Not even concise notes.This is just a list, people.
- 12/06/2005
- 05:39:57
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"Who wouldn't want the ability to transform their car into a jet-powered boat at the touch of a button?"Answer: Anyone who lives nowhere near water.Duh.
- 29/04/2005
- 05:36:03
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You know very little about the actual facts of your topic.Much misinformation.
- 20/04/2005
- 05:41:10
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second sentence "Drug use is the increasing problem among teenagers today." doesn't even make sense.
- 20/04/2005
- 05:22:57
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Grammar is atrocious.
- 30/03/2005
- 04:55:42
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but don't mix past and present. Be consistent.
- 30/03/2005
- 04:53:07
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Spell out an acronym at first reference!
- 25/03/2005
- 16:59:04
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"Pollution now is a very important problem"-- do you mean to imply that it wasn't a very important problem 5 years ago? 10 years ago? In some areas, hasn't the problem of pollution improved over time, such as auto emissions, disposal of hazardous waste, decline in use of ozone-destroying chemicals such as CFCs and so forth?Research: it's a good thing.
- 24/03/2005
- 19:02:24
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would go a long way toward credibility.This paper could have been written four years ago. Computer simulations, advancements in treatment of lab animals. . . has nothing changed since 2001?
- 24/03/2005
- 18:58:51
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The sky is falling! The sky is falling!Lots of hype, barely any useful information at all.
- 24/03/2005
- 18:54:27
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That could easily be more specific and add much needed focus to the essay.
- 24/03/2005
- 18:52:04
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Your agenda is clear. Your argument is weak.
- 24/03/2005
- 00:15:59
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that the themes of parental obligation and religion are discussed during the 2nd act.Since this is the introduction to your essay as well as the first sentence, more care should be takento ensure clarity.Torvald is strict about the breeding of his children?
- 24/03/2005
- 00:12:08
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Your title indicts all of Hollywood while the essay discusses only 2 films.
- 24/03/2005
- 00:04:22
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My question would be: Did you intend to prohibit praying or the utterance of God's name in our public schools or public gatherings?The answer: Yes. That was the intent.Uttering "god" may represent freedom for those who believe in a god-centered religion.Doesn't do much for non-believers or members of other faiths.
- 23/03/2005
- 01:12:33
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why?
- 22/03/2005
- 02:26:47
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Auschwitz is still recognized for hatred and death.
- 21/03/2005
- 19:30:51
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"violent and racist hatred of whites towards black people" Doesn't make sense.
- 21/03/2005
- 19:20:46
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!!!
- 21/03/2005
- 19:18:01
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You obviously are unaware of laws currently in place. You know nothing about firearms and self defense, and your 4th paragraph contradicts your thesis entirely.
- 21/03/2005
- 19:07:36
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interesting analysis, though.(yeah, basically repeating the other comment)
- 21/03/2005
- 18:54:44
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...is probably a good paper.Get rid of the outline, the methodology, the outdated sources and other irrelevant commentary and you might just have something here.
- 21/03/2005
- 18:47:46
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The Terminator -- 1984Terminator 2: Judgment Day -- 1991(Also, Terminator 3: Rise of the Machines -- 2003)
- 21/03/2005
- 18:40:43
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. . .
- 21/03/2005
- 18:13:31
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Your second sentence states "as I said" but you did not say *anything* yet, and more of nothing is said throughout.And even if something worthwhile was said, there is never a need to say "as I said" because, as you said, you already SAID IT.
- 21/03/2005
- 04:10:27
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Super crummy introduction: "In this novel called Wuthering Heights written by Emily Bronte there is a character named Heathcliff." Gah.The character Heathcliff in Emily Bronte's _Wuthering Heights_ is viewed as a victim because_______ <--and no, "childhood, etc." is not acceptable.
- 21/03/2005
- 04:01:04
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Hint: A study published 5 years ago is not recent.
- 21/03/2005
- 03:49:15
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How about an INTRODUCTION and a THESIS STATEMENT? Or, are we just supposed to GUESS wtf you are writing about? Oh, and please, could you make the title more vague? Thanks.
- 21/03/2005
- 03:45:05
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http://www.123helpme.com/view.asp?id=9752
- 20/03/2005
- 22:55:29
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An insightful analysis.
- 20/03/2005
- 22:46:55
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You seem to miss the entire point of the novel.
- 20/03/2005
- 22:41:59
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sloppier?
- 20/03/2005
- 07:29:55
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"believing" in the first paragraph but it gets better after that.Would be much stronger if "I believe" was removed completely.
- 20/03/2005
- 07:24:15
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Why so many outdated sources?Otherwise, a decent essay.
- 20/03/2005
- 07:07:28
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Garbage.
- 20/03/2005
- 06:52:30
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There's like, a whole paragraph or more missing, So it doesn't make any sense.Second paragraph starts: "In the case presented" -- but there is no case presented.
- 20/03/2005
- 06:46:05
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I don't See where it says that notes are an acceptable substitutefor actually writing something coherent.
- 20/03/2005
- 06:38:18
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But it lacks an overall organizational structure or purpose and instead drones on endlessly. Points are listed one after another after another after another after another with zero analysis.
- 20/03/2005
- 06:20:43
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Although very similar to your other essay on the same topic, you seem to contradict yourself.
- 19/03/2005
- 18:58:31
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Or were you born knowing all this?
- 19/03/2005
- 18:53:04
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Very tedious reading.Also:"The growth of the economy and stock market increased the job opportunities as well as morals"The word you are looking for is *morale* -- morals makes no sense in that sentence.
- 19/03/2005
- 18:51:31
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Suspiciously well written.
- 19/03/2005
- 18:41:17
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Annoying contrivance.
- 19/03/2005
- 18:19:39
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Obviously the stuff from Freud will be old. No excuse for the others. Do you think no research has been done since 1995 -- or is that when this paper was actually written (by someone other than yourself)?
- 19/03/2005
- 18:15:41
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Way too many questions! Answer them-don't ask them!Spell out acronyms on first reference. FDI, PVD, MNE etc.
- 19/03/2005
- 18:09:13
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Too much repetition for a short, lousy 5 paragraph essay."A great female writer of the time, Abigail Adams, wife of John Adams... ""woman by the name of Abigail Adams, husband [sic] of our second President, John Adams"
- 19/03/2005
- 18:02:48
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Ideas are repeated instead of developed.Awkward.
- 19/03/2005
- 07:13:53
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One would think the writer has no thoughts of his or her own.
- 19/03/2005
- 07:05:18
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this story is crap and has no point.
- 19/03/2005
- 06:52:59
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. . .needs more development.
- 18/03/2005
- 22:05:37
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"Since 1789, over 10,000 amendments to the Constitution have been proposed in Congress. Of those, only 33 were sent to the states for ratification, and only 27 were ultimately ratified."Source: http://www.c-span.org/questions/weekly54.asp
- 18/03/2005
- 21:04:19
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1. virtualvin.com no longer exists2. Much of the research above relies on sources from the mid 1990s3. eCommerce is no longer new, therefore this statement: "The advent of the Internet and electronic commerce (e-commerce) provide interesting new choices to industries and businesses. . ." is ridiculous.
- 18/03/2005
- 20:56:42
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It's frightening when the cheathouse cheaterz can't distinguish proper grammar from bad grammar.Hint: Formatting is not grammar.
- 18/03/2005
- 20:40:34
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Think about it.
- 18/03/2005
- 20:27:59
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Interesting historical analysis of studies that took place in 1964, but please indicate the relevance to current research methods.
- 18/03/2005
- 20:20:50
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"We now know and understand the power of knowledge and science in our lives."So, that's it, then?Just because technology makes YOU lazy, don't assume that is true for everyone!
- 18/03/2005
- 20:17:10
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As the father of scientific management which focus on improving work methods, tools and performance standard, Frederick Winslow Taylor believes that the employees should be motivated by obtains highest possible wages through working in most efficient/ productive way or the incentives will motivate employees to be more effectively.????Also: To get the best of the staff, we need to understand our staff, most of them do not need economical incentives to make them motivate to work, and they just need to know that the manager is happy with the performance of the staff.Ya think?
- 18/03/2005
- 20:14:32
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!!!!
- 18/03/2005
- 20:09:51
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What, exactly, is the point here?By the way, it's called "groupthink" and it's *not*a good thing: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Groupthink
- 18/03/2005
- 20:02:36
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Why not title this ignorant little rant "Eminem's Music and Children"?And why would responsible adults not monitor what their precious children listen to?Blah.
- 18/03/2005
- 19:54:29
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You said: ". . the government deserves better."What about the people????
- 18/03/2005
- 19:50:56
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You say: There is no difference between the violence on the television or in real life.Try reality, it's a good thing. In reality, it is clear that the difference between violence in real life and violience on television is that violence on television is NOT REAL. Pretty big difference, eh?
- 18/03/2005
- 19:38:43
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Overly simplistic and lacking logic.
- 18/03/2005
- 19:32:52
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. . . that there has to be actual EVIDENCE of research.Yet, magically, there are NO SOURCES in this essay. Information is cited, but it comes from nowhere???Plagiarised essay on a plagiarism website. Imagine that.
- 18/03/2005
- 19:15:59
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This sentence has no meaning:A story, Generation X, people who were born in the late sixties/early seventies, represent much of the attitudes towards the world today.WTF???
- 18/03/2005
- 19:13:54
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Single sources are relied upon to support author's viewpoint suggesting that sources with opposing viewpoints were ignored. Lack of bibliography is troubling. Are sources recent?Proofreading is needed. Errors in the title are unacceptable.
- 18/03/2005
- 19:06:26
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. . .that this is your original work.
- 18/03/2005
- 19:02:00
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Another form of symbolism, another form of symbolism, another form of symbolism YAWN.
- 08/10/2004
- 03:09:46
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your example "while researching on [sic] sex education..." is not cited. Sounds like you made it up.
- 08/10/2004
- 03:05:22
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'nuff said
- 08/10/2004
- 02:55:03
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Your idea is a good one to begin with, but then it kind of goes nowhere. Bible, no need to save that--anyone who's interested already knows it well enough to tell anyone else who cares. History is very subjective--you would need to select a specific history book and then defend your selection. A history of the south and a history of the north in the US alone would be two completely different books. And if you feel the US government is untruthful, well, have you experienced any other governments that are better??Finally, the only "real" book you mention you don't even bother to capitalize the title. Seems like you probably need to read more.
- 03/04/2004
- 03:23:09
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"Due to the numourous sources I do not have a bibliography."Do you realize that the above reason is precisely why you should have a bibliography?Stupid stupid stupid.Idiotic.
- 10/03/2004
- 03:18:14
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The appeals process is far and away more costly than life imprisonment.There is no reliable evidence that the death penalty is a deterrent.Next time do some homework and collect a fact or two.
- 21/02/2004
- 05:53:11
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All this crap about learning styles and not one word explaining what they are. Here's a hint-learning styles: not rocket science and nowhere near the level of importance indicated in this overblown essay.
- 21/02/2004
- 05:46:00
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Guess what--evil is not necessary for good to occur.Your teacher who liked this must be an idiot.
- 20/02/2004
- 03:21:32
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You've demonstrated that you write poorly and can barely express the hate and ignorance that blinds your ability to approach this topic maturely.
- 06/02/2004
- 00:59:50
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You write: "Almost everyone follows the American styles of clothing. We also all, for the most part, eat all of the same foods and behave in the same ways."This is true on television. Hint: "The OC" is not the real world. We don't all eat the same foods. What is "American styles of clothing"?????
- 06/02/2004
- 00:52:38
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"The SUV phenomenon says a lot about American culture especially when we notice other countries haven't fallen prey to their charms." Well, I'm not sure what countries you've "noticed" but you may want to take another look. Be sure to look at only the highest income levels. Imagine what you'll find...
- 30/01/2004
- 05:15:40
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And that's why there's no teen violence in Japan. No teens there ever play violent video games.
- 24/01/2004
- 22:00:08
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for one thing, proofread.for another thing, persuasive essays should appeal to logic, not emotion. Since that is fact, it renders the rest of your "argument" irrelevant, doesn't it?As for 30 year old skateboarders, the name Tony Hawk comes to mind.
- 24/01/2004
- 21:48:38
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I don't want a doctor who does not excel at math and English.
- 13/01/2004
- 19:34:48
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Probably you need a blog.
- 13/01/2004
- 06:06:55
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The answser is plain and clear. Stop writing about this topic. Everyone! It's boring, there's nothing new, your teachers don't want to read it and the world will not be a better place for your having written it.
- 11/01/2004
- 00:26:30
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The best essay I've read on this site so far. In fact, a great essay in general. Very informative, very helpful. Should be required reading for anyone who searches the web. So much useful info.Great work.I'd give this an A.Only small, small, change: first paragraph change proportion to either portion or percent.
- 11/01/2004
- 00:22:51
- Score: 11 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
Why is "apathy" in quotes throughout? Apathy is apathy. Nothing ironic or foriegn about the usage of this word in your essay.Also, isn't it obvious why voter turnout is higher in presidential election years? The interesting part of this essay, if true, is the decline in voter turnout--focus the whole essay on that and you'll have a winner.
- 11/01/2004
- 00:13:18
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The author raises many important points about the responsibility of dog ownership. I wish there would have been more of an emphasis on the joys of rescuing a shelter dog, but that's just my own point of view. This essay is solid.
- 07/01/2004
- 03:44:44
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Not bad at all. One huge suggestion: make this essay gender neutral. There is such a thing as a female hero or heroine (not heroin) but to read this essay one would think that to be a hero a character must be male. Yikes. Otherwise, I really liked this.
- 31/12/2003
- 08:46:09
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
Although the protagonists downfall is predictable, there is a nice twist at the end. This writer has talent and style. Just add better proofreading! Oh, and tense agreement and stuff like that. But mostly plain old proofreading. Keep up the good work!
- 31/12/2003
- 08:37:49
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
Well developed (for a summary). Am not impressed, however, by use Greenhaven Press Opposing Viewpoints as a source. This series is basically a secondary source that oversimplifies issues by gathering information from primary sources and dumbing it down. Use Opposing Viewpoints only for their bibliographies then go to the original sources. You\'l feel smarter for doing so.
- 31/12/2003
- 08:20:08
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Lacks logic. Because the media arrives after a crime takes place the media is responsible for the crime. That's like saying cardiologists are responsible for heart attacks. Absurd. And what about some real examples?
- 31/12/2003
- 08:10:49
- Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.