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  • Seems like an essay submitted purely for points...

    i wasn't impressed by this at all... and i'm sure you just typed this and prayed it would be accepted. there is no way that the wording "And it's wonder why" would be accepted by any competent teacher, and obvious quick typing errors like "screammed" and "srared"... and while we're there.... what the **** does "Imidiant' mean?In answer to your question - should you update? I think not. And if you really are serious about this, um, "work"... maybe you should have the decency to spell check it before you submit it.
    • 11/08/2005
    • 13:11:09
    • Score: 15 out of 18 people found this comment useful.
  • Re: McSheep's comment

    I found this essay thoroughly interesting - I wonder how the hired help's children were looked after - did they even have children? i doubt a nanny would have had children whilst looking after the children of a wealthy victorian upper class family. but what if afterwards she decided to have a family of her own - would she raise her children differently from those of the 'ordinary' peasant class?
    • 17/03/2005
    • 12:10:13
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Great essay!!!!

    One of the best written creative pieces I have read for a long time. Apart from a couple of minor mistakes ("proceeds to pouring himself" instead of "proceeds to pour himself"), the only other comment I would make is the use of tense... when I read the sentence... "My parachute did not open" I wondered, wouldn't this essay be better off written in the present tense... ie. "My parachute doesn't open?" What do you think? Maybe you could submit a revised version... would be interesting to see how the tone of the story changes. Otherwise, a great story. I thoroughly enjoyed it!
    • 12/10/2004
    • 01:01:40
    • Score: 9 out of 14 people found this comment useful.
  • Dankie!

    Dit was so lekker om jou essay te lees. Ek het vir jou a smilie gegee. Asb kom en kyk vir my twee Afrikans essays. Baie goed!
    • 14/09/2004
    • 03:46:01
    • Score: 3 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Very touching...

    This speech was written extremely well. It flowed, like a speech should - contains all the right elements. Although this is a very personal piece of writing, I think you can help others if they need to write a milestone speech for a family member. Well done.
    • 14/09/2004
    • 02:18:13
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Hot topic.

    Gay & Lesbian marriage is a hot topic at the moment it seems. That's all good and well, but if only it were made legal. I can't believe that in the 21st century a woman can't marry who she loves or a man for that matter! who cares what sex you love, it's not your business - love is love!
    • 13/09/2004
    • 14:27:29
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Re: ivzivkovic

    I agree with your comment. I hope to see more essays like this in the future... hopefully it can shed some light.
    • 13/09/2004
    • 14:25:44
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Questionable...

    I wonder if you wrote this with English as your 2nd language? I don't mean to be rude, but when you wrote "Too persuasive people that same sex marriages should be legal. I mean love is love " did you actually mean to say 'to persuade people that same sex marriage should be legal...'?
    • 13/09/2004
    • 14:24:25
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Great essay.

    Although I can definately tell that this essay was written by a heterosexual, this is nonetheless a good essay with some great points. Well done.
    • 13/09/2004
    • 14:20:08
    • Score: 2 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Very interesting.

    I just wrote an essay (before seeing this) comparing American, British, Australian, Near-Eastern, Far-Eastern television programmes, soap operas, sitcoms, television dramas, feature films etc. *nods* quite a big task, you can imagine!!! Anyway, I stumbled on your essay and I must say, you have quite a few of the same facts that I did & I just wanted to say that I found your essay very interesting, considering!
    • 13/09/2004
    • 11:22:19
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Lovely!

    A superb essay, written with such confidence. I really envy your writing style, it flows so nicely. The only I, personally, would change is the exceptionally long paragraphs - just breaking them up a little would make your ideas more separate. Otherwise, I have nothing but good things to say about your work. Fantastic - a pat on the back for you!!!
    • 13/09/2004
    • 11:13:50
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Wow!!!

    I recently handed in an essay on Intertextuality in Baz Luhrman's movies, and therefore watched "Romeo + Juliet" not too long ago. I think you did a wonderful in your analysis - I agree, despite the fact that I am a film student, nothing can beat reading Shakespeare or watching it in a traditional theatre. Every year in Cape Town we have the Maynardville Shakespeare which is an outdoor production - it's fantastic. Nothing better than watching Romeo and Juliet under the stars!
    • 13/09/2004
    • 11:11:51
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Only good things...

    When I saw your three essay topics I got quite excited. It took me back to my days at University when I was studying English literature as a major (I am now studying film)... Tennessee William's play "A Streetcar Named Desire" is one of my favourite works. Your essay is of such a high quality, it deserves a much higher mark that 85% (in my opinion) but I know how high the standards are at a 3rd year level. Congratulations, I look forward to reading your other two!
    • 13/09/2004
    • 11:08:21
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Please note...

    This is not an essay, this is a script treatment, which is the second phase of script writing after the concept. It is meant to be brief, and written in the present tense, (this is the strict formula in script writing), so please take this into consideration when judging my work. Thank you.
    • 13/09/2004
    • 06:08:20
    • Score: 1 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Hehehe....

    when I saw the title, i thought this was either going to be about MacDonald's or vegetarians :P
    • 13/09/2004
    • 05:56:36
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Graf Art

    I made a graf calendar in high school. I went around taking photos of graf with my digicam and then along came the government and painted over all the pieces! At least I have pictures to remember the beautiful work. What a shame. There's graf and there's scrawl. You have to learn to tell the difference.
    • 13/09/2004
    • 05:49:27
    • Score: 3 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Sex and the City

    I really enjoyed reading your essay. What a pity we won't be seeing any new episodes or series of this fantastic show. Oh well, I guess we can catch the repeats!
    • 13/09/2004
    • 05:47:22
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Maths is fun!

    wow... this is incredible! you must have felt really satisfied after writing this, and finding the solution to your problem so easily! well done!
    • 13/09/2004
    • 05:25:20
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Oops!

    Yes, I'm sorry, that is most definately a spelling mistake! Thank you for your lovely comment.
    • 13/09/2004
    • 05:22:50
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Starbucks

    Reading your essay made me wish we had a Starbucks in this country (South Africa)... I feel so deprived!!!
    • 13/09/2004
    • 02:22:43
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Where are your references???

    I know for a fact that this is an analysis of the short story "Miss Brill" by Katherine Mansfield - but without saying this, how is the uninformed reader supposed to know?
    • 13/09/2004
    • 01:35:30
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Interesting essay.

    Pity about the typo in the heading, but otherwise a great essay - structured nicely with good information.
    • 13/09/2004
    • 01:29:39
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Great essay

    Simple, and well written. Nice structure, with good intro & conclusion. Goood work.
    • 12/09/2004
    • 16:09:32
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Gay marriage

    "rather than really be serious about them" do you really believe that gay people aren't serious about having the same legal status as straight people. i get so angry when i see such bigotted essays like this - it's not like you know what it's like... love is love... i want to marry one day, and i will damn well find a way - i'm serious, and so is every other gay person out there... you don't think it'll happen? watch us!!! we're here, we're queer, get used to it...
    • 12/09/2004
    • 16:05:50
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Beautiful work....

    You really have a way with words. I thoroughly enjoyed reading your poem. A very talented writer, I could really relate to the emotions in this poem. Really powerful, and I'm not just saying that. I look forward to reading more of your creative work.
    • 12/09/2004
    • 16:00:56
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Writing?

    Didn't your teacher teach you how to structure a sentence properly? Where's the verb in the sentence "Not much music, action music or sad"? among many other things, this essay is more like jotted down notes - 94%? u must be joking... i would fail this paper, despite it's information purely on it's poor style.
    • 12/09/2004
    • 15:56:47
    • Score: 7 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Really great!

    I really enjoyed your essay, I like your own personal writing style, and I think you have a wicked sense of humour!
    • 10/09/2004
    • 05:39:23
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Well done!

    I know a lot about Wicca, and practised the religion for many years. Congratulations on a thoroughly researched essay that shows us Witches in a good light!
    • 10/09/2004
    • 05:37:25
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Great essay.

    I have lots of Catholic friends, and had a long discussion with them about this essay. They all had differing opinions, but the general consensus was that they agreed with what has been written.
    • 10/09/2004
    • 05:36:06
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Interesting essay.

    I'm not sure about the title, but otherwise a thought-provoking piece of work.
    • 10/09/2004
    • 05:34:28
    • Score: 1 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Go and see "Super Size Me"

    This documentary on McDonald's should have a lot of you Americans thinking about the crap you guys eat.
    • 10/09/2004
    • 02:49:00
    • Score: 4 out of 17 people found this comment useful.
  • This is not an essay...

    Despite the good message, this was a very bad example of an essay. The quality is shocking! I highly doubt that this essay got 90%
    • 09/09/2004
    • 16:47:05
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • What is your problem, guys?

    There is nothing wrong with this essay - the only thing that could be changed is the sentence "A person should also note that ultra-violet rays can pass through many types of clothing and thus take many precautions against them." replacing the word 'can' with the word 'could' because of the use of the word 'should' (I hope that made sense)... the only other thing, is that there should have been a comma before the word 'which' in the sentence "A person should also put on sunscreen which is SPF 15..."
    • 09/09/2004
    • 16:38:00
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • What a beautiful essay.... from a friend :)

    I hope you will come back and check your comments, and if you do, please I'd like you to know how much your essay touched me. I came out to my parents last December (2003), because God had sent me a beautiful girl to love, and who loves me back. I hope you have found someone the way I have. I hope you are as proud to be a lesbian. There is no shame in loving your own sex.
    • 09/09/2004
    • 16:31:59
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • What the ........??????

    Dude, you have some serious issues wanting to have anal sex with your mom & sister? This is not an essay - this is trash. I don't know how it got on cheathouse.com in the first place, and in my opinion, if you want your 'work' to be read, put it on www.sickosexfreaks.com
    • 09/09/2004
    • 13:08:12
    • Score: 9 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Great essay!

    Don't understand the rating, but I guess it's people scared of Cheathouse admit for voting differently. This is a great essay, and deserves a great rating.
    • 09/09/2004
    • 12:03:23
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Read these essays!

    I've said it before and I'll say it again - don't rate just because you've seen others rate poor. This is a great essay, and deserves a good rating!
    • 09/09/2004
    • 12:02:38
    • Score: 1 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Is anyone actually reading these essays?

    This essay does not deserve such a low rating. Whoever has written this must understand that people are scared to rate differently for fear that they will be disqualified from Cheathouse for some reason. Guys! Read the essays! This one is great!
    • 09/09/2004
    • 12:01:55
    • Score: 0 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Great essay - very useful!

    I'm surprised this essay hasn't had more hits, since this is a very topical issue. To pierce/tattoo or not to pierce/tattoo. I know I've been debating for years, and I still won't get one!
    • 09/09/2004
    • 12:01:03
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Great essay!

    A family member is deaf, so it was useful to read this information. Thank you!
    • 09/09/2004
    • 11:44:13
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Hungry for points?

    hmm... not one of your best pieces of work, but ok - i'll admit i did read it through to the end. perhaps you could have, like larrylove said, used the phrase 'the pain' slightly less? it became a little tedious after a while...
    • 09/09/2004
    • 11:42:11
    • Score: 5 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Very interesting!

    After reading your essay, I was so interested that I went and found a copy of the poem. Good work, you really analysed it well.
    • 09/09/2004
    • 11:40:22
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Pity there's no bibliography......

    ......would have finished off your essay very nicely. Otherwise, good work!
    • 09/09/2004
    • 11:39:24
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Teen pregnancy

    This essay still needs a lot of work. Apart from the lack of structure (paragraphs etc. that final_fantasy mention), there are numerous grammatical & spelling errors. On the whole, an average essay - I wonder what grade this was written in.
    • 09/09/2004
    • 11:37:46
    • Score: 3 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Yay!

    Finally, an original essay that I have enjoyed reading! I totally agree with you. I believe everyone should go that extra mile. Communication is life!
    • 09/09/2004
    • 11:29:31
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Very interesting!

    I really enjoyed reading your essay - it's amazing how the media can be so influential, despite the fact that what is said is biased and often contains lies/bent truths.
    • 09/09/2004
    • 11:27:49
    • Score: 0 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Feel good essay!

    Made me feel refreshed, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your essay - I liked your own personal touch.
    • 09/09/2004
    • 11:23:55
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Spelling errors...

    This essay needs to be seriously proofread before it can be understood by anyone!
    • 09/09/2004
    • 11:22:49
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Great essay!

    Original writing, which was thoroughly researched, considering the extensive bibliography! Keep it up!
    • 09/09/2004
    • 11:20:16
    • Score: 0 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Nice conclusion.....

    I really enjoyed reading your essay, and you rounded it off very well at the end. Good submission!
    • 09/09/2004
    • 11:19:19
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Great essay!

    Fascinating topic, with great bibliography. Thanks for a super read!
    • 09/09/2004
    • 11:18:08
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • I really didn't like reading this...

    As a homosexual, I did not like the way you refered to all homosexuals as being 'the gays'.... it's like saying "Look Martha, the gays are having one of them parades again..." We're not so different from you 'straights'... bet you don't like being call that, do ya?
    • 09/09/2004
    • 11:12:03
    • Score: 4 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Great essay!

    Well researched - I really enjoyed reading your essay, maybe if you still have to submit this you could rethink your paragraph structure? Otherwise, great content.
    • 05/09/2004
    • 16:16:39
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Lacks originality.

    Although a dull, factual topic, could have been a little more creative. Otherwise, facts were good.
    • 05/09/2004
    • 08:46:02
    • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Pity it's not in English!

    I really wanted this to be in English - anyone care to write an essay on this topic?
    • 05/09/2004
    • 08:40:49
    • Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Thoughtful topic.

    This really makes me feel grateful for where I live - although South Africa is densely populated, it's not at all like this except for in the townships & informal settlements.
    • 30/08/2004
    • 11:50:09
    • Score: 11 out of 17 people found this comment useful.
  • What is this supposed to be?

    If we wanted to read a book we'd buy it - don't submit stuff to cheathouse that isn't yours - come on guys!
    • 30/08/2004
    • 05:56:08
    • Score: 4 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Very good essay.

    Well structured, informative, well-researched, and great bibliography - what more could one ask for? Well done, keep up the good work. I reckon it deserved the 97%.
    • 30/08/2004
    • 02:23:56
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Creative essay!

    I miss those days when you could pretend to be an inanimate object or another creature. Took me back - a trip down memory lane. Fabulous essay, thoroughly enjoyed reading it.
    • 29/08/2004
    • 15:27:42
    • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Hehehe... you guys wish

    If the Christian's triumphed over Paganism, then why does it still thrive? Remember, those wooden carvings in your churches are actually depictions of the Pagan gods - Pan, Diana etc.
    • 29/08/2004
    • 15:26:23
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Unbelievable.

    You have copied and pasted directly from a cheathouse user - this is blatant plagiarism, and I cannot understand why this hasn't been noticed by admin or any other user for that matter. Just take a look at the dates of submission - sunny70541 submitted the essay 'AIDS AND YOU' on June 12, 2002.
    • 29/08/2004
    • 15:24:28
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Duplicate submission detected.

    I take it you're the original author of this essay - better check out "Aids and you" submitted by cheathouse.com user, leewhitbread on February 23, 2004 and take this up with them personally.
    • 29/08/2004
    • 15:23:15
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • AIDS is -not- just a gay man's disease......

    "Homosexual men spread the disease to others through unprotected anal sex." Come on - we all know this happens, but the misconception that gay men are one of the main problems is totally irrational. AIDS is primarily a straight disease. Use a condom guys!
    • 29/08/2004
    • 15:20:51
    • Score: 8 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Useful information about such a terrible disease.

    Coming from South Africa, I know all about these problems - the fact that 1 in 5 people here have AIDS is enough to scare you off sex for life! Be careful, use a condom guys!
    • 29/08/2004
    • 15:19:13
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Air pollution

    It's scary how the ozone layer is disappearing. Every day, I wake up and I see more and more pollution along the horizon, which is scary because I live next to the sea, so there's this brown muck just hanging there.
    • 29/08/2004
    • 15:13:46
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Very touching....

    This must have been hard to write. This reminds me of something very scary and close to me in my past. Thanks for sharing such a difficult piece of work with us.
    • 29/08/2004
    • 13:02:05
    • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Great poem :)

    I like the lyrical feeling that this poem gives off - it's one of those feel good poems that makes you wanna just run outside or something...
    • 29/08/2004
    • 09:05:10
    • Score: 4 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Lacks structure.

    No real structure - lacks introduction and conclusion, although some extremely useful and high quality infomation in this piece.
    • 29/08/2004
    • 06:57:34
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • More info here......

    http://www.e-hawaii.com/stars/index/barry_bonds/default.htm
    • 29/08/2004
    • 06:55:55
    • Score: 5 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • What an interesting topic!

    I thoroughly enjoyed reading your essay. I found it absolutely fascinating, well done! I hope this gets good ratings, because it deserves it!
    • 29/08/2004
    • 06:54:28
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Watch out!

    I'm surprised this isn't plagiarised as well, although I did spend a lot of time looking. We have our eyes on you!
    • 29/08/2004
    • 06:52:06
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • What a beautiful essay.....

    I couldn't have written this better myself. Top marks and my hat goes off to you. I have thoroughly enjoyed reading all your essays, and I hope you'll enjoy mine too!
    • 29/08/2004
    • 06:43:21
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Deep & profound.......

    Really excellent quality of work for 13th grade... I think this essay deserves way more than 57% - I'd give it at least 82%!
    • 29/08/2004
    • 06:42:09
    • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Something I've noted........

    For once, I can actually read an essay and tell who wrote it - it's not just copied off something and pasted into cheathouse for points. sileas, you have your own original writing style - keep it up!
    • 29/08/2004
    • 06:40:26
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Jane Austen fan too!

    A lovely essay, interesting contrasts and comparisons.
    • 29/08/2004
    • 06:38:37
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Re: kangaroo's comment

    hehe... glad I'm not the only one to think this (re. references) I think everyone should read the article on cheathouse.com on citing & it's importance. however, the essay does state it was written 4 years ago, so there's not really much one can say about it being outdated - it wasn't outdated when it was written, and all our essays are going to be outdated in 4 years time - this actually gives us some kind of reference, which is a good thing.
    • 29/08/2004
    • 06:37:13
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Another great essay....

    ...yet there is no bibliography, which I'm sure there was when it was written/handed in.
    • 29/08/2004
    • 06:34:17
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Only one thing to add...

    I know I'm always going on about this, but it really is so important to include your sources at the end of your essays guys!
    • 29/08/2004
    • 06:33:26
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Hmmmm........

    Not sure if I should be commenting on the comments and not the essay, but since I have read everything I'd like to put in my 2 cents. I don't think johnjip should talk when he says 'authors should not comment on their own essays' since that's pretty much the only thing he does! You just have to look at his 3 essays to see that the majority of the comments are his own *sigh* wish I could make this comment anonymous, I don't want to start any fights again.
    • 29/08/2004
    • 06:31:28
    • Score: 6 out of 15 people found this comment useful.
  • Nabokov fan here!

    What a surprise to find an essay on this poem! One of my favourites from my first year at University, a trip down memory lane!
    • 29/08/2004
    • 06:29:27
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Another beautifully crafted piece of work...

    What a pity about all the "<Tab/&gt" everywhere. I like the way you ended off with a meaningful quote from the novel. You have a great talent with words!
    • 29/08/2004
    • 06:28:03
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Leviathon

    A very well structured essay, with lovely use of quotes. I wonder though, if you may have used other sources which are not cited below your essay? Otherwise, a really riveting read and highly informative.
    • 29/08/2004
    • 06:26:11
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Hmmm...

    This does not seem to be complete at all. Where is the rest? Or else, where did you get this from?
    • 29/08/2004
    • 06:21:35
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Plagiarised religious stuff.

    Copying from your Sunday school teacher's textbook now? "The Lord Knoweth Everything"
    • 28/08/2004
    • 05:24:23
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Ugh

    Looks like this was copied off your teacher's grade 2 notes. Pathetic. I don't even have the energy to comment on this.
    • 28/08/2004
    • 05:22:07
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Progressive Era

    I do not know much about this history, but as far as I could read it seemed like some of the points made were unjustified, despite the thorough referencing.
    • 28/08/2004
    • 05:20:36
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • George Washington

    I'm so sick of writing about your plagiarism. Hopefully I will soon be able to find more essays like this which are well-written and have thorough bibliographies. Don't forget, when you quote you have to reference page numbers.
    • 28/08/2004
    • 05:18:48
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • I know exactly what you're doing.......

    Stop handing in friend's work, and passing it off as your own. We all know that this is often done - no wonder you have totally different essays about the exact same topic.
    • 28/08/2004
    • 05:15:10
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • As I said before.....

    Stop handing in friend's work, and passing it off as your own. We all know that this is often done - no wonder you have totally different essays about the exact same topic. It's really pathetic!
    • 28/08/2004
    • 05:15:07
    • Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • I agree with courlove7's comment.......

    Do you really expect us to believe that you handed this in?
    • 28/08/2004
    • 05:13:27
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • It's sickening.......

    This is disgraceful. Cheathouse is nothing the way it used to be 2 years ago. *sigh* I guess everything loses it's edge after a while.
    • 28/08/2004
    • 05:11:54
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Thanks again for the references.

    Good job on including your sources, but other than that the paper is relatively average.
    • 28/08/2004
    • 05:08:15
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • More references.....

    Is this the face for things to come...... I hope so. As courlove7's comment says, 'the citing of references saves it'.
    • 28/08/2004
    • 05:07:26
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Oh my goodness.

    I'm about to faint with shock. You included references! Wow. I'm impressed, I am.
    • 28/08/2004
    • 05:06:28
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Not again!!!????

    Which CD did you copy this from? Encarta Encyclopedia, or Brittanica? And those little 'original' comments at the end... say hi to XXX and YO for me.....
    • 28/08/2004
    • 05:04:29
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Why can't it all be like the first few lines?

    The first paragraph seems plausible, however the rest just leaves you with your toes hanging off a cliff...
    • 28/08/2004
    • 05:02:41
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Copied from a textbook.

    This is not an essay, and this is not original. Pathetic, pathetic, pathetic.
    • 28/08/2004
    • 05:01:40
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Guys!!!!!

    POINTS aren't EVERYTHING!!!!!! How many times do I have to say that!!!!????? Plagiarising work is just pathetic and illegal too. Imagine if someone plagiarised YOUR original work... how would YOU feel?
    • 28/08/2004
    • 05:00:23
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Wrong topic.....

    I doubt Discrimination falls under the category of 'Classical Studies' but anyway.... this essay was another average read, I supposed it's typical high school writing. I guess I just look for higher quality writing.
    • 28/08/2004
    • 04:56:40
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Could it be? Yes? Maybe?

    I think this may be original. I hope so. It was an average read, not very thought-provoking, but still it has it's merits.
    • 28/08/2004
    • 04:53:04
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Macbeth....

    Again, I'm concerned that these are copied from the blackboard, or from a school English textbook.
    • 28/08/2004
    • 04:49:03
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Is it really satisfactory?

    This looks like it was copied word for word out of a school text book, or teacher's notes. I'm a bit suspicious, but I will leave it at that....
    • 28/08/2004
    • 04:48:28
    • Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Muslims.....

    It seems like you just sat down, vented, and submitted something to get your points. Pity, if you'd taken more time this could have been a viable essay.
    • 28/08/2004
    • 04:44:59
    • Score: 8 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • This really is too short Eggy, and you know it......

    You could have written SO much more! I think Courlove7's comment was justified - and being that your essay is only 392, I'm sure she took the time (like I did) to read it.
    • 28/08/2004
    • 04:42:54
    • Score: 15 out of 17 people found this comment useful.
  • Great essay :)

    I thoroughly enjoyed reading your essay, it was insightful and being a 'gay person', it is always nice to have someone writing on 'our side'.
    • 28/08/2004
    • 04:39:53
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Short & Sweet

    A little too short, actually, but nevertheless contains valuable points and a good conclusion.
    • 28/08/2004
    • 02:01:34
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Hmmmmm..........

    As a South African myself, this is a little biased (I find)... a little bit from the Brit's POV.
    • 28/08/2004
    • 01:58:26
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Obesity

    "children should be able to decide for themselves what they want to do with their bodies" ..... if only it were that simple!!! makes me think of the new documentary, "Super Size Me"!
    • 28/08/2004
    • 01:53:47
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • I agree!

    "it makes most sense to let people do with their own bodies as they please" I couldn't agree more... you don't always know girls' situations.
    • 28/08/2004
    • 01:51:52
    • Score: 5 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Based on a true story?

    I wonder... interesting poem. Did you really see this happen? Or is this just a product of your vivid imagination....?
    • 28/08/2004
    • 01:50:04
    • Score: 7 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Overall not bad...

    Your structure and style needs a little fine-tuning, but overall it's not a bad essay.
    • 28/08/2004
    • 01:45:24
    • Score: 1 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • House on Mango Street

    This is a very good essay, with conscise and clear points and a great conclusion. I really would like to go out and read this book now, as a strong feminist myself!
    • 28/08/2004
    • 01:42:05
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Important information missing........

    You really should have included a paragraph explaining Film Noir - you know, about the mysterious blonde woman, the chiaroscure lighting etc. etc. You can't throw terms like that around without a brief explanation.
    • 27/08/2004
    • 03:05:01
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Essays like these are tough.

    For once, someone has been honest about the grade they were given. Despite the fact that this is an excellent essay, lecturers at Universities mark extremely strictly, so 67% is actually quite good. I think you should have included your bibliography, and another thing - where are your references and quotes?
    • 27/08/2004
    • 03:03:29
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Film school......

    Pity there's no bibliography. This essay reminds me of my first year at Film School, where we learnt about target audiences and the Magic Bullet Theory (v. interesting for researching this topic).
    • 27/08/2004
    • 03:02:03
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Some incorrect information...

    " even Avid Suites are becoming obsolete and are being replaced by computer-based editing suites like Adobe Premier "Avid is the Apple Mac computer-based editing suite which is industry standard. Adobe Premier is a very basic computer-based editing system, usually used as a base for learning other more advanced editing suites such as Avid Xpress Pro, Final Cut Pro, and Media 100 (which are all Apple based).
    • 27/08/2004
    • 02:55:54
    • Score: 4 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Just what I was looking for!

    I have to do an essay on comparing editing genres - we have to deduct whether editing is culture or genre specific - including examples from South Africa (where I come from), America, the UK, India, China, Australia etc. so this is very helpful - thanks!
    • 27/08/2004
    • 02:53:21
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Bowling...

    This is the only essay on Cheathouse.com that actually focuses only on editing. As an editing student, that really irritates me! However, I was overjoyed when I found this essay... wish you could contribute some more - it's always great to see what people can write about this fascinating topic.
    • 27/08/2004
    • 02:50:04
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Study notes?

    Useful essay, although I'm not sure this qualifies as study notes? Correct me if I'm wrong, but aren't study notes generally submitted in point form.
    • 27/08/2004
    • 02:47:03
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • This is where being gay helps........

    If you don't want a baby, have sex with a lesbian :)
    • 25/08/2004
    • 14:51:04
    • Score: 9 out of 26 people found this comment useful.
  • Very useful!

    Great essay, made me think really positively.
    • 25/08/2004
    • 13:50:39
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Wow. I'm impressed.

    Great essay, from your strong beginning all the way to the end - thanks for the referencing.
    • 25/08/2004
    • 13:49:52
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Bad formatting......

    This was really badly formatted - such a pity, totally put me off reading what is probably really something good :(
    • 25/08/2004
    • 13:48:41
    • Score: 1 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Hmmmmmm *puff*

    after reading this, and then cuet's comment i have to wonder - were you smoking something when you wrote this?
    • 25/08/2004
    • 13:45:38
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • I'll let you parry my sandwich..... :)

    "So I tried to parry my sandwich by wavered my arms wildly." This writing is so bad it's actually good... hahahahaaha.... I'd love to know what "excising the fetal pig" means :P
    • 25/08/2004
    • 13:44:19
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Are you for real?

    This looks like something a five year old would have written... no offence dude, but really - is this all you have to offer?
    • 25/08/2004
    • 13:42:33
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Waiting for part 2...

    I can't really judge this until reading the second part, although for a twelve-year-old the standard seems fairly high. I could really visualise the beginning of what I hope will be a great story.
    • 23/08/2004
    • 14:56:02
    • Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Christmas essay...

    Interesting essay in the wrong category! Should have been in creative writing perhaps?
    • 21/08/2004
    • 06:13:19
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Anon E Mouse

    Who was "I Stand Here Ironing" written by? You haven't included the writer's name once.... pity.
    • 21/08/2004
    • 06:02:25
    • Score: 2 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Dictionary thoughts...

    Just a thought - include which Dictionary you used for your definition, i.e. Cambridge, Oxford etc. this makes it easier for referencing.
    • 21/08/2004
    • 05:59:05
    • Score: 3 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Oh no.... referencing?

    You've included reference numbers, but no bibliography.... please when you read this comment, include your bibliography in a comment - otherwise referencing here was a waste of time! Otherwise a strong essay.
    • 21/08/2004
    • 05:50:28
    • Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Just a query...

    "Dead Poets' Society. Directed by Peter Reis. Discuss Mr Keating's philosophy; carpe diem (seize the day) and to what extent is it christrian, in relation to four students from the film." Are you sure you've answered the question correctly? I don't see how you've related this to four students, but I can't be sure.
    • 21/08/2004
    • 05:48:21
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • You've done it again......

    Yet another brilliant essay from srmikeone. I hope to be seeing many more submissions from you - you really have such a talent with words.
    • 21/08/2004
    • 05:46:40
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Full marks!

    One of the best essays I've read on Cheathouse for a long time - (i.e. I actually read every single word, I was completely gripped!!!!) This essay is fantastic... made me remember my own inner-nerd :) Just one thing... are you sure this essay is meant to be in Creative Writing?
    • 21/08/2004
    • 05:44:52
    • Score: 7 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Viva Greece

    My girlfriend is Greek, so I guess I'm biased - but this is a good essay, with solid information which I enjoyed reading.
    • 21/08/2004
    • 05:40:22
    • Score: 6 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Thanks!

    Thanks for including the bibliography - as I always say, it's nice to know where you get your information from & helps prevent plagiarism on the site. This essay was very helpful.
    • 21/08/2004
    • 05:39:56
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Short & Sweet (dude)

    This is a good example of a point made simply, concisely and clearly. Good work!
    • 21/08/2004
    • 05:38:14
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Great talent, vampire-chick :)

    Unfortunately for me, I haven't read the previous 7 editions. This piece of writing, however, has made me excited to go back and see what I have missed!
    • 21/08/2004
    • 05:36:59
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Average...

    hmmm... it's ok - i don't really see the point of this essay though - it's a little short, and the structure isn't that good.
    • 21/08/2004
    • 05:35:32
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Punic War

    I had never heard of the Punic War before, I thought it was a spelling error! How interesting..... you learn something new every day.
    • 19/08/2004
    • 10:33:16
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • South African Fast Food

    In South Africa we only have MacDonald's... none of the other fast food chains. We had Pizza Hut briefly, but it didn't last. Weird. Wish we had a Burger King.
    • 19/08/2004
    • 10:30:31
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Ben Harper...

    When I read the topic, I thought this was going to be on the character Ben Harper from the BBC series "My Family"... oops!
    • 19/08/2004
    • 10:25:45
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Flu.....

    A really great essay with good advice at the end.
    • 19/08/2004
    • 10:24:35
    • Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Very good essay!

    I enjoyed reading your essay, and it was great that essay was referenced.
    • 18/08/2004
    • 05:37:32
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Eng Lit

    Again this has been placed in the wrong category. This should be in English Lit.
    • 18/08/2004
    • 05:35:20
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Perfect essay!

    Great essay, well referenced and well researched. New Zealand is a fascinating country.
    • 18/08/2004
    • 05:34:27
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Good essay.

    Good essay. Well written and well referenced.
    • 18/08/2004
    • 05:33:47
    • Score: 2 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Dialect problems?

    There are different types of spanish, so maybe you just don't know this dialect Kokiri.
    • 18/08/2004
    • 05:31:42
    • Score: 2 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Nicely done.

    Nicely written and well referenced.
    • 18/08/2004
    • 05:25:32
    • Score: 4 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Length....

    Short piece on Oz, could have been longer.
    • 18/08/2004
    • 05:24:37
    • Score: 3 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Ver interesting.

    I learnt a lot about Egypt - I don't really know much about this topic. Good essay.
    • 18/08/2004
    • 05:21:27
    • Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Where did you get your info?

    This looks like it was copied directly from a brochure, or some other source. You should quote/reference/cite.
    • 18/08/2004
    • 05:18:44
    • Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Wonderful read.

    A beautiful woven story, describes Ireland and all things Irish. Can't wait for the 2nd part.
    • 18/08/2004
    • 05:18:06
    • Score: 2 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Wrong category - should be in English Lit.

    This essay has been placed in "Area & Country Studies" - Why?
    • 18/08/2004
    • 05:16:59
    • Score: 1 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Excellent essay.

    Although I don't know much on this topic, it seems well researched (thanks to the bibliography) however you haven't referenced correctly, or at all!
    • 18/08/2004
    • 05:15:54
    • Score: 3 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Spell check!!!!!

    Very short, and as soapss mentioned, there are a few spelling errors and typos - "thier" instead of "their", "presjident" instead of "president", "Joly" instead of "July" etc. Use the built in spell check!!!!
    • 18/08/2004
    • 05:14:23
    • Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Opinions.......

    Highly opinionated yes, but one doesn't have to agree.
    • 18/08/2004
    • 05:11:44
    • Score: 4 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • Very interesting.

    I learnt a lot from reading your essay - even though I've been to Spain before, I didn't know all of this!
    • 18/08/2004
    • 05:08:14
    • Score: 3 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • What a pleasure!

    A really excellent essay, of a very high standard. Congratulations, it would be nice to see more essays of this quality. Pity there are no references or works cited though.
    • 18/08/2004
    • 05:06:45
    • Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Nicely structured.

    Good essay, with well balanced structure and paragraphing. Good bibliography at the end.
    • 18/08/2004
    • 05:02:01
    • Score: 9 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • Useful info but no structure.

    This is not in essay format, it is merely facts yet for a 7th grade assignment, it is probably adequate.
    • 18/08/2004
    • 04:59:18
    • Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Encyclopedia article?

    Yet again this appears to be copied directly from an encyclopedia article. Disappointing, could have been a much richer essay.
    • 18/08/2004
    • 04:54:52
    • Score: 4 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • What is this?

    This should not be accepted, based on the fact that questions are not included and this is not helpful unless you have the worksheet to which these answers belong. Sorry, but it's the truth.
    • 18/08/2004
    • 03:36:40
    • Score: 5 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Makes you wonder, doesn't it....

    I'm glad I stopped smoking weed when I did... as much as I enjoyed the sensation, you are damaging your mind and your body.
    • 18/08/2004
    • 03:27:10
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • I wish this could be lengthened.

    Pity again about the <Tab/>. The story is great - wish it were longer though!
    • 16/08/2004
    • 11:17:54
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • About to read part 2.....

    Pity about the <Tab/> but that's not your fault.... maybe put the document into notepad before submitting? I think that might get rid of that problem.....
    • 16/08/2004
    • 11:16:06
    • Score: 5 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Part 3?

    I hope this will continue... could be a good book. Reminds me of R.L. Stine.
    • 16/08/2004
    • 11:14:45
    • Score: 4 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Waiting for part 2.....

    Great work, can't wait to read the second installment :)
    • 16/08/2004
    • 11:14:06
    • Score: 3 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • MccaddenSucks's Comment.

    To be honest, the description 'a dark Dr Seuss book' is quiet apt. The style is similar, and it reads and flows well. final_fantasy, take this (Mccadden's comment) as a compliment and not a criticism... Dr Seuss was a genius :)
    • 16/08/2004
    • 11:13:09
    • Score: 9 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Great to see an essay on Wicca :)

    I used to be extremely fascinated by Wicca, and still am to an extent - although I prefer traditional Witchcraft. Good essay, pity you didn't use more sources.
    • 16/08/2004
    • 11:09:39
    • Score: 10 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • Interesting....

    I'm a bit concerned about why you put your bibliography at the top of your essay - nevertheless, you included one and that is always appreciated, especially here at Cheathouse.. The essay is good, and has its strong points - possibly could have been a little longer? The 95% seems a little unlikely though.
    • 16/08/2004
    • 11:00:20
    • Score: 2 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Lesbian coins :)

    What a fascinating essay. So much I didn't know - I really feel so much more knowledgable after reading your excellent essay - and what a fantastic bibliography, I will be sure to take a look at some of those sources.
    • 16/08/2004
    • 10:51:45
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • "Gay and Lesbian Youth"

    "Attending high school as a gay or lesbian is like going to war." You couldn't have said it better. I wasn't able to come out as a gay woman until the age of 20. Luckily college and universities are generally more accepting, and there are clubs and societies you can join. A great essay, with a full informative bibliography.
    • 16/08/2004
    • 10:49:09
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Lesbian Health

    Very informative essay - essential reading for any lesbian who is sexually active.
    • 16/08/2004
    • 10:47:05
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Looking back...

    I just noticed that you haven't actually described this as 'study notes'... this is a point form document, so it can't really be considered an 'essay' as such - just another thought... I still liked your essay, and by the way - I got a great mark for my own essay on Feminism which I'll be sure to submit soon.
    • 16/08/2004
    • 10:43:27
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • I wonder if this is merely a spelling error......

    "phorphyria's lover and my last duches" or did you mean "Porphyria's Lover" and "My Last Duchess" hmmm... something smells a little fishy here...
    • 15/08/2004
    • 08:22:15
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Great topic!

    People have so many misconceptions about Satanism - it's not people killing babies and cats, it's just a group of dejected people wanting power 'back in their control'. We should just leave them alone, and let them think they're really powerful - it's not like they can actually do anything.
    • 07/08/2004
    • 09:45:34
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Smoking!

    Pity about the '·<Tab/>' throughout the essay, but that's not your fault. Informative, interesting, and factually correct.
    • 07/08/2004
    • 09:36:29
    • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • I wonder if this is a true story...

    A Peurto Rican called Xavier? Interesting :)
    • 07/08/2004
    • 09:33:47
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Argh!

    "But now I'm running out of things to say"Never admit that you've run out of ideas. It ruins the poem! Otherwise, I thought it was lovely. Rework it please!!!! I think this could be great.
    • 07/08/2004
    • 09:31:58
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Good!

    Great essay with a thorough and comprehensive bibliography.
    • 07/08/2004
    • 09:29:04
    • Score: 1 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Another good example of an exercise.

    You people obviously aren't reading this work - there is nothing wrong with it. No, it's not strictly an essay, but it's a good example of an exercise for someone working on "Of Mice and Men".
    • 07/08/2004
    • 09:12:08
    • Score: 4 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Something missing?

    I think this is supposed to go on a bit, I think maybe you didn't include the rest of your work. Pity, it is a very good example of an English exercise.
    • 07/08/2004
    • 09:08:54
    • Score: 4 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Don't you think this is a little harsh!?

    I come from South Africa, which to be perfectly honest, is probably a heck of a lot worse than NZ - be grateful for what you have! The All Blacks are probably the top rugby team in the world, apart from the Springboks of course :P and I'm sure you are exagerating about the public transport - I don't think anything could be worse than SA's public transport "system". Come to Cape Town, and I'll personally show you what I mean!!! BE GRATEFUL FOR WHAT YOU HAVE!!!!!!!!
    • 06/08/2004
    • 05:15:29
    • Score: 6 out of 15 people found this comment useful.
  • Lacks important little details.

    Who are Peter Brooks and Joacza Savit, and where these stage/film productions? You should include this in your essay, just in a sentence to let the reader know immediately what you're talking about - you can't assume the reader knows who these two are. Otherwise, a good essay.
    • 06/08/2004
    • 05:08:32
    • Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Great essay!

    Short, concise and to the point. A good essay, with great use of references and good intro & conclusion.
    • 06/08/2004
    • 05:05:35
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Interesting!

    Very informative - I knew none of this information before, I didn't even know where Quebec was.
    • 05/08/2004
    • 01:52:10
    • Score: 3 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Thanks for the bibliography!

    It's always great to see where you get your information from. Good job!
    • 03/08/2004
    • 15:17:54
    • Score: 6 out of 14 people found this comment useful.
  • Where's your structure?

    Would have been nice to have an introduction or a conclusion - this essay wouldn't have been marked that highly without these two crucial elements - 95% is an extremely unrealistic grade.
    • 03/08/2004
    • 15:16:45
    • Score: 5 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • I wonder why the user is anonymous......

    This looks like it was copied directly from an encyclopedia.
    • 03/08/2004
    • 15:14:50
    • Score: 4 out of 15 people found this comment useful.
  • In response to trp159753's comment.

    If I'm not mistaken, the general age in ninth grade is 12... you can't expect a college level essay - it wasn't meant to be! Look at the Grade in future!!!! *wink*
    • 03/08/2004
    • 15:13:43
    • Score: 13 out of 18 people found this comment useful.
  • Title?

    For something that was supposed to be written at a 2nd year level, the title could possibly have been slightly more interesting. Just a suggestion.
    • 03/08/2004
    • 15:10:55
    • Score: 10 out of 21 people found this comment useful.
  • Is this your own work?

    Seems very rushed, and perhaps copied from some other source? If not, then it is a very well researched essay, but lacks that personal touch that is often required.
    • 03/08/2004
    • 15:09:27
    • Score: 8 out of 18 people found this comment useful.
  • Great!

    Great study notes, very informative - I learnt something!
    • 02/08/2004
    • 06:10:36
    • Score: 3 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • And now....?

    great story, but it feels like we're missing something... is there going to be another 'episode' if u will?
    • 02/08/2004
    • 05:50:32
    • Score: 13 out of 22 people found this comment useful.
  • Personal medium, poetry is.

    I think it's really hard to crit poetry, since this is a very personal medium of expression. I can say, however, that I did enjoy reading this. Poetry is something that often lingers...
    • 30/07/2004
    • 06:55:20
    • Score: 24 out of 27 people found this comment useful.
  • Hehehe

    I thoroughly enjoyed your essay. You people must learn to take things less seriously - the essay is not suggesting one should only drink beer! It's merely a comical assessment of the nutritional information!
    • 30/07/2004
    • 06:47:55
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Interesting take.

    I thoroughly enjoyed reading your essay. It amazes me how many celebs go through with surgery and then admit to having had it done to them - just look at Pamela Anderson and Cher!
    • 30/07/2004
    • 06:38:10
    • Score: 4 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Very good essay

    Thoroughly researched, and great angle. A very informative essay.
    • 30/07/2004
    • 06:35:57
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Hehehe....

    liked the sarcasm in your opening paragraphs :) you have a great writing style!
    • 27/07/2004
    • 10:16:07
    • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Ooooeeer......

    Well, the two people who I have ever let get close to me in my life, my ex-boyfriend and my current girlfriend, have both been slaves to this dreadful drug. I, myself, have experimented with other recreational drugs in the past, but this is one I would never get close to... I am just so scared of how addictive and how dangerous this can be...
    • 27/07/2004
    • 10:08:22
    • Score: 4 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Just for interest sake...

    At my college, there used to be what was called 'homework period', where you would actually be forced to do an hour of homework at college. The system worked brilliantly, because you were supervised, could go and see teachers that could help you with your homework, so we all got great marks and by the time we got home we had loads of free time. I think every school should introduce this system!
    • 27/07/2004
    • 10:03:14
    • Score: 3 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Sometimes things don't have to be long to get the message across...

    Even though I'm not a Christian, this short essay touched me spiritually.
    • 27/07/2004
    • 10:00:49
    • Score: 6 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Freaky!

    Made me feel quite sick after reading this... I guess your poem touched a soft spot, as I am generally pro-abortion - I don't believe teenage moms should have to have the responsibility of bringing a child into this world unless they can afford to raise them decently... also, the world has a huge problem with over-population. Please don't hate me for this comment! It's just my opinion, but your poem really made me question those things... I mean, every child has the right to a life, regardless of the situation. There is now new research that after only a few days after conception, the baby has a personality. Scary stuff.
    • 27/07/2004
    • 09:57:58
    • Score: 11 out of 14 people found this comment useful.
  • Just a few comments.

    A couple of spelling and punctuation errors - 'Hysterics' shouldn't have a capital, and 'slaggs' should only have one g, also quite a lot of apostrophes left out, eg. didnt, wasnt, etc. Sounds a lot like a homage to the author R.L. Stine, whose horror stories I was addicted to as a teenager!
    • 27/07/2004
    • 09:53:53
    • Score: 7 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Brings back memories!

    Wow - I love this book. Reading your analysis made me wanna run upstairs and fish out the old copy I have. Good work!
    • 26/07/2004
    • 12:01:17
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Thanks for the help!

    I recently did an essay myself on feminism... was great to see someone with similar information and ideals.
    • 26/07/2004
    • 11:43:46
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Fantastic topic.

    What a well written essay. I thoroughly enjoyed reading your essay on cults and cult activity. I have always had a sort of 'sick' fascination with the topic, and it was interesting to see such a well-researched document. Good one on ya!
    • 26/07/2004
    • 01:57:43
    • Score: 5 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Essays needs to be spell-checked!

    It amazes me how after reading so many essays on this website how few of the authors have had the decency to run the good ol' spell check. Come on.... they've even included this feature on the site! Do yourselves a favour and use it - it makes life a lot easier, for example you wrote 'Aloud' instead of 'Allowed' and 'chid' instead of 'child'. These mistakes are elementary, and shouldn't be overlooked. Sorry for those who think I'm nit-picking... it's just something I've noticed a lot (not 'alot') recently :)
    • 25/07/2004
    • 15:09:53
    • Score: 7 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Be cautious of using the word 'obviously'.

    I quote, "It obviously must not since Word 2000 does not recognize at as a word". This is a very rash statement to make - everyone knows that computers and computer programs are fallible. Just because Microsoft Word does not recognise this as a word, doesn't mean it doesn't exist - just look at all the specialised, technical dictionaries that the word "nanotechnology" may be found in! The prefix 'nano-' means "indicating extreme smallness".... it is a prefix, hence can be joined to any word... eg. nanosecond, nanoplankton, nanometre etc.
    • 25/07/2004
    • 15:00:53
    • Score: 1 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Too close to home.

    An ex of mine is an addict. This descriptive essay conveys those scary feelings to a tee. Did you know that cigarettes are just as addictive as this 'off topic drug'? Scary but true. If anyone who smokes reads this, take that to heart - sooner or later you may be in this position.
    • 25/07/2004
    • 14:54:13
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Scary topic.

    Made my whole body hurt just thinking about this. Congratulations on writing such a good essay on such a horrendous, foul, primitive tradition.
    • 25/07/2004
    • 14:51:11
    • Score: 1 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Seems to be the general vibe...

    The first thing I noticed about this essay was the lack of paragraphs. It makes it so difficult to read, Reptromiki! This probably wasn't how it was originally presented though - computers are funny things when it comes to formatting. Otherwise, a good informative read - although 98% may be a little farfetched... I don't know many institutions/teachers that would give a mark so high.
    • 25/07/2004
    • 10:02:00
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Highly informative read.

    As a film student, it was quite heavy reading - this! I, ignorantly, really had no idea how much work goes into manufacturing and shaping plastics. Very informative, great essay.
    • 25/07/2004
    • 09:52:44
    • Score: 4 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • What a beautiful essay.

    Made me remember when I came out to my friends and family. Brilliantly and tastefully written. Definately one to show my friends!
    • 25/07/2004
    • 09:49:16
    • Score: 1 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Great essay.

    I was kept interested up until the very last word. You obviously have a great skill for writing - you have the talent that keeps your reader enthralled!
    • 25/07/2004
    • 09:47:30
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Short, factual, good.

    Short and simple, yet factually correct. Reminds me of my music classes that I used to do at school.
    • 25/07/2004
    • 09:44:13
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • What a breath of fresh air!

    I thoroughly enjoyed your well-structured, well thought out essay. 'Queer Eye for the Straight Guy' is like the gay man's version of 'What Not to Wear'.
    • 25/07/2004
    • 09:23:04
    • Score: 1 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Needs to be proof-read and rewritten.

    Your essay has a lot of grammatical mistakes in it, and needs to be reworked into something that flows a lot better. On the whole, an interesting idea - doubt it will happen soon though - we can only hope.
    • 25/07/2004
    • 09:21:11
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • What a disappointment.

    I was so excited to read this essay, since I am also a lesbian, but as I read I couldn't see where your essay was going. Great topic. Bad essay. It seems you only submitted it to get points. Maybe resubmit this after some careful thought and consideration.
    • 25/07/2004
    • 09:19:00
    • Score: 6 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Wow - what a risce topic.

    This essay, going by the extensive bibliography, seems to be relatively well researched, although the conclusion doesn't seem to be that convincing.
    • 25/07/2004
    • 09:12:44
    • Score: 10 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Very interesting topic.

    Great facts about Mandy Carter that I didn't know before. Would have been great if the essay was a little longer though - didn't quite know where it was going.
    • 25/07/2004
    • 09:11:09
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Very interesting essay.

    My girlfriend and I would like adopt a child one day (yes, I'm a girl too). Interesting point of view, with some interesting facts and statements.
    • 25/07/2004
    • 09:08:22
    • Score: 3 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Finally, someone speaks out!

    "Gay and lesbians should have the same right as every other American; after all this is the land of the free" - what a brilliant way to start your argument... although quite ironic though, because as a South African, i have noticed that you Americans aren't as free as you would like to be (recently watched "Bowling for Columbine" by Michael Moore... some interesting facts about your country there!) nevertheless... great to see a positive essay about this touchy subject.
    • 25/07/2004
    • 09:03:45
    • Score: 6 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Where's the love?

    What do you have against homosexuals? You don't have to like us or approve of what we do in our own private space - yet, still we deserve and demand the respect that should be awarded to every human being. Marriage should be for any two people who love each other - be they black, white, yellow, gay, straight, blind, deaf... we are all people, and everybody has the right to life, freedom and love.
    • 25/07/2004
    • 09:00:18
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Outraged!!!

    "it is clearing being discriminatory against those in the heterosexual community who are marrying for love" are you saying that homosexual couples do not marry for love? are you out of your mind!!?? what else would we want to be married for... !!?? i was highly disgusted and offended by your discriminatory, bigoted, and extremely one-sided essay.
    • 25/07/2004
    • 08:56:47
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Good philosophy

    I enjoyed your essay thoroughly. Most of us do not realise that what we usually perceive as 'needs' are actually merely 'wants'. Living in a developing country, and being on the more priveledged side of things, we often do not see things the way others do - it makes you think about the more important things in life.
    • 22/04/2004
    • 01:59:31
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Yuch!!!!

    I don't mean to be rude but well... err.. how can you end your essay with, "I hope you enjoyed reading this, 'cause I enjoyed writing it!"... yuch yuch yuch!!! It ruined the whole story for me. Writing that in a final 12th grade exam will definately not score you 98%, so I think that the mark you have said is very unaccurate. Sorry for the negative comment, but I think your writing needs some serious work.
    • 22/05/2002
    • 12:31:10
    • Score: 7 out of 13 people found this comment useful.
  • A tip... keep writing like this!

    Essays like this are what I've been told for years that examiners love to mark - real experiences that have happened to the author. The really good thing about essays like this is that they draw the reader into the writing - you can tell immediately that this wasn't just made up because it was due the next day for school. I remember writing an essay about an accident that happened to me regarding my hands, and it was very fulfilling writing about something that actually happened. A tip - keep writing like this! Examiners will score you highly for real life experience writing.
    • 22/05/2002
    • 12:17:04
    • Score: 9 out of 12 people found this comment useful.