-Americans who fought bravely for the United States. We owe these valiant soldiers, the living and the dead, and all Japanese-Americans a debt of gratitude for their contributions and an apology that fear got the best of us.
    • 15/04/2004
    • 10:30:18
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Titanic

    You have written a very informative essay. I'd just like to briefly comment about your concluding remarks. It is tragic that the ship did not carry a sufficient number of lifeboats out of a concern that they would make the decks look too cluttered. Aesthetics can be important, but surely not more so than human life. I sometimes wonder if the Titanic disaster wasn't preordained in order to remind us of human vanity and folly.
    • 15/04/2004
    • 10:12:29
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Junkyard

    For a state that prides itself on being so progressive, California's treatment of inmates seems awfully backward based on your essay. Personnel changes seem a logical first step in addressing the problem, but more is going to be required based on the seriousness of the problems you describe. Money will also be needed, something that is in short supply in Sacramento currently. Consequently, meaningful reform may be put on hold until the state's budget picture improves.
    • 15/04/2004
    • 09:42:44
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • The Truth

    Two out of three isn't bad. You are right that Abraham Lincoln only freed the slaves in those states in open rebellion against the Union in 1863. He did it more to help the North win the war than because of any moral imperative, although he did oppose slavery. Lincoln was honest when he said that he would keep slavery or abolish it, whichever would better preserve the Union. There is no evidence that Lincoln ordered the rebels to fire on Fort Sumter. Indeed, the notion that the Confederates would follow the orders of a man they despised is somewhat ludicrous. Lincoln ordered the resupply of Fort Sumter, but it was the South's decision that taking Fort Sumter was militarily important. It was a huge and costly blunder as firing on a federal fort put the South in open rebellion against the United States.
    • 15/04/2004
    • 09:34:53
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  • Say Goodbye

    Some traditions don't die so easily. "Kodak's decision to stop selling traditional film cameras in North America marks the formal end of tradition" for them, but other companies will probably continue to sell them for some time. There are still a number of people who aren't comfortable with computer technology. They will serve as ready customers for smaller companies who recognize an opportunity to make a little money by serving what is becoming a niche market.
    • 15/04/2004
    • 09:17:07
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  • Low Road

    You're right about the motivation behind the stunt. Music stars know that publicity is as important in marketing CD's as is talent. It's more about image than music, and the more controversial the better. The idea is to cultivate a controversial image in order to get a star noticed so that CD sales hopefully take off. If taking off clothing does the trick, then a star has been successful in getting free publicity. It doesn't seem to matter that it's negative publicity as long as stars stay in the public eye. It doesn't always work out this way, and it's sad when it does.
    • 15/04/2004
    • 09:05:01
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  • Geometry

    Yours is a good essay concerning a topic most would not think to choose. In addition to the reasons you mention, the most important reason for studying geometry may be to develop a disciplined set of critical thinking skills that will be helpful in many areas. I must admit to hating the various proofs that were an integral part of the subject, but the mental exercise was invaluable. With so much of school involving mindless rote memorization, I would not eliminate geometry from the curriculum, although many students would probably be happy to see it go.
    • 14/04/2004
    • 21:44:51
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  • Daycare

    This is a marvelous paper which thoroughly addresses the subject. It is broken up nicely with headings for ease of reading. Your points are well thought out. The bibliography is extensive as one would expect in such a well researched paper. Your prof's a tough grader. My grade: A
    • 14/04/2004
    • 20:24:54
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  • Design

    You've written an outstanding poetic analysis. I'd like to add a few of my own comments about the paragraphs that weren't directly remarked on by your professor. Paragraph 1: Great introduction. Paragraph 2: Nice parallel to human behavior. Paragraph 4: Apt explication of Frost's simile of the witches' broth. Paragraph 7: Excellent conclusion. My verdict: A+
    • 14/04/2004
    • 20:17:22
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  • Gladiator

    You've written a fine plot summary. If you intend to expand on this, you may wish to discuss more of the political and cultural situation and reference plot points as they relate specifically to your main focus. Consistent with the essay's title, I had hoped to see more of an examination relating to Rome's economy as well. Also, I thought that the elderly emperor who appeared early in the movie was supposed to be Marcus Aurelius not Julianus, who became emperor after Commodus' successor was assassinated.
    • 14/04/2004
    • 19:52:28
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  • Mexican War

    Without a doubt, the Mexican War was tragic but your essay seems far too one-sided. If you are trying to persuade readers, a more balanced tone and presentation would be advisable. I wonder if the settlers in Texas who wanted to form a state and be part of the United States thought they were so terribly wrong. Certainly, Mexico seemed to think so. When Texans got their wish and entered the Union, troops were dispatched to Texas to defend against foreign agression on what had become American soil. When some Mexican soldiers crossed the Rio Grande and engaged American troops, the Mexican War was on. Both countries regret the war, but stirring up old animosities seems pointless more than 150 years after the war ended.
    • 14/04/2004
    • 18:25:13
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  • War

    You're off to a good start in your research paper. It's important to define your topic before starting your paper and you've obviously spent some time doing that. War is something I wish we could do away with, but unfortunately that seems an unrealistic hope. As long as there are tyrants who try to impose their totalitarian beliefs on others, there will be the need to defend oneself and one's country. Sadly, that defense must sometimes be by force of arms if freedom is to be safeguarded.
    • 14/04/2004
    • 18:03:39
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  • Go for it

    Good for you! Don't worry about any doubts you may have about your qualifications to be a teacher. I can tell you have one of the most important characteristic of all and that's a desire to give. Mr. Dennis sounds like a wonderful role model and would probably enjoy acting as a mentor when you start teaching. All that students ultimately want is someone who cares about them. You would probably be the sort of empathetic teacher students admire and respect. We desperately need good teachers to guide young people.
    • 14/04/2004
    • 17:55:56
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  • A sad necessity

    It was not America's fault when the United States was attacked. It was, however, an act of war committed against the United States. A nation has the right to defend itself. Unfortunately, sometimes a nation must go to war to protect itself as the United States did following the attack on it which took place on American soil. Not defending the American homeland would have been unthinkable and would have only encouraged further attacks by those who seem to understand nothing but force.
    • 14/04/2004
    • 17:47:06
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  • The Great Gatsby

    Many would take exception with your final statement that: "Attempting to ascend the ladder of classes in a capitalist society will only result in bad things." This is an example of an overreaching conclusion not supported by evidence. It is a generalization and oversimplification. It's hardly a good way to end an essay and is not even the point Fitzgerald was trying to make in his novel. Blind ambition can result in tragedy in any society.
    • 14/04/2004
    • 17:37:04
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  • Civil War

    Slavery was certainly an important issue in the Civil War, but some would argue that it wasn't the main issue. The North fought in order to preserve the Union as many felt the South had no right to secede after a federal fort was attacked and seized, an act of open rebellion against the United States. The South fought because they felt that their right to self determination would be better served outside the Union. Southerners viewed the Union as something akin to a voluntary association which they had a right to leave if they wished, just as they had voluntarily joined. Lincoln acknowledged he would have kept slavery or abolished it, whichever would better preserve the Union. He abolished it in those states in open rebellion against the Union two years after the war began.
    • 14/04/2004
    • 17:18:43
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  • Plano

    Your fine essay underscores that drugs will proliferate anywhere people are bored or in despair. Unfortunately, feelings such as boredom and despair can afflict youths from all walks of life. The drug problem can be worse among the affluent because they have the money to buy drugs. With both parents often working, teenagers are often left to fen for themselves. It's long been known that wealth does not ensure happiness, and drugs are an insidious lure to young people whose lives seem empty no matter what their socioeconomic status.
    • 14/04/2004
    • 17:04:45
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  • Huck Finn

    Yours is a good essay which adopts a sensible approach to a touchy subject. Words matter and we should be careful about what we say lest we unfairly cast aspersions on another. I don't believe Mark Twain was a racist, even if he did incorporate the vernacular of his day in the dialogue of his novels. That sort of practice used to be lauded as realism. Now, of course, it's politically incorrect to like Mark Twain's novels. It seems unfair to apply today's standards to an earlier time. Let's recognize Twain's novels for the good literature which they are but not adopt the patterns of speech he used to accurately portray the way people spoke in his day. Those who wish to censor Twain's novels might be better off if they devoted half as much time to ridding the Internet of pornography, which seems a far greater threat to young people.
    • 14/04/2004
    • 16:03:56
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  • Feedback

    You make some good points in your well written essay. Even if negative feedback must be given on an essay, for example, it does not have to be stated in a harsh fashion. The tone of negative feedback should at the very least be neutral and objective. It's better if it can be combined with something positive to say. When giving feedback, it is important to look for something to contribute which the author may be able to use in a rewrite or the next essay.
    • 14/04/2004
    • 15:49:15
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  • Immigrants

    Indeed we are a nation of immigrants and therein lies one of the greatest strengths of this blessed land. My grandparents were European and struggled mightily to assimilate in the great American melting pot. Ancestors of Americans came from perhaps more nations than the inhabitants of any other country in the world. Ultimately, immigrants are looking for a better life for themselves and for their families. America has long provided opportunity for those who might not have found it anywhere else. In the process, the nation has grown and prospered. Our Statue of Liberty yet beckons at the golden door as our wonderful diversity will continue the hallmark of a great society.
    • 14/04/2004
    • 15:41:28
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  • Vietnam War

    I agree that the Vietnam War was costly, and ultimately futile as North Vietnam prevailed militarily, but am less convinced that the story is over. Most Americans initally supported the war effort out of a commitment to fight for freedom. I wonder if the defense of liberty is ever a worthless endeavor, even if an occasional setback is suffered. The pursuit of freedom for the oppressed remains a worthwhile goal and the final chapter on Vietnam has not been written. In fact, the nation is slowly adopting a form of capitalism that might make some communists roll over in their dusty graves. What could not be achieved in the hamlets and dense jungles may succeed in the sidewalk shops and stores.
    • 14/04/2004
    • 15:27:48
    • Score: 8 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Capital Punishment

    I would be more in favor of abolishing capital punishment if I could overlook the heinous nature of some crimes. One is not so glib in bemoaning the injustices of capital punishment when consoling the families of victims. Whether it is a deterrent or not, capital punishment does seem effective in allowing victims' families to move on with their lives, although they will long be haunted by the memories of murders too barbaric to describe.
    • 14/04/2004
    • 15:08:18
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Welfare

    Welfare should be reformed, and not abolished, if we care to remain a compassionate society. The primary recipients of welfare are children. Children don't get to choose their parents and should not be unduly punished because of something that's not their fault. I do not wish to see children go hungry or be without shelter. Assistance given by the government to the needy is mandated by charity, which admittedly defies rhetorical elegance.
    • 14/04/2004
    • 15:02:29
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  • College Admissions

    As the Supreme Court has ruled, race can be a factor in college admissions but it cannot be the deciding factor. This policy seems to be a workable compromise regarding an extremely contentious issue. While it is considered the supreme law of the land, the High Court does not wish to micro-manage the admissions process, which is best left up to individuals. If points can be awarded for having a parent who was an alum, the admissions process is far from ideal and will likely remain so. In such a diverse society, America has kept relative calm within its borders by doing better than many countries in respecting the rights of minorities, although this might not be said of the nation's history which reflected the mores of an earlier time. In trying to make amends for past wrongs, allowing race to be one of many factors college admission committees may use signifies that America is committed to its ideals of open access to all citizens, even if the remedy is less than perfect.
    • 14/04/2004
    • 14:57:12
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Passion of Christ

    Perhaps the main point Mel Gibson is trying to get across is that the sacrifice Jesus made on our behalf was so tremendous that few of us have a full appreciation of it. It is easy to look at a cross with the sort of numbness that familiarity brings and be totally unaware of what a horribly agonizing way it was to die. Maybe Mel Gibson wanted to help viewers deepen their understanding of what an enormous act of love it was on the part of Jesus to willingly undergo death by crucifixion so that the faithful might have eternal life.
    • 14/04/2004
    • 14:41:57
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • The Forgotten War

    You've given a good historical perspective on the Korean War. As one who served in Korea long after the war ended, I can attest to the importance of the UN effort over fifty years ago to keep South Korea free. South Korea is a vibrant, thriving democracy in which the people work very hard to improve their lives and country. Contrast that with the situation in North Korea where the people are starved while the government focuses on a nuclear buildup that threatens world peace. The South Koreans I knew were grateful to America for leading the effort some fifty years ago to help them fight for freedom and it is not a forgotten war to many of them.
    • 14/04/2004
    • 14:30:44
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Ten Absences

    Ten absences seems like a lot and you would not be the only one in favor of the principal's policy. However reasonable it may seem, policies which are invoked without allowing for sufficient individual discretion appear arbitrary. The only discretion in this case is apparently whether the student will receive a grade of D or F. If all teachers put forth a greater effort to try to make their classes interesting and meaningful, maybe students would be more motivated to attend regularly. Teachers who effectively employ humor as a way to keep students interested and make learning fun rarely complain about excessive absences from their classes.
    • 14/04/2004
    • 14:22:28
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Trends in America

    You raise the interesting issue of having celebrities as elected officials. There is nothing wrong with celebrities holding public office if they have been duly elected by the voters. Celebrity is enough to get you noticed, and name recognition is a big advantage in politics, but I have more confidence in the electorate than to believe that the majority would vote for bad candidates just because they were good actors. Some actors have proven to be effective leaders. Most people, including a number of Democrats, feel Ronald Reagan was a good governor of California and president of the US, although he spent most of his working life as an actor. Although he hasn't been in office long, most give Arnold Schwarzenegger high marks so far as governor of California and there is even talk of amending the Constitution so that he would be eligible to serve as president also.
    • 14/04/2004
    • 14:13:03
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Gun Control

    Yours is a good essay which you have taken the time to research. However, your essay could be improved if you would elaborate on the statement in your introductory paragraph in which you say, "why not modify the gun policy allowing only people who are trained and licensed to obtain regular hand guns, therefore keeping things simple so that people can purchase them for the purpose of protection." You should explain what you mean by "trained." Some might ask if you envision that a one hour safety class would be sufficient. Others would insist that a semester long class should be required at a minimum. In fact, there is so much disagreement as to what would constitute proper and sufficient training that a level of complexity would be introduced that is inconsistent with your apparent desire of "keeping things simple."
    • 14/04/2004
    • 13:58:42
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Too much of a bad thing?

    Fortunately, I live in a society which rejects torture and rightfully so. You seem conflicted on the subject. In your introductory paragraph, you state: "Torture, to me, is a horrific procedure that no one should go through under any circumstances." However, when referring to torture in your concluding paragraph, you state: "To me I believe it's the right thing to do if you do it right. It's a useful tactic to get information that is needed." Perhaps you need to think this through more carefully.
    • 14/04/2004
    • 13:46:38
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Character Analysis of Judith

    Yours is a wonderful essay which delves deeply into the character of Judith. It was interesting to read your professor's comments with which I concur. I'd like to elaborate on your observation that, "many people are not what they seem if we don't know them well." Some people are not what they seem even if we believe we do know them well. As for Judith, I wonder if anyone could really know her well as she seems so complex that it's doubtful how much self-knowledge she possesses. I don't think Judith wants to get close to others for fear of being hurt again. Multiple personalities are not inconsistent with a history of abuse and one cannot help but feel sorry for Judith who will likely always remain in the relative safety of emotional remoteness.
    • 14/04/2004
    • 13:33:20
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Character Analysis of Emily

    You've written an excellent paper and I agree with your professor's comments. I'd like to comment on the paragraphs your professor didn't say anything specifically about. Paragraph 1: Good introduction which effectively draws the reader in. Paragraph 4: Insightful analysis of the reactions of Emily's neighbors to her. Paragraph 6: Good wrap-up of story. Your conclusions are well founded. I'm reminded of a Robert Browning poem called "Porphyria's Lover" in which the hapless victim was also killed by one not at all fully sane.
    • 14/04/2004
    • 13:14:31
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  • Theme of revenge in Shakespeare's Hamlet

    You've done a fine job in providing a good summary of the play. Based on the essay's title, however, I was expecting more of a discussion of the theme of revenge rather than what seemed to be primarily a discussion of plot. I'm aware it could be argued that plot and theme are intertwined. Still, the essay would be stronger if it centered around a more detailed explication of theme, with references to those plot elements which support your thesis. While you do mention revenge, especially in your introductory and concluding paragraphs, your essay could be improved by introducing a tighter focus in the intervening paragraphs consistent with the title you have chosen.
    • 14/04/2004
    • 12:52:25
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  • History of Writing

    Not everyone would agree that, "Writing was first developed by the Sumerians." The earliest writing was in the form of inscriptions in caves which are sometimes referred to as petroglyphs. Long afterwards, the Sumerians began to make their impressions in clay which you properly refer to as cuneiform. I agree with what you say about the importance of writing and can't imagine too many people at all would take exception. This essay needs to be expanded into a more substantive history of writing.
    • 14/04/2004
    • 12:39:03
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Unsupported allegations

    In a persuasive essay, it is important that you provide support for your claims. Your assertions do not constitute evidence. Much more than a persuasive essay, this comes across as an emotional attack that will undoubtedly appeal to those who dislike the President. Where is your proof that "Bush lied to gain oil, to create a diversion from homeland issues, and revenge"? Besides faulty parallelism, your writing contains various fallacies such as ad hominem and post hoc ergo propter hoc. I'm a nonpartisan, but your invective seems more like a partisan campaign speech than enlightened rhetoric. In a supposedly persuasive essay, you would be well advised to adopt a more objective tone if your goal is to win people over to your point of view.
    • 14/04/2004
    • 11:34:42
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Character Analysis of Scout

    A piece submitted more than once is a waste of the reader's time
    • 13/04/2004
    • 19:56:26
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  • The Negro Speaks of Rivers

    This is almost identical to your other essay ("The Negro Speaks of Rivers" and The Plight of African Americans) and I can't say it's a good use of the reader's time to go through both.
    • 13/04/2004
    • 17:10:33
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  • The Downfall of Macbeth

    In addition to greed and ambition, Macbeth was done in by moral weakness and an inability to distinguish reality from illusion. For Macbeth, evil was the precursor of even more evil, which fortunately did not prevail in the end as he and his wife got what they deserved.
    • 13/04/2004
    • 16:35:48
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  • The Jazz Age

    You've done a very good job in describing the Jazz Age, which is certainly one of the more interesting periods in American history. The roaring 20's always conjure up images of gangsters and bootleg whiskey, which Fitzgerald, among others, did colorfully capture in literature. I'm also always sadly reminded of the terrible sadness in the decade that followed, which was as downcast as the 1920's were upbeat.
    • 13/04/2004
    • 15:03:48
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  • Charlie Gordon

    You've described the pre-operation Charlie, but it is the post-operation Charlie which is missing. Once Charlie gets his operation which makes him a genius, at least for a while, he loses the innocent happiness he once knew. Ironically, the new intelligence he wished for so passionately doesn't enhance his happiness. In fact, it makes him resentful, self-centered and contemptuous of others. He learns that he has merely traded his mental retardation for emotional retardation, being unable even to relate effectively to the two women who mean the most in his life. His relapse to his former self is sad in a way. His intelligence could have allowed him to achieve great things. But he could have never been happy, given his memories of the family that abandoned him and the way people have treated him. His deterioration seems tragic, even if he can once again be somewhat content, and Charlie Gordon remains one of the more pitiable characters in literature.
    • 13/04/2004
    • 14:53:19
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Just Say No?

    With all of the well known health hazards of smoking, it's unfortunate anyone needs to be persuaded not to smoke. Sadly, it's not simply a rational choice as people are addicted. How do you persuade someone whose body is crying out for a cigarette that it's something they really shouldn't do? It would be nice if reading a page full of all of the disadvantages of smoking would do the trick. The best course of action is trying to make sure young people don't get hooked in the first place. Parents and schools need to take this problem seriously as proper education of the young is vital as they are a prime target group. The health-related consequences to our economy are staggering and the toll in human lives is tragic.
    • 13/04/2004
    • 13:45:30
    • Score: 8 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Stock Market Crash

    One of the main abuses behind the unprecedented run-up in stock prices in the 1920s was the practice of unbridled buying on margin. This practice is analogous to buying stock with a credit card. As long as prices kept rising there was no problem. But if prices fell, your broker would issue what's called a margin call. The investor who bought stock on credit would be expected to send his broker a check to cover the drop in stock value. Of course, when the bubble finally burst in 1929, the plunging prices were too steep to allow the vast majority of investors to make good the losses. Bankruptcy resulted all around, including at banks which were some of the biggest stock investors of all. FDIC insurance wasn't instituted until the 1930's and many depositors were wiped out. Strict rules were also instituted regarding margin buying, which still isn't prohibited. The rules remain to this very day as one safeguard to prevent a recurrence. The SEC was also formed in the 1930s to serve as a watchdog to encourage fairer corporate financial reporting.
    • 13/04/2004
    • 13:28:21
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Medieval Sieges

    PBS's NOVA had an excellent documentary on the trebuchet. If the program is rebroadcast, I highly recommend it to anyone interested in learning about medieval technology. For its time, the trebuchet was a technologically advanced weapon, in particular because of it's intricate design. Most people think of medieval weapons as crude and many of them were, but not the feared trebuchet. The PBS special illustrated how difficult it is even for a team from our present age to design a working trebuchet. It gave me greater respect for medieval engineering skills.
    • 13/04/2004
    • 13:04:30
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Similarities

    The main similarity between these two tyrants is that both had utter disregard for anyone other than themselves. Neither could be seriously considered a military genius and both would have been better off delegating decisions on strategy and tactics to those who had trained all their lives in the ways of war. When the two despots did leave matters to the generals who had survived their purges, things tended to go much better for their countries on the field of battle. Hitler and Stalin used propaganda to deceive the very people they should have served. It is utter tyranny for a nation's leaders to execute dissenting civilians in the tens of thousands. It is folly to consider that such barbarous actions could further the interests of a nation. I guess that makes me a nobody because I say neither of these two ruthless men was very smart.
    • 13/04/2004
    • 12:45:19
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Reasons

    If one of your reasons for writing this essay was to be humorous, you should be a teacher. The main reason students don't like school is because it's not fun. If a teacher can make the class fun and interesting, students enjoy the experience of learning. Often the best way to appeal to students and keep their attention is with humor. If we had more teachers who realized that learning can be fun, we'd have a lot fewer students in detention.
    • 13/04/2004
    • 12:27:41
    • Score: 11 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • You say tomato and I say tomahtoe

    Whether it's called community service or service learning, based on your essay it still sounds mandatory. Service learning sounds like community service incorporated into the regular school curriculum. If certain classes have to be taken to graduate and those classes involve service learning (which sounds as if it's more than a textbook exercise), it seems that students are now going to be required to do something that used to be an elective in order to graduate. Teachers wouldn't be satisfied having students write papers based on what they've read about service. Rather, teachers would want students to write papers based more on their hands-on service experience. Service learning that involves activities by students to assist their communities is an excellent idea, and I've long favored having it as an elective. However, if it is part of classes that are required to graduate, it becomes mandatory and might engender the sort of resentment which is not a desirable outcome.
    • 13/04/2004
    • 12:18:32
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Globalization

    A nation's people, not its government, should be allowed to decide if another country's products and services are worthy of import. For a government to make it difficult for its citizenry to enjoy American products, for example, can indicate a bias which is unhealthy. American movies, in particular, are often cited as a threat to another nation's culture, but no such threat is intended. There isn't some sinister effort underway in the US to export American culture, but Hollywood obviously reflects American culture because it is situated in the United States. People in other countries seem to enjoy American movies, which doesn't make them dupes in some conspiracy to brainwash them. Hollywood produces those films which are thought to best appeal to filmgoers, and make the most money, not best disseminate American culture abroad.
    • 13/04/2004
    • 11:54:35
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Causes of the American Revolution

    You've done an excellent job of focusing on some of the more important reasons for the Revolutionary War. The most important reason seems to be British arrogance and folly. Up until the outbreak of armed hostilities in 1775, most American colonists still wanted reconciliation with England. They had hoped that their actions up to that point would convince the mother country to moderate her oppressive policies toward the American colonies. King George III would not even name an emissary to seek compromise. Had he done so, revolution probably would not have broken out as soon as it did. George III declared the American colonies in rebellion because of some relatively minor skirmishes and from that point on revolution was inevitable. It is interesting to speculate how history might have changed had a more reasonable man sat on the throne of England in 1775.
    • 13/04/2004
    • 11:30:51
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Response to Self Evident Truths

    Few would argue about the importance of truth or that it is often lacking in business. This topic has currency and your essay could have benefited from a discussion of recent business scandals such as at Enron, Tyco, Global Crossings, Arthur Andersen, WorldCom, Adelphia Communications, ImClone/Martha Stewart, etc.
    • 13/04/2004
    • 11:06:58
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Porphyria's Lover

    Porphyria's lover might be described as insanely obsessed as his actions are those of a madman. Based on how she was dressed, we may conclude Porphyria was of the upper class. Though probably married, she flees from a gay feast to be with her lover, who is apparently not of the upper class. Thus their love is in vain, yet Porphyria's lover wishes to possess her. Totally deluded, he imagines she wishes death as a way to be with him always and never have to leave him again. Browning's poem illustrates that we may not really know even those we are closest to, and pay for our ignorance with deadly consequences.
    • 13/04/2004
    • 10:40:05
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Arnold

    This is an excellent biography of Arnold which highlights his driven nature to be the best at whatever he undertakes. To overcome California's huge problems, he will have to be a very good politician indeed. He is off to a good start and has already kept some of this campaign promises, such as repealing the car tax hike. As governor of California, he has attained one of the highest political offices available to him, but don't be certain he can't be president someday. It would take amending the Constitution and there is already talk of doing just that.
    • 13/04/2004
    • 10:26:33
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Wickham

    Austen's skill in dramatically relaying the accidental, awkward meeting between Darcy and Wickham is one of the high points of her book. You are correct in observing that Elizabeth's prejudice against Darcy does not allow her to draw the proper conclusions about the unease between him and Wickham. Later at dinner, Wickham wastes no time ingratiating himself with Elizabeth and further poisoning her mind against the "proud" Darcy. Elizabeth's preconceived notions about Darcy are strengthened by Wickham's false and inconsistent account of mistreatment at his hands, which Elizabeth is all too willing to accept as confirmation of her (blind) assessment of Darcy's "prejudicial" nature.
    • 13/04/2004
    • 10:16:39
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Correct use of language

    You've done a good job in meeting the requirement of writing a 500-word essay on the importance of the appropriate and correct use of language in the work of graduate students. I would like to emphasize another important reason which has to do with developing critical thinking skills. Correctly using language is not limited to grasping the relevant material and explaining it to others but also involves developing certain reasoning skills which are required in higher education. A comprehensive study of language will thus involve a mastery of logic and rhetoric, which are vital if complex ideas are to be rigorously explored and debated.
    • 13/04/2004
    • 09:53:26
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Uniforms

    You've apparently done a good job in thinking about this issue and your strong feelings on the subject are obvious. The media is primarily privately owned in most free societies and cannot be compelled to instill a certain set of values in youngsters. Because much of the media is a for-profit enterprise, programming will be chosen for reasons other than properly raising children. Parents bear primary responsibility for conveying a set of values to their children but must compete with influences such as peer groups, advertisers, and Hollywood. Uniforms may not be workable in many public schools and there does not seem to be an easy solution to the vexing problem of lagging student performance.
    • 13/04/2004
    • 09:40:18
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Is man inherently evil?

    This is an improvement over your other essay on "Lord of the Flies" but it still needs some work beyond grammar check and spell check. You need to provide still more support for your disagreement with Golding's theme. You indicate that there are philosophers who agree with your viewpoint. You may want to state their names and explain specifically what they have written if you feel it supports your position.
    • 13/04/2004
    • 09:24:40
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Lord of the Flies

    It would have been better to start your essay with the sentence which begins your third paragraph. You could have then disagreed with Golding's theme and proceeded to support your opposing statement in subsequent paragraphs.
    • 13/04/2004
    • 09:12:59
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • The Outsiders

    You don't really say how the poem "Richard Cory" by Edwin Arlington Robinson supports your thesis statement. Perhaps you could develop the idea that Richard Cory was widely admired by all because he appeared to be a true gentlemen who treated all with respect. He was even envied because of his great wealth and physical attributes. Still, one day he went home and put a bullet through his head, illustrating that a man's reputation isn't always a true indication of reality.
    • 13/04/2004
    • 09:06:11
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • The Tet Offensive

    I presume "(bleep)" and "(bloop)" indicate that your references are still tentative, as do "(Wirtz something)" and "(Moise something...)." Since you indicate, "I think I need a different thesis statement" how about the following: While the US was undoubtedly the greater military power in the Vietnam War, the North Vietnamese prevailed because of their more effective propaganda, as evidenced by the Tet Offensive, and perseverance, as illustrated by the fact that they were willing to fight for over thirty years against South Vietnam and her allies.
    • 13/04/2004
    • 08:54:50
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • The Purpose of Macbeth

    In addition to underscoring the tragic consequences of unrestrained ambition, Shakespeare had at least two other important reasons in writing Macbeth. Rather than merely highlighting flaws in human nature, Shakespeare also wanted to point out that evil often leads to even more evil, which nonetheless doesn't always win out in the end. He also wanted to caution us against relying too heavily on appearances, which can sometimes be so deceptively false that they have tragic consequences.
    • 13/04/2004
    • 08:22:28
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • THE RESEARCH PROPOSAL

    This could have been combined with your other somewhat longer essay of yesterday on the same subject having the same title.
    • 13/04/2004
    • 06:13:25
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Energy Efficiency and Conservation

    A piece submitted more than once is a waste of the reader's time
    • 13/04/2004
    • 00:15:44
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • US neutrality and WWII

    While your essay contains a great deal of information about the various Neutrality Acts, your conclusion needs more support than 20-20 hindsight. Even since Washington's 1796 farewell address in which he warned against entangling alliances abroad, America has shown an historical aversion to involving itself in foreign wars. Recently, that has changed, but in the 1930's America was preoccupied fighting the Great Depression. While the threat from Germany and Japan was acknowledged, it was thought to be a European and Far East concern oceans away and not a direct threat to our shores. Prior to the infamous attack on Pearl Harbor, Imperial Japan had not committed an act of war against the US and neither had Nazi Germany. America's European allies should have stood up to Hitler long before the invasion of Poland rather than follow a policy of appeasement. It was appeasement and not American neutrality which most encouraged Hitler.
    • 12/04/2004
    • 18:18:02
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • What the Gossips Saw

    The poem you mention has an important message and you have shown how it can relate to our everyday lives. Physical beauty fades with time, but if we love someone for their inner beauty, we will not as likely be disappointed with age.
    • 12/04/2004
    • 16:46:15
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • My Wood

    I agree with your interpretation as it is written in Psalms, "Do not lay up for yourselves treasures on earth, where moth and rust consume and where thieves break in and steal, but lay up for yourselves treasure in heaven, where neither moth nor rust consumes and where thieves do not break in and steal. For where your treasure is, there will be your heart also."
    • 12/04/2004
    • 16:22:05
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Behavior modification plan

    For a piece to be submitted more than once is a waste of the reader's time.
    • 12/04/2004
    • 15:40:00
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Library Censorship

    More time and care should be taken in proofreading the essay to make sure it is complete (including any bibliography) so that it isn't necessary for the author to add information via a comment on his or her own essay.
    • 12/04/2004
    • 15:09:02
    • Score: 8 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • Reading on-line

    Besides the problems you mention, a principal difficulty one encounters on-line is evaluating the credibility of the information. We tend to believe what we read, especially when it is stated in authoritative terms. That is why it is especially important to look for the writer's sources where possible so as to be able to evaluate the credibility of what is being read.
    • 12/04/2004
    • 14:26:28
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • MacBeth

    In another of his plays, King Henry VIII, Shakespeare wrote, "I charge thee, fling away ambition: / By that sin fell the angels." MacBeth would have done well to heed those words and you are quite right to focus on his fatal ambition (and moral weakness).
    • 12/04/2004
    • 14:19:05
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Lady MacBeth

    Lady MacBeth has long given new meaning to the old adage, "Behind every good man is a woman." Of course, MacBeth was far from a good man, while his wife was one of the most richly drawn villainesses in literature. I can think of few scenes in Shakespeare's play in which she is not plotting evil. If one cares to gain lasting insights into human nature, both good and bad, the immortal bard's plays are a wonderful place to start.
    • 12/04/2004
    • 14:07:44
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Iago

    Fortunately, Iago's scheming goes terribly awry for him. There are few more consummate villains in literature as the jealous Iago who incites Othello's own envy against the innocent Desdemona. The bitter Iago got exactly what he deserves and readers don't have to worry that a corpse will attain a higher office so richly undeserved.
    • 12/04/2004
    • 13:55:06
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Ozymandias

    Whenever we get caught up in the mindless pursuit of possessions, we would do well to remember Shelley's poem. There is perhaps no better example of the futility of vanity. It is ironic that a once powerful Egyptian king is rendered utterly silly and passe by a simple poem which has become immortal in the English language.
    • 12/04/2004
    • 13:44:38
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Women and the American Revolution

    Yours is a fine essay praising the role of women in winning America's Revolutionary War. Too often the history books concentrate on battles and dates while leaving ignored the invaluable contributions of women. Some people mistakenly think that World War II was the only war in which women made critical contributions to victory, even though women have participated in vital ways in every war.
    • 12/04/2004
    • 13:37:13
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Foreign Languages

    Yours is a good essay and you are to be commended for your mastery of written English. Your obvious talent for foreign languages seems to make you well suited for a career as a translator. Your well put phrases may even indicate an ability to be a diplomat.
    • 12/04/2004
    • 13:30:14
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • The birth and death of stars

    An essay submitted more than once is a waste of the reader's time.
    • 12/04/2004
    • 13:22:32
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Perseverance

    This is a good essay, but I would recommend changing the title which some might find a bit redundant as perseverance implies a consistency of effort. You may also want to discuss perseverance more so that the essay is more in keeping with the title. Developing perseverance can be one of the many benefits of belonging to a fraternity or sorority and you did well to mention many more positive aspects of Greek life.
    • 12/04/2004
    • 13:16:00
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Expressing Emotions Appropriately

    This is an excellent essay which benefited from your personal experiences. How we deal with others accounts for the vast majority of our success or failure in the workplace. Learning to convey emotion appropriately on the job is vital to our interpersonal relationships.
    • 12/04/2004
    • 13:02:55
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Depression

    This is an excellent essay that has been well researched. I would have liked to have seen a bibliography also. The importance of recognizing the symptoms cannot be overemphasized as it is vital to get help for those whose depression may lead to tragic consequences.
    • 12/04/2004
    • 12:55:53
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • The Hobbit

    This summary is too condensed to be very useful to many readers. I suggest you expand on it and also let the reader know why you highly recommend the book. I may realize that the book is considered a classic of modern literature but some may not.
    • 12/04/2004
    • 12:50:10
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Minor character analysis

    This is more of a short character summary than it is a character analysis. It would have been helpful to provide more detail about what makes the characters act as they do.
    • 12/04/2004
    • 12:44:25
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Flowers for Algernon

    This short essay seems to be much more about analyzing the character of Charlie Gordon than it does about theme. It might be a good idea to make your thesis statement about theme explicit.
    • 12/04/2004
    • 12:38:39
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Of Mice and Men

    Curley's wife was undoubtedly lonely, but she was also immature and naive. Perhaps she wouldn't have been so lonely had she worked harder to make her marriage work. Curley had his faults, and jealousy was one of the main ones. His wife knew this and punished Curley for his inattentiveness by making him jealous whenever she could. I'm not saying she got what she asked for, but she went about finding relief for her loneliness the wrong way.
    • 12/04/2004
    • 12:30:17
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Romeo and Juliet

    Lady Capulet did not show much understanding of a teenage girl, much less her own daughter, if she thought comparing Paris to a book would be an appealing image. Juliet would surely be more interested in the possibility of love than bookish interests, notwithstanding her realization of the requirements of duty.
    • 12/04/2004
    • 12:17:49
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Reform movements in the United States

    I'm not sure if the difference of one word justified submitting this essay twice. The reader's time should be considered.
    • 12/04/2004
    • 12:07:17
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Othello

    Other than dropping "Othello Essay" from the title, I wonder if a second essay is justified considering you've already submitted your "Othello Essay In what ways does this dialogue in act three four develop your response to Othello and Desdemona in the play."
    • 12/04/2004
    • 11:55:49
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Eastern Dragons and Western Dragons

    This is too similar to your essay of yesterday "Differences and similarities of Eastern dragons and Western Dragons Question: Compare and contrast the Eastern and Western perception of dragons" to justify the need for a separate essay, even "now with original text."
    • 12/04/2004
    • 11:44:59
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Drugs in Sports

    You've written a good essay on drugs in sports. Performance enhancing drugs are one of the more insidious ways of cheating in sports and I agree with you that they should not be tolerated. I wonder if one of the reasons the rules against such drugs are not enforced more stringently is that schools and team owners benefit from the enhanced performance among the athletes who use them. Perhaps more rigid penalties against schools and team owners would help stem the abuse.
    • 12/04/2004
    • 11:05:33
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Rabbi Hirsch

    You've done a good job describing the flaws of Rabbi Hirsch. However, even heroes have flaws. Certainly he would have been more heroic had he always acted on his convictions, but I'm not so sure Rabbi Hirsch is unheroic. I would agree that he does not conform to the stereotypical mythic hero of literature, but there still seems something quietly heroic about a man who has experienced so much bitter suffering yet retains a certain loving, hopeful outlook on life. His gentle teachings help Michael grow in wisdom and I doubt Michael would characterize the rabbi as unheroic.
    • 12/04/2004
    • 10:55:17
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • The Man Who Fought for Independence

    You've written a good biography of America's second president. John Adams is an underrated president perhaps because he succeeded George Washington, the proverbial hard act to follow. President Adams caused some of his own problems, however, because of his prickly personality. He did not suffer fools gladly and didn't care to hide his disdain for others who disagreed with his positions. Even men of great wisdom such as Thomas Jefferson were the subject of the scorn of John Adams merely for disagreeing with him. Had Adams been a better master of interpersonal relations, he could have achieved a great deal more and would perhaps be remembered as one of America's more effective presidents.
    • 12/04/2004
    • 10:33:38
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Hiroshima

    You've written a fine essay on why it was necessary to drop the A bomb on Hiroshima (and Nagasaki). It was certainly one of the most difficult decisions any president has had to make, but Truman seems correct in his assessment that dropping the A bomb, while tragic, would save more lives than it would take. You are right when you observe that an invasion of the Japanese homeland would have cost an enormous number of lives, both among the allies and Japanese who would have been fanatical in their defense of their beloved country. I don't blame the Japanese for their reluctance to surrender, but neither do I fault President Truman for making a very difficult decision which he did not enjoy.
    • 12/04/2004
    • 10:17:53
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • What's in a name

    You've done a good job discussing the importance of choosing the right name. While still preferred by many, traditional names from the Bible are not quite as popular as they once were, especially for women. Although Shakespeare said that a rose by any other name would still smell as sweet, a person's name can be important as it is one way others may form a first, and perhaps lasting, impression.
    • 12/04/2004
    • 10:03:49
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Internet Banking

    Some people, especially those too busy to make it to the bank even with the extended hours most banks now offer, will prefer the convenience of internet banking, while others cannot bring themselves to accept that it is safe to have their financial transactions on the Internet. The banking industry needs to do a much better job in convincing the public that their private finances will remain private and not be exposed to fraud if internet banking is to really catch on, which is in the industry's best interests as it is a very economical way to do business.
    • 12/04/2004
    • 09:50:56
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Evaluate what psychologists have found out about lifestyles

    I've already read this in Part B of your essay titled "Describe what psychologists have found out about lifestyles."
    • 12/04/2004
    • 09:30:24
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Stadia Design

    It is interesting that over the millennia, the basic design of stadia has remained essentially the same. While stadium design has been improved upon, the ancients showed great wisdom in fields such as architecture, which is underscored by the fact that many monumental structures from old are still standing, though decayed with time.
    • 12/04/2004
    • 09:18:28
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Why Hitler came to power

    You've written a good essay on why Hitler came to power and I agree that the depressed economic conditions caused by the 1929 stock market crash were critical. Not to be overlooked, however, was the lawlessness which Hitler provoked in Germany as Nazi thugs patrolled the streets assaulting and even shooting their opponents. Ironically, President Hindenburg appointed him Chancellor of Germany in 1933 to curb the very violence which Hitler was responsible for inciting.
    • 12/04/2004
    • 08:54:49
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Treaty of Versailles

    You've done a good job in discussing the strengths and weaknesses of the Treaty of Versailles. However, not everyone would agree that: "Another good point about the treaty was the fact of there being a lesser likely hood of war by Great powers such as Austria- Hungary and Germany because they had been made weaker." Precisely because the treaty had attempted to make Germany so weak that she felt humiliated, a man such as Hitler was able to gain power and start World War II. Many would call this an extremely bad point of the Treaty of Versailles.
    • 12/04/2004
    • 08:36:30
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Viewing Violence

    This is an excellent and well researched essay concerning an important topic. Your final paragraph is an outstanding choice to conclude the essay. Change begins with each of us. It may be convenient to blame everybody else for the sad situation surrounding media violence, but the solution starts with taking personal accountability in our own homes to ensure that acceptable standards are upheld.
    • 11/04/2004
    • 20:36:43
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • A deplorable practice

    The situation you detail is almost too detestable for words. It is incumbent on every nation of the world to come together and do whatever is possible to finally put an end to this awful trafficking in lives.
    • 11/04/2004
    • 19:56:46
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Wilson and the Treaty of Versailles

    President Wilson was in favor of a more forgiving attitude toward Germany and her allies than England and France were. Unfortunately, given the level of animosity toward Germany following World War I, it seems unlikely Wilson could have changed the attitudes of America's allies, no matter how hard he tried. Undoubtedly, the harsh terms of the Treaty of Versailles were a leading cause of World War II, but the fault lies much more with America's European allies than with Wilson.
    • 11/04/2004
    • 19:44:14
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Childcare

    Because of economic conditions, it is becoming increasingly difficult for one parent to stay home and take care of the children. Although having the children taken care of by a parent may be preferred, the demands of paying the bills often take precedence. A "nonworking" parent may have a full-time responsibility caring for the children. They are not a drain on the tax system but a vital part of the family. There is no dependent spouse rebate. There is a dependency deduction (which includes children too) as the government has historically tried to ease the financial burden on parents, and rightfully so.
    • 11/04/2004
    • 19:36:04
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Abraham Lincoln

    Our sixteenth President was arguably our best, with all due respect to Washington and Jefferson. As the nation's leader, Lincoln actually didn't want to do everything in his power to abolish slavery. He wanted to preserve the Union above all else. If he could have done so by keeping slavery, he would have. While he was personally opposed to slavery, he knew that abolishing slavery in the states in rebellion against the Union would help end the Civil War. Fortunately, the demands of his office and his personal conscience coincided with the issuance of the historic Emancipation Proclamation.
    • 11/04/2004
    • 19:26:29
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Occupation, employment and identity

    This is a nicely done essay. What is unfortunate is that sometimes one's identity can be so tied up with employment that tragic consequences can ensue when a job is lost. It is vital to have other interests and resources so that a period of forced unemployment does not so demoralize us that we find it difficult to function.
    • 11/04/2004
    • 19:15:53
    • Score: 12 out of 13 people found this comment useful.
  • Muhammad Ali

    This is a great Ali biography with a nice personal touch. Seeing the champ recently on TV with his daughter (who has boxed a bit herself) was a sad reminder that the disease that has ravaged his body may be the one foe impossible to beat. He hasn't lost his fighting spirit, but it must be incredibly difficult for a man who was once so proud of his physical prowess.
    • 11/04/2004
    • 19:09:08
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Death of a Salesman

    You've written a fine essay revolving around the American dream gone awry. Willy Loman made himself unhappy by focusing on all he didn't have and couldn't achieve. He would have done well to harken back to the words of Abraham Lincoln who observed that most men are about as happy as they set their minds to be.
    • 11/04/2004
    • 19:01:55
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Pros and Cons of Large Chain Stores

    Yours is a good and balanced presentation of the two sides of the issue. I would have enjoyed reading your conclusion as to which side you agree with and why.
    • 11/04/2004
    • 18:57:09
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Abortion

    You've written an excellent essay and have done your research. Even with better access to more effective contraceptive options and to other kinds of reproductive health care information, abortions will not go away as long as poverty remains a sad reality, which seems likely.
    • 11/04/2004
    • 18:53:40
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Dulce et Decorum Est

    You've written a thorough analysis of the poem. I'd just like to add that Owen was resentful that British officials were encouraging young men to enlist so that they could fight and die gloriously for England, while the officials were safe at home. That was why Owen chose to describe a death from a gas attack, as there was perhaps no less glorious way to die.
    • 11/04/2004
    • 18:49:09
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Independent Research Project

    This was such a well done and extensively researched essay that it makes superfluous your other essay of 235 words called IRP (Independent Research Project) "The Matrix" which wasn't bad.
    • 11/04/2004
    • 16:28:11
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • "The Matrix"

    This is not bad but I believe it should have been part of your other, longer essay titled "The Matrix IRP (Independent Research Project)" which I thought was good. This is especially true since it is on the same subject, even though the focus of your topic is more limited. What you've said here is not inconsistent with your similarly titled essay, which would not have been overly long by incorporating this much shorter essay.
    • 11/04/2004
    • 15:51:00
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • A Dangerous Threat

    My main concern is that while we're busily trying to figure out the motivations of terrorists, they'll be even more busy trying to figure out newer, more effective ways to kill us. I find it difficult to try to understand murderers who want to kill me, my family, and everyone whom I know and love just because we're American.
    • 10/04/2004
    • 15:19:28
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Excellent discussion of abortion

    You make some great points and are a strong advocate for your position. We shouldn't try to value one life over another since all life is precious. I find myself more in agreement with Don Marquis than you seem to be. Society has a proper interest in protecting life. Safeguarding the current lives of its citizens is essential to preserving society. If society has an interest in current life, it seems to me that it also has a vested interest in future life. A society is acting rightfully which seeks to perpetuate life, not just in the present but in the future as well. A viable, ongoing social structure is vital for a society which may act to preserve it's most important institutions through safeguarding the lives of all of its citizens, now and in the future.
    • 10/04/2004
    • 15:10:03
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • A Controversial Issue

    Your essay appears to be well researched and you make some good points. Your case would have been more compelling had you raised important arguments against decriminalization and addressed them as fully as you could. For example, is the legalization of marijuana for medicinal purposes a first step to decriminalize the drug for recreational purposes? Is marijuana needed for medicinal purposes when more effective drugs are available for pain relief? Aren't there legal treatments for nausea, loss of appetite, and other medical conditions? Is marijuana an addictive drug that destroys brain cells and may lead people to more serious drug abuse? By rebutting as fully as you can these and other arguments of those who oppose decriminalization (such as me), your essay would appear more balanced and fair.
    • 10/04/2004
    • 14:50:46
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Excellent Essay on a Vital Document

    You've done an outstanding job in analyzing one of the most important documents in American history. I particularly liked the way you broke the Declaration into smaller parts and explained each as you went along. Anyone wishing to obtain a better understanding of this very important document would do well to begin with your full analysis, which completes what you started.
    • 10/04/2004
    • 14:05:57
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Killing Lennie

    While yours is not a bad essay, I disagree that George was justified in killing Lennie. Of course, Steinbeck's book "Of Mice and Men" is fiction and the ending could thus be rationalized as a good way to finish the novel. In real life, there is little justification for a civilian taking the life of another human being, short of self defense. In taking Lennie's life, George was playing God and nobody has a right to do that.
    • 10/04/2004
    • 13:43:35
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Ford Pinto Case

    This is one essay that badly needs the source cited. It's difficult for a reader to evaluate what you're saying without seeing the same information you saw, or at least a listing of your references. It would have also been helpful if you could have explained "Bonger's theoretical model" as it seems likely most readers are unfamiliar with it. If Ford knowingly placed profit above human lives, it's deplorable conduct and the company should be held fully accountable.
    • 10/04/2004
    • 13:33:58
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Good Essay on Being An American

    I agree that Americans possess patriotism, a strong work ethic, and a belief in freedom. More positive qualities could be added as well, but I would only like to mention one: charity. Americans are a very giving people. Americans are generous not only to the less fortunate at home, but also abroad. Whenever a natural disaster strikes anywhere in the world, Americans routinely lead the effort to help. I would thus say that a fourth key characteristic of Americans is a generosity of spirit.
    • 10/04/2004
    • 13:09:45
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • A Sociological Analysis of Vagrancy

    I can't agree that Marxist theory, even structural, is realistic. When put into practice in the former Soviet Union, where the theory is now largely discredited from experience as it is throughout Eastern Europe, Marx's theory didn't give hope to persons born into lower class families that they could rise and be part of the upper class, given hard work and determination. Rather the dreams for a better life were crushed for generations by tyrannical regimes until the people rose up and threw off the awful yoke of dictatorship, political and economic, which strangled them for decades. I can't think of any country in history which has adopted Marx's theories and prospered, until capitalism was accepted. Marxism can, however, transform a nation into vagrancy in the world community.
    • 10/04/2004
    • 12:54:22
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • US Objectives and the First World War

    The United States achieved its most important objective in World War I, which was the defeat of Germany and her allies. Had the US not entered the war, it would have lasted much longer and might even have resulted in a German victory. Germany gave up because it realized that with the vast resources of the US fully committed to the war, victory was hopeless. America's vengeful European allies were largely responsible for the war's tragic aftermath, which laid the foundation for an even more bloody war a generation later.
    • 10/04/2004
    • 12:36:49
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Teenage Pregnancy

    While you correctly point out that teenage pregnancy can in certain cases have a positive impact, there are at least as many anecdotes that can be told about its tragic consequences. Therefore, I especially found your discussion of prevention worthwhile. I am less sympathetic toward Joycelyn Elders who was fired as Surgeon General one week after she made her controversial remarks that may not have expressed "values contrary to the administration," which was the official excuse for her termination, but were contrary to the dictates of decorum.
    • 10/04/2004
    • 12:27:04
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • The Declaration of Independence

    You did fine on the first two parts ("The Preamble" and "A Declaration of Rights"), but I would have also liked to see the final two parts ("A Bill of Indictment" and "A Statement of Independence"), along with notes pertaining to the meaning of these last two passages.
    • 10/04/2004
    • 12:13:00
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • America the Free

    I agree that we should do a better job of honoring the spirit of holidays such as Memorial Day and Veteran's Day. Of course, the same could be said of just about any holiday. For example, people also enjoy Christmas but that doesn't necessarily make them un-Christian. Most Americans are rightly proud of their country and do respect those who have fought for freedom, even if they do enjoy a day off from work.
    • 10/04/2004
    • 10:21:14
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • The Great Depression

    You've written a very nice essay on the The Great Depression. For nations to impose tariffs in response to an economic downturn may seem reasonable but the consequences can be disastrous. One of the main causes of turning what might otherwise have been a slump into a full blown depression is thought to be the Smoot-Hawley Tariff Act of 1930 which raised duties on goods imported into the United States to historically high levels. The ill conceived law is still cited in Washington today as justification for free trade, which benefits the international economy much more than short-sighted protectionist measures.
    • 10/04/2004
    • 10:01:09
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Stereotypes

    Many people resort to stereotypes as a substitute to thinking. While it is true that thinking can require more effort, the use of stereotypes is lazy and unjust. Resisting the tendency to develop stereotypes requires that we break out of our comfort zone, but it is often a path to personal growth well worth undertaking.
    • 10/04/2004
    • 09:46:23
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Letter from King Henry VIII

    Sir Thomas More truly was "A Man For All Seasons" who was willing to sacrifice all, including the friendship of his beloved king, in order to be true to the principles he held dear. His simple reply to the king might have been, "As much as I pay homage to ye, my King, I regard the truth more, and thus am willing to forfeit my life in service to honor."
    • 10/04/2004
    • 09:09:46
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Let History Be the Final Judge

    The ideas of men such as Marx may sound appealing to some, but experience teaches us that the principles Marx espoused when put into practice led to some of the greatest misery mankind has endured. Men of his ilk would have found it ironic that tyranny and oppression abounded in societies which adopted Marx's teachings while equality of opportunity was far more likely to be found in capitalistic societies.
    • 10/04/2004
    • 08:56:30
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Good essay on fair sentencing

    Equal justice for all would seem to indicate that an elderly offender who is not incapacitated should be subject to the same sentencing guidelines as any other adult. One could even argue that the sentencing should be more stringent given that the elderly have had more years of experience and should therefore be held fully accountable for any crimes they commit.
    • 10/04/2004
    • 08:46:35
    • Score: 9 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Fantastic essay on resisting oppression

    The internees in the World War II concentration camps were heroes even if they didn't receive medals for their valiant efforts. It is hard for us to imagine the hopelessness which must have daily haunted the tragic internees. The despair couldn't have been better described than in a sign from Dante's "Inferno" proclaiming: "Leave aside all hope ye who enter here." The human spirit is so indomitable that many clung to hope anyway and we can all learn from their brave example.
    • 10/04/2004
    • 08:37:30
    • Score: 12 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • How do men and women communicate?

    Understanding the differences in the way men and women communicate is the beginning of establishing better dialogue between the sexes. Regardless of gender differences, the best communication is possible when a genuine interest is developed in another person. We all tend to become better communicators when we take a sincere interest in others who often want someone sympathetic to listen to them.
    • 10/04/2004
    • 08:20:38
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Friends

    It would be difficult to argue against the desirability of having friends. Most of us have friends, but we don't realize the quality of friendship until it is tested by adversity. True friends make themselves available when we need them. We cannot be certain someone is a true friend until asked to sacrifice on our behalf.
    • 10/04/2004
    • 08:04:13
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Erasing the Lines

    You've done a good job describing a medical procedure for catering to vanity. Injecting a toxin into one's skin so that wrinkles fade may seem crazy, until one realizes that people are willing to pay almost any price and bear unpleasant risks in the interests of recapturing their lost youth.
    • 10/04/2004
    • 07:54:59
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Amber Alert System

    If a child is abducted, it's primarily the abductor's fault who should be caught and punished. However expensive the amber alert system may be, it's less that the value of a child's life. Parents should do whatever they can to protect their children and so should society. The amber alert system which was put in place by society is one important safeguard to protect children.
    • 10/04/2004
    • 07:44:25
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Poignant essay on diversity

    Your description of your school experiences was touching. Permit me to finish your last sentence of the essay which ends with the words "realize that we" by adding "realize that we are all unique individuals with something special to contribute if others would accept our differences as members of the same race, the human race."
    • 10/04/2004
    • 07:25:30
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Comprehensive coverage of subject

    You've done a great job of thoroughly discussing motor development and children. I would suggest a list of works cited at the end of your well researched essay.
    • 09/04/2004
    • 23:50:54
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Well researched essay

    This was an excellent discussion of teenage pregnancy. Prevention programs are vital because of the devastating effects an unwanted pregnancy can have on the mother and infant. My only recommendation would be to add headings to the essay.
    • 09/04/2004
    • 15:05:50
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Interesting discussion of a controversial subject

    Performers such as Janet Jackson are encouraged to be controversial in order to promote CD sales. Publicity and media image are no less important in selling music than is its quality. Still, some decency standards are necessary, although there does seem to be a double standard.
    • 09/04/2004
    • 15:01:12
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Capital Punishment

    There is no agreement among experts as to the deterrent effect of capital punishment. A good justice system is based on the principle that it is better to let 100 go free than to send just one innocent person to prison. The principle is even more important when taking people's lives, even if they have been justly convicted.
    • 09/04/2004
    • 14:44:15
    • Score: 9 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Microsoft

    Some would find your analogy with sheep apropos as they have long concluded that Microsoft's wolf-like business practices are predatory. Microsoft is a great company with marvelous products, but that doesn't mean things couldn't be even better with more competition.
    • 09/04/2004
    • 14:31:43
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • The Beat Goes On

    The older generation has been complaining about the younger generation for centuries, yet most new generations seem to leave the world a better place than the one they inherited. I suppose the complaining won't soon change, as the world continues making progress despite those pesky upstarts. However, society tends to take the elderly for granted and forget the tremendous contributions made by prior generations, which is sad.
    • 09/04/2004
    • 14:25:38
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Powerful message

    Faith is a gift which, when we are lucky enough to have it, can be a powerful force for good in our lives. If more people believed in the power of faith, remarkable things could be accomplished and you have done a very good job illustrating two compelling examples.
    • 09/04/2004
    • 14:18:48
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Interesting take on a much discussed topic

    You make some very good points on communication between the sexes. Men and women could both benefit from a deeper understanding of the differences between the way they tend to communicate.
    • 09/04/2004
    • 14:12:23
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Benevolence

    Benevolence certainly can be a powerful force on lives. I would have liked to read more about what happened to the Masters and if things changed when one outlived the other.
    • 09/04/2004
    • 14:07:18
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Atomic Theory

    I would have liked to read more details about how atomic theory has changed over time.
    • 09/04/2004
    • 14:02:29
    • Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Wonderful example of the pitfalls of revenge

    I read Poe's story a long time ago in high school and had forgotten the details, but I still remember Poe's lesson on the emptiness of vindictiveness. We would all do well to remember that vengeance does not belong to us and is best left alone.
    • 09/04/2004
    • 13:58:25
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Good essay dealing with the tragedy of suicide

    The phenomenon called suicide by cop is all too common and tragic, especially when a young life is lost. We all need to be more acutely aware of the warning signs that someone may be contemplating suicide so that we can help make sure someone in need gets help.
    • 09/04/2004
    • 13:52:08
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • George

    I agree that 7 seems to be an approximate limit for remembering some types of information. Many believe it explains why telephone numbers are seven digits long.
    • 09/04/2004
    • 13:46:29
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Technology is dramatically changing bookselling

    A good beginning but I would have liked to read more about the changing nature of the bookselling business. Even though Barnes & Noble sells books online, they face a continuing threat from competitors such as Waldenbooks, especially after having teamed up with Amazon. Companies such as eBay also pose a strategic threat.
    • 09/04/2004
    • 13:42:01
    • Score: 9 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • A promising beginning

    Micaela Serra is to be congratulated for helping to bring innovation to her field. I would have enjoyed hearing more about her experiences as a woman in a male dominated area.
    • 09/04/2004
    • 13:33:03
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Music's Appeal is Unchanging

    One thing that's great about music is that it periodically undergoes a wave of change and is renewed. While we all have a tendency to prefer the music we grew up with, we shouldn't lose sight of the fact that for music to undergo a period of radical change is healthy and refreshing.
    • 09/04/2004
    • 13:28:35
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Important message about our environment

    We only have one ecosystem and life on this planet depends on it. The environment binds us together as members of a global community and you have done an excellent job reminding us of the importance of protecting it.
    • 09/04/2004
    • 13:20:25
    • Score: 12 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • Informative essay on education in Japan

    Your insights into Japan's educational system are illuminating. There's no doubt that Japan's educational model helped lift the nation from the devastation of World War II to become a leading economic power. I would agree that the rigidity of the system may have unfortunate social consequences.
    • 09/04/2004
    • 13:15:02
    • Score: 15 out of 16 people found this comment useful.
  • Great Information and Headings

    I would have liked to have seen a list of sources cited. The listing would have made a great essay even better.
    • 09/04/2004
    • 12:41:07
    • Score: 9 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Very good job of praising women's efforts

    Certainly one of the more important outcomes of World War II was the realization that women were excellent workers. The tremendous contributions women made on the homefront while men were away fighting shortened a terrible war. It is only fitting that women should have been rewarded for their efforts and it is unfortunate that it took so long.
    • 09/04/2004
    • 10:16:14
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Very nice math essay

    In a world in which calculators are perhaps relied on too heavily, it's nice to know that mathematical reasoning is still being taught. I don't believe calculators ever taught anyone to think.
    • 09/04/2004
    • 10:09:04
    • Score: 11 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • An important essay on women

    Women have long made invaluable contributions to society and have proven themselves every bit as intelligent as men. As barriers continue to come down, the important contributions women will be able to make in the future will surpass what they have done in the past, and everyone benefits.
    • 09/04/2004
    • 09:51:00
    • Score: 12 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • Good introduction to the topic

    Since you point out that new therapies may offer hope for the most seriously affected sufferers, it would have been helpful to specifically describe what those new treatments were and how successful they have been to date.
    • 09/04/2004
    • 09:42:44
    • Score: 9 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Complaining to the manager is not enough

    A call to McDonald's corporate headquarters in which your experience could have been professionally recounted might have been beneficial. Most corporations care about the image franchises convey to the public.
    • 09/04/2004
    • 09:33:29
    • Score: 24 out of 25 people found this comment useful.
  • Well thought out comparison essay

    I'm more concerned about man's tendency toward self destruction which isn't motivated by the pursuit of knowledge but rather by ignorance. If mankind does self destruct, it seems to me to be more likely the result of rejecting truths we know to be vital, such as the importance of tolerance, mutual respect, and understanding. We must not equate knowledge with wisdom, which is far more important.
    • 09/04/2004
    • 09:14:19
    • Score: 13 out of 13 people found this comment useful.
  • I would have preferred one comprehensive essay

    I thought your essay was good and rated it as such. However, after reading your other two essays on the same subject which you submitted in the past couple of days (called "To what Extent Is Shylock Responsible For His Downfall In The Play The Merchant Of Venice" and "'Shylock's Downfall": Is Shylock responsible for his downfall in Shakespeare's play The Merchant Of Venice?"), I feel the content of all three essays could have been combined into one thorough essay which would not have been overly long.
    • 09/04/2004
    • 08:48:04
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Similarity of Titles and Duplication of Content

    This is the third time in the past couple of days that I've read one of your essays on this subject (the first essay which I rated as good was titled "Shylock's Downfall". To what extent is Shylock responsible for his downfall in the play The Merchant Of Venice?) Not only might the similarity of the titles be confusing to some, but also the three essays may have been appropriately combined into one essay since the subject matter is similar.
    • 09/04/2004
    • 08:34:01
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Similarity of Titles

    This is the second time in the past couple of days that I've read one of your essays on this subject (the first essay which I rated as good was ""Shylock's Downfall". To what extent is Shylock responsible for his downfall in the play The Merchant Of Venice?" The similarity of the titles might be confusing to some. Specific titles geared to the differing content would have been better.
    • 09/04/2004
    • 08:25:42
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Thanks for your honesty

    Most people who do the same thing refuse to admit it, thereby wasting everybody's time. The administrators will view your comment and delete the duplicate submission which I will not rate. I rated your original essay as good.
    • 09/04/2004
    • 06:56:51
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Terrific job of researching teaching

    You are absolutely right when you observe that teachers devote their lives to helping others succeed. This can make teaching rewarding to those willing to put up with the sacrifices. Based on your essay, you seem to have the right attitude about the profession.
    • 08/04/2004
    • 21:16:26
    • Score: 9 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Great poetic analysis

    I agree that Owen titled his poem fittingly when he chose Horace's famous line "Dulce et decorum est pro patria mori" as he was outraged that British officials safe at home would encourage England's sons to die gloriously (often miserably) in their place. It is also ironic that Owen fell in battle just one week before the war ended
    • 08/04/2004
    • 13:45:57
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Great implementation ideas

    The systematic approach you specify would go far to increasing the chances of success for organizational change. The importance of educating the affected employees about the reasons for the change and encouraging their feedback can hardly be emphasized too much. Having employees involved early on and getting them to sign on to the changes can often determine the success or failure of the effort.
    • 08/04/2004
    • 13:28:55
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Creative addendum to the play

    You haven't gilded the lily. Rather, you have made me wonder if the immortal bard didn't end his play one scene too early.
    • 08/04/2004
    • 13:10:20
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Excellent concluding paragraph

    Fortunately, democratic societies realize the importance of an informed electorate so that enlightened choices are more likely to be made. World War II Germany is a painful example of a country in which burning books was thought beneficial. We would do well to remember the lessons of that era and cherish freedom.
    • 08/04/2004
    • 13:06:47
    • Score: 13 out of 13 people found this comment useful.
  • Comprehensive discussion of line and staff conflict

    Your conclusion seems well thought out. Sometimes staff officers have line responsibility in their own departments (such as finance and information systems) which can also lead to inner conflict within the individual, further complicating an already troublesome situation in the organization.
    • 08/04/2004
    • 12:55:30
    • Score: 11 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Excellent concluding quote

    Famed philosopher George Santayana would have agreed with Mr. Jones as he had said almost a hundred years ago that, "Those who forget the past are condemned to repeat it."
    • 08/04/2004
    • 12:36:30
    • Score: 13 out of 13 people found this comment useful.
  • We Need Teachers Such As You Describe

    You have summarized quite effectively that a good teacher should focus on those strategies most useful in helping students learn. Different people learn best in varying ways, which requires that teachers be sensitive to students' needs and be able to adapt their teaching style.
    • 08/04/2004
    • 12:26:10
    • Score: 20 out of 20 people found this comment useful.
  • Duplicate submission

    I just got through reading your first posting of this essay.
    • 08/04/2004
    • 12:12:35
    • Score: 9 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Duplicate submission

    This is another repeat essay from you.
    • 07/04/2004
    • 20:03:00
    • Score: 7 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Duplicate submission

    I just finished reading this same essay of yours.
    • 07/04/2004
    • 19:55:21
    • Score: 8 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Duplicate submission

    I just got through reading this same biography by you.
    • 07/04/2004
    • 16:41:09
    • Score: 11 out of 13 people found this comment useful.
  • Inferior title and duplicate text

    I thought the title of your previous essay was better and this essay duplicates its text.
    • 07/04/2004
    • 13:05:56
    • Score: 10 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Thorough Analysis of Browning's Poem

    The Duke refused to stoop to correct the Duchess on what he perceived to be her inadequacies. The Duke is addressing the Count's envoy, not the Count. Still, you've done a good job of describing the Duke's jealous possessiveness.
    • 06/04/2004
    • 22:47:43
    • Score: 12 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • Duplicate Submission

    I just got through reading this same thing.
    • 06/04/2004
    • 21:06:56
    • Score: 8 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Very creative and humorous

    Thomas Jefferson couldn't have done a better job drafting a 21st century Declaration of Independence from the tyrannical, ubiquitous pop-up.
    • 06/04/2004
    • 20:03:51
    • Score: 14 out of 14 people found this comment useful.
  • Creative Approach to a Dry Subject

    This is an interesting way to present a blend of scientific and historical information about a chemical element. It was short but to the point. I prefer this essay's title to the other title you were considering.
    • 06/04/2004
    • 16:14:26
    • Score: 12 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • Duplicate submission

    I just finished reading this same essay.
    • 06/04/2004
    • 14:14:54
    • Score: 9 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • Duplicate submission

    I just got through reading this same essay.
    • 06/04/2004
    • 10:42:51
    • Score: 10 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • Duplicate Submission

    I have seen this already.
    • 06/04/2004
    • 07:21:10
    • Score: 7 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Duplicate Submission

    I just read this repeat.
    • 06/04/2004
    • 01:33:26
    • Score: 9 out of 13 people found this comment useful.
  • Duplicate Submission

    I just got through reading this.
    • 05/04/2004
    • 21:40:36
    • Score: 8 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Duplicate Text

    I just read this, minus the bibliography.
    • 04/04/2004
    • 20:30:29
    • Score: 10 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Duplicate Submission

    I've seen this already
    • 02/04/2004
    • 05:24:17
    • Score: 8 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Duplicate Submission

    I just got through seeing this.
    • 31/03/2004
    • 21:44:05
    • Score: 7 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Duplicate Submission

    I just got through looking at this.
    • 31/03/2004
    • 20:31:06
    • Score: 10 out of 13 people found this comment useful.
  • Duplicate Submission

    I've read this before.
    • 31/03/2004
    • 19:39:59
    • Score: 8 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Duplicate submission

    I have already read this.
    • 31/03/2004
    • 13:08:39
    • Score: 11 out of 13 people found this comment useful.
  • Duplicate submission

    I've already read this.
    • 31/03/2004
    • 07:58:28
    • Score: 10 out of 15 people found this comment useful.
  • Duplicate submission

    I've already ready this.
    • 31/03/2004
    • 07:39:56
    • Score: 14 out of 19 people found this comment useful.
  • Comments You Asked For

    Properly spelling the essay's title is especially important. In an essay such as this, a bibliography would be especially helpful to readers who want to look further into the topic and fully explore the support behind your arguments.
    • 31/03/2004
    • 07:00:13
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  • Depreciation Expense vs. Accumulated Depreciation

    The difference between depreciation expense and accumulated depreciation is that depreciation expense is for a specified time period (e.g., one quarter or one year) whereas accumulated depreciation reflects how much depreciation expense has been recorded for all past periods. Furthermore, on the statement of cash flows (SCF), depreciation expense is not recorded to allocate loss in value over time. Depreciation expense is recorded because of the matching principle, which requires that expenses be reflected in the same period in which the related revenues are recorded. On the SCF (direct method) depreciation expense is not reflected at all in the main body of the statement (depreciation expense may appear as an adjustment in reconciling net income to net cash flow from operations in a supplementary schedule or in the footnotes to the financial statements). On the SCF (indirect method), depreciation expense is added to net income to arrive at net cash flow from operating activities. This adjustment is necessary because net income is determined based on the accrual method and net cash flow from operating activities is based on cash inflows and outflows from operations (net cash flow from operating activities is analogous to cash basis income).
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